如何在高考英语作文中增加细节市公开课一等奖百校联赛获奖课件.pptx

Howtoaddreasonabledetailstoyourarticle第1页假定你是李华。上周日在地铁站捡到了英假定你是李华。上周日在地铁站捡到了英国人国人Steven 护照。请你用英语给你市某英文护照。请你用英语给你市某英文报社编辑写一封信，内容包含：报社编辑写一封信，内容包含：1.简述时间过程简述时间过程;2.交代护摄影关信息交代护摄影关信息;3.委托报社登载招领启事委托报社登载招领启事.注意注意:1.词数词数100左右左右 2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。广东一模书面表示广东一模书面表示第2页一个问题一个问题主体信息写完往往只有60-70个字，不足100词，怎么填补词数？需要“适当增加细节，以使行文连贯”。第3页Deareditor,ImLiHua,ahighschoolstudentinourcity.Imwritingtotellyouapieceofurgentinformation.IpickedupapassportlastSundayinthesubwaystationwhenIwastakingaridehome.TherewasnobodyaroundwhenIfounditonawaitingbench.TheownerofitisStevenwhocomesfromEngland.Havinglostthepassport,hemustbeveryanxious,butIhavenoideahowtoreturnittohim.SoIneedyourhelp.Iwishyoucouldpostanoticeonyournewspapertotellhimaboutthemissingpassport,sothathecangetitback.Iwouldappreciateitifyoucoulddomethefavor.Imlookingforwardtoyourreply.Yours,LiHua结结果果交际语交际语心理心理感受感受详细化详细化同位语同位语原因原因第4页怎样适当增加细节怎样适当增加细节增加同位语补全前因后果或目适当将写作内容具体化写出个人感受、评价或后果补充功能性（交际性）语言第5页Whatkindofinformationcanoftenbeaddedtoyourarticle?1增加同位语增加同位语1IamLiHua,_(我们学校学生会主席我们学校学生会主席)./_(来来自中国一位交换生自中国一位交换生).2.Iwanttohaveapenfriend,_(希望是一位跟我有相同兴趣女孩希望是一位跟我有相同兴趣女孩).Chairman of the Students Union of my school.an exchange student from China.hopefully a girl with interests similar to mine.第6页2.补充前因后果或目_(因为知道你对中国传统文化很感兴趣因为知道你对中国传统文化很感兴趣），Iamwritingtoinviteyoutoparticipateinthisactivity._(为了取得一些实践经验为了取得一些实践经验)Implanningtotakeapart-timejobinaforeigncompany.(1)KnowingthatyoushowgreatinterestinChinesetraditionalculture,(2)Inordertogetsomepracticalexperience,_(因为我有过丢身份证经历），IcanfeelhowanxiousMrStevenwillbenow.(3)SinceIhavetheexperienceoflosingmyIDcard,第7页（1)Theactivitywillbeheld_(详细时间、地点）详细时间、地点）(2)IknowtheownerisSteven_(相关身份信相关身份信息息)3When I received the dictionary,I found that _(详细存在问题详细存在问题如错印、缺页等如错印、缺页等)3.适当将写作内容详细化适当将写作内容详细化from9a.m.to10a.m.onApril11inClassroom501.fromEngland,aged38,married.thereweresomemisprintsandpagesfrom23-45weremissing.第8页4增加结果或者是效果增加结果或者是效果(1)Ithinkitisagoodchancetoappreciatelocaloperas,_(这必将有利于你学到更多中国文化这必将有利于你学到更多中国文化）(2)Wecansetoutearly,_(方便我方便我们有更多时间阅读和挑选图书们有更多时间阅读和挑选图书）(3)Therearequiteafewmissingpages,_(变得无法使用变得无法使用)sothatwecanhavemoretimetoreadandselectbookswhichwillsurelyhelpyoulearnmoreaboutChineseculture.makingitimpossibletouse.第9页1_（假如（假如你能帮我这个忙，我将不胜感激你能帮我这个忙，我将不胜感激（2）_（期待着你早日回复）（期待着你早日回复）5.补充功效性（交际性）语言补充功效性（交际性）语言(3)_(假如有什么能帮到你，请不要犹豫告诉我）假如有什么能帮到你，请不要犹豫告诉我）Iwouldgreatlyappreciateitifyoucoulddomethefavour.Lookingforwardtoyourearlyreply.IfthereisanythingIcandoforyou,pleasedonthesitatetoletmeknow.第10页practice(addreasonabledetails）1.ImLiHua,_.(同位语同位语)2.Imwritingtoaskyoutohelpmefindtheownerofapassport,_.(详详细起源等细起源等)3Withcaution,Iopenedtheplasticbag,_.