值得再次研究的七篇六级作文(1).doc

• 1. 大学生面试
• 2. 学生选择老师时考虑的主要因素
• 3. 假冒商品/盗版
• 4. 新东方08.6模拟：出国留学（对比观点）
• 5. 新东方08.12模拟：老龄化
• 6. 新东方09.6模拟：考研人数增加（图表）
• 7. 书信：04.1， 课堂范文， 求职信P94.14

一． 面试
见蓝色书P31.31篇和讲义

二． 大学生自由选择老师
第一段
In contemporary society, an overwhelming majority of college students are beginning to be aware that there are some dramatic changes on campus. Particularly, some of them are allowed to select the teachers themselves. Undoubtedly, this change has been in the spotlight and arouses the public concern.

版本二：
In contemporary society, students in some universities have the chance to pick their own teachers and professors. This is a prevalent and pervasive issue with which a great number of college students are confronted. Undeniably, such issue has been in the focus of the public and deserves the following analysis.

批注：This is a prevalent and pervasive issue with which a great number of college students are confronted. 这是最新开发出来的套话，如果不知道第一段如何发挥的话（社会热点），此话可以当作绝佳凑字数高级句式表达。不同情况只需改变with which后的主语就可以了。比方with which our society is confronted/with which millions of families are confronted.

A multitude of factors, both individual and social, could account for the phenomenon. Initially, a qualified and popular teacher in university should be able to provide students with profound knowledge, which will undoubtedly exert a far-reaching influence on students’ development. Additionally, students tend to welcome the kind of professor who has honest and moral personality. On the contrary, an obscene teacher will no doubt bring about some adverse consequence on the students. Finally, a lecturer’s character plays an irreplaceable role in students’ choices, which means humorous and easy-going teachers are more likely to be popular among students.

第一句主题句写法有很多。也可以写为
We may attribute the factors of selecting a teacher to the following factors.
The reason for selecting teachers can be listed as follows.

三点理由分别是
1. 知识渊博 2. 诚实道德 3. 性格（举例：幽默随和）
用了无数课堂套路
希望大家好好体会

三． 盗版/假冒（见蓝色书）

四． 新东方08.6模拟：出国留学（对比观点）

内容简单化
一般六级写作的分析问题段，可以从个人和社会两大层面来构思，both individual and social。 思路是最不重要的，外语考试的作文，除了GRE和GMAT以外，考察的目标都不是思维或者分析能力，而是语言能力。所以我们的建议是：简化你的思维。一般来说，思维越复杂，语言就越难表达。大家不用为难自己。别人都想的到的观点你更要写，为什么？因为语言上来区分你们。一般来说，高手2点，一般人3点，
理由一：经济，有钱了 社会
理由二：国外教育发达 社会
理由三：可以扩大视野，增加知识面 个人
理由四：之前回国的人成功，吸引了我们 个人

而至于有人的不同意见更容易想到
1. 出国费用高，一般人承受不起
2. 国外有的大学可能质量不好
3. 不适应外国生活，而且有危险，可能obscene
4. 学生自己没有自制能力，可能会在国外堕落，如我一同学去了新西兰，夜总会。。FC个人推荐：去美国才是王道，杀G烤T才是正道，而出国的前提是背单词，大家大学什么都不要搞，背单词吧

结构模式化
一般的六级写作，都是严格遵循 提出问题-分析-解决的三段论
从近几年的文章来看，行文大多可以套用中心句+123的模式，也就是说，每段第一句改写相应的提纲，后面的1，2，3是连接词，每个连接词后面接自己的分论点。中心突出，层次分明，同时节省了考生构思的麻烦。
其中分析问题段是得分的关键段落，大多是分析原因，方法，危害，

这篇文章比较特殊，大家一定要注意，历史上没有出过这样的文章：为什么
1. 有图表，却没有要求我们写图表
2. 本身是一个对比观点选择题，一二两点提纲都是主体分析问题段，我的看法属于解决问题段，而考生最好写一段描写图表段，点出“出国人数越来越多”的这个社会现象

