专题七-读后续写-06--【技法二--巧构思--续情节】(原卷版).docx

年份
卷别
主题语境
词数
2022年
I卷
特殊教育教师鼓励学生勇敢接受挑战
阅读理解语篇312词
续写要求两部分，共150左右
II卷
特殊教育教师鼓励学生勇敢接受挑战
阅读理解语篇312词
续写要求两部分，共150左右
2021年
I卷
母亲节
阅读理解语篇316词
续写要求两部分，共150左右
II卷
母亲节
阅读理解语篇316词
续写要求两部分，共150左右
1.读后续写的选材聚焦社会关爱、友谊和亲情，传递鼓励、关爱、理解、沟通、勇气等信息。内容贴近学生生活，能够引起共鸣，可以顺利展开写作。
2.以情感类话题复习为主，注重学生个人的自我品德的培养和修养提升，构建积极向上的心理暗示。
3.提升阅读速度和质量，重点训练阅读过程中对于有助于展开续写活动的信息的提炼和梳理。
4. 把握短文关键信息和语言特点的能力，重视开头语的提示作用。段落开头语的前后和上下衔接也很重要，考生需要注意整篇的篇章结构来续写构思，理顺上下文逻辑关系，短文内语句要连贯、有序。
5. 注重细节，尤其是注重写作视角。不能照搬照抄备考时背诵的心理描写、环境描写等好的句子照搬，要根据具体实际来选择用哪种叙述方式和进行适当改写。

题型解读
读后续写要求考生在读完一篇350词以内的阅读材料后，根据材料内容及所给段落开头语续
写两个段落（共150词左右），与材料组成一篇逻辑顺畅、情节和结构完整的文章。读后续写的阅读材料一般都是记叙文，考生需要续写的内容往往是故事的高潮和结尾，所以考生要按照原文本的思路、脉络和情感，甚至语言的表达特点进行写作。
读后续写对考生的阅读能力、词汇储备以及谋篇布局的能力提出了较高的要求。那么，我们
如何才能写好读后续写呢？下面，我们以2021年新高考I卷的读后续写为例，进行说明。
A MOTHER'S DAY SURPRISE
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother's Day.How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed.They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge.They had watched their mother in the kitchen.There was nothing to it.Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
The big day came at last.The alarm rang at 6a.m.The pair went down the stairs quietly to the
kitchen.They decided to boil the porridge first.They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil
while they made the French toast.Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk.Jenna found
the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture.Next，Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat
up the frying pan.Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread.The pan was too hot
and the bread turned black within seconds.Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the
other slice of bread.This time，she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake.The next minute，the
porridge boiled over and put out the fire.Jenna panicked.Thankfully，Jeff stayed calm and turned off
the gas quickly.But the stove was a mess now.Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to
cook the rest of the porridge.But Jeff's hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain.Jenna
made him put his hand in cold water.Then she caught the smell of burning.Oh dear！The piece of
bread in the pan had turned black as well.
注意
1. 续写词数应为150左右。
2. 请按如下格式作答。
As the twins looked around them in disappointment，their father appeared.____________________
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The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.__________________________
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技法二 巧构思，续情节
在理清所给故事的基本脉络之后，我们就要开始写作了。在写作时，我们要依据所给材料的
故事脉络，巧妙地预设故事的走向，合理地解决故事中的冲突，最后达到一个完美的结局。我们可以根据如下步骤构思续写情节：
步骤1 读懂续写首句，判定故事走向
续写首句为我们提供了续写的基本依据。续写第一段的内容往往是事件的高潮，我们要利用
续写首句合理推测相关人物解决问题的具体方式和实施过程。另外，要注意的是，续写第一段的
最后一句所陈述的内容必须能够顺畅地过渡到续写第二段首句。而续写第二段是整个故事的结
尾部分。故事的结尾必须是续写第一段的活动所产生的正常的、合理的结果。
本篇续写第一段首句表示"当双胞胎失望地环顾四周时，他们的父亲出现了”，再根据续写第
