句子润色用高级结构让句子靓起来.pptx

句子润色：句子润色：用高级结构让句子用高级结构让句子 靓起来靓起来l教学目标：1.用高级结构为作文提档升级l2.活学活用，能够在情境中实际运用所学知识。第二节书面表达（满分第二节书面表达（满分25分）分）假定你是李华，与留学生朋友Bob约好一起去书店，因故不能赴约。请给他写封邮件，内容包括：1.表示歉意；2.说明原因；3.另约时间。注意：1.词数100左右；2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。2016年全国卷3lDearBob,lImLiHua.YesterdayweagreedtogotothebookstoretogetheronSaturdaybutIwanttotellyouthatIcannotgotothebookstorewithyou,becauseIhavesomethingimportant.IknowIshouldkeepmypromise.Iamverysorryaboutthat.Ihopeyoucanunderstandme.lShallwegoonSundaymorning?Isuggestweshouldstartearly.Inthiswaywecanhavemoretimetoreadandselectbooks.Ifyouagree,letsmeetat8:30outsidetheschoolgate.Youcanalsochoosethetimetogotothebookstoreifyouhaveaplan.Iwillbefreeanytimeafterschoolnextweek.YourslLiHua 整篇作文缺少高级词汇、短语。句式单调，缺乏多整篇作文缺少高级词汇、短语。句式单调，缺乏多样性，简单句的大量运用给人记流水账的感觉。样性，简单句的大量运用给人记流水账的感觉。遣词造句过于平淡，叙述理由不够真诚，含糊不清遣词造句过于平淡，叙述理由不够真诚，含糊不清以我为主体，没有顾及他人的感受。以我为主体，没有顾及他人的感受。正文第一段结尾结构松散，不够紧凑，上下文缺乏正文第一段结尾结构松散，不够紧凑，上下文缺乏巧妙连接，表达过于口语化。部分句子不符合英式表达，巧妙连接，表达过于口语化。部分句子不符合英式表达，如如I hope you can understand me.完全是汉语思维完全是汉语思维的产物。的产物。综上可知，语言平淡、中式英语思维、上下综上可知，语言平淡、中式英语思维、上下文缺乏连贯性是制约考生取得高分的关键因文缺乏连贯性是制约考生取得高分的关键因素。素。策略1：特殊句式风景独好l1使用强调句:用用do,does,did强调一般时强调一般时态的谓语动词态的谓语动词;用用it is.that.强调谓语之强调谓语之外的各种句子成分。外的各种句子成分。lThosewholikereadingextensivelysaywegetourknowledgethroughreading.Thosewholikereadingextensivelysayit isthroughreadingthatwegetourknowledge.Thosewholikereadingextensivelysaywedogetourknowledgethroughreading.举一反三l您给了我们很多的知识和快乐！(梅二检)Itisyouwho/thatgiveussomuchknowledgeandhappiness.Youdogiveussomuchknowledgeandhappiness.Itisyourunreserved(无保留的）helpthatenablesmetoobtainthissplendid（极好的）opportunityoffurthereducation.2使用倒装句lThelibraryistotheeastoftheteachingbuilding.Totheeastoftheteachingbuildingisthelibrary.只有用这种方法我们才可以学好英语。只有用这种方法我们才可以学好英语。Only in this way can we learn English well.l我不仅取得了好成绩，而且交到了很多好朋友。（梅一检）举一反三NotonlyhaveIobtainedtheexcellentacademicperformance,butalsoIhavemadelotsofgoodfriends3使用虚拟语气lObviously,itshightimeforustotakesomemeasurestosolvetheproblem.Obviously,itshightimethatwetooksomemeasurestosolvetheproblemWehavedonetheworkwellwithyourhelp.Without/butforyourhelp,Wecouldnothavedonetheworkwellwithyourhelp.IcantimaginewhatIwouldbelikewithoutthem.4使用with的复合结构:介词with+宾语后接非谓语（动名词、现在分词、不定式、过去分词）、名词、形容词、副词并构成逻辑上主谓关系的结构。lwiththetechnologydeveloping,thehumanlivingenvironmenthasbecomeworseandworse由于有个重要的会要参加，我不能和你一起去书店了。Withanimportantmeetingtoattend,Icannotgotothebookstorewithyou.策略2：活用非谓语，句句精彩l1运用非谓语动词整合简单句，提升表达档次（1）IhaveagoodcommandofEnglish.(2)ItmakesiteasyformetocommunicatewithnativespeakersofEnglish.IhaveagoodcommandofEnglish,makingiteasyformetocommunicatewithnativespeakersofEnglish.举一反三lInthispicture,amotherbirdstaysinhernestinabigtree.shewatchesherbabiesflyingaway.Inthispicture,amotherbirdstaysinhernestinabigtree,watchingherbabiesflyingaway.Allthepeopleherelikethenovel.ItiswrittenbyTom.AllthepeopleherelikethenovelwrittenbyTom.2运用非谓语动词简化复合句，使语言简练lIfyouwanttotravelaroundthedowntownarea,youdbetterhireastreetbike.lWantingtotravelaroundthedowntownarea,youdbetterhireastreetbike.Aftertheyvisitedthelab,thevisitorswenttothelibrary.Havingvisitedthelab,thevisitorswenttothelibrary策略3使用谚语，画龙点睛l谚语的准确使用也可以为文章增色。策略4运用从句，丰富内涵l通过合并意义相关的几个句子，用一定的连接方式连接起来，或通过紧凑，去掉一些多余的成分，避免冗长累赘、松散无力，使句子凝练，层次清晰。例如：lSomestudentsareinterestedintheactivity.Theyarewelcometotakepart.Studentswhoareinterestedintheactivityarewelcometotakepart.背熟这10篇优秀范文，2017高考英语写作轻松得20+lThatisowingto（因为）thefactthat（同位语从句）myyoungerbrothersuddenlyfellillandwastakentoahospitalthismorning.(2道歉信)Besides,thesuccessstoriesofworld-famouspeoplearealsoattractivetome,whichhelpmelearnalotfromthem.（6建议信）IkeepwonderinghowyoufeelaboutyourschoollifeinBeijing.（7求助信）第二节书面表达（满分第二节书面表达（满分25分）分）假定你是李华，与留学生朋友Bob约好一起去书店，因故不能赴约。请给他写封邮件，内容包括：1.表示歉意；2.说明原因；3.另约时间。注意：1.词数100左右；2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。2016年全国卷3lDearBob,lImLiHua.YesterdayweagreedtogotothebookstoretogetheronSaturdaybutIwanttotellyouthatIcannotgotothebookstorewithyou,becauseIhavesomethingimportant.IknowIshouldkeepmypromise.Iamverysorryaboutthat.Ihopeyoucanunderstandme.lShallwegoonSundaymorning?Isuggestweshouldstartearly.Inthiswaywecanhavemoretimetoreadandselectbooks.Ifyouagree,letsmeetat8:30outsidetheschoolgate.Youcanalsochoosethetimetogotothebookstoreifyouhaveaplan.Iwillbefreeanytimeafterschoolnextweek.YourslLiHuaBeautify it