也就是说，这篇文章写四段，1 提出现象-描述图表 2，3 正反两方面分析原因 ，各自分两三点4. 我的看法。 在真实考试中，一般不可能出现这样的现象。这是为了全面锻炼大家对各种段落的熟悉程度

语言要包装
主要有两层意思，一是扬长，二是避短
考生再考试中是真正拥有信息最多的人，考官只能被动接受你给的信息。考生出招，考官接招，他永远不知道哪些你会哪些你不会。所以

第一层：如果有自己的经典句，再这么绕也要用上自己的经典句，注意这是你最拿得出手的而且是绝对正确的句子
第二层：如果是临场发挥的话，如果你的语言基础不是太好的话，请保持宁简勿烂的原则，在中国，无论你玩多么高超的语法现象，错了就扣分，所以宁可弱智也别错，这样虽然找不到加分的理由，但是绝对找不到扣分的理由

范文赏析

Part I Writing
Studying Abroad

As is illustrated in the line chart (graph), the number of people studying abroad has increased considerably during the past 4 years from 2004 to 2007. 或者the past four-year time span from 2004 to 2007 witnessed a dramatic increase in the number of people who study abroad. There was a steady rise from about 110,000 in 2004 to 120,000 in 2005. And the number continues to soar in the following 2 years, reaching more than 150,000.
　　A multitude of factors, both individual and social, could account for the phenomenon. Initially, with the development of economy, more and more people(people in increasing numbers) become better off. And their ability to finance their children’s studying abroad is growing. （因果）Secondly, the education quality of foreign developed countries, like the United States, British, and Australia, is thought to be better than(superior to) that in China. （举例细节）Last but not least, students today are expected and encouraged to go outside to widen their horizon and to face the real world of globalization, which will undoubtedly lay a solid foundation for their future life.
There are, however, also people who think differently. Besides(除开。。以外) the pains in adapting to a unfamiliar environment, there is also the uncertainty about the reliability and advantages about foreign education, which may depend mainly on the students themselves.（定语从句）
或者：Others, however, think differently. On the one hand, they hold the view that the strange environment may pose a potential and probable threat on students’ personality. On the other hand, it is difficult for them to afford the expensive fees in foreign universities.

From my perspective, on no account can we ignore the trend/phenomenon. For one thing, we must have a good command of both written and oral English in order to adapt to the foreign environment. For another thing, it is our unshirkable obligation to maintain Chinese culture if we study abroad. All in all, I am convinced that only in this way can we develop in a prosperous and harmonious way.

五． 5. 新东方08.12模拟：老龄化
下面就本次考试做出简要分析，具体范文大家可以去我上课提供的公共邮箱里去查看
第一段是提出社会现象，3-4句就可以了，最好采取总分总的模式。第一句话从总体趋势描述老龄化这个社会现象已经在上升了。上升怎么写？increase, on the rise, popular, prevalent; hotly debated issue都可以选择。第二句话最好具体阐述一下你所看到的现象，写身边的老龄化的现象很多。第三句话承上启下，说明这个问题已经引起了社会的关注，对国家提出了要求。
In contemporary society, an overwhelming majority of people are beginning to be aware that the number of old people is on the rise. This is a prevalent and pervasive issue with which our society is confronted. Particularly, we can see the aging phenomenon in all walks of life. Undeniably, such issue has been in the focus of the public and deserves the following analysis.

A multitude of requirements，both individual and social, are brought about by this phenomenon.
This phenomenon, undoubtedly, will bring about the following influences both on individual and on society.
Initially, 社会服务和保险医疗
Additionally, 为经济发展带来压力
Finally, 也要求我们自身提出了要求

1.It exerts an unfavorable consequence on our social services such as medical insurance, for the reason that we do not have enough preparation. 2. It also poses a potential and probable threat to/on the economic development, which means that more older people will bring about more pressure. 3. this is a big/huge/tremendous challenge for ourselves. In other words, we have to spend more time in taking care of them.