二段首句 "这对双胞胎把早餐端到楼上，叫醒了他们的母亲"，我们可以推测，双胞胎在父亲的指导下，完成了早餐的制作。那么，在续写第一段的时候，我们就可以描述双胞胎是如何在父亲的指导下做好早餐的。根据续写第二段首句可知，双胞胎把早餐做好了，并且送到了母亲的床前。这时，我们可以从母亲的心理活动、面部表情、语言、动作等方面去描述母亲的反应。
步骤2 预设核心冲突，搭建故事框架
故事的发展是靠矛盾冲突（或核心问题）推进的，我们要从故事中挖掘核心冲突，分析这个冲突是如何产生的。通常情况下，核心冲突的爆发在前文会有提示，如何解决这个问题前文也会有相应的暗示，这就是我们所说的伏笔。伏笔也暗示了故事的发展方向，发现伏笔并在续写中揭开伏笔可以增强文章的逻辑性。
线索1 首段伏笔
文章首段可能会出现导致核心冲突产生的原因，因此我们在阅读的过程中，要善于发现这些
伏笔。本篇读后续写材料第一段中的"They had watched their mother in the kitchen.There was nothing to it.Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do"暗示双胞胎曾经看过母亲做饭，他们感觉非常自信，但实际上，他们并没有实际的操作经验，这就是他们在厨房中出乱子的主要原因。
线索2 情节伏笔
核心冲突的解决方案可能在故事的中间段落出现。中间段落是故事发展的过程，在这个过程
中，作者也可以设置解决核心冲突的伏笔。本篇读后续写材料中的"The pair went down the stairs
quietly to the kitchen"暗示了两个孩子不想惊动父母。结合这里说的是给妈妈的惊喜，出了问题肯
定是由爸爸来解决，这就给续写第一段中父亲的出现埋下了伏笔。
线索3 尾段伏笔
所给材料的最后一段往往说明续写内容的发展方向。本篇读后续写材料中的最后一段告诉
我们：由于双胞胎缺乏经验，在厨房里，粥从锅里溢了出来，弄得灶台全是粥，而且火也被浇灭了。此外，eff的手也被烫伤了，厨房里一团糟。通过场景的描写，作者暗示我们，离开了大人的帮助，两个孩子是不可能把早餐做好的。这就给我们续写第一段埋下了伏笔。
在把握好续写方向并明确核心冲突的解决方法后，我们可以分别对所给的两段的首句进行提
问，提出3至5个问题，然后，分别对这些问题进行回答。最后，我们可以把这些回答串联起来，这样就形成了两个段落的框架。
续写第一段
Question 1：What did the father see？ Answer 1：A mess on the stove.
Question 2：How did he feel？ Answer 2：Surprised and angry.
Question 3：What did he do to help the twins？ Answer 3：He showed them how to adjust the burner.
Question 4：What was the result？ Answer 4：A delicious breakfast was ready.
续写第二段
Question 1：What did the mother see before her？ Answer 1：Her children and the breakfast.
Question 2：How did she feel？ Answer 2：Surprised and grateful.
Question 3：What did she do？ Answer 3： She took her children in her arms.
Question 4：What did the children say？ Answer 4：Happy Mother's Day！
Question 5：How did the mother and her children feel？ Answer 5：Happy and excited.
步骤3串联文章线索，设计精彩结尾
解决了故事的核心冲突后，需要给故事一个结尾，常见的结尾方式有自然式、点题式、首尾呼应式、主题升华式和以景结情式。
结尾1 自然式
自然式结尾是指顺着原文的思路，顺势结束全文，这样的结尾比较自然。本篇读后续写材料
中描述了兄妹二人想给母亲做惊喜早餐，而由于他们没有做过早餐，把厨房弄得一团糟，最后在父亲的帮助下解决了问题，为母亲做好了早餐，所以可以将"Excited and happy，their mother ate the
breakfast and thanked the twins."作为故事的结尾，清晰明确、顺理成章。
结尾2 点题式
点题式结尾就是在结尾时用一两句话点明文章主旨，而文章的主旨一般可以通过阅读材料总
结得出。例如2020年新高考I卷的读后续写，Meredith夫人和她的孩子们想办法帮助Bernard一
家摆脱困境，并最终走上了致富之路。我们可以这样结尾"He never forgot the help from the
Meredith family，and he also did what he could to help those in need."，这样故事的主题就得以体现
了。这种卒章显志的结尾方式增加了文章的深刻性和感染力，有画龙点睛的作用。
结尾3 首尾呼应式
首尾呼应是记叙文常见的写作手法之一，首尾呼应式结尾就是指故事的结尾要与故事的开头
有一定关联。本篇读后续写首句是"The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the
surprise they were planning for Mother's Day”，我们在结尾时可以利用孩子们的愿望得以实现来呼应首句，以"How excited they were when they found they could do something for their mother."为结尾。
这种结尾方式不仅能够保证续写不偏离主题，还可以增加故事的连贯性。
结尾4 主题升华式
很多时候，一些记叙文，特别是有哲理的记叙文，会通过一个故事说明一个道理。对于这类记叙文，要善于把握它的主题，然后通过一句高度凝练的话（通常是名言或谚语）给以启示。例如2020年新高考I卷的读后续写中，可以通过"In addition to love，the most beautiful verb in the worldis help."升华乐于助人的主题，号召读者主动帮助他人。
结尾5 以景结情式
以景结情是指在叙述或抒情的过程中转而写景，以景代情作结，使短文"此时无情胜有情”。
本篇续写第二段的结尾我们可以采用以景结情的方式，通过情境的描述传递画面，表现亲子之情。
因此，我们可以这样结尾："The children said loudly，‘Happy Mother's Day！'Mother hugged them
tightly and kissed them again and again.The air in the room was filled with the happiness.

