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专题20读后续写：情感刻画(解析版)
情感细节包括人物的感受、情绪，是续写中必不可少的细节描写之一。合理的情感情绪 描写与刻画，可以凸显人物的性格、人际关系的特征、以及烘托故事高潮进而突出语篇主题 等。因此，合理的情感情绪刻画在续写中是非常必要的。以下就是读后续写过程中，刻画人 物情感情绪的四个方法：
■ 一、直接描写法直接利用恰当的表情感的形容词、副词或名词、介词短语等表达人物的喜怒哀乐 例如：快乐(happy, delighted, pleased, joyful, enjoyable 等)、吃惊(surprised, shocked, amazed, astonished)等形容词或介词短语(to one's surprise, in relief, in panic)等描述人物的情绪。
■二、环境烘托法利用环境细节“融情于景”烘托人物的情感
【例 1 ] Della finished her crying and dried her face. She stood by the window and looked out unhappily at a gray cat walking along a gray fence in a gray back yard.(小说《麦琪的礼物》中 利用3个形容词gray,体现了 Della的难受和不开心。)
【例 2]涌上心头 sth. well up on me / sth. swept over me
A flood of fear welled 叩 in me.一股恐惧涌上心头。
高考真题：
(1) [2020.7 全国新 爆米花]He was so delighted that he could hardly speak, but his bright smile face spoke for him.
(2) [2020.1 浙江 给 Poppy 买狗作伴]Poppy jumped with joy at the sight of the little dog.
(3) [2017.11 浙江 与善忘母亲一同旅游]Every time we mentioned the funny incidents of the journey, a pleasant smile would spread over Mom' s face.
■三、动作反吸法 利用恰当的动作描写反映人物的情绪
"Excuse me, salesgirl, would you be so kind as to let me put back all I had chosen, for I had intended to buy my daughter Janie a new pair of shoes, Mag another dress, boys new shirts and all of them new stockings?
9.我一定是昏了头！ ,一种关心孩子的责任感驱使她思考钱该往哪里去的正确想法。
I must have lost my head!" A sense of responsibility of caring about her kids drove her to think of the right idea where the money should go.
参考范文：
After buying a pair of new shoes / she walked into the clothing department. Coming to a dressing mirror, looking at herself in the mirror up and down and fixing her eyes on her shoes, “Won't I look more beautiful if my shoes match a perfect dress on my body?” thought Missus Sommers to herself, waving to the salesgirl of the department. Missus Sommers asked her what the fashionable dress styles of this year were and whether she could try them on. Her requests approved, Missus Sommers kept trying on whatever she considered was the best on her body. With different being changed dresses on her body, she turned around and around in front of the mirror, admiring herself as if she were a super model at a fashion show. One dress after another tried on, she put them into her shopping cart fondly. '"What a lovely woman!5 is the response for everyone to see me.” smiled Missus Sommers.
She was about to leave the store when a kid running around reminded her of something. "Oh, my! Dear me! I forgot all about my kids!" yelled Missus Sommers, realizing that she had done something wrong and starting to blame herself. "Excuse me, salesgirl, would you be so kind as to let me put back all I had chosen, for I had intended to buy my daughter Janie a new pair of shoes, Mag another dress, boys new shirts and all of them new stockings? I must have lost my head!" A sense of responsibility of caring about her kids drove her to think of the right idea where the money should go.
例如：下面文章片段中的句子：
With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she _twned_aTQumLhoping_to_see_the_lake.（动作描写，说明 Jane 满怀期望）Tojier surprise” 函［用介词短道体现 Jane 的吃惊）she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snQW-CappedmQUn以in lQp.（寓情于景，体现 Jane 的无望失落）She suddenly realized that she was lost.
■四、句式变换法利用高级句式和修饰成分细化情感细节
句型1:独立主格结构
① uAbsolutely! ” replied John, excitement shinning in his eyes.（利用名词 excitement 和独 立主格结构，描写John的兴奋激动）
约翰答道，“一定”，他两眼兴奋地闪闪发光。
句型2： so..・that结构So angry was the bear that it roared and smacked the fence violently, （so …that 倒装句型） 熊怒火中烧，开始咆哮并用爪子猛烈地拍击护栏。
句型3： how+宾语从句
② You can not imagine how frightened we were at the approach of the polar bear, （how 弓| 导 的宾语从句，介词短语）你无法想象北极熊向我们逼近时我们多么的恐惧。
句式4：非常… I am more than +情感类形容词to…
r m more than happy to learn that you are admitted to Peking University.得知你被北京大学 录取，我非常高兴。
句式5：让我非常…的是… Much to my +情感类名词，…
Much to my disappointment, no one came up to give me a helping hand.令我非常失望的是，没 有人站过来帮助我。
■句子演练按要求补全下面动作、情感和心理细节的句子
1 .简又害怕又无助，靠着一棵树坐下，歇歇疼痛的双脚。
, Jane sat against a tree, .（形容词短语/非谓语动词作状语）
1. “如果我没有和汤姆吵架，我现在就不会被困在这里了，”她想，悔恨的泪水模糊了她的眼睛。
", " she thought toherself.（虚拟语气的侄V装
句，with复合结构）
3 .她挣扎着站起来寻找那个湖。
4. 她精疲力竭，她爬上一块大石头，躺了下来，很快睡着了。
（so ...
