英语九年级下册英语书面表达易错剖析含解析.doc

【英语】九年级下册英语书面体现易错剖析含解析

一、英语书面体现
1． 如今，诸多都市出现了一种绿色出行方式――共享单车（bike-sharing），它因环境保护、便捷而备受青睐，但同步也引起了某些问题。请你根据提醒以＂Bike-sharing＂为题写一篇英语短文，体现自已见解和提议。
要点提醒：
Advantages
Be convenient, less pollution, reduce the traffic pressure（减缓交通压力）
Take exercise…
Problems
Throw away, damage（毁损）, be stolen…
Advice
Civilized（文明）, follow the rules, take good care of…

注意：
1. 短文应包括以上要点，可合适发挥，以使行文连贯；
2. 文中不得出现真实人名、校名及地名；
3. 词数：80-100（文章开头已给出，不计入总词数）。
Bike-sharing
Today, as a greener means of transportation, bike-sharing is becoming more and more popular in many cities. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【答案】Today,as a greener means of transportation, bike-sharing is becoming more and more popular in many cities. It's known that it has many advantages. So it's enjoyed by lots of people.
First of all, it's very convenient for people to go somewhere.【高分句型一】Also, it helps to reduce the traffic pressure. There will be less pollution because of bike-sharing. Besides, bike-sharing helps people take more exercise.In this way, it's helpful to people's health.（优势） However, it also brings some problems. For example, some people throw them away after using bikes. Even some people damage them, and some bikes are stolen.（难题）
In my opinion, everyone should try to be civilized and follow the rules of using bikes. As long as we take good care of bikes, it will make our life better and better,and our environment will be more beautiful.【高分句型二】（提议）
【解析】
【详解】
这篇短文内容丰富，体现了所有要点，语言体现精确，意思连贯，符合逻辑。在短文中使用了大量复合句、固定句式、连词及固定短语，为文章增色不少，.如: It's known that it has many advantages.，First of all, it's very convenient for people to go somewhere.，Also, Besides, In this way, However, it also brings some problems. For example, In my opinion,等。
【点睛】
本文规定以“Bike-sharing”为题，根据表格内容提醒，写一篇短文，体现自已对共享单车见解和提议。写作时，考生要紧密贴合表格中三个要点：首先，论述共享单车长处；另一方面，列举共享单车带来问题；最终，根据问题给出个人提议。

2．假如你是班长李华，今天你们班对即将到来暑假计划进行了讨论。你们班外教David对此很感爱好。请你根据如下信息，给 David写一封电子邮件，告诉他讨论状况及你自已本人计划及原因。
比例
计划
原因
50%
去国内外旅游
1.放松;2.欣赏美景
30%
多读某些书
1.增长知识；2.培养爱好
20%
参与社会实践
1.锻炼自已;2.认识朋友
你计划
? （至少一种）
？（请你补充）

注意：
（1）邮件应包含所有要点
（2）词数80个左右（开头和结尾已给出，不计入词数）；
（3）不得透露学校、姓名等任何个人信息，否则不予评分
注：社会实践 social practice activities
Dear David
I'm writing to tell you something about our discussion today.
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Best wishes!
Yours
Li Hua
【答案】Dear David
I'm writing to tell you something about our discussion today.
The students have their own plans about how to spend a meaningful summer vacation. Half of the students plan to travel at home and abroad. They want to relax and enjoy the beautiful scenery. Thirty percent of students plan to read more books. They believe that reading can increase knowledge. Reading books can make people smart and develop interests. 20% of them plan to take part in social practice activities. They want to exercise themselves and make new friends.
I'm going to take part in social practice activities, too. I want to learn something new and get good experience from these activities.
Best wishes!
Yours
Li Hua
【解析】
【详解】
这篇短文使用了大量固定句式和短语，为文章增色不少，如how to do，spend a meaningful summer vacation，half of，plan to do，travel at home and abroad，enjoy the beautiful scenery，take part in，social practice activities，make new friends 等。而非谓语动词构造The students have their own plans about how to spend a meaningful summer vacation./ Reading books can make people smart and develop interests.和宾语从句They believe that reading can increase knowledge.运用，丰富了短文内容，使体现多样化，是本文亮点。在学习中注意总结牢记某些固定句式及短语，写作时就可以合适引用，使文章体现更有逻辑性，也更富有条理。
【点睛】
书面体现题既不是汉译英，也不是可任意发挥作文。它规定将所规定材料内容经整理后展开思维，考察运用所学英语知识精确体现意思能力。因此，考生不能遗漏要点，要尽量使用自已熟悉单词、短语和句式，尽量使用高级词汇和较复杂句式构造以便得到较高分数。

