英语作文写作之Revising Essays 修改.ppt

,*,单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,Revising Essays,修改，润色你的作文,How to evaluate an essay,？,如何评价一篇作文？,Unity,完整，统一,Support,支持,Coherence,一致性,Sentence Skills,润色句子,Unity Support Coherence Sentence Skills,Unity,完整，统一,Advance a,single point,.,只阐述一个观点,Stick,to that point.,直入主题,Make sure all sentences,Are relevant,.,确信每个句子都和主题有关,Unity,Support Coherence Sentence Skills,Sticking to the Point,The Problems of Being Unemployed.,No source of income,Pleasures of having more free time,Social pressures on the unemployed,Which of the above doesnt stick to the point?,Unity,Support Coherence Sentence Skills,Support,支持，支撑,Give specific evidence to support your topic sentence and thesis.,给于特别的证据或是迹象来支持你的观点,Vivid details,生动，清晰的细节,Unity,Support,Coherence,Sentence Skills,Support,Which of the following provides better support?,看一看哪个提供了更好的例子来支撑他们的观点,Unity,Support,Coherence,Sentence Skills,Blaming others is another negative and unproductive way to cope with disappointment.The all-too-common response of pointing the finger at someone else doesnt help.This posture will only lead to anger,resentment,and further unhappiness.Disappointment in another persons performance doesnt indicate the performer is at fault.Perhaps expectations were too high or there could have been a misunderstanding.,Unity,Support,Coherence,Sentence Skills,The positive way to react to disappointment is to use it as a chance for growth.Helen,the women who wasnt promoted,could have handled her disappointment by looking at other options.If her boss doesnt recognize her talent and hard work,perhaps she could transfer to another department.Or she could ask the boss how to improve her performance so that she could be a,shoo-in,for the next promotion.,Unity,Support,Coherence,Sentence Skills,Support,Which provides better support?Why?,Unity,Support,Coherence,Sentence Skills,Coherence,统一性,Is the essay organized in a logical or clear way?,Is the essay easy to follow?Does the author use transitional words to act as a guidepost,路标,for the reader?,Unity Support,Coherence,Sentence Skills,Coherence,Television makes children passive.,Worst of all,TV presents a false picture of reality that leaves viewers frustrated.,Television discourages communication.,Unity Support,Coherence,Sentence Skills,Coherence,Watching T.V has the value of sheer relaxation.,In addition to being relaxing,television is entertaining.,Most important,television is educational.,Unity Support,Coherence,Sentence Skills,Sentence Skills,Revising sentences,润色句子,Formatting,格式化,Run-ons and fragments,Unity Support Coherence,Sentence Skills,Revising Essays,Unity-sticking to one point,Support-specific details,Coherence-organized logically?Flow?,Sentence Skills-formatting,punctuation,spelling,sentence variety.,Activity:Revising Essays,