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单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,Writing Training,假如你是李华,你的美国朋友,Alice,听说中国的中小学正在实施素质教育,来信询问有关情况。请你根据下表提供的信息，写封回信，谈一谈“素质教育”实施后你们学校生活发生的变化。,应试教育,素质教育,上课：听讲，做笔记,上课：课堂活跃，研究学习，能力培养，有时学生当老师,课外活动：做不完的作业,课外活动：开展各种类型的活动：唱歌跳舞，球类活动，电脑学习，英语角,晚上：继续做作业至深夜,晚上：看新闻，做实验，各学科讨论,注意：,1,、写信日期为,2004,年,2,月,20,日；,2,、词数：,100,左右；,3,、注意书信格式。,Dear Alice,You said that you wanted to know something about quality-oriented education.So I will talk about quality-oriented and exam-oriented education.At last,we only could listen our teachers and make notes.After classes we had a lot,homeworks,to do.It took us much time on it at night.But now,in class,we can discuss questions with teacher.Students are all like to study.Sometime we also could play a teacher.We dont have so many,homeworks,.So we have enough time to do all kinds of activities,for example,singing,playing balls,English,coner,and so on.At night,we can see news,do experiments,Yours,Li,Hua,2004,2,20,Incorrect letter form;,Spelling mistakes;,Grammatical mistakes;,The passage is wordy;,Think in Chinese and write in,Chinglish,;,No effective conjunctions,Common problems:,Dear Alice,:,Yours,Feb 20,2004,Li Hua,Incorrect letter form,Spelling mistakes:,Our school life was quite boiling.,We only made notices and lessoned in class.,A lot of activists take the place of the homework.,But now things are difficult from it.,We do experiences and discussion the subjects.,boring,notes,listened,activities,different,experiments,discuss,In class,exam-oriented education made us to listen the teachers and make notes,Comparing with that,quality-oriented education allows us learn lively.,We just had too many,homeworks,to do.,Several years ago,we have saw and experienced the exam-oriented education.,Grammatical mistakes,to,Compared,to learn actively,much homework,The passage is wordy,I received your last letter yesterday.I am pleased to receive it.You said you heard that China is carrying out the quality-oriented education in primary schools and middle schools and you wanted to know something about it.So I will tell you something about it and the exam-oriented education.,(50 words),Glad to,hear from you,.You want to know something about the quality-oriented education in China.Id like to tell you something about the changes in my school.,27 words,Write in,Chinglish,In the evening,we,see news,do experiments and,discussing,subjectswhich,instead of,continue doing homework.,On top of that,we not only happier,than ago,we can learn better and more now.,In the evening,instead of continuing,our exercises far into the night we can,watch news on TV,do experiments and discuss our subjects.,In a/one word,we are,not only,happier,than before,but,we can learn better and more now.,No effective conjunctions,And we did our homework in our free time.We did homework till midnight.,We have a lot of activities,dancing,computers,English,and so on.,And we had to do our homework exercises,both,in our free time,and,even far into the night.,After class,We have various outside activities,such as,singing,dancing,English corner,and taking computer lessons.,Feb 20,2004,Dear Alice,How nice to,hear from you,.You want to know what is,going on,in schools in China?Now,I will tell you about it.,In the past,exam-oriented education,forced,us to listen to our teacher,while,taking notes in class.After class,we did,all kinds of,exercises,without end.,After supper,we,had to,continue,our exercises,far into the night,.,Now,quality-oriented education has,made our school life colorful,.We are active in class.,In order to,train the ability,we,often,do research on study.,Sometimes,one of us teaches ourselves.We have various outside activities,such as,singing,dancing,English corner,and taking computer lessons.Basketball and football are our,favorite,sports.,In the evening,we can watch news on TV,do experiments,by ourselves,and have talks and discussions of our subjects.,Its certain that,our school life is getting more and more colorful and interesting.,Best wishes.Yours,Li Hua,Proper letter form.,No obvious mistakes.,Write in,logical,order.,Use exact,adjectives,good,verbs,and proper,phrases,.,Use some,effective conjunctions,.,Use different,sentence structures,.,Why do say it is a good article?,Read the following sentences and decide