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考研写作考研写作4连俊霞连俊霞北京新东方学校北京新东方学校第1页2.2寓意说明寓意说明+原因分析段原因分析段 It is blind worship that makes it possible to do such crazy/unreasonable things as the photos display.The main reason,I assume,would be the distorted education of the popular culture leading to the pervasiveness of the star-worshipping.As is shown in the statistics of a recent survey launched by a non-profit institution,the increase of teenagers someone is so prominent that the result caused by it may be concluded as follows./10/10Writing21强调句说明寓意强调句说明寓意插入插入分词做定语分词做定语3数据论证数据论证desire/aspirations of respectingeagerness to respect2过渡说明原因过渡说明原因第2页2.2寓意说明寓意说明+原因分析段原因分析段 It may mislead adolescents to dream about an immediate success/triumph rather than to dedicate to their study.And it is of little surprise to find their disappointment at last.107words/10/10Writing34结果推导结果推导5深入推导深入推导形式主语句形式主语句第3页二、高分范文得分解密二、高分范文得分解密2.2 寓意说明段寓意说明段+举例说明段举例说明段（1）五至六句）五至六句(80-90词词)：第一句说明寓意：第一句说明寓意(承上承上启下启下)；第二句说明以下事例能够证实；第三四句；第二句说明以下事例能够证实；第三四句一个事例及扩展；第五六句另一个扩展。一个事例及扩展；第五六句另一个扩展。详细化详细化切忌以理说理。切忌以理说理。（2）注意事项）注意事项切忌例子私人化。切忌例子私人化。（3）扩展方式）扩展方式数据论证、借用常识、引用权威、数据论证、借用常识、引用权威、因果论证、比较论证因果论证、比较论证例中人例中人/例中事例中事 behave(s)/occur(s)in the same way that 图中人图中人/图中事图中事 do(es)in the picture./10/10Writing4第4页2.3 寓意说明寓意说明+举例说明段举例说明段1998(P34)It seems reasonable when people laugh at the cartoon,but it would no longer be laughable when people find similar things taking place in our daily life.1Recently there is a trend of making promises in various fields of our society.From departments of government to common shopping centers,many businesses who supply products or offer services have made various promises to their customers or service receivers.2/10/10Writing5分词作定语分词作定语定语从句定语从句第5页2.3 寓意说明寓意说明+举例说明段举例说明段They assert their products to be of good quality or promise to offer excellent service.3As a matter of fact,many of these businesses claim in the same way that（比较）（比较）the hen in the above cartoon promises to lay eggs.4of great importance/significance=important/significantof great/little possibility=possible/impossibleof great help=helpfulof poor/outstanding quality/10/10Writing6of+n.=adj.比较论证比较论证第6页2.3 寓意说明寓意说明+举例说明段举例说明段举例论证惯用过渡句：举例论证惯用过渡句：Abundant of examples would demonstrate the phenomenon,while the following one,I suppose,would suffice.Here is an example.Take for an example/instance.(短语短语/that主语从句主语从句)provides us with an excellent example.Eg.Teenagers surfing on line provides us with an excellent example.That teenagers,in increasing numbers,surf on line provides us with an excellent example./10/10Writing7第7页2.4 寓意说明寓意说明+利弊分析段利弊分析段，主动中带有消极，消极中暗含主动主动中带有消极，消极中暗含主动(1)五至六句五至六句(80-90词词)：第一句说明寓意：第一句说明寓意(承上启下承上启下)；第二句说明有利有弊；第二句说明有利有弊；on one hand,第三四第三四句一个优点及扩展；句一个优点及扩展；on the other hand,第五第五六句一个缺点及扩展。六句一个缺点及扩展。(2)优点优点/缺点缺点=原因原因 扩展扩展=举例举例/数据数据/权威权威/常识常识/结果结果(五种论证五种论证)/10/10Writing8论点必须清楚论点必须清楚第8页2.4 寓意说明寓意说明+利弊分析段利弊分析段(P35)From the cartoon,we can conclude that the cartoonist wants to convey such a message:with the popularity of computers,people from all over the world become nearer by using the internet to communicate with each other.1 Meanwhile,people also become far away from their friends.2 All of us accept the fact that the development of the internet brings lots of conveniences to our daily life,for instance,we can buy a book on the net instead of going to a bookstore./10/10Writing9套话一句引出套话一句引出“利利”rather than第9页2.4 寓意说明寓意说明+利弊分析段利弊分析段Besides,we