五年级作文片段练习.doc

五年级作文片段练习

篇一：五年级上作文片断
五年级上期“阅读·写作”辅导（ ）
片段作文训练——人物外貌描写 姓名
■外貌描写，又叫肖像描写，是指对人物面貌、身材、衣着、神情、姿态等的描写。外
貌包括：容貌、身材、衣着、表情等
外貌描写的具体要求：
1、抓住个性特征，做到人各有貌；
2、一定要抓住人物的主要外貌特征；
3、要有一定的顺序；
4、善于用比喻来强化描写的效果。
■揣摩一下下面描写分别表现了人物怎样的性格特征：
丁丁今年9岁，头发披散着，垂到脖子边，见人就羞得把头低下去，或者跑开了又悄悄
望着人，或者等你不知不觉时猛然叫一声来吓唬你。
她叫常常，一头有些发硬的卷发，凸额头、塌鼻梁，穿一件红底白点小罩衣，总是不声
不响，像个静默的小哲学家似的。
常丁长得像她娘，眼睛长得尤其像。白眼珠鸭蛋清，黑眼珠棋子黑，定神时如清水，闪
动时像星星。
■有人说眼睛是心灵的窗口，从人的眼睛可以感受到人的性格。请看看下面几双眼睛，
试着体会一下人物不同的性格。
“她的眼睛真正的美是美在笑，不论是浅笑，还是大笑，只要一笑，那双眼睛里就会有鲜
花开放。那花儿鲜艳、娇媚、逗人喜爱，使她的脸面顿时甜蜜、俊俏、神采飞扬。即使她气
恼，那眼里依然隐约有花儿颤动。”
“那双眼睛，如秋水，如寒星，如宝珠，如白水银里头养着两丸黑水银，左右一顾一看，
连那坐在远远墙角子里的人，都觉得王小玉看见我了。那坐的近的，更不必说。”
她扎着两条小辫子，一双大眼睛整日里忽闪忽闪的，使得那张堆满笑容的脸显得格外明
亮。她一哭起来，那就我能给人留下甜甜的印象。不过她发脾气时，两眼瞪得吓人，你最好
躲远一点。
■外貌描写要有顺序，有条理。试分析一下描写顺序。
1、她头上系着彩带，身穿一套洗的发白的校服，脚上穿着半旧的硬鞋，至少也有半斤
重。
2、常常胖墩墩的，红扑扑的小脸蛋上，有一双水灵灵的眼睛。小辫儿朝天翘着，粉红
色的发带在头上一颠一颠的，像两只飞舞的彩蝶。尤其逗人喜爱的，是她那张伶俐的小嘴。
3、他的眉毛胡子都花白了。但脸膛仍是紫红色的，显得神采奕奕。他身穿崭新的青布
棉袄棉裤，头上还包着一块雪白的毛巾，蹲在地上，乐滋滋地抽着旱烟。
4、他身穿军用棉大衣，脚穿高筒皮靴。高个子，方脸盘，长得很魁梧。下巴上有一颗
黑痣，那双眼睛在黑暗中闪着亮，使人觉得粗犷又精明。
5、吃了一惊，赶忙抬起头，却见一个凸颧骨，薄嘴唇，五十岁上下的女人站在我面前，
两手搭在髀间，没有系裙，张开两脚，正像一个画图仪器里细脚伶仃的圆规。
三、外貌描写要与身份、处境相吻合。说说下面文字分别写的是四大名著中的哪个人物，
你是怎样判断的？
1、只见他黑脸短毛，长嘴大耳，圆身肥肚，穿一件青不青、蓝不蓝的梭布衣服，提一
柄九齿钉耙。（）
2、他有三头六臂，脖子上套着乾坤圈，脚踏风火轮，威风八面。（ 哪咤？ ）
3、他身穿金光闪闪的战袍，头戴金冠，手持从东海龙宫掠来的金箍棒，现出一副威武
霸气的样子。一对火眼金睛炯炯有神，透露出产出一切妖魔的决心。浑身透露出一种天不怕、
地不怕的精神。（ 孙悟空 ？）
4、伸长八尺（大概184CM），面如冠玉，头戴纶巾，身披鹤氅，飘飘然有神仙之概。
（ 诸葛亮）
5、身长九尺（大概211CM），髯长二尺（大概46CM）；面如重枣，唇若涂脂；丹凤眼，
卧蚕眉，相貌堂堂，威风凛凛。（ 关羽）
三、阅读下面两个文段。
（1）门一开，班主任领进一位女生。她长得很好看，衣着朴素。“我叫李华，请多光照。”
简单的开场白后，她被分到我的旁边，以后我们成了同桌。
（2）门一开，班主任领进一位女生。她中等个儿，梳着两根长辫子，黑里透红的脸上，
有一对明亮的眼睛。穿着一身洗的褪了色的学生装，裤子的膝盖处还缀着两个像眼睛一样的
补丁。“我叫李华，请多光照。” 简单的开场白后，她被分到我的旁边，以后我们成了同桌。
评价：这两个文段同写一个人物，哪一种好？为什么？
四、写写练练
1、猜猜他（她）是谁？
用50字左右描写一个同班同学的外貌，老师挑选几个写得好的，请同学们一起猜猜写
的同学是谁。
2、当堂练笔——给老师画张像。
3、课后作业：再来写写“我”自己。
篇二：五年级作文精彩开头和结尾片段欣赏
五年级作文精彩开头和结尾片段欣赏
一、精彩开头：
苦，不是好滋味。人尝胆汁、黄连，其味即苦也。然而，偏就有卧薪尝胆者，明知味苦，定要尝之。何故？用以励志也。苦行、苦斗、苦恋、苦苦地折磨自已，坚忍、执著，心甘情愿、锲而不舍，“衣带渐宽终不悔，为伊消得人憔悴“。苦，至此便成为一种镜界。为追求一种目的，达到一种镜界，虽苦犹乐，甘之如饴。苦之极，亦乐之极也。读书之苦乐亦如此也。就本人自身而言我看过很多书,所以我也爱书,自然知道读书的苦与乐.