3．书面体现
假如你是Amy，德国互换生Sara下周即未来你家寄宿，昨天你收到她来信，在信中，她问询如下信息：1．你家状况；2.有关餐桌礼仪；3. 她要承担家务劳动；4. …目前，你就她提出问题给她回信，也预祝她在你家过得开心！
规定：1. 文章必须包括图片中重要内容，可合适发挥；
2. 文中不得出现真实人名、校名等有关信息；
3. 字数约110词。
Dear Sara，
I’m glad to hear from you yesterday._____________________________________________
Love，
Amy
【答案】Dear Sara，
I’m glad to hear from you yesterday. Welcome to my family next week.
I have a small family. There are three people in my family, my parents and me. In China, unlike in the West, plates are placed on the table and shared by everyone. And sometimes the Chinese hosts use their chopsticks to put food in your bowl or plate. This is a sign of politeness. The appropriate thing to do would be to eat the whatever-it-is and say how delicious it is. If you feel uncomfortable with this, you can just say "thank you |"in politely and leave the food there.
As for housework, I think it's our duty to help our parents do some housework. So you can help my parents wash the dishes, clean the room and make the bed. I hope you can take care of yourself and your family by doing housework.
Of course, if you like, I will teach you how to cook delicious dishes.
Love,
Amy
【解析】
【详解】
这篇短文使用了大量固定句式和短语，为文章增色不少，如be glad to，hear from，unlike in the West，on the table，a sign of，help sb. do，do some housework，wash the dishes，clean the room，make the bed，take care of，how to do等。而复杂并列构造In China, unlike in the West, plates are placed on the table and shared by everyone.和If you feel uncomfortable with this, you can just say a polite thank you and leave the food there./ I hope you can take care of yourself and your family by doing housework./ if you like, I will teach you how to cook delicious dishes.等复杂从句构造运用，丰富了短文内容，使体现多样化，是本文亮点。在学习中注意总结牢记某些固定句式及短语，写作时就可以合适引用，使文章体现更有逻辑性，也更富有条理。
【点睛】
书面体现题既不是汉译英，也不是可任意发挥作文。它规定将所规定材料内容经整理后展开思维，考察运用所学英语知识精确体现意思能力。因此，考生不能遗漏要点，要尽量使用自已熟悉单词、短语和句式，尽量使用高级词汇和较复杂句式构造以便得到较高分数。

4．（题文） 书面体现
在中学生机器人大赛上，出现了一种专门照顾老人新型家用智能机器人，它重要功能有：
1. 定期做饭、洗衣服； 2. 陪老人聊天、下棋、做运动；
3. 处理紧急状况（如：拨打120）
假如你是该机器人发明者，请你简介这个产品，并谈谈你未来设想。
规定：1. 意思连贯，语句通顺；
2. 词数80词左右；短文开头已给出（不计入总词数）
3. 参照词汇： at a fixed time 定期
emergency 紧急状况
ccompany sb. 陪伴某人
Ladies and gentlemen,
Thank you for attending our robot show. Now I’d like to introduce my new invention to all of you.
【答案】Ladies and gentlemen,
Thank you for attending our robot show. Now I’d like to introduce my new invention to all of you.
I invented the new robot mainly to help the elderly at home. It can cook meals and do some washing at a fixed time. When old people feel alone, it can also accompany them by having a chat, playing chess or doing exercise. What’s more, it can deal with some emergencies. For example, if an old man falls ill suddenly, the robot will call doctors immediately for help.
I’m sure my new invention will be a great help to the elderly. I think in the future people will live a more comfortable life with the help of new robots.
【解析】
亮点阐明：这篇习作层次清晰，内容饱满，体现流畅。文中使用了非常好短语，例如thank you for doing，I’d like to do，introduce sb. to，all of you，at home，do some washing，at a fixed time，have a chat，play chess，do exercise，deal with，a great help，in the future等。而Thank you for attending our robot show./ I invented the new robot mainly to help the elderly at home. / I think in the future people will live a more comfortable life with the help of new robots.等非谓语动词和复杂从句运用，丰富了习作内容，使体现多样化，是本文最大亮点。
点睛：书面体现题既不是汉译英，也不是可任意发挥作文。它规定将所规定材料内容经整理后展开思维，考察运用所学英语知识精确体现意思能力。因此，考生不能遗漏要点，要尽量使用自已熟悉单词、短语和句式，尽量使用高级词汇和较复杂句式构造以便得到较高分数。

