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Period 5 Writing
读后续写——动物描写
技法指导
读后续写的文章要注意以下几点：
第一点：读懂前文，把握文章的关键信息和语言特点。
第二点：按照原文中事件发生的逻辑性，构思好情节发展，这个发展须符合情节内在的逻辑。
第三点：要注意保持卷面整洁，字体工整清晰；严格控制字数。
典例演练
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Brady is a recently retired search and rescue dog. He is not happy and misses his owner Al because Al has gone out on a rescue mission without him. Al's nephew Steve decides to take Brady along when he and his friend Zach go on an overnight hike. But suddenly Steve and Zach smelled something burning and they realized that lightning has set the woods on fire. Windblown flame had leaped from the top of one tree to another. The long dry summer had turned the forest into a tinderbox (危机四伏的地区), and the thunderstorm wasn't helping much. It had more wind and lightning than rain. Zach pulled Steve's arm. “Let's go! We can make it back to the river we crossed today.”
Brady barked_a_sharp_warning. Ahead of them lay a dense curtain of smoke across the trail. They'd never make it through that—they'd have to find another escape_route. The dog was tugging (拖，拉) at his leash (皮带) trying to draw them away from the smoke. This was what Brady was trained to do, and yet Steve was uneasy. It seemed to him they were moving away from the river.
Brady lifted his head and snuffed (出声地嗅) the smokeladen wind. Next moment, the dog bounded away and disappeared. The boys yelled and shouted for him, but he didn't come back. They had no choice but to leave him behind. Heartsick, Steve helped Zach up the slope. He couldn't blame Brady for panicking and bolting. He himself wanted to run even though he didn't have a clue which way. They hadn't gone far when there was a familiar bark, and Brady came bounding toward them.
注意：
1．所续写短文的词数应在150左右；
2．至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4．续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1：
“Where've you been？” Steve cried.
Paragraph 2：
Brady led them back down the incline and into the trees.
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Paragraph 1：
“Where've you been？” Steve cried. He bent down and held tightly to Brady,_“Never will you leave me again！” He then checked the leash to ensure that Brady wouldn't escape again. The fierce fire kept burning, straight towards their slope under the control of wind. Despair surrounded Steve and Zach. What could they do now? Surprisingly, Steve found Brady was struggling to pull him down the slope. “Where're you heading？” “Steve，” Zach said, “you have told me that Brady was a rescue dog, right? Why not give him a chance？” Steve gave it a second thought and agreed.
Paragraph 2：
Brady led them back down the incline and into the trees. The air was full of smoke,_and to their huge astonishment, Brady was leading them to an alternative escape_route,_exactly opposite to the river. After some initial hesitation, Steve chose to trust Brady. Smoke getting thicker, sight growing weaker, they ran after Brady blindly. It seemed a century had passed, a lake with a boat on its surface, came into sight. “Wow! Thank you, Brady! You saved us all！” So far, it taught us that animals are worth our trust!
总评 本篇范文在原文的基础上能够合理进行续写，通过提示句巧妙衔接所续写的下文，Paragraph 1描写了火势的严重性以及关键时刻选择相信Brady的决定，Paragraph 2描述了Brady如何帮人们脱险，全文一气呵成，续写自然。
[亮点呈现]
(1)“Never will you leave me again！”是“never”开头的否定倒装。
(2)“smoke getting thicker, sight growing weaker”，这种独立主格并列，很有气场，渲染了当时的恶劣环境。
(3)“It seemed a century had passed”，这个用“seem”描写心理活动的写法很实用。
跟踪演练
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Jack and his wife Tonya were sailing around Africa with their friends Max and Sasha. One day they saw a big fishing boat. It was moving fast.
“Hello！” they shouted. The men on the boat looked at them angrily. Max looked carefully at the boat.
“Something's wrong with their fishing net，” he said. They got nearer to the net.
“What's that？” said Tonya. “There is something in the net. It's alive.”
Very slowly they moved nearer.
“I can see it now，” said Tonya. “It's a killer_whale—it's hurt. There's blood in the water. How can we help it？”
“I can see it too. It's a baby but we must be careful，” said Max.
Jack jumped into the water, “I can get the net off its fin (鳍)，” he said.
