作文解析总汇（最终版）.ppt

单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,四级考试作文,四级作文评分标准,Main Mistakes in Grammar in Writing,四级作文解析,四级作文评分标准,以,15,分满分来计算：,2,分条理不清，思路紊乱，语言支离破碎或大部分句子都有错误，且为严重错误。,5,分基本切题。表达思想不清楚，连贯性差。有较多的严重语言错误。,8,分基本切题。有些地方表达思想不够清楚，文字勉强连贯；语言错误相当多，其中有一些是严重错误。,11,分切题。表达思想清楚，文字连贯，但有少量语言错误。,14,分切题。表达思想清楚，文字通顺，连贯性好。基本无语言错误，仅有个别小错误。,注意：,如题目中给出主题句，起始句，结束句，均不计入所写字数。,只写一段者：,0,4,分；只写两段者：,0,7,分（指规定三段的作文）,长度计分标准：,81,89,词：扣,1,分,71,80,词：扣,2,分,61,70,词：扣,3,分,51,60,词：扣,4,分,50,词以下：最多给,5,分,如作文与题目毫不相关，或只有几个孤立的词而无法表达思想，则给,0,分。,计算成绩时的“作文最低分”的规定：,以,100,分制计算，作文（满分,15,分）的最低分定为,6,分。,作文得分为,0,分时，若总分高于,60,分，最后报告一律按,59,分不及格处理；若总分低于,60,分则报告时一律再减,6,分。,作文得分大于,0,分，小于,6,分，则最后报告分原计算总分,6,分实得作文分,例如：原计算总分为,63,分，实得作文分为,2,分，最后报告分,63,6,2,59,分。,四级作文解析,议论文写作,三步骤：,提出问题,分析问题,解决问题,三段式：,Part 1,:,引出话题,Part 2,:,表明观点并加以论述,Part 3,:,得出结论，首尾呼应,切记：,一个段落只涉及一个主题或是主题的某一方面。,段落,=,主题句,+,N,个主题论述句,议论文写作模板及范文分析,现象分析型,问题解决型,对比选择型,观点论证型,现象分析型,Changes in Peoples Diet in China,1.State the,changes,in peoples diet in the past 5 years;,2.Given the possible,reasons,for the changes;,3.Draw your own,conclusion,.,1986,1987,1988,1989,1990,Grain,49%,47%,46.5%,45%,45%,Milk,10%,11%,11%,12%,13%,Meat,17%,20%,22.5%,23%,21%,Fruit and Vegetables,24%,22%,20%,20%,21%,Total,100%,100%,100%,100%,100%,Example:,Changes in Peoples Diet in China,From the table,we can see clearly,that great changes took place in peoples diet from 1986 to 1990.,What impresses us greatly is,that the consumption of grain decreased year by year while milk and meat increased steadily.,Why were these changes in peoples diet?,First of all,Chinese people could afford more expensive food such with great nutrition such as milk and meat which were regarded as luxurious-consumption.,Second,people paid more attention to the quality of their diet,because they knew it was beneficial to their health.,Therefore,they were eager to improve the structure of their food.,As to me,its the great progress in economy development and the conception of scientific contribution of Chinese people that result in the changes in diets.,Thus,I believe we Chinese people will be stronger and our life will be more prosperous.,现象分析型模板,(1)According to/From the chart/graph/table,/picture,we see/know/find clearly that,概括图表等所,反映的,总体,内容,，,which should been given great,concern/has already aroused our attention.(2)What,makes us amazed/impresses us/inspires us is that,具体阐述现象或者其中的,突出,变化等,.,(3)The reasons,for this phenomenon are different./There are many,reasons to account for it./Many factors lead to it./,Many factors contribute to it.,(4)First of all/Firstly/To begin with/In the first,place,原因一,.(5)Whats more/secondly/Moreover,原因二,.(6)In addition/Besides,原因三,.(7)Therefore,/As a result/Consequently,总结最终导致或带来的结果,.,(8)In my opinion/As far as I am concerned/As to,me/In my point of view,概括自己的观点,.(9)Firstly/,For one thing/On one hand,理由一,.(10)Besides/In,addition/For another/On the other hand,理由二,.(11),To conclude/To sum up/In a word/In conclusion,总结,句,.,问题解决型,How to Eliminate Cheating on Campus,（,1,）当前校园中存在许多作弊现象,（,2,）解决这一问题的办法是,How to Eliminate Cheating on Campus,Nowadays,instead of listening attentively in class,and working hard after class,a number of students,adopt all kinds of dishonest methods to get high,scores in examinations.,It has become such a serious,problem that it has aroused the concern from the,whole society.,To put an end to such a serious problem,in my,mind,it calls for the efforts from all sides,.,First,of all,the university authority should make it clear that,any cheating behaviors in the examinations,from,whispering and copying,receiving