5． 亚洲文明对话大会近期在北京召开，你印度朋友Danny收看了大会有关报道，对华夏文明产生了浓厚爱好，来信向你理解中国文化。假设你是李华，请根据如下内容提醒用英语写一封回信给Danny。
要点
内容
历史文化
历史悠久，文化各异；老式节日，多彩习俗（举一例）
文明行为
互相尊重，以礼相待；互学共鉴，共同成长（或自拟）
身边文明
校园文明（自拟一点）

注意：1. 词数90词左右，开头和结尾已经写好，不计入总词数。
2. 答复必须包括因此要点，可是当发挥，是短文连贯，通顺。
3. 文中不得提及真实人名、校名等有关信息。
参照词汇: civilized 文明
Dear Danny,
I’m glad to receive your letter. Since you are interested in civilization（文明） of China, I would like to share something with you.

I hope you can come to China someday to experience the ancient culture of China. Look forward to hear from you soon.
All the best,
Li Hua
【答案】Dear Danny,
I’m glad to receive your letter. Since you are interested in civilization（文明） of China, I would like to share something with you.
Chinese civilization is one of the oldest and longest civilizations in the world. China is a country of 56 nationalities. Different nations have difficult cultures. In my country, we have many traditional festivals, such as, the Spring Festival, Mid-Autumn Festival and the Dragon Boat Festival . They are also called “three major Chinese holidays” in China. Here are the customs of eating Zongzi and racing dragon-boat on the Dragon Boat Festival.
China is a nation of etiquette （礼仪）. Chinese people can respect, trust and help each other. We all learn and grow together. Everyone in my school should protect the whole public environment. Climbing the trees, picking the flowers and throwing garbage at random are not allowed there.
I hope you can come to China someday to experience the ancient culture of China. Look forward to hearing from you soon.
All the best.
Li Hua
【解析】
【分析】
本文规定给你印度朋友Danny写一篇有关华夏文明回信。
【详解】
文章需要简介下中国文化。表格中列举了三个要点，写作时注意不要漏写。平时注意多多积累句型、短语。细心检查避免疏漏。以图表展示作文要以“读”为主，首先要认真读懂图表中规定，对所给信息加以分析、推断、筛选、概括，去粗取精；在写作时目要明确，要注意内容精确性和严厉性。
【点睛】
写作中注意语义通顺，符合逻辑关系，上下文之间可以合适使用连接词。如but, so, then等。可以合适使用高分句子。本篇文章写好句子有：Chinese civilization is one of the oldest and longest civilizations in the world．中华文明是世界上最古老、最悠久文明之一。China is a nation of etiquette（礼仪），中国是一种礼仪之邦。