（结果）（结果）4 Last week,I bought an English dictionary from your online bookstore _(目标目标/原因原因)5_(若你能考虑我提议，我若你能考虑我提议，我将不胜感激将不胜感激).第11页假如你是李华，你英国朋友假如你是李华，你英国朋友Peter来信向你咨来信向你咨询怎样才能学好汉字。请你依据以下关键点写询怎样才能学好汉字。请你依据以下关键点写封回信。封回信。关键点：关键点：1、参加汉字学习班。、参加汉字学习班。2、看汉字书刊、电视。、看汉字书刊、电视。3、学唱汉字歌曲。、学唱汉字歌曲。4、交中国朋友。、交中国朋友。注意：注意：1.词数：词数：100左右。左右。2.可适当增加细可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。节，以使行文连贯。3.开头语已为你写好开头语已为你写好.Dear Peter,Im glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on how to learn Chinese well.第12页 Here are a few suggestions.First,it is important to take a Chinese course.Then,it also helps to watch TV and read books,newspapers,and magazines in Chinese.Besides,it should be a good idea to learn and sing Chinese songs.In addition,You can also make more Chinese friends.第13页 Dear Peter,Im glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on how to learn Chinese well.Here are a few suggestions.First,it is important to take a Chinese course,as youll be able to learn from the teachers and practice with your fellow students.Then,it also helps to watch TV and read books,newspapers,and magazines in Chinese whenever possible.Besides,it should be a good idea to learn and sing Chinese songs,because by doing so youll learn and remember Chinese words more easily.In addition,You can also make more Chinese friends.They will tell you a lot about China and help you learn Chinese.Try writing to me in Chinese next time.Best wishes Li Hua第14页(全国课标卷全国课标卷)假定你是李华，暑假想去一家外假定你是李华，暑假想去一家外贸企业兼职，已写好申请书和个人简历贸企业兼职，已写好申请书和个人简历（resumeresume）。给外教）。给外教Ms JenkinsMs Jenkins写信，请她修写信，请她修改所附材料文字和格式（改所附材料文字和格式（formatformat）。）。注意：注意：1.1.词数词数100100左右；左右；2.2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。第15页Im your student Li Hua.Im applying for a part-time job at a foreign company in my city during the summer vacation.Could you correct the language and the format of the application letter and resume I have written?They are in the attachment.第16页 Dear Peter,Im glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on how to learn Chinese well.Here are a few suggestions.First,it is important to take a Chinese course,as youll be able to learn from the teachers and practice with your fellow students.Then,it also helps to watch TV and read books,newspapers,and magazines in Chinese whenever possible.Besides,it should be a good idea to learn and sing Chinese songs,because by doing so youll learn and remember Chinese words more easily.In addition,You can also make more Chinese friends.They will tell you a lot about China and help you learn Chinese.Try writing to me in Chinese next time.Best wishes Li Hua第17页并不是每篇文章都需要使用到这并不是每篇文章都需要使用到这5种增加细种增加细节方法节方法依据实际，进行合理、适当增加依据实际，进行合理、适当增加第18页第19页