BoUnit高一英语基础英语写作训练.ppt

BoUnit高一英语基础英语写作训练(高一英语高一英语)基础英语写作训练基础英语写作训练-Book1Unit2Writing(TextbookP16)2Main Purpose&Background:We have finished writing this essay.Manystudents did very well in this writing practice.But atthe same time there are quite a few students who dont know how to add details properly based on thegiven information so that their English sentencesare too simple(without any supporting sentences)small mistakes about the five basic English sentence structures can be frequently(频繁地频繁地)found.To improve this situation,I designed this lecture.And I do hope you can make amazingprogress through this lesson.Study smartly&good luck to you all!3书面表达书面表达1评分原则评分原则（1）本题总分为）本题总分为25分，按分，按5个档次给分。个档次给分。（2）评分时，首先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所）评分时，首先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。最后给分。（3）词数词数少于少于80和多于和多于120的，从总分中减去的，从总分中减去2分。分。（4）评分时，应注意的主要内容为：）评分时，应注意的主要内容为：内容要点、应用词内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性、上下文的连贯性及语言汇和语法结构的数量和准确性、上下文的连贯性及语言的得体性。的得体性。（5）拼写及标点符号拼写及标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面，评分时，是语言准确性的一个方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及词汇应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。用法均可接受。（6）如果）如果书写书写较差，以致影响交际，将分数降低一个档较差，以致影响交际，将分数降低一个档次。次。（7）如果）如果时态时态出错较多，从得分中扣除出错较多，从得分中扣除3-5分。分。（8）用铅笔答题，不给分。）用铅笔答题，不给分。42各档次的给分范围和要求各档次的给分范围和要求（1）第五档：）第五档：2125分。分。完全达到了试题规定的任务，完全达到了预期的写作目的。完全达到了试题规定的任务，完全达到了预期的写作目的。覆盖所有覆盖所有内容要点内容要点。应用了较多的应用了较多的语法结构和词汇语法结构和词汇。语法结构或词汇方面有语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂的结构，但为尽力使用较复杂的结构或较高级词汇所致。或较高级词汇所致。具备较强的具备较强的语言应用能力语言应用能力。有效地使用了语句间的有效地使用了语句间的连接成分连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。，使全文结构紧凑。（2）第四档：）第四档：1620分。分。完全达到了试题规定的任务，达到了预期的写作目的。完全达到了试题规定的任务，达到了预期的写作目的。虽漏掉虽漏掉1、2个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容。个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容。应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试较语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试较复杂的语法结构或词汇所致。复杂的语法结构或词汇所致。应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。5 高考英语书面表达四：句子的写作（简单句）高考英语书面表达四：句子的写作（简单句）在认识了高考英语作文的特点，以及学习了如何在认识了高考英语作文的特点，以及学习了如何进行英语作文的写作之后，我们很多同学还是会进行英语作文的写作之后，我们很多同学还是会发现很多同学的作文，还是会出现不少错误，不发现很多同学的作文，还是会出现不少错误，不能写好句子就是问题之一。英语完整意思的表达能写好句子就是问题之一。英语完整意思的表达是依靠句子来完成的。而要想写出漂亮的英文作是依靠句子来完成的。而要想写出漂亮的英文作文，就需使用正确无误的、符合英文文法的句子。文，就需使用正确无误的、符合英文文法的句子。从用途来分，句子可以分为从用途来分，句子可以分为陈述句陈述句，疑问句疑问句，祈祈使句使句和和感叹句感叹句；从结构来分，句子可分为从结构来分，句子可分为简单句简单句，并列句并列句，复合复合句句和和并列复合句并列复合句。然而，英文句子千变万化，但无论怎样，都离不然而，英文句子千变万化，但无论怎样，都离不开开简单句的这五种基本句型简单句的这五种基本句型。6五种基本句型：五种基本句型：（1）主语）主语+谓语谓语(vi.)My brother studies hard.请根据以下汉语提示请根据以下汉语提示细化细化该句：该句：我哥哥学习特别努力。他总是充分利用每一分钟我哥哥学习特别努力。他总是充分利用每一分钟学习功课，他梦想将来能就读于清华大学。我真学习功课，他梦想将来能就读于清华大学。我真为他感到骄傲！为他感到骄傲！My brother studies very hard.He always makes good use of every minute to study his lessons and he dreams of being a student of Qinghua University.Im really proud of him!7（2）主语）主语+连系动词连系动词+表语表语 Jerry is an English teacher.