作文润色.ppt

单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,How to better your composition,1.Writing correct sentences,2.Writing effective sentence,3.Using appropriate language,4.Making coherence,5.Using variety and emphasis,6.Using effective words,7.Using parallel structures,8.Summarizing accurately,9.Using quotation well,10.Imitating the model compositions,Adding connectors,Addition and stress,补充和强调,Concession and contrast,让步与对比,Therefore and related expressions,因果和相关表达,Similarity and contrast,相似与反差,。,一、句子润色,She is looking after her mother,in,addition to,my own.,她除了要照顾她母亲还要照顾我妈。,2.You need money and time.,In addition,you need diligence.,你需要钱和时间，此外你好需要勤奋。,3.I do trust him.,For one thing,he is very diligent,for another,he is reliable.,我很相信他，一方面他刻苦，另一方面他可靠。,10.They never,in fact,read the report,I think.,依我看他们实际上根本就没看这份报告。,11.He has promised to try harder.,It remains,to be seen,whether he will.,他承诺要再努把力。这要待以后见分晓。,12.,Needless to say,any contribution of money will be gratefully received.,不用说，接受任何捐款都将心存感激。,13.Avoid using the car for traveling,if possible,.,可能的话出行不开轿车。,14.Children are asked to put the rubbish into cycling bin and non-cycling bin,respectively,.,要求孩子们把垃圾分别放入可回收和不可回收的垃圾箱内。,15.,I am very pleased to welcome you and the rest of the staff are,similarly,delighted that you could join us.,很高兴欢迎你,其他员工同样也很高兴你的加入。,16.,He continued speaking,regardless of,my feelings on the matter.,他继续讲话，全然不顾我在这个问题上的感受。,17.Driving in the busy streets is a messy job,no matter how,careful you are.,在拥挤的大街上开车是个棘手的活无论你有多小心。,18.,His behavior made me feel calm and relaxed,in comparison with,theirs.,与他们的做法相比,他使我感到平静和放松。,19.,In contrast to,last year,the students have great progress.,与去年相比，学生们有了很大进步。,20.,Theres a shortage of labor,relative to,the demand for it.,与需求相比，劳动力不足。,21.,She was over the age limit and,in consequence,her application was rejected.,她因超龄所以申请被拒绝。,22,.,Animals have died,as a consequence of,coming into contact with this chemical.,一些动物因接触了这种药物而死亡。,23.,Man have cut down many trees,as a result,many kinds of animals have disappeared.,人类砍伐了许多树木，结果很多种类的动物都消失了。,24.,If only,they could be placed together someplace safe.,要是他们能够一起待在某一个安全地方就好了。,二、文段连贯,（,1,）,Some candidates failure to pass through the college entrance examination is due to many reasons.What they lack is the self-controlling.,And,they are likely obliged to study.They havent formed good habits.,For example,they cant arrange their time properly that they waste a lot of time,in fact,.They cannot work hard enough at the target subject until there is an examination.,On the other hand,its difficult for them to devote all their efforts to the tasks because they cant concentrate their mind on their studies.,Another,cause of their failure is lacking in motivation.I think anyone who wants to reach the target should make every effort to arrive.,（,2,）,_ people have spread in the world,they have killed wolves,usually to protect their own animals _ sheep and cattle._,the number of wolves has been greatly reduced.They are extinct in many countries.In Britain,_,wolves became in about 1650._,there used to be many thousands of wolves in America.Now there are fewer than 2,000.If people had not come to America,wolves would not have disappeared.,Whenever,such as,As a result,for example,Similarly,(3),As a popular saying goes,“Time is money.”,In fact,time is more precious than money.When money is spent,you can earn it back if you want to.,However,when time is gone,it will never come back.As the pace of modern life continues to accelerate,the time,at our disposal,is quite limited.,But,there are a lot of things to be done in our lives.We should make full use of our time to fulfill what is useful to us.,For instance,as students we should devote most of our time to our academic studies.,In this way,we can acquire new knowledge and skill necessary for our future career.,In my opinion,wasting time means wasting out valuable life.My conclusion is that we should never put off what can be today until tomorrow.,(,at ones disposal,支配）,(4)Im strongly against students just reading for exams or certificates.Todays society needs people with comprehensive backgrounds.Its only when you acquire a wide range of knowledge outside your field that you can be competitive in job hunting.Philosophy,history and psychology are needed to shape ability,thinking,and comprehension.,（,5,）,Happy is the man,who acquires the habit of reading when he is young.He has secured a lifelong source of pleasure,instruction,and inspiration.,So long as,he has his beloved books,he needs never feel lonely.He always has a pleasant occupation of leisure moment,so that,he needs never feel bored.He is the possessor of wealth more precious than gold.,On the contrary,poor indeed is the man who does not read,and empty is his life.,少年时养成读书习惯的人是幸福的。他获得了终生拥有的愉快、教益和灵感的源泉。只要他有喜爱的书籍，就从来不必感到孤寂。空闲时，他总是有愉快的消遣，因此他从来不必感到烦闷。他拥有比黄金更宝贵的财富。反之，不读书的人实在很穷，生活也是空虚的,。