From my perspective, on no account can we turn a blind eye to this phenomenon.
或者it is imperative for us to take effective and efficient measures to reverse the disturbing trend.
On the one hand, it is our obligation to take care of our aging parents. On the other hand, we should appeal to the public to build more hospitals and community services to meet the increasing needs of the aged. I am convinced that only in this way can our society become harmonious and prosperous. （养老足球赛，精神家园）

六． 6. 新东方09.6模拟：考研人数增加（图表）（这是新东方官方范文文章，非FC版本）
It can be seen from the chart that there have been sharp increases in the number of students attending graduate entrance exams in University X in the past decade. As the chart shows, the year 1999 witnessed only 2,900 students taking part in the exams. In 2004, the number soared to nearly four thousand. In 2009, far more people prepared themselves for graduate study. （这一段也可以写为FC课堂版本, 如下：）
As is illustrated in the bar chart, the past ten-year time span witnessed a dramatic increase in the number of students who attend the graduate entrance exams in University X. The number rose from 2900 in 1999 to 3950 in 2004. Besides, it soared to more than 6000 in 2009.

官方版：
A number of factors could account for the change in the chart, but the following might be the critical ones. First, due to the spreading financial crisis and economic recession in the past years, the number of job vacancies has been on a sharp decline. Secondly, as a result of expanded enrollments in many colleges and universities, the number of graduates has rocketed in China, which adds to the fierceness of competition in the job market. Last but not least, relevant state policies and the boom of higher education provide students with more opportunities to go after higher degrees.
Personally, I would not pursue graduate study right upon graduation from college. The main reason is that I have not made up my mind on the field to major in. But I really deem it necessary for me to secure a master degree. So I would set my goal while I am working.

七． 7. 书信：04.1， 课堂范文， 求职信P94.14

附录一：两篇值得一看的书信
题目:你是负责网上书店服务的,最近收到很多投诉网上销售服务的信件.写一封信给这些投诉者:
1   理解他们的投诉并表示歉意
2   指出改善服务的措施
3   表示对他们的感谢   

FC分析: 三段写法十分明显, 第一段根据提纲,第一句写背景:理解投诉,第二句写目的:我写这个信就是为了道歉的(当然可以加一句自我介绍,放最前面)
第二段措施,虚拟自身或者前因后果,2-3点展开
第三段 可以写感谢+问题留言

Dear sir or madam, (这个称呼最好)

As the manager of the on-line book service, I can understand your complaints owing to our work which is not satisfactory. Therefore, I am writting this letter for the purpose of expressing my apology.
或者:As the manager of the on-line book service, I am writting this letter to apologize for our insufficient job.

To improve the situation, we would take the following actions. 或:We would take action to improve the situation, and the details are listed as follows. On the one hand, since many of you have expressed that the our service does not cover sports especially NBA, we would immediately expand our book list by adding some basketball magzines such as HOOPCHINA. On the other hand, we would take effective and efficient measures to shorten our delivery time. (或:we would take effective and efficient measures so that you can receive our books more quickly).一点是增加书的种类,二是加快发送速度. 还可以写的方面,如:提高书的质量, 简化服务程序,让更多的人可以享受服务, 价格更优惠,等等

I would like to express my gratitude for your attention to my letter. If you have any questions or suggestions concerning our service, please do not hesitate to contact me. 或: I am most appreciative of your attention to my letter. In addtion, let me apologize for any inconveniences we have caused.

Yours, sincerely
Li Ming

Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a letter of application for a MBA program in Columbia University. You should write at least 150 words following the outline given below:
　　1． 介绍你目前所学专业；
　　2． 介绍个人特长爱好以及性格；
　　3． 说明为什么申请该校的MBA。
●审题概述●
建议写四段。（为什么？因为有两个可以分为123的主体段，而提纲1介绍专业明显可以归入提纲2一起介绍自己）。四段分别是
1. 我是谁，我要干什么
2. 我的自我介绍，专业，特长爱好，性格
3. 申请原因 1，2，3.。。
4. 客套话结尾
　　这是一封留学申请信。要提供申请人的个人资历，写明申请学校和所学专业以及申请的理由。
　　【范文】（本文并非FC所写，不太新东方化，只提供参考）
Dear Sir,
①I am writing in the hope that I may obtain an opportunity to further my study in the MBA program in your university.
My name is Li Ming, and I am an ①undergraduate student of Marketing in Nanjing University. During the last four years, I have been studying hard and also working hard for the Students’ Union. I am careful to ②keep a balance between study and ③extracurricular activities. I have won from the University various scholarships for my good study and my efficient Student’s Union work.
I’m interested in business and wish I could ①further my study overseas. I choose Columbia University because you have a long history and enjoy a good reputation in this field. I believe my interests are extremely ②congruent with the strengths of your school, and my solid academic background will meet your general entrance requirements for graduate study.
I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