which is better.,1),Im waiting for you to come,.,Im looking forward to your arrival.,2),Tom is ill.He cannot study.He still attends school.,Tom is ill and cannot study,yet he still attends,3),I read the newspaper in the past.I like to watch TV now.,I used to read the newspapers,but now I prefer to watch TV.,4)He came and brought us a lot of new stories.,He came with a lot of new stories.,Improve the following sentences:,1)The flat has an area of 25 square,metres,and there is a bedroom,a bathroom,and a kitchen.,3)Next the text will be gone through by us and then the main idea will be found.,4)He saw the boy in the street.He stopped to speak to him.He gave him a penny.,2)I heard you are learning Chinese.I am very glad to hear that.,Im very glad to hear that you are learning,Lets go through the text and find the main idea.,Seeing,the boy in the street,he stopped to speak to him,and,gave him a penny.,with,Feb 20,2004,Dear Alice,Thank you for your last letter.You asked me what quality-oriented education,brought,to us.Now Ill tell you about it.,Instead of,just,listening to the teacher and taking notes,we,now experience,a more active atmosphere in class.We,often,do research to develop our ability,and sometimes,we can,even,act as a teacher to teach others.,After class,we,used to,spend all the time trying to finish the homework.,But now,there are all kinds of activities for us,such as,singing,dancing,ball games and computer studying.We often go to the English corner to practise our English.,In the evening,the homework exercises,once,forced us to study till midnight.,Yet now,we can watch news on TV,do experiments by ourselves and have discussions of our subjects.Self-improvement,comes with,the new way of study.We,really,benefit a lot from,it.,What about your school life?,Best wishes,Yours truly,Li,Hua,In the evening,the homework exercises,once,forced us to study till midnight.,Yet now,we can watch news on TV,do experiments by ourselves and have discussions of our subjects.Self-improvement,comes with,the new way of study.We,really,benefit a lot from,it.,What about your school life?,Best wishes,Yours truly,Li Hua,A,1,2,3,Past,Structure 1:Topic-by-Topic Structure,B,1,2,3,Present,/disadvantage,/advantage,A Past1,Structure 2:Point-by-Point Structure,B Present,1,A Past2,B Present,2,A Past3,B Present,3,/disadvantage,/disadvantage,/disadvantage,/advantage,/advantage,/advantage,Effective,conjunctions,compared with,be different from;unlike,on the other hand,on the contrary;just the opposite,while/however/but,take for example;for example,just like,similarly,in the same way,I,used to,read the newspaper,but now,I prefer to watch TV.,He once knew her,but,they are,no longer,friends,now,.,Tom liked to collect stamps when he was young,although now,he enjoys climbing.,Ten years ago there was only one middle school here,yet now,there are five.,We played basketball,in the past,while,we play football,now,.,Examples:,Mini-exercises for writing 1,：,I,work indoors,my neighbor,work outdoors,I,prefer,working indoors.,my neighbor,enjoys,working outdoors.,While,(just the opposite,on the contrary,),20 years ago,most people,travel by train,now,more&more people,travel by air,20 years ago,most people traveled by train.,more and more people,are traveling,by air.,But now,，,Mini-exercises for writing 2,：,children,eat out at weekend,western food,parents,eat out at weekend,Chinese food,Children like to eat out at weekend.They are usually interested in western food,such as KFC,Big Mac and so on.,In the same way,parents,also,eat out at weekend.,But,they usually go to a Chinese restaurant,instead of,a foreign one.,Mini-exercises for writing 3,：,How can we write a good article?,Read the instructions carefully and decide the,style,person and tense.,List the,key points,.,Put the key points into,sentences,.,Never make up new words and sentence patterns.,Use exact adjectives,good verbs and proper phrases.,Develop the sentences into,passage,.,Do use some effective,conjunctions,.,Write in good logical order.,Follow typical patterns,.,请根据下面六幅图的提示和所提供的主题句，写一篇题为,“,Changes in Our Life,”,的英文短文。词数,100,左右。（,2004,年北京市春季高考写作）,开头已为你写好：,Over the past twenty years or so,great changes have taken place in our life.Take my family for example_,Homework,Sending letters,Through phone,Listen to the radio,Watch TV,Small room,Big room,