that状语从句，一连串的动作）
5. 简醒来时天己经亮了。
6. 尽管很沮丧，她还是决定继续前进。
2 she decided to continue forcing her way ahead.（让步状语从句）
2 she decided to continue forcing her way ahead.（状语从句的省略句）
7. 随着小溪的声音，她向水边走去。
i she walked toward the water.胃语动t司作状语）
8. 突然，她注意到远处有一个熟悉的身影向她走来。
（非谓语动词作宾补）II.将以上补全后的各句合并为短文，注意恰当的衔接过渡
参考答案.1. Scared and helpless, Jane sat against a tree, resting her aching feet.（形容词短语/非谓语动 词作状语）
2. “Had I not quarreled with Tom" wouldn't have been trapped here, “ she thought to herself with regretful tears clouding her eyes.（虚拟语气的倒装句，with 复合结构）She struggled to her feet to search for the lake.
3. She became so exhausted that she climbed up onto a big rock,lay down and fell fast asleep.
（so ... that状语从句，一连串的动作）It was daybreak when Jane woke up.
4. Although she was depressed, she decided to continue forcing her way ahead.（让步"犬语月i句）Although depressed, she decided to continue forcing her way ahead.（状语从句的省略句）
5. Following the sound of the stream, she walked toward the water.（非谓语动词作状语）Suddenly shv noticed a familiar figure at a distance coming towards her.（非谓语动词作宾补）
I .参考范文
Scared and helpless, Jane sat against a tree, resting her aching feet. "Had I not quarreled withTom, I wouldn't have been trapped here, ” she thought to herself with regretful tears clouding her eyes. She struggled to her feet to search for the lake. However, she became so exhausted that she climbed up onto a big rock, lay down and fell fast asleep. It was daybreak when Jane woke up.
Although depressed, she decided to continue forcing her way ahead. Following the sound of the stream, she walked toward the water. Suddenly she noticed a familiar figure at a distance coming towards her.
■【补充语料1】愤怒类
(1) He was fuming with rage.他气得大发雷霆。(fumev.发怒)He could hardly control his rage.他几乎控制不住怒火。
⑶His face clouded with anger.他气得脸色阴沉。(脸上一块乌云)悲伤忧愁类
(1) He stood silently, tears rolling down his cheeks.他静静站着，眼泪顺着面颊流了 下来。
(2) I feel like I am floating in an ocean of sadness.我漂浮在悲伤的海洋里。
(3) Her hands were shaking. She was on the verge of tears.她手在颤抖，她快要哭了。(verge 边 缘)Hearing the news, so desperate was he that he was drowned with sadness,听至肘肖/息、， 他淹没 在悲伤中。
(4) They sat there with glum looks on their face.他彳门坐在那里，带着一脸忧郁。
1. 害怕类[2018.6 浙江卷：农场游玩迷路]Tears of fear and regret rolled down my cheeks.
(1) [2017.6 浙江卷：与朋友骑车遇狼]After hearing Mac' s experience, they froze, their mouths hanging open.
⑶ He turned to me, with his eyes full of horror.他转过身来，眼里充满了恐惧。
(4) Fears slowly crept upon her.恐惧慢慢蔓延到她身上。
(5) Her face turned pale and stood there tongue-tied.她脸色苍白站在那里，舌头打结，说不出 话。
■【补充语料2】关于情感句子的积累：（表达情感的形容词+动作具体描写），用so..that...
1 > 兴奋：I was so excited/thrilled that I gave a jump in the air.我激动得跳了 起来2、开心：I was so happy/cheerful that I jumped up and down.我高兴得上蹿下跳。
3、感动：I was so moved that I failed to say a word.我感动得一句话也说不出来。
4、悲伤：I was so sad that I hid my face in my hands.我难过得用手捂住 了脸。
5、生气：I was so angry that I failed to say a word.我气得一句话也说不出来。
6、害怕：I was so scared/frightened that my palms sweated and my heart pounded.我害T白得手心 冒汗，心怦怦直跳。
7、羞愧：I was so ashamed that I could feel my face burning.我羞愧得感觉自己的脸在燃烧。
■模拟练习01读后续写阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Missus Sommers one day found herself the unexpected owner of fifteen dollars. It seemed to her a very large amount of money. For a day or two she walked around in a dreamy state as she thought about her choices. Her daughter Janie was wearing worn shoes and needed new ones. She would buy cloth for new shirts for the boys. Her daughter Mag should have another dress. And still there would be enough left for new stockings for her children. The idea about how to spend the dollars made her restless with excitement.