6．书面体现
初中即将毕业，同学们都感到压力很大。就此问题，老师规定你在英语课上做一种以“Less Pressure Makes Life Better”为题汇报，谈谈你做法，与同学分享经验。请根据如下规定写一份发言稿，内容包括：
1. 普遍存在压力：同学关系；考试
2. 我过去压力：父母期望；学习
3. 我成功缓和压力措施及效果；……
规定：1. 文中不得出现真实姓名和校名；
2. 词数80左右，短文开头已给出，不计入总词数。
Less Pressure Makes Better Life
Hello, everyone!
Pressure is a serious problem in today’s world. Most students in our class are under too much pressure. _____
____________________________________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________________________________
【答案】Hello, my classmates!
Pressure is a serious problem in today's world. Most students in our class are under too much pressure. Some students can't get on well with their classmates, while others may worry about their exams too much.
I was always under pressure, too. My parents wanted me to be the top student in my class. They always sent me to all kinds of after-classes on weekends. 
I had a talk with my parents and told them I had done my best. Finally, they understood me. In this way, I feel less stressed out so that I can concentrate more on my studies. 
Less pressure makes better life. Thank you.
【解析】
【详解】
这篇作文规定我们针对目前同学们普遍感到压力大这种现象，以Less Pressure Makes Life Better为题，谈谈自已见解，和同学们分享一下自已经验。审题可知，文章中应重要包括如下几种内容：首先简介同学们普遍感到压力这种现象；然后讲述自已过去曾面对压力；最终简介自已怎样成功缓和压力。题目中只给出了大概提纲，其中详细内容应由学生们自已发挥想象力来补充，并用对英语体现出来。学生们可以从自身经历和体会出发，选用生活中常见场景进行简介。文章应使用一般目前时和一般过去时，注意根据体现需要使用对时态，并变化谓语动词对形式。句式构造可以简单句构造为主，这样句式体现简洁、明了，易于掌握。但为提高作文档次，应穿插使用并列句和复合句，或使用某些复杂构造，如非谓语动词、被动语态等。语句之间使用恰当连接成分，使文意连贯。
【点睛】
这是一篇优秀作文，短文作者根据题目规定，谈了自已对同学们普遍感到压力大这种现象见解，并分享了自已经历。短文有如下几种长处：首先短文内容完整，包含了题目中规定所有信息，且层次清晰，文章提成了四段，每一段中心话题也很明确。另一方面短文中使用了对时态和人称，文章重要使用了一般目前时和一般过去时，谓语动词形式精确。句式构造以简单句为主，论述清晰、简洁。也使用了并列句和复合句构造，如宾语从句、状语从句等。短文中使用了丰富句式，如Some students can't get on well with their classmates, while others may worry about their exams too much.、My parents wanted me to be the top student in my class、In this way, I feel less stressed out so that I can concentrate more on my studies等等。

7．写作
81. 春天，许多人都喜欢参与多种户外活动。为了倡导中学生靠近大自然，某中学生英文报举行了一次征文活动，请你根据如下问题，用英语写一篇短文参与征文。
提醒：1）What’s the benefit （好处） of outdoor activities? （1-2 opinions）
2）Which is your favourite outdoor activity? How and why? （1-2 examples）
3）What do we need to pay attention to when we do outdoor activities? （At least 1 suggestion）
规定：1）体现清晰，语法对，上下文连贯；
2）必须包括提醒中所有信息，并按规定合适发挥；
3）词数：100词左右，开头已给出，不计入词数；
4）不得使用真实姓名、校名和地名等。
It’s spring now. Many people like to go out for some activities. I think it’s great to get close to nature.

【答案】It’s spring now. Many people like to go out for some activities. I think it’s a good way to get close to nature.
When we are outdoors and in the natural world, we can not only breathe fresh air and enjoy the beautiful scene, but also relax ourselves for the coming study or work.
There are many different ways we can get out into the natural world, such as hiking, cycling, camping and climbing. Cycling is my favourite. I join a cycling club, and often go out with other members. While cycling, we can forget our worries and have fun together. Also, we can learn to be a part of a team and help each other.
Whatever you do, remember to stay safe. When you’re outside, it’s better to be with your parents or friends.
【解析】
试题分析：本篇书面体现以“outdoor activities”为话题，结合所给写作材料，写一篇报刊征文稿。根据内容提醒可知本文会使用到一般目前时态，注意某些常见句式应用。写作中注意连词、固定短语交替使用，使文意连接紧密，还要注意使用丰富语句，注意论述次序，符合逻辑关系，最终最佳要体现出人物感想和见解。
写作亮点：本文构造紧凑，语言简洁、要点齐全。文中in the natural world, not only…but also, get out, such as,