压轴题08-读后续写(亲情故事类)(解析版)(江苏专用).docx

压轴题08 读后续写

新高考最突出的特点是增加了读后续写题型，读后续写是对考生阅读和写作的综合能力考查形式，是整个考卷中最难的题，它每年堪称是压轴题。读后续写总是以友爱互助、人和动物之间的和谐相处为主题。2023年高考对于读后续写的考查，友爱互助、人和动物之间的和谐相处仍将是主要话题。2023年1月的浙江高考英语试题及2023年四省联考试题都能闻到这个味道。

三亲情故事类
1.基本规律：读后续写中给出的故事本身难度不大，其核心是考查学生的续写能力，如果考生连给出的故事都看不懂，就无法展现考生的写作水平，这样的试题是失败的命题。读后续写和前面的故事构成一个完整的闭环的故事，这样才能较好的考查考生的水平。
2．实用解题方法：

押题速练1.
[2021·新全国I卷]
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
注意：1.续写词数应为150左右。
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.
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The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
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【思路点拨】
1. 原文情节情感线
精读原文材料,理清情节脉络,把握基本信息(时间、地点、人物、事件、主题等),抓住情感主线。
主题语境
人与自我--生活与学习--家庭生活
语篇话题
本篇读后续写为记叙文，文章大意为母亲节当天，双胞胎想要做一顿丰盛的早餐作为母亲节礼物，给母亲惊喜。
情节梳理
故事要素
when：on Mother’s Day
where：At home
who：The twins -- Jenna and Jeff
what：The twins planned to make a delicious breakfast for their mother. On Mother’s Day, they got up early and began to make breakfast. However, everything didn’t go smoothly as they wished.

2. 续文情节推理
基于原文情节脉络和语篇立意,以步步设问的方式合情合理地预测可能的情节发展,最终勾勒出整个故事的完整脉络。
情节走向
通过第一段首句“As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.”可预测，续写思路为：爸爸指导--孩子重新尝试--进展顺利--成功--欣喜若狂。
通过第二段首句“The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.”可预测，续写思路为：孩子们呈现惊喜给妈妈--妈妈喜极而泣--孩子们献上母亲节的祝福--母亲感动至极一家人幸福相拥。

【参考范文】
Possible version 1:
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.Father’s appearing was like a savior to the two children. Knowing what had happened, instead of scolding his children, the father encouraged them to cook breakfast again. Under their father's guidance, the kids started to try again and everything was going smoothly. While they were frying the bread, father helped them adjust the fire, which was the key to success. In no time, a delicious breakfast started to take shape. Wild with joy, they couldn’t wait to let mom taste their homemade breakfast.
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. When their mother saw the delicious and perfect breakfast in front of her, she was very surprised. A warm current welled up in her heart. It was not only the gift, but the love of the children for her that moved her very much. The children said loudly,“Happy Mother’s Day!”Mother hugged them tightly, saying ''Thank you so much, Jeff and Jenna. I believe it will be the best breakfast in my life. "Hearing this, the twins smiled proudly.
Possible version 2:
Paragraph1:
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.①Seeing the black bread and the spilled porridge, Father suddenly figured out their secret. A smile of understanding flashed across his face. Without a second thought, Father offered to help. A ripple of excitement ran through them.②They helped clean the kitchen while their father cooked a sandwich and some porridge skillfully. Soon, the delicious smell of breakfast permeated the kitchen.③Fafher hinted to show that it was a secret and went back to the bedroom, asking the twins to go on to carry out their great plan.
Paragraph 2:
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.They yelled“Happy Mother's Day, darling Mummy!A big surprise for you!”④When she saw the breakfast, her eyes widened up and twinkled with excitement. Father was pretending to be surprised to see such delicious food. Mother hugged the twins and showed her thanks. She tasted it and praised that it was the best breakfast she had ever had. The twins smiled at their father secretly.⑤A feeling of love filled the whole room. What a beautiful surprise!
Possible version 3:
Paragraph1:
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. Father's appearing was like a savior to the two children. After they explained that they were trying to make a surprise for their mom, Father smiled and helped clean up the stove first.①Then under his guidance, Jeff stood by the pot and stirred the porridge from time to time while Jenna carefully fried the French toast. It was all right this time. Before long, the delicious breakfast was ready. How happy the twins were!
Paragraph 2:
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.②“Surprise! Happy Mother's Day! Mummy!” They said in chorus, their eyes twinking with excitement. Their father laughed heartily and told her that the twins had prepared breakfast for her.③So shocked and delighted was she that she hugged the twins tightly, tears of joy welling up in her eyes, “Thanks， my dear kids.” It was not only the surprise, but the love of the children for her that moved her very much.④Indeed, love should be made known to loved ones.