Jack got the net off the baby killer whale. There was a big cut on its fin. It swam away. Suddenly there were other killer whales near the boat.
“Jack！” Tonya shouted. “Get in quickly.” Jack swam to the boat as fast as a fish. “That baby killer whale ... I am going to call it Lucky，” he said.
As they moved away, it began to rain harder and harder.
Jack said, “We must get away from the wind. I can see a town over there. Let's go.”
The town got nearer but the_waves got bigger. Suddenly a very big wave hit the boat.
“Is everyone OK？” shouted Jack.
“Tonya? ... She's not in the boat，” said Sasha. “She's in_the_water.”
They looked into the cold, dark water for hours. “Tonya! Say something, Tonya. Where are you？” shouted Max.
The_wind got stronger and the boat was full of water. Another big wave hit the boat.
“Jack, do you want us all to die？” said Max. “We can't do any more. Tonya is wearing a life_jacket (救生衣) and she can swim very well. Let's sail to the town.”
Moments later the boat hit a beach. They went out. Max and Sasha slept on the_beach. Jack sat near the water, looking at the sea and thinking about Tonya.
注意：
1．所续写短文的词数应为150词左右；
2．至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4．续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1：
At that time, Tonya was five hundred metres away out in the sea.
Paragraph 2：
Jack was walking along the beach and suddenly he ...
写前导读：本文是一篇记叙文。Jack和妻子Tonya在与朋友一起乘船环游非洲时冒险救下了一头虎鲸，这时突然下起雨来，风越来越大，他们的小船被海浪击中，Tonya掉进水中不见了。
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Paragraph 1：
At that time, Tonya was five hundred metres away out in the sea. A big wave came and crashed onto her, swallowing her. She struggled to come up from under the water, only to find her lifejacket gone. “Help! Anyone help！” She shouted at the top of her voice but heard nothing in response except the roaring waves. All of a sudden, she caught sight of a giant dark fish－like creature moving swiftly towards her. “A shark！” Tonya froze. “I will be killed！” The next moment, another giant wave hit her unconscious.
Paragraph 2：
Jack was walking along the beach and suddenly he spotted something like a tiny boat moving towards the_beach. “Maybe someone has picked up Tonya！” He was expecting a miracle to fall upon Tonya. “Oh, no, it wasn't a boat. It was Lucky—the injured killer_whale we had rescued！” “Why is it here？” Before Jack figured out what was happening, another killer whale came out of nowhere, holding up a person high in the air! “It's Tonya！”
课外拓展阅读——中国优秀传统文化专题练
阅读下面材料，在空白处填入适当的内容(1个单词)或括号内单词的正确形式。
In much of Asia, especially the so－called “rice bowl” cultures of China, Japan, Korea, __1__ Vietnam, food is usually eaten with chopsticks.
Chopsticks are usually two long, thin pieces of wood or bamboo. They can also be made of plastic, animal bone or metal. Sometimes chopsticks are quite artistic. Truly elegant chopsticks might __2__ (make) of gold and silver with Chinese characters. Skilled workers also combine various hardwoods and metal __3__ (create) special designs.
The Chinese have used chopsticks for five thousand years. People probably cooked their food in large pots, __4__ (use) twigs (树枝) to remove it. Over time, __5__ the population grew, people began cutting food into small pieces so it would cook more quickly. Food in small pieces could be eaten easily with twigs which __6__ (gradual) turned into chopsticks.
Some people think that the great Chinese scholar Confucius, __7__ lived from roughly 551 to 479 BC, influenced the __8__ (develop) of chopsticks. Confucius believed knives would remind people of killings and __9__ (be) too violent for use at table.
Chopsticks are not used everywhere in Asia. In India, for example, most people traditionally eat __10__ their hands.
1．________ 2.________ 3.________ 4.________
5．________ 6.________ 7.________ 8.________
9．________ 10.________
答案：1.and 2.be made 3.to create 4.using 5.as/when 6.gradually 7.who 8.development 9.were 10.with
China is the hometown of chopsticks. The invention of chopsticks reflects the wisdom of Chinese ancient people. A pair of chopsticks, though simple, can nip, pick, rip and stir food.
中国是筷子之乡。筷子的发明反映了古代中国人民的智慧。一双筷子，尽管看起来简单，但却可以夹，挑，撕开和搅拌食物。
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