英语四六级写作.pptx

Which one is better?It makes me feel painful to think that she has to work 12 hours a day and seven days a week.It pains me to think that she has to work 12 hours a day and seven days a week.It will be our aim to ensure proper health care for each and every one of the Chinese people.Our aim is to ensure proper health care for all Chinese.Which one is better?The search of the forest that they conducted was entirely complete.The search of the forest was complete.They conducted a complete search of the forest.He has no sense of principles,whether he is in public or in private.He has no principles,public or private.Which one is better?Whenever anyone telephoned her to ask her for help with their homework she always obliged right away.She immediately obliged anyone who telephoned for help with homework.Which one is better?Another important aspect is good health.It is one of our great blessings.It may be achieved through proper diet and exercise.Rest is also desirable.The great blessing of good health may be had through proper diet,exercise,and rest.写作技巧写作技巧-简洁才是美简洁才是美策略之一：用介词短语替代从句。策略之一：用介词短语替代从句。Wordy:While they were playing tennis,she started an argument that lasted all morning.Better:During tennis she started an argument that lasted all morning.Wordy:When you come to the second traffic light,turn right.Better:At the second traffic light turn left.写作技巧写作技巧-简洁才是美简洁才是美策策略略之之二二：删删除除诸诸如如who is”或或that is之之类类的的关系代词，变从句为短语。关系代词，变从句为短语。Wordy:The novel,which is written in three parts,told a story that took place in the Middle Ages.Better:The three-part novel told a story set in the Middle Ages.写作技巧写作技巧-简洁才是美简洁才是美策略之三：剔除你不需要的单词策略之三：剔除你不需要的单词Two joint partners will present their views over a long-distance telephone call.写写完完这这样样的的句句子子后后，你你自自己己再再读读一一遍遍，挑挑出出单单词词joint和和telephone，注意删去不必要的词。，注意删去不必要的词。写作技巧写作技巧-简洁才是美简洁才是美策策略略之之四四：表表达达否否定定意意义义时时，尽尽量量避避免免使使用用否否定定词词。英英语语中中很很多多词词不不用用 no 或或者者not也也能能表表达达否定含义的词汇。否定含义的词汇。Thus college students who do not have sufficient financial backing,也也就就是是 college students who lacks sufficient financial backing。Which one is better?The Art of Strategy was written by Sun Tzu.It is a fifty-six-hundred-word Chinese classical work.The writer put forth a set of principles in a very tightly compressed manner.They deal with how to defeat oppositions and win battles.In his fifty-six-hundred word classic,The Art of Strategy,Sun Tzu put forth a tightly compressed set of principles for achieving triumph over opposition.Which one is better?Of course,the weapons at Sun Tzus time were quite primitive.The armies were very large.They were nearly as large as those in World War Two.The devastation and human sufferings were just as profound as in World War Two.Compared with World War Two,the weapons at Sun Tzus time were quite primitive,but the armies were nearly as large and the devastation and human suffering just as profound.Which one is better?Proverbs are short sayings.They are drawn from long experience.Proverbs are short sayings drawn from long experience.Which one is better?This is a wreck.It was formerly the stately Imperial Garden.It is preserved deliberately as a reminder and symbol.This wreck,formerly the stately Imperial Garden,is preserved deliberately as a reminder and symbol.Which one is better?Beijing streets are crowded with taxis,company cars and private vehicles owned by the newly affluent.The number has been rising rapidly in the last few years.The latest statistics show there are now 1.2 million vehicles in Beijing alone.Taxis,company cars and private vehicles owned by the newly affluent have crammed Beijing streets in rising numbers in the last few years-1.2 million vehicles at last count.写作技巧写作技巧-变化才是真变化才是真Lu Hao graduated last summer.He joined the First Auto Works in Changchun soon after graduation.He received an engineering degree from his college.After graduating last summer with an engineering degree,Lu Hao soon joined the First Auto Works in Changchun.写作技巧写作技巧-变化才是真变化才是真Lu Hao graduated last summer.He joined the First Auto Works in Changchun soon after graduation.He received an engineering degree from his college.An engineering degree-holder,Lu Hao joined the First Auto Works in hangchun last summer soon after graduation.写作技巧写作技巧-变化才是真变化才是真Lu Hao graduated last summer.He joined the First Auto Works in Changchun soon after graduation.He received an engineering degree from his college.Having graduated with an engineering degree,Lu Hao joined the First Auto Works in Changchun last summer.