附录二：学生文章修改
It goes without saying that the issue of university students on pursuing fashion caused wide concerned（ 你的意思是wide concern把？） at present in universities, and become（主语是谁？是不是the issue?第三人称单数呢？）（要写an increasing number of） increasing number of university student are prevalence（这个是名词）&pervasive from mass medio of surper girl as their idiot,pursuing their singing style,wearing style,personal style,sometimes even talking style.
      what caused this phenomenon,（问号）there are three points of view can be listed as follows,（我课堂上不是这么教的吧？？？there are已经有一个谓语了，can be 又是一个谓语了。就凭这一个双谓语的错误就可以分数直接扣完。要么按照我的写，要么写为Three points of view can be …）

initially,it can blind our eye to realize the invisible marketing if we are not reason,
（是不是we are not reasonable???）

additionally,uncompletely can focus on your study,(只有名词结构才可以做主语，不知道这个地方的uncompletely是什么意思？而且还是一个副词)

and finally,also the most important it exerts  extra burnden on your parent to wast money,and therefore as a adult we must take an action to set high sense of responsibility on this phenamenon.

      as far as I am concerned,young people especially our university students play a role of properly&painstaking  can swarm into sociaty development&innovation in the future,
can 的主语是谁？？？？？play a role of properly and painstaking又是什么意思？role of 的of 后面肯定只可以接名词，properly是副词，painstaking是形容词

we must set a right standard on pursuing fashion,for the reason that it exerts dynamic&energytic,and positive influence for far—reaching on our society.
Exerts a XXX influence on 就可以了，怎么可以写exert a xxxxx influence for far-reaching>?????混用N多结构在一起，没人可以看的懂

全文小错太多，导致阅卷人无法看懂。如果不现在采取措施，考试的作文部分将会十分十分危险。已经没有什么时间了，措施就是：弱智化你的思路和语言。作文部分求过不求高分。
宁弱智别错误。什么从句插入语分词之类的，不是有十足的把握绝对不要写。

我来弱智化改写下你的第一段，一定要让对方看的懂啊！！！看不懂一切都完了

It goes without saying that the issue of university students on pursuing fashion caused wide concerned at present in universities, and become increasing number of university student are prevalence &pervasive from mass medio of surper girl as their idiot,pursuing their singing style,wearing style,personal style,sometimes even talking style.

It goes without saying that the issue of university students pursuing fashion becomes prevalent in our society. Particularly, an increasing number of university students are pursuing their singing style, wearing style and even talking style.

脑子里想简单想清楚点。套句It goes without saying that写完以后，后面的句子主语是谁？issue，谓语是谁？当然是become，一定要加S，become后的形容词是谁？当然是流行。就可以了！ 第二句具体描写，主语是谁？是越来越多人。谓语是谁？是are，然后是什么》是追求ABC。。。这就可以了！！

一句就是一句，每写完一句就问自己，主谓是谁？？？
主语只可以是名词结构，谓语只可以是动词
其他的都是错的

结构还是基本按照课堂教的写，思路弱智化，语言一定要有十足把握才可以写，把我的绝对正确的句子看熟悉，然后自己发挥的时候就保证主谓宾主谓宾，一句就是一句，清清楚楚，明明白白， 这才能让作文部分顺利过关

祝六级顺利通过！
　Drunken Driving
　　Nobody could have failed to notice the fact that drunken driving has been a grave problem with which we are confronted. Generally speaking, there are several reasons accounting for /behind this phenomenon. Firstly, recent decades have witnessed the rapid development of people’s living standards. As a result, cars gained ever-increasing popularity and have found their way into our everyday life. Secondly, people participate in more activities or banquets than ever before, where they will drink liquor/strong wine. Then, they may get drunk but continue to drive.
　　Drunken driving is bound to generate severe consequ