2022年六级作文学业与假期.docx

2022年六级作文范文：学业与假期
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay based on the picture below. You should start your essay with a brief description of the picture and then give your comments. Write your essay on Answer Sheet 1. You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.

【审题构思】
　　这是一篇图画类作文，要求考生描述图画，并做出评论。此类作文一般为三段式。即第一段简洁描述图画的内容及内涵，其次段就图画的内容绽开评论，并说明自己的观点，第三段重申自己的看法并提出建议。考生在评论和说明自己的观点时，肯定要思路清楚，且要表达清晰。

　　【参考范文】
　　In the picture above, a child flies from one cage to the other cage like a bird.One cage is named school, and the other is named cram school. What a sarcastic picture. There is no freedom left for the children who cannot enjoy the supposed cheerful vacation.
　　Why cannot the children enjoy the vacation that belongs to them? Who push the children from one cage to the other? What should we do to help the trapped children? The three questions solved, the above picture will not exist any more. The answer to the first question is hidden with the superficial one being acquiring more knowledge, and the fundamental one is that parents demand more scores from their children. 　　　　　　They expect their children to be able to score more through attending various cram schools at the cost of their children’s supposedly splendid vocation. So it is the parents who pursue quick success that push the children from one cage to the other. To free the children, the parents should put emphasis on the children’s physical and mental health rather than the score.
　　As is known to all that pursuit of high scores has long been a phenomenon in China, the cause of this phenomenon is hard to be uprooted. Therefore, we should emancipate the children in the mind and return the joy of childhood to children gradually.
【高分表达】
　　supposed 本该的
　　trapped 受困的
　　attend various cram schools 参与各种辅导班
　　pursue quick success 急功近利
【句型替换】
　　To free the children, the parents should put emphasis on the children’s physical and mental health rather than the score.
　　=To set the children free , the parents should emphasize the children’s physical and mental well-being rather than the score.
　　As is known to all that pursuit of high scores has long been a phenomenon in China, the cause of this phenomenon is hard to be uprooted.
　　=As we all know that pursuing high scores has long been a phenomenon in China, the cause of this phenomenon is hard to be eradicated.