请根据以下汉语提示请根据以下汉语提示细化细化该句：该句：Jerry是一位很优秀的英语教师，他来自澳大利是一位很优秀的英语教师，他来自澳大利亚。亚。Jerry从从2014年开始教我们英语，在学习方年开始教我们英语，在学习方面他严格要求我们，在生活方面他极其关心我们，面他严格要求我们，在生活方面他极其关心我们，他在我们每一个学生心中很受欢迎。他在我们每一个学生心中很受欢迎。Jerry is an excellent teacher of English,who comes from Australia.He has been teaching us English since 2014.He is not only strict with us in study but also cares for us in life.He is very popular with every one of us.8（3）主语）主语+谓语谓语+宾语宾语 Translate the following Chinese sentence into English orally,using as many different verbs as possible:我弟弟非常喜欢数学。我弟弟非常喜欢数学。My younger brother likes maths very much.My younger brother loves/enjoys maths very much.My younger brother is crazy about/cares for maths very much.Maths is my younger brothers favourite subject.What my younger brother likes most at school is maths.9链接高考（链接高考（2007全国卷全国卷 I）：）：爱好（旅游、运动、宠物等）爱好（旅游、运动、宠物等）I want to have a pen friend who is interested in traveling,sports and keeping pets.要点齐全、语言正确要点齐全、语言正确10 Improve it!I want to have a pen friend who likes sports,（比如篮球和足球。）（比如篮球和足球。）爱好运动爱好运动such as basketball and football.Or:such as outdoor activities,like mountain-climbing and hiking.11 Improve it!I like to seek a pen pal who is interested in travelling just like me，（以便于我们可，（以便于我们可以在我们的电子邮件中分享旅游经历。）以在我们的电子邮件中分享旅游经历。）爱好旅游爱好旅游so that we can share traveling experiences in our e-mails.12 Improve it!I have another hobby that is keeping pets.（我在家养了一只可（我在家养了一只可爱的狗狗已经爱的狗狗已经3年了年了)喜欢养宠物喜欢养宠物I have kept a lovely dog at home for 3 years.13（4）主语）主语+谓语谓语+间接宾语间接宾语(sb.)+直接宾语直接宾语(sth.)汉译英：汉译英：1.Jerry教我们英语。教我们英语。2.昨天我把我的书借给了她。昨天我把我的书借给了她。Jerry teaches us EnglishJerry teaches our English.(WRONG!)Yesterday I lent my book to her.I lent her my book yesterday.14（5）主语）主语+谓语谓语+宾语宾语+宾补宾补 汉译英：汉译英：1.我经常请他帮我复习功课。我经常请他帮我复习功课。2.我们选他做我们的班长。我们选他做我们的班长。I often ask him to help me with my homework.(宾语补足语宾语补足语)We made(或或chose)him our monitor.(宾语补足语宾语补足语)15巩固性练习：分析句子并改错巩固性练习：分析句子并改错(每句只有一处错误每句只有一处错误)1.There was no people to take care of the children.2.There are many students in our class like music and sports.3.There is too much litter throwing here and there,which makes tourists disgusted.4.There are a desk,a sofa and two chairs in the room.5.Mr.Wang went to bed until 12 last night.was-werelike前加上前加上whothrowing-thrownare-isMr.Wang did not go to bed until 12 last night.或或 Mr.Wang stayed up until 12 last night.166.When one has knowledge,he can do what he wanted to do.7.When I got to the station yesterday afternoon,the train has left.8.Could you please tell me where shall we meet tomorrow9.As we all know,watch TV too much is bad for our eyes.10.Though we were very tired,so we felt very happy.wanted-wantshas-hadwhere we shall meetwatch-watching删去删去so17简单句经常出现的错误：简单句经常出现的错误：1.He closed the door and hurries away to class.2.She disagrees this plan.That is to say,she strongly