善良，像一颗缀在叶尖上的露珠，也许它很小，但它可以滋润一朵花并让它美丽的开放；善良，像一座草屋，也许它很破旧，但它可以让疲惫无助的旅人过一个平安的夜晚……朋友，当你向他人伸出援手时，你便是在善待自己
拥有梦想可以创造奇迹，拥有梦想，一根小小的火柴，可以点亮一片天空；拥有梦想，一片小小的树叶，可以装点整个春天；拥有梦想，一叶小小的扁舟，可以惊动一片海洋。小小的心灵，大大的梦想，一步一步努力，总有一天会找到自己的天空。
虽然你现在还只是一株稚嫩的幼苗。然而只要坚韧不拔，终会成为参天大树；虽然你现在只是涓涓细流，然而只要锲而不舍，终会拥抱大海；虽然你现在只是一只雏鹰，然而只要心存高远，跌几个跟头之后，终会占有蓝天。
如果只看到太阳的黑点，那你的生活将缺少温暖；如果你只看到月亮的阴影，那么你的生命历程将难以找到
光明；如果你总是发现朋友的缺点，你么你的人生旅程将难以找到知音；同样，如果你总希望自己完美无缺，假设你的这一愿望真的能如愿以偿，那么你最大的缺点就是没有缺点。
阴沉的天空扯来一片乌云掩住了自己忧伤的脸。鲜红如血的分数，像把图钉洒在我的心上，再一个个被用力地踩了进去。
风停了，雨住了，月亮出来了。我从她闪烁的双眼中看到了光明，似乎她就是天空的那轮明月。我用力地点了点头，露出了久违的笑容。
二、精彩结尾：
太阳偏西了，我们也有点累了，便一起乘车，带着在笔架山游玩的快乐，踏入归途…… 这次蛋壳实验真是太有趣了！不但锻炼了动手的能力， 而且还从中明白了“力的集中与分散”的道理，收获太大了！所以我喜欢这样的实验！
这件事过去很长时间了，但我却铭记不忘。事情虽然小，但它给我的启发却很大，
因为它让我明白了一个道理，那就是：人不论做错了什么事，只要认识到错了，而且敢于承认，勇于改正，那就一定有新的开始，一定会进步的。
我们终于和好了，而且通过这件事，更让我们明白了以诚相待，宽容谅解才是友谊的基础。朋友，您说是不是这样啊？（也可以这样说：“朋友，难道您不这样认为吗？”）
让沙尘暴来得更猛烈些吧！唤醒人类沉睡的环保意识，否则人类将被迫用自己的毁灭来赎罪。否则地球上的最后一滴水是人类的眼泪，地球上的最后一粒砂将是埋葬人类的坟墓。
三、不同话题的作文结尾
感 恩
开头：落叶在空中盘旋，谱写着一曲感恩的乐章，那是大树对滋养它大地的感恩；白云在蔚蓝的天空中飘荡，绘画着那一幅幅感人的画面，那是白云对哺育它的蓝天的感恩。因为感恩才会有这个多彩的社会，因为感恩才会有真挚的友情。因为感恩才让我们懂得了生命的真谛
结尾：怀着一颗感恩的心，去看待社会，看待父母，看待亲朋，你将会发现自己是多么快乐，放开你的胸怀，让霏霏细雨洗刷你心灵的污染。学会感恩，因为这会使世界更美好，使生活更加充实。
给予
开头：花叶摇摆，当给别人送一片绿：花朵盛开，当给别人捧一阵香，因为，当你把生命放进了别人心里，关怀他们一些，帮助他们一些，你的生命之花便会在别人心中常开不败，溢满心香。
结尾：赠人玫瑰，手有余香！
心胸宽广
开头：雨果说:"比陆地宽广的是海洋,比海洋宽广的是天空,比天空宽广的是人的胸怀。 结尾：心就是一个人的翅膀，心胸有多大世界就有多大
篇三：五年级作文训练题目
五年级作文训练题目
1\题目：我总想着这件事
要求：（1）要围绕中心把一件事有层次、有条理地写具体、写完整。
（2）和中心有关的情节要写得具体详细。
提示：文章的主人公是“我”，事情只允许写一件。而且这件事必须是自己亲身经历或耳闻目睹的。应该说，在日常生活中碰到的事是十分多的，但使自己总想着的事却不太多。惟独“这件事”使作者“总想着”而不能望却，说明“这件事”决不是一件普普通通的事。“这件事”也许对自己帮助极大，也许十分有趣，也许对自己教训十分深刻，等等。写作时，要在“总想着”三个字上下功夫，如果写的“这件事”，让读者看了也忘不了，那么这篇作文就写得成功了。
2\题目：学校生活二三事
要求：（1）用具体的事例来反映学校生活。
（2）有中心，意思连贯。
提示：凡是在学校发生的有关德、智、体、美、劳等方面的事情，都属于学校生活的范围，因此，这道题可写的范围是较大的。
同学们置身于丰富多彩的学校生活之中，同学之间团结友爱的事，师生之间关怀爱戴的事，同学们勤奋学习、勇攀高峰的事……都可入文。
题目规定写二三事，即可写二件事，也可写三件事，还可多写几件事，但不能只写一件事。写二三事时不能平均使用笔墨，而应有所区别，如具体地写其中的一件事，略写另一件或几件事。
3\题目：喜事
要求：（1）中心明确、详略得当，注意表达真情实感。
（2）语句通顺，标点正确。
提示：
喜事，即令人高兴的事。在我们的日常生活中，喜事是很多的，可以写发生在家里的喜事，如家里的人评上了劳模、先进工作者，考上了大学，或添置了新的家用电器等。也可写发生在社会上的喜事，如一个新的娱乐设施的落成，一条高速公路的开通，人们告别了旧平房住进了新公房等。
写喜事，要描写好喜庆的场面，字里行间要洋溢欣喜之情，使读者也受到感染，感到愉悦。
4\题目：我的同桌
要求：（1）用事实来反映人物特点。
（2）注意人物的语言、行动及心理活动描写。
提示：同桌，指的是使用同一课桌的同学。从小学年级至小学毕业，或许换了好几个同桌，写谁呢？哪一位同桌某一方面的特征和思想品质给自己留下了深刻的印象，并值得学习的呢？要认真想一想。
确定写谁以后，就要选择一件或几件最能反映同桌特点的，带有代表性的生动事例或片段。叙述过程中要对同桌的外貌、语言、行动和心理活动恰当地描写，使人物形象更丰富，文章更生动。