,（,6,）,Dear Sir/Madam,I am Li Hua from Class One,Senior Two.Im writing in reply to the notice for host families.I think I have several reasons to accommodate one foreign friend.,First,I believe my English is good enough to communicate with foreigners.,Also,my good communication skills enable me to keep a good relationship with others.As for accommodation,my family live in a 4-room apartment and there is always a spare room for the guest.,In addition,my home is very convenient in transportation.Its location makes it easy to take either subways or buses to most places.I have also got support from my parents,who said yes without hesitation when informed of my wish.,I would appreciate it if my application is taken into account.,Yours sincerely,Li Hua,（选自,2012.5,海淀期末练习）,三、定语修饰,例,1.,The air,surrounding,us is important to everyone.Without air,we could not exist.Everyone understands that.But air is necessary in many other ways,that are not always so obvious or widely known.,我们周围的空气对每个人都是重要的。没有空气我们无法生存。大家都懂得这一点。但是空气在许多别的方面也是必不可少的。而这些方面并不总是那么明显或被广泛了解。,例,2.,Ship,carrying,oil and articles of trade will move beneath the ocean.,Passenger,ship will be built to travel underwater,where storms cannot delay them or make people seasick.,装载着油和商品的货船将在海底运行。建造的客船将在水底行走，在风暴天气的情况下就不会耽搁或使乘客晕船。,例,3.,These,rainforest cover more than,6,percent of,the,Earths,land surface and,their,continuing,existence is vital to the survival,of the plant,.,这些雨林覆盖了超过,6%,的地球表层，它们的持续存在是植物维持生命所必需的。,例,4.,Counting the number of miles,traveled,by a product is a strange way of trying to tell the true situation of the environmental damage,done,by an industry.,计算产品运输距离多少英里是一个很奇妙方法，该方法试图辨别由工业造成环境破坏的真实情况。,例,5,And theres a growing need for new writers,trained,to create the$3 billion worth of childrens books,bought,each yearplus stories and articles,needed,by over 650 publishers of magazines for children and teenagers.,（,NMET),要培训对新作者不断增长的需要，才能创造出每年卖出,3,亿美元价值的儿童读物，和,650,多家杂志出版社所需的为青少年提供的小说和文章。,例,6,Wild camping is not permitted in many places,particularly in crowded lowland Britain.Wherever you are,find out about organizations,responsible for,managing wild spaces,and contact them to find out their policy on camping and shelter building.,在很多地方野营是不允许的，特别是在拥挤的低地英国。不论你在哪里，要找到负责管理野营地的有关机构，并与他们联系，搞清楚野营和栖息住所的有关规定。,四、使用各种不同句型,如，强调句、倒装句、复合句、各种分词短语介词短语,it,句型等结构,It was he who,had saved my little sister bravely.,What we have to do,was to stand there,trying to catch the offender.,就是他勇敢地救了我的小妹。,我们一定要做的是站在那，设法抓住那个罪犯。,(3)Satisfied with the result,he decided to go on with a new experiment.,(4)He found,it,increasingly difficult,to read,for his eyesight was beginning to fail.,(5)With confidence comes success.,成功来自信心。,对成绩很满意，他决定继续一个新试验。,他发觉阅读越来越困难，是因为他的视力开始衰退。,(6)It is necessary to reuse and recycle as much as possible.,(7)I see very little of her.,(8)Always have a dictionary near at hand.,尽可能多地回收和再利用是很有必要的。,我很少见到她。,手边经常要有一本词典。,(9)Half the amount of work brings double the result./Do little to achieve much.,(10)It is high time someone explained to you about good manners.,(11)Forgiveness makes it possible for us to look forward rather than backward.,(12)The driver had no idea how grateful I was to him for not challenging me with questions.,事半功倍。,早就该有人给你讲讲礼貌。,宽容对我们来说使向前而不是向后成为可能。,这位司机不知我对他有多么感激他没有难为我。,五、书报摘抄,Its in that moment that I step onto my definition of the summit.If the weather prevents me from reaching the top,it doesnt matter.Ive already succeeded.The mountains been defeated.Ive gone to my limit.Ive,hit the wall,and Ive pressed on nevertheless.,就在那一刻，我踏上了我所定义的“顶峰”。即使天气恶劣登不上顶也没有关系，因为我已经成功了。高山已被我征服。我已经竭尽全力。尽管面前困难无法逾越，但我还是奋力尝试了。,On Nov.23,five pilots from the East China Sea Fleet landed J-15 fighter jets on the,Liaoning,and later took off.It is a landmark success as the carrier-borne(,舰载的,)fighter jet is at the core of a carrier is far more difficult than performing an outer space mission.For planes such as the J-15,the normal runway is about 3,000 meters long.But the runway on the,Liaoning,is only 195 meters long.,(21st Century,2012.11.),Prized storyteller:Mo Yan,the winner of the 2012 Nobel Prize for literature,delivers a speech at a banquet the award ceremony at Stockholm City(,斯德哥尔摩,)Hall on Monday.,Chinese writer Mo Yan said literature is useless compared with science.He was calm and relaxed,and his talk touched upon the two most important themes for him as a person and a writer-his peasant roots,and the significance of literature.Mo Yan is wise to avoid talking politics.He is a real defender of literature.He has concentrated on thoughts about human nature.(China Daily),Addressing,(,应对,),these factors and changing the emissions and energy use trends requires a massive increase in investment in both energy efficiency and the renewable energy sector.,要应对这些因素并改变温室气体排放和能源消费趋势，就需要在提高能源使用效率和再生能源领域大幅度增加投资。,Through his career,he continued to advocate unmanned satellites,once telling a panel that manned space programs have been beset by cost overruns but unmanned rockets“have,delivered on,their promises and have gone far beyond them”.,在整个研究生涯中，范艾伦一直主张开发不载人卫星。他曾经对一个专门小组说，载人航天计划始终为经费超支所困扰，而不载人火箭“不仅,实现,了他们的承诺，而且比载人航天器飞得更远”。,I,firmly,believe that in order to write well,one has to read-read widely,read often,read anything and everything.,One can learn the rules of grammar without reading much,and one can learn vocabulary by practicing conversations with other people,but,the only way,to develop a degree of fluency in writing,and the ability to use different styles of writing,is to expose oneself to,as wide a range of reading material as possible.,-,摘自,英语学习,