can communicate with our friends on the net without going out of home.3 But we cant ignore the other side of these:the time we spend with friends or family becomes less.And we hardly see them once in a week.It will make us feel lonely if we continue to use the tool on the net to talk with friends instead of talking with them on the phone or going out with them.4 158words/10/10Writing10第10页2.5 提议办法段提议办法段(1)三至四句三至四句(50-55词词)：第一句过渡词：第一句过渡词(accordingly,as is mentioned above插入插入)引引出重复论点；第二句改进提议出重复论点；第二句改进提议(消极意义消极意义)或提升或提升方式方式(主动意义主动意义)；第三句表明期待结果。；第三句表明期待结果。(2)改进提议惯用表示方式：改进提议惯用表示方式：It is high time that (did)It is imperative for that (should)(3)提升方式惯用表示方式：提升方式惯用表示方式：As enhancing the sense of,we would benefit more from /10/10Writing11第11页2.5 提议办法段提议办法段(1)三至四句：第一句过渡词三至四句：第一句过渡词(accordingly,as is mentioned above插入插入)引出重复论点；第二句引出重复论点；第二句改进提议改进提议(消极意义消极意义)或提升方式或提升方式(主动意义主动意义)；第；第三句表明期待结果。三句表明期待结果。(4)表明期待结果惯用表示方式：表明期待结果惯用表示方式：Only in this way/by doing/by exerting this can we both and embrace a brighter tomorrow./10/10Writing12第12页2.5 提议办法段提议办法段(P36)消极寓义消极寓义Child education has become one of the most popular topics discussed not only by educational experts,but also by people in all walks of life.The failure of child education does more harm to the development of our society and our civilization than to the children themselves.Thus,its high time that parents,educators and the government made concerted efforts to put an end to this situation.70words/10/10Writing13重复观点重复观点第13页2.5 提议办法段提议办法段(P47紫紫)主动寓义主动寓义Accordingly,it is imperative for us to take some measures to enhance the sense of teamwork in our society.We should bear in mind that teamwork is of great significance to both our society and ourselves.Every one should have the ability of teamwork.Only in this way can we achieve success and only in this way can our society become more harmonious to live in.70words/10/10Writing14both第14页三、短文写作篇章分析三、短文写作篇章分析（1）写作三段论）写作三段论首段首段图画描述段图画描述段中间段中间段1寓意说明段寓意说明段+原因分析段原因分析段 中间段中间段2寓意说明段寓意说明段+举例说明段举例说明段 中间段中间段3寓意说明段寓意说明段+利弊分析段利弊分析段尾段尾段提议办法段提议办法段（2）篇章结构表达）篇章结构表达段与段之间过渡段与段之间过渡第二段第一句寓意说明；第三第二段第一句寓意说明；第三段第一句重复观点段第一句重复观点段内衔接段内衔接各种连接词使用（各种连接词使用（P6）/10/10Writing15消极寓意类消极寓意类主动寓意类主动寓意类必须使用！必须使用！利弊包含类利弊包含类第15页三、短文写作步骤三、短文写作步骤审题审题主动还是消极主动还是消极列提要列提要三段选择与句型填充（汉字处理逻辑思绪）三段选择与句型填充（汉字处理逻辑思绪）开始写组开始写组注意语法，书写工整注意语法，书写工整检验检验拼写、标点、语法、动词（唯一性标准）拼写、标点、语法、动词（唯一性标准）/10/10Writing16第16页图画描述图画描述There is a boiling hot pot,as is illustrated in the picture,with various ingredients of multi-cultures,such as famous figures home and abroad:Bi Sheng and Shakespeare,philosophical concepts:Confucianism and Taoism,performing art:Beijing Opera and Swan Lake,and the like.The caption under the picture is that the cultural hot pot is both delicious and nutritious.59words/10/10Writing17插入插入,such as and the like表语从句表语从句第17页寓意说明寓意说明Of all the changes that have taken place in international culture during the past half a century,perhaps the most far-reaching,as is shown in the above picture,has been the sharp increase in culture blending.38wordsOn one hand,文化融合带来好处（在国内享受文化融合带来好处（在国内享受各国文化各国文化论证）论证）On the other hand,需要注意方面（本土文化需要注意方面（本土文化丧失丧失论证）论证）尾段尾段勉励多元文化同时保护本土文化勉励多元文化同时保护本土文化/10/10Writing18借阅读句借阅读句第18页可用词汇可用词汇文化融合：文化融合：cultural integration/blending,multi-culture,mosaic culture,pluralistic culture本土文化：本土文化：national culture,local culture外国文化：外国文化：foreign cultures享受：享受：enjoy,benefit from,make full use of,take advantage of消失：消失：disappear,perish,fade away/10/10Writing19第19页