against it.3.In their opinions,Lesson Nine is more easier than Lesson Ten.4.I received a letter from Jim in last week.5.As we all know,China is no longer what used to be.hurries-hurrieddisagrees后加后加with;strongly前加前加isopinions-opinion;删去删去more或将或将more-much删去删去inwhat后加上后加上it186.Today there are still some students dont know how to use English dictionaries.7.There are many attractive places of interest in Henan Province.They are often paid a visit by tourists at home and abroad.8.Now I eager to stay at your home for a week.By the way,is your school very convenient to godont前加上前加上whovisit后加上后加上toeager前加上前加上am;go后加上后加上to199.We should not look down at the homeless.Instead,wed better treat them in a friend way.10.Teenagers should be frequently encouraged by their teachers and learned a great deal from failure.11.Peter is very fond of Chinese traditional customs.In addition to,he is crazy about Chinese Kungfu(功夫功夫).at-on或或upon;friend-friendlylearned-learn删去删去to2012.I am a high school student.A few days before,one of my good friend told me that he was going to stop the school.He said that he wanted to start his own business.I tried to get him change his mind,but I failed.(1).before-ago(2)friend-friends(3)删去删去school前的前的the(4)him后加上后加上to21书面表达强化训练书面表达强化训练段落练笔（将下列一段话翻段落练笔（将下列一段话翻译成英语）：译成英语）：小鹏一家有五个人。他们都有自己小鹏一家有五个人。他们都有自己的爱好。他的父母喜欢打羽毛球。爷爷的爱好。他的父母喜欢打羽毛球。爷爷奶奶喜欢晚饭后散步。小鹏喜欢集邮。奶奶喜欢晚饭后散步。小鹏喜欢集邮。几乎每天晚上小鹏的爷爷奶奶都给他讲几乎每天晚上小鹏的爷爷奶奶都给他讲故事。他们过着幸福的生活。故事。他们过着幸福的生活。22一般表达一般表达 Xiaopengs family has five people.They all have their hobbies.His parents like badminton(羽毛球羽毛球).His grandparents like to have a walk after supper.Xiaopeng likes collecting stamps.His grandparents tell him a story almost every evening.They live a happy life.23高级表达高级表达 There are five people in Xiaopengs family,including himself.All of them have their own hobbies.For example,his parents like badminton and his grandparents enjoy walking after supper.Collecting stamps is Xiaopengs favourite hobby and to his great joy,his parents tell him a story almost every evening.What a happy life they lead!24教师点评教师点评 以上两段都是使用简单句进行表述，但是读起以上两段都是使用简单句进行表述，但是读起来效果大不一样。来效果大不一样。一般表达中存在两大问题：一般表达中存在两大问题：(1)是是主语主语的表达过于单调，从头到尾使用主语的表达过于单调，从头到尾使用主语加谓语的单一模式，平铺直叙，让人加谓语的单一模式，平铺直叙，让人读起来平淡无味；读起来平淡无味；(2)是是谓语的使用谓语的使用过过于简单，三句中的于简单，三句中的“喜欢喜欢”均使用均使用like一词，不能不使读者感到作者的词汇一词，不能不使读者感到作者的词汇量的量的贫乏贫乏。以上两个问题导致整个段。以上两个问题导致整个段落落表达单调、语句呆板、档次低下表达单调、语句呆板、档次低下。25 而看完一般表达到后再读高级表达，给人的感觉而看完一般表达到后再读高级表达，给人的感觉是耳目一新，越读越有味。主语的表达是耳目一新，越读越有味。主语的表达新颖别致新颖别致，谓语的使用谓语的使用灵活多变灵活多变，使整个段落，使整个段落活了活了起来，起来，美美了了起来！假如你是阅卷老师，难道你不给这样的起来！假如你是阅卷老师，难道你不给这样的表达以高分吗？表达以高分吗？综观以上高级表达，它有综观以上高级表达，它有三大亮点三大亮点：1.主语的表达要主语的表达要多样化多样化。如高级表达中的。如高级表达中的all of them,还有还有both his father and mother,both of them,they each like,each of them等。等。2.谓语的表达谓语的表达灵活灵活。如喜欢一词的表达用了。如喜欢一词的表达用了like,enjoy,be fond of,go in for,be crazy about等。等。3.简单句的简单句的句型变换多样句型变换多样。如。如there be 句型，动句型，动名词做主语，感叹句、倒装句、强调句型等。