切忌过于依赖从句切忌过于依赖从句妙用倒装妙用倒装平行结构平行结构少用关系代词少用关系代词语态语态同位结构同位结构独立主格结构独立主格结构规范使用标点规范使用标点真题演练真题演练-提纲式（现象型）提纲式（现象型）Directions:For this part,you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic Attend Your Classes Regularly.you should write at least 120 words,and base your composition on the outline below:1.现在大学校园里迟到、早退、旷课是常见现象现在大学校园里迟到、早退、旷课是常见现象2.如何避免这种现象发生如何避免这种现象发生3.作为一个大学生应该怎么做作为一个大学生应该怎么做 真题演练真题演练 Nowadays it is a very common phenomenon that some university students are late for or even absent from classes.And still there are some students who slip out of the classroom before the class is over.Class attendance has become a thorny problem to both the students and teachers.真题演练真题演练 It is urgent immediate measures should be taken to stop the situation.first of all,the whole university staff should commit themselves to establishing a better learning environment and safer campus for the students.Furthmore,the teachers should increase punishments for misbehavior.Last but not least,other means to solve the problem are to reduce class size to 真题演练真题演练improve the attendance.Actually,the ways to tackle the problem are countless.As far as Im concerned,it is very important for the students to attend their classes regularly.For one thing,it will ensure you to catch up with the teachers in your learning.That is very helpful to you if you want to do a good job in your study.For another,attending classes 真题演练真题演练regularly is a way of showing respect to your teachers,too.Meanwhile,attending classes regularly will help to form a good habit of punctuality,which is of great importance for the students to do a good job in the future.真题演练真题演练Directions:Youre allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay by commenting on the humorous saying,“Quiting smoking is the easiest thing in the world.Ive done it hundreds of times.”Youd write at least 120 words but more than 180 words.真题演练真题演练-谚语警句型谚语警句型 The humorous saying,Quitting smoking is the easiest thing in the world.Ive done it hundreds of times.can be naturally associated with the significance of a strong will.Just as“Where there is a will,there is a way.”,if you are really resolved to do something,no matter how difficult it might be,never give up.I take this opinion quite reasonable.真题演练真题演练 The reasons can be listed as follows.Take Thomas Edison as a yupical example.He could not have found the ideal material for electric bulbs if he had given up after thousands otrials.For another example,if without the strong will to save Chinese people from heavy disaster and build a prosperous,democratic and civilized new country,how could Chairman Mao drive Japanese invaders out of China and become such a famous leader in the world?真题演练真题演练 Judging from the evidences offered,we might surely draw the conclusion that nothing succeeds without a strong will.Besides,we should make full preparation,though a strong will will help us overcome difficulties,it is not for a person who has no preparation.To conclude,we students should have strong wills or we will not succeed if good opportunities are offered.真题演练真题演练-应用文（书信）应用文（书信）Directions:For this part,youre allowed 30 minutes to write a letter to the editor of a newspaper complaining about the poor service of a bookstore.You should write at least 120 words but more than 180 words.1.事情的起因事情的起因2.与书店交涉的经过与书店交涉的经过3.呼吁服务行业必须提高服务质量呼吁服务行业必须提高服务质量真题演练真题演练Dear Editor,I am Zhang Fang,a sophomore from Harbin University of Commerce.Now Im writing to inform you that I found the quality of some publication not very satisfactory,and I would like to draw your attention to the problem of some poor services of the service industry.The cause of my complaint is a dictionary I bought a few days ago.After I bought it,I found two pages if it were 真题演练真题演练in poor print.However,the salesgirl was very impolite,saying that she wouldnt change ifor another one because it was my own negligence,and that its none of the bookstores business.Under this circumstance,I feel rather annoyed and disappointed.Honestly speaking,this unsympathetic attitude towards customers has 真题演练真题演练set a bad example to the whole service industry.I hope all the publishers and bookstores should give sufficient respect to knowledge and consumers.If this kind of problem cannot be properly settled,Im afraid the public would lose faith in the service industry.I trust you will take my complaint seriously.I would very much appreciate it if the problem 真题演练真题演练coule be solved as soon as possible.Thanks for your time and kind consideration.Sincerely yours,Zhang Fang