answers via mobile,phones to asking ringers for help,will be severely punished,with no exception,.,Moreover,teachers of all subjects,should go all the way to restore honesty by setting an,example for the youth through speaking sincerely and,behaving truthfully.,Last but not least,young students,the future of our nation,should view integrity as the,prerequisite to an upright and responsible citizen so as to,learn to despise and fight dishonest behaviors throughout,the society.,How can anybody expect to lead a meaningful life until he is far from any kind of cheating behaviors?,Only when,all of us join in the efforts of eliminating cheating at all levels can we expect to have a cleaner society and a more beautiful future.,问题解决型模板,(1)There has been a discussion recently about/,Nowadays there is a growing concern on/With the,development of society/It is well known that,存在的,问题或现象,.,(2)Its certain/obvious/true/common,that,现象一,/,危害一,.(3)In addition/Additionally,现象,二,/,危害二,.,(4)Therefore how to solve this problem is,Worth our attention/Its of great importance for us,to solve this problem/So its high time for us to solve,This problem.,(5)Firstly/To begin with/On the one hand/First of,all,解决办法一,.(6)Secondly/On the other hand/,Further,解决办法二,.(7)Thirdly/Finally/Last but not,least/Moreover,解决办法三,.,(8)In fact,there are still many solutions to this,problem.(9)As for me,我的看法,.(10)In a word/All in,all/Therefore/Only in this way,总结句,.,对比选择型,Do Lucky Numbers Really Bring Good Luck?,（,1,）有些人认为某些数字会带来好运,（,2,）也有些人认为数字与运气无关,（,3,）说明你的看法,Do Lucky Numbers Really Bring Good Luck?,Different people hold different views about,so-called lucky numbers.,Some people take it for,granted that,some lucky numbers can bring good,luck.For example,number“8”is widely used in,telephone number and vehicle licenses and its,expected to bring good fortune to its owner.,Yet,other people dont think so.They insist,numbers have nothing to do with luck.,Because,they think numbers are designed logically for,counting only.,Furthermore,some numbers such as,number“8”are pronounced similarly to making,money in Chinese and therefore are misinterpreted,as the token of luck or great fortune.,They even,laugh at those people who believe numbers are,bring good luck.,In my opinion,I am for,the latter.,Firstly,numbers are only the simple tool in counting which,havent scientific relationship with good luck or,bad luck.,Secondly,some people favor so-called,lucky numbers which may result from traditional,customs and personal expectation.Its,unnecessary to laugh at them and we should,respect their habits.,Taking these into,consideration,I insist that,we should work hard to,create great fortune and win good luck instead of,expecting lucky numbers.,对比选择型模板,(1)Different people hold different opinion on/,There is a heated debate over/There is no,complete,agreement about,讨论的事件或问题,.(2),Some people consider/prefer/take it for granted,that/many people assert that,观点一,.(3)However/,In contrast,others think that,观点二,.,(4)Some people may advocate/prefer/agree with,the idea of,观点一,.(5)Because they think/believe,that,支持观点一的理由,.(6)However/In contrast,others think that,支持观点二的理由,.(7)They argue,/proclaim that,进一步解释支持观点二的理由,.,(8)In my opinion/Personally/In my view/As,for me,I prefer/I stand on the side of/,Weighing up these two views,I am for,做出自己,的选择,.,(9)Firstly/In the first place,我的依据一,.,(10)Secondly/In the second place,我的依据二,.