名词做主语，感叹句、倒装句、强调句型等。26书面表达原题：书面表达原题：假定你是李华，从小喜爱大熊猫(panda),一直通过有关网站(website)关注三年前在美国圣迭戈动物园出生的大熊猫“苏琳”和她母亲“白云”。现在苏琳即将三岁。请根据以下要点给动物园 工作人员写一封信：1.自我介绍；2.祝贺苏琳生日；3.感谢工作人员；4.索取苏琳三岁生日照。注意：1.词数100左右；2.可以适当增加细节(How），以使行文连贯；3.开头语已为你写好。First,were going to enjoy one possible version.While reading it,please try to find which sentences are added details based on the four main ponits.OK27优秀范文欣赏、研读：优秀范文欣赏、研读：Dear Sir/Madam,Greetings from China!Im Li Hua,a student in Sichuan.Ive been a panda lover since I was a child.About three years ago I was delighted to learn that Baiyun gave birth to her daughter Sulin and I have been watching her grow on your website.Now shes going to be three.Id like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work,because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the USA.28 By the way,could I have a photo of Sulintaken on her third birthday Thank you verymuch in advance.Yours truly,Li Hua (共110 words)29Dear Sir/Madam,Greetings from China!Im Li Hua,a student _ Sichuan.Ive been a panda lover _ I was a child.About three years ago I was _ (delight)to learn that Baiyun gave birth to her daughter Sulin and I have been watching her grow _ your website.Now shes going to be three.Id like to _ her a happy birthday and to _ my thanks to you for your hard work,_ _ which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and _(health)life in the USA.insincedelighted onwishexpressbecauseof healthy30 _ the way,could I have a photo of Sulin_(take)on her _(three)birthday Thank you very much _ advance(=ahead of time/schedule).Yours truly,Li Hua (共110 words)Bytaken third in31Written homework for today:Part1:Translate the following into English.1.为了学习好，我们需要每天锻炼身体。为了学习好，我们需要每天锻炼身体。2.放学之后，我总是通过无线电收听英语节放学之后，我总是通过无线电收听英语节目。这大大提高了我的英语听力水平。目。这大大提高了我的英语听力水平。3.他总是乐于助人，很受同学们欢迎。他总是乐于助人，很受同学们欢迎。4.我们每一个人都应努力使地球变成一个更我们每一个人都应努力使地球变成一个更适于居住的地方。适于居住的地方。5.上个月我把一本书忘在了你家。你能不能上个月我把一本书忘在了你家。你能不能把它给我邮寄回来？把它给我邮寄回来？32*Part2:Practise writing an English essay.假设你是李华，你的美国朋友假设你是李华，你的美国朋友Tom上月来上月来到北京学习。七月份你将去北京参加暑假到北京学习。七月份你将去北京参加暑假中学生英语演讲比赛中学生英语演讲比赛(speech contest),你你在资料搜集、语言运用等方面遇到了困难。在资料搜集、语言运用等方面遇到了困难。请根据以下要点给请根据以下要点给Tom写一封电子邮件：写一封电子邮件：1.询问询问Tom的生活和学习情况；的生活和学习情况；2.谈谈你的困难并请谈谈你的困难并请Tom帮忙；帮忙；3.告诉告诉Tom你打算赛后去看望他。你打算赛后去看望他。注意：注意：1.词数：词数：120-150；2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯33制作单位：河南省巩义市第二高级中学东校区制作单位：河南省巩义市第二高级中学东校区工作人员：赵俊雅工作人员：赵俊雅录制时间：录制时间：2015年年10月月16日日341.To study well,we need to take exercise every day(或或daily).2.After school,I always listen to English programmes on the radio.My English has been greatly improved in this way(或或by doing so).3.He is always ready to help others,so he is4.very popular with his classmates.5.Every one of us should do what we can to 6.make the earth a more comfortable place to live in.7.I left a book behind at your home last month.Would you please be so kind as to8.send it back to me35教学资料整理仅供参考，