On the day she planned to go shopping with the money, she ate a light meal- no! Between getting the children fed and the house cleaned, and preparing herself to go shopping, she forgot to eat at all!
When she arrived at the large department store, she spotted a pile of silk stockings at the entrance. A sign nearby announced that they had been reduced in price a young girl behind the counter asked her if she wished to examine the silky leg coverings. She smiled as if she had been asked to inspect diamond jewelry, and started to feel the soft, expensive items. Missus Sommers picked up a black pair and looked at them closely. Two red marks suddenly showed on her pale face. She looked up at the shop girl and said proudly, "Well, I will buy this pair.”
Missus Sommers changed her cotton stockings for the new silk ones in the ladies' rest area. She had let herself be controlled by some machine-like force that directed her actions and freed her of responsibility. How good was the touch of the silk on her skin! Then she put her shoes back on and put her old stockings into her bag. Next, she went to the shoe department, where she tried on a pair of new boots. Her foot and ankle looked lovely. She could not believe that they were a part of herself.
注意：1 .所续写短文的词数应为150左右；至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1 :
After buying a pair of new boots, she walked into the clothing department.
Paragraph 2 :
She was about to leave the store when a kid running around reminded her of something.
翻译小练习：
1.来到化妆镜前，上下打量着镜子里的自己，眼睛盯着鞋子，"如果我的鞋子和我身上完美的衣服搭配，我看起来会更漂亮吗？萨默斯太太心想，向部门的女售货员招手。
2.萨默斯太太问她今年的时装款式是什么，是否可以试穿一下。
3 .她的要求得到了批准，萨默斯太太继续尝试她认为在她身上最好的东西。
2. 身上穿着不同的衣服,她在镜子前转来转去，像时装秀上的超级模特一样欣赏自己。
3. 她一件接一件地试穿，深情地把它们放进购物车里。
4. 〃多可爱的女人！ 〃这是每个人看到我的反应。〃萨默斯太太笑着说。
5. 〃哦,天哪！亲爰的我！我把我的孩子都忘了 ！萨默斯太太大声喊道，意识到自己做错 了什么事，开始自责。
6. 〃对不起，女售货员，请您把我选的东西都放回去，因为我本来打算给我女儿珍妮买一 双新鞋，买一件新衣服，给孩子们买新衬衫和新袜子，好吗？
7. 我一定是昏了头! 〃一种关心孩子的责任感驱使她思考钱该往哪里去的正确想法。
参考答案：
1. 来到化妆镜前，上下打量着镜子里的自己，眼睛盯着鞋子，〃如果我的鞋子和我身 上完美的衣服搭配，我看起来会更漂亮吗？萨默斯太太心想，向部门的女售货员招手。 Coming to a dressing mirror, looking at herself in the mirror up and down and fixing her eyes on her shoes, “Won't I look more beautiful if my shoes match a perfect dress on my body??, thought Missus Sommers to herself, waving to the salesgirl of the department.
2. 萨默斯太太问她今年的时装款式是什么，是否可以试穿一下。
Missus Sommers asked her what the fashionable dress styles of this year were and whether she could try them on.
3. 她的要求得到了批准，萨默斯太太继续尝试她认为在她身上最好的东西。
Her requests approved, Missus Sommers kept trying on whatever she considered was the best on her body.
4. 身上穿着不同的衣服,她在镜子前转来转去，像时装秀上的超级模特一样欣赏自己。 With different being changed dresses on her body, she turned around and around in front of the mirror, admiring herself as if she were a super model at a fashion show.
5. 她一件接一件地试穿，深情地把它们放进购物车里。
One dress after another tried on, she put them into her shopping cart fondly.
6. ”多可爱的女人！”这是每个人看到我的反应。”萨默斯太太笑着说。
'“What a lovely woman!' is the response for everyone to see me." smiled Missus Sommers.
7. ”哦，天哪！亲爱的我！我把我的孩子都忘了 ！萨默斯太太大声喊道，意识到自己做错 了什么事，开始自责。
"Oh, my! Dear me! I forgot all about my kids!" yelled Missus Sommers, realizing that she had done something wrong and starting to blame herself.
8. 〃对不起，女售货员，请您把我选的东西都放回去，因为我本来打算给我女儿珍妮买一 双新鞋，买一件新衣服，给孩子们买新衬衫和新袜子,好吗?
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