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Make full use of the network carrier, to explore the establishment of electronic group service system, promote the work of Communist Youth League information.Attachment 4:XX municipal Party Committee Propaganda Department of the Communist Youth League work pointsIn 2006, the Communist Youth League propaganda ideological work XX to Deng Xiaoping theory and the important thought of "Three Represents" as guidance, study and implement the party's sixteen and the spirit of the the fifth Plenary Session of the 16th CPC Central Committee implementation of the eight plenary session of the two committee, the city's cultural work conference, the Propaganda Department of the meeting and the the fourth Plenary Session of the 15th CPC Central Committee permanent mission spirit, closely around "11th Five-Year XX" the goal of full implementation of Scientific Outlook on Development, emancipating the mind, seeking truth from facts, keep pace with the times, close to reality, close to life, close to the young, persevere grasp orientation, grasping deepening, grasping construction innovation, further improve the group's propaganda and ideological work ability, unity To guide the majority of members of the youth to achieve the "11th Five-Year" planning tasks, the overall construction of a well-off society, building a socialist harmonious society to make new contributions.One, adhere to the "Three Represents" important thought and Scientific Outlook on Development education to guide the youth, to further strengthen the ideological and political education of youth(a) armed with youth science theory. Unremittingly with Deng Xiaoping theory and the important thought of "Three Represents" armed members of youth education, to promote the study and implement to expand the depth and breadth. To study and implement the important thought of "Three Represents" with the establishment and implementation of Scientific Outlook on Development combine with the implementation of the requirements of constructing socialist harmonious society with Scientific Outlook on Development, carry out education as an important part of the theory of armed youth in the new period, strengthen the establishment and implementation of Scientific Outlook on Development education, educate and guide the youth to fully understand the great significance of establishment and implementation of Scientific Outlook on Development, in-depth understanding of the Scientific Outlook on Development era back The king, the practice foundation, basic connotation, historical status, spirit and practice requirements, a profound understanding of Scientific Outlook on Development with Marxism Leninism, Mao Zedong thought, inheriting and developing relationship between Deng Xiaoping theory and the important thought of "Three Represents", to help young people establish and consciously practice Scientific Outlook on Development. 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