(11),Taking these into consideration/Therefore,I come,into conclusion/In a word,as stated above,总结句,重申观点,.,观点论证型,Fake Commodities Should be Forbidden,（,1,）市场上充斥着许多假冒伪劣商品,（,2,）要杜绝假冒伪劣商品,Fake Commodities Should be Forbidden,Its widely accepted that,fake commodities are,disastrous to our society.,The consequence of,the,prevailing of fake commodities,is obvious,.,As we,know,if fake commodities are allowed to circulate,in the market,we may buy our favorite goods with,poor qualities and unreasonable prices;farmers,may buy fake fertilizers and suffer great loss,from poor harvest.,Additionally,even when we are,sick,its possible what we buy are fake medicines,which are harmful to our health and even fatal.,Therefore,we hold no doubt that,fake,commodities should be forbidden.,There are many reasons contributing to this,argument.Firstly,to forbid fake commodities can,protect the legal rights and interests of consumers.,For example,fake commodities usually have poor,qualities,if the consumers buy them and find out,they cannot work efficiently,it can only make loss to,consumers.,Whats more,fake commodities disturb,the positive competition among manufacturers with,lower prices even by illegally copying the products of,famous brands which in turn ruin good reputations,of the original manufacturers.,Finally,they make the,whole society be dishonest.,All mentioned above can tell us that,fake,commodities should be disallowed to,manufacture and appear in the market.,Therefore,we should attach great importance,to this problem and take measures to fight,against them with enough quality supervision and,management.,观点论证型模板,(1)Its well known/widely accepted/true/Many,people believe that,提出观点,.(2)The truth/,influence is obvious/profound/evident.(3)As we,know,观点的具体表现之一,.(4)In addition/,Additionally,观点的具体表现之二,.(5)No one can,deny that/Therefore/Its no doubt that,总结句,.,(6)There are many examples to support/prove,/back up this argument/point/view.(7)First of,all,支持的理由一,.(8)For example,例子,.(9)Whats,more/Furthermore,理由二,.(10)Finally/Besides/,Moreover,理由三,.,(11)There is no doubt/No one can deny/All,mentioned above can tell us that,重申观点,.(12),Therefore,应该采取的行动,.,议论文写作练习,Blind Date,相亲在中国已演化成一种潮流；,人们对此的看法；,我的看法。,Outline,Part 1:,Blind date becomes popular in China today.,Part 2:,People hold different views about blind date.,Many young people believe blind date is an efficient way for them to make friends with the opposite sex.,Some argue that it is difficult for people to find true love merely through blind date because,Part 3:,I think blind date is a good way for the youngsters to socialize.,Example:,Blind Date,Enjoying popularity across the whole society,blind date is becoming more common and,acceptable in China today which appeals to,countless people,.,However,for it,peoples views,differ.,According to a recent survey,young people are,found quite positive about blind date.They believe,that blind date can help them experience more,make new friends,etc.,Even though,most blind,dates will not develop into romantic relationship,that people search for,it is still an effective way,for us to meet more people.,However,some people,think differently.They argue that people who go,for blind date may value materials more than ones,personality.For instance,a girl may like to date a,wealthy guy rather than a poor one.,To sum up,despite the above negative views on blind date,I still think it is a good way for the youngsters to socialize.,For one thing,due to the busy nature of our life,blind date is still an opportunity for us to expand our friend circle.For another,it is not completely impossible for people to find the right person through blind date.Therefore,we should view blind date in a rational way.,