押题速练2.
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Rick, a ten-year-old boy, was constantly angry at everything around him. He always fought in school with the other kids. Once he had an outburst in school. Upset by something a classmate said to him, he pushed the boy, and a fight happened. When the teacher stepped in to break it up, Rick went crazy, throwing papers and books around the classroom and rushing out. His teachers couldn’t say anything that would comfort the kid. And the parents of his schoolmates were getting concerned. Rick was earning quite the reputation. After talking with school officials, Rick’s mom tried everything she could to calm Rick down.
She tried different methods until one day she came home with a canvas (画布) and paint. “What’s this?”, Rick asked. Rick’s mom handed over the painting equipment and said, “Whenever you feel angry, paint whatever you’re angry about instead of bursting out.” Rick wasn’t that happy about it but he gave it a try anyway. Over the next few weeks, the young boy created several artworks. They mostly showed disturbing images though. So his mom took all of the paintings and called Rick over so that they could talk about them. “Tell me, Rick. What are these paintings about?”
“Well, the first painting is about how some of the kids show off their new clothes and pencil cases. The next painting is about my teacher who keeps telling me about how I’m doing things wrong. And the last painting is about how one of my schoolmate’s father suggested that I change my attitude. All of them make me so angry.” Rick’s mom, in a calm voice, took Rick by her side and told him: “Don’t you see it, Rick?” “See what?” Rick asked. “You’re so angry at all of these things but not once did you try to understand why you’re getting so angry. What have all these people done to you, really?”
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Rick was lost in thought.
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Rick knew it was time to change.
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【参考范文】
Rick was lost in thought. It slowly dawned on him that people he was angry at had done nothing wrong. His classmates who showed their new clothes and pencil cases to others might just want to share their happiness with friends. His teacher did blame him because he was being a problem. And his schoolmate’s father was just trying to help him correct his mistakes. They had no intention to hurt him but he just let his unreasonable anger consume him and hurt them. How ridiculous he had been!
Rick knew it was time to change. From then on, Rick tried his best to control his temper. Every time he felt he was to explode, he would walk away and ask himself why he was angry and whether it was reasonable to be angry. Then he would find his peace and laughed his anger away. Gradually, everyone saw a different Rick. He no longer shouted at others or threw things away. He chatted with classmates after class and complimented their new clothes and pencil cases. He even helped teachers carry books before class sometimes. Rick’s change surprised everyone an【解析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了一个十岁的男孩Rick总是因为周围的各种事情发脾气，经常和同学打架。他的妈妈在尝试过各种方法无效后，终于有一天，他对妈妈带来的一块画布和颜料有了一点兴趣，于是在妈妈的建议下，他开始尝试创作绘画以转移自己的坏脾气，并且描述了自己所画的各种让他生气的人物和场景。逐渐地，在妈妈平和的引导下，他开始反思自己的行为，最终作出了改变。
1. 段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“Rick陷入了沉思。”可知，第一段可描写Rick开始重新思考并逐渐理解了以前令他生气的那些同学、家长和老师的行为。
②由第二段首句内容“Rick知道是时候作出改变了。”可知，第二段可描写Rick是如何改变的，描述具体的行为，最终让自己和周围的人都感到了快乐。
2. 续写线索：沉思——豁然开朗——具体描述他的理解——决定改变——如何改变（具体行为）——获得快乐
押题速练3
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Seeing the United Parcel Truck pull into my driveway, I opened the garage door knowing that another package had arrived helping us with the Christmas in July Party we were putting together for the homeless children at a local charity.
As I stood watching the driver get the packages from the back of the truck, I saw Madison, my three-year-old granddaughter, picking weeds from the lawn. “These are for my mommy and daddy,” she replied, as she held out a hand full of worthless little weeds. I just smiled and nodded my head as I looked at her tight little closed fist.
The UPT driver walked into the garage and sat the two packages down on the wooden bench. He and I stood talking about the numerous baseball gloves, baseball bats, helmets and baseballs sitting about the room. I told him I had been raised in a Jacksonville, Florida orphanage and that during my entire childhood I never once owned anything of my own. I told him that these presents were for the children themselves and not for the orphanage.
After talking for a few minutes, the driver told me he had to leave. He waved and began walking back down the driveway. I turned around, locked garage door and began walking up onto the front porch. Just as I closed the gate, Madison came running up to where I was standing.
“My flowers, my flowers,” she screamed aloud. I soon realized that I had locked her weeds in the garage.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
“We’ll get them later,” I told her,
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I turned around, walked back to the end of the porch and opened the gate.
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【参考范文】
“We’ll get them later,” I told her. I just did not want to walk back down the stairs and unlock the garage door for a bunch of worthless weeds. Putting my hand onto her small shoulder, I began directing her back into the house. She stood there with tears welling up in her eyes. “These flowers are specially for my mommy and daddy,” she sobbed. All of a sudden, I realized that those baseball gloves were like gold to those homeless children just as those weeds were beautiful flowers to my granddaughter.
I turned around, walked back to the end of the porch and opened the gate. Then I walked down the three stairs, took out my keys and opened the garage door. Wearing a shining smile on her face, Madison ran past me, grabbing the little treasures she had picked moments before. “Thank you, grandma, I love you!” she said. I knelt down, looked through the green, now lifeless weeds and smiled as I saw the beauty of a dozen beautiful red roses reflecting in her eyes. As is often the case, something valueless to adults means a lot to children.
【解析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者一家为当地慈善机构的无家可归的孩子们举办的7月圣诞派对，孙女说她专门为父母准备了花，其实只是杂草。一开始作者并不重视孙女要打开车库门的请求，后来认识到了孙女的用心，非常感动。
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“我告诉她：‘我们一会儿再去拿。’”可知，第一段可描写孙女被拒绝后的伤心反应，作者的感悟和反应。
②由第二段首句内容“我转过身，走回门廊的尽头，打开了门。”可知，第二段可描写作者为孙女开门拿东西，认识到了一些对成年人来