一、（2022·湖北·模拟预测）
Eight-year-old Amanda heard Mom and Dad talking about her little brother, Hyman, who was very sick and learnt that only a very costly surgery could save him. Being in heavy debt, Dad said to Mom in desperation, “Only a miracle can save him now.”
Amanda went to her bedroom and pulled a glass jar in the closet. She poured all the change out and counted it carefully. Three times. No chance here for mistakes. Carefully placing the coins back in the jar, she slipped out the back door and made her way six blocks to the pharmacy (药店).
On arriving the pharmacy, she poured her jar on the counter. The pharmacist got annoyed as she was talking to her brother, Dr. Bethune, a neurosurgery (神经外科) surgeon, who happened to be on a visit. Asked what she wanted, Amanda answered back, “My brother’s really, really sick... and I want to buy a miracle.” She explained her brother had something bad growing inside his head and needed an operation, and her Dad said only a miracle could save him. The pharmacist shook her head and said softly, “We don’t sell miracles here, little girl. I’m sorry but I can’t help you.”
Hearing this, Amanda couldn’t help wailing, tears rolling down like a broken string of beads. Witnessing this, Dr. Bethune leaned down and asked her, “How much do you have?” “One dollar and eleven cents.” Amanda responded proudly. “Well, what a coincidence,” smiled Dr. Bethune, “A dollar and eleven cents-the exact price of a miracle for your little brother.” Overjoyed, Amanda twirled and jumped.
注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph1: Dr. Bethune held her hand and said kindly, “Take me to see your brother.” __________________
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Paragraph2: “That surgery,” her Mom whispered to Amanda, “was a real miracle. I wonder how much it would have cost.” ___________________________________________________________________________________
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二、（2022·湖北武汉·模拟预测）
I was ten the summer my dad helped me buy my first ten-speed bicycle from a second-hand store. I put up $60 of my grass cutting and snow shoveling (铲) money, and my dad put up the other half. I would pay him back in installments (分期付款) over the next six months. Although it was a bit out of style, it was my ticket to the adult world.
I spent that summer and autumn riding. I was able to ride to every corner of town. However, my sister Liz, a prisoner of her five-speed bicycle, never had a chance to keep up. Just before the Christmas deadline to pay my dad back, we were hit with several snowstorms. This allowed me to shovel enough driveways to pay off my debt. I was now officially a bike owner; it was a feeling unlike any other.
While my mom and dad were fantastic parents, they always passed off gloves, sneakers, and shirts as “presents”. Then came that fateful Christmas morning, my father gave me a used portable record player. I was excited. However, my excitement was short-lived after my dad took my sister to the garage. There, on the steps, stood a brand new ten-speed bicycle. I didn’t hear her screams of joy-all I could hear was the noisy engine of the lawnmower, the endless scraping (刮擦声) of the metal snow shovel on concrete. I’d gone through far too many hours of hard work for my used bike while Liz got her shinny new machine less than a week later.
“Let’s go for a ride, Rob!” Liz sang, my dad holding the bike upright as she got on the shining leather seat.
“Too snowy to ride,” I refused, pushing the record player farther away from me.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右：
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
I seethed (生闷气) for the rest of the day. _____________________________________________________
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Reflecting on my dad’s words, I figured out what he meant. _______________________________________
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三、（2022·山东烟台·三模）
As I sat on the bus waiting to arrive at school, the sun shining, I just sat there full of excitement ready to enjoy the first day of spring. At last, the bus stopped and I started my day.
The whole day I was waiting for one thing, noon break. As the day passed by, I heard the bell rang and everyone rushed out of the door. I hurried and ate lunch just to get outside.
As soon as I was out, my close friend, Riley called me over to play basketball. We all started playing and time flew by as we heard the timekeeper yell, “10 more minutes.” From that point on, the game sped up. Score after score, the competition process was more intense. I passed it to my teammate, Austin, and he dished it back as I pulled up a shot. I felt as if the world around me were barely moving, and all I concentrated on was the ball going to the hoop (篮筐). Not knowing I was pushed back hard, I hit the ground. A huge pain entered my left ankle. I wanted to scream, but I didn’t, hearing the people around me shout for help. I just lay there as Riley came over to pick me up and Austin fetched a wheelchair from the school clinic. Both of them helped me sit on the wheelchair. It seemed like the whole school circled around me as I was being pushed away.
The moment we entered the clinic where I always felt nervous, I didn’t think my ankle hurt as badly as it did just now, so I said, “I’m okay.” Then they had to send me back to class without any treatment. The rest of the day I felt my ankle swelling (肿) up and I thought of how stupid I was to say that my ankle didn’t hurt in the clinic. “I should have gone home.” I thought to myself as I was thrown through this terrible pain. After school, I worried how to go back home.
注意：
1．续写词数应为150 左右；
2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Just then I found Riley come in with an ice pack in his hand._______________________________________
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As we went out, we were surprised to find Austin holding some medicinal oil._________________________
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四、（2022·江苏·南京师大附中三模）
Tina was seventeen years old and always wore a bright smile. This may not seem that unusual except that she suffered from a