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挺,为人进出门,紧锁着，,为狗爬出洞,敞开着，,日积月累,为人进出门：指革命者所走道路。,为狗爬出洞：指出卖革命，充当可耻叛徒投降之路。,朗诵诗歌，了解重点词义。,第9页,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,一个声音,高叫着：,爬出来吧，给你自由！,我渴望自由，,但我深深地知道,人身躯怎能从狗洞子里爬出！,一个声音：指国民党反动派声嘶力竭叫喊诱降声音。,第10页,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,我希望有一天，,地下烈火,，,将我连这活棺材,一齐烧掉，,我应该在烈火与热血中得到永生,！,地下烈火：指革命烈火。,活棺材：指国民党反动派关押革命者牢房，也指国民党反动派统治下黑暗社会。,永生：永远活着，永久生命。指革命者为革命献身精神永不磨灭。,第11页,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,【,译文,】,革命者所走路被敌人紧紧地锁着，出卖革命、充当可耻叛徒投降之路却敞开着。反动派声嘶力竭地叫喊着：投降吧！给你自由！,我渴望得到自由，不过我深深地知道,一个真正革命者怎么能靠出卖革命取得自由！,我希望有一天，革命烈火把我和反动派监狱,这黑暗社会一齐烧掉，我应该在火与血斗争中得到永生。,第12页,【,作者介绍,】,叶挺,（,1896-1946,），广东惠阳人。中国无产阶级革命家、军事家，中国人民解放军创建人和新四军领导人。毕业于保定军校。曾于,1921,年任孙中山大元帅府警卫团营长。,1924,年赴莫斯科东方大学学习，后加入中国共产党。北伐战争中任国民革命军第四军参谋处处长、独立团团长。参加领导了,1927,年南昌起义和广州起义。抗战暴发后任新四军军长。,1946,年,4,月,8,日由重庆回延安途中因飞机失事遇难。,第13页,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,【,赏析,】,这是一首用生命和热血写成诗歌。诗人利用,象征,和,对比,手法，向人们昭示了革命者坚强革命意志、高尚革命气节和奋斗到底革命精神。诗歌语言铿锵有力，层层推进，含有极强感染力和号召力。,第14页,小说,红岩,作者是著名作家罗广斌、杨益言。主要描写解放前夕，革命者为迎接全国解放，挫败敌人垂死挣扎而进行斗争故事。,课外书屋,第15页,作品有纪实性，成功地塑造了以许云峰、江姐、成岗和华子良等人为代表共产党人英雄形象，感人至深；同时对反面人物形象塑造也很有特色，揭示了他们反动本质。作品语言朴实，笔调悲壮，被中宣部、文化部、团中央命名为“革命教科书”。,第16页,课余时间，我们能够阅读这部革命巨著,红岩,，也能够读一读,红日,小兵张嘎,铁道游击队,青春之歌,小游击队员,赤色小子,等其它革命题材小说。,第17页,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,红日,：吴强所著红色经典小说，描写在解放战争时期，中国人民解放军华东野战军在山东歼灭国民党部队整编,74,师故事。故事以军长沈振新、政委丁元善所率领一支部队为根本，围绕着山东战场上著名莱芜、孟良崮两大战役，描绘了波澜壮阔战斗场面和可歌可泣英勇事迹。,第18页,铁道游击队,由刘知侠所著，是一部描写在抗日时期，鲁南地域确有这么一支游击队，开始在临（城）枣（庄）支线，以后发展到津浦干线上活动。在广大革命依据地中，由共产党人领导一支特殊游击小分队，以打击日伪军交通线为目标而与日伪势力进行游击斗争英雄故事。,第19页,青春之歌,是当代文学史上第一部描写学生运动、塑造革命知识分子形象和成长命运优异长篇小说。作者杨沫，出生于北京一个没落官僚地主家庭，曾在河北省定县等地教书，后又在北京做过家庭教师和书店店员，在此期间接触了马列主义思想，并加入了共产党。这种个人生活经历对她小说创作有很大影响。,第20页,口语交际,习作三,第21页,口语交际,词典上说，是对未来事物想象或希望（多指有依据、合理，跟空想、幻想不一样）。,理想是什么,第22页,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,俄国作家列夫,托尔斯泰说：“理想是指路明灯。没有理想，就没有坚定方向；而没有方向，就没有生活。”,正值花样年华我们，该怎样用理想做挂天征帆，驾长风破巨浪；以一柄木桨，引领生命之舟驶入金色港湾？今天我们一起来讨论一下相关理想话题。,第23页,化学家诺贝尔为减轻工地上挖土工人繁重劳动，决心创造炸药。废寝忘食，四年里做了几百次试验。最终一次试验时，他聚精会神地盯着燃烧导火线。一声巨响，在旁人们惊叫：“诺贝尔完了！”诺贝尔却从浓烟中跳出来，面孔乌黑身上还带着血，兴奋地狂呼：“成功了！”那些出色人物正是被一个高尚目标所鼓舞，才产生了惊人毅力与忘我精神,是理想浪涛激励着他们去刻苦奋斗。,第24页,交际内容,理想是人生导航灯塔，我们每个人都应该有自己理想，这次口语交际话题就是“我理想”。请大家谈谈自己理想是什么，为何有这么理想，准备怎样为实现理想而努力。,我理想,第25页,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,交际指导,1.,确定理想。,仔细思索：自己理想是什么？为何有这个理想？这个理想对于自己来说有什么主要意义？实现自己理想需要从哪些方面做起？,2.,列出提要。,把自己想法列成提要，尽可能分条细致，每一步都要考虑周到。,第26页,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,3.,小组交流。,首先在小组内召开“放飞理想”交流会，每个小组组员都要畅谈自己理想。同学们要学会倾听，尊重他人理想和愿望。在小组交流基础上，选出代表，在班级内交流。,4.,评议。,同学之间要敞开心扉，既要畅谈自己理想，又要对他人理想进行评价。评价时要多必定，让每个人都得到成功体验。还要注意立足现实，讨论怎样为实现理想而努力。,第27页,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,小冰：,我理想是长大后成为一名宇航员，遨游太空，探索宇宙奥秘。因为我在电视转播中目睹了“神舟十号”飞船与“天宫一号”成功交会情景，那一刻是全中国人自豪与骄傲。从那时起，当一名宇航员梦想就深深地刻在了我心里。,第28页,小红：,从小我就想当一名女交警，穿上漂亮警服，站在马路中央指挥交通，多么英姿飒爽。这个工作可能会很累，不过能够让城市交通更顺畅！,第29页,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,小刚：,当一名画家是我理想。现在我利用课余时间上美术班，有了专业老师指导，我绘画水平有了很大提升。我相信，只要努力，我定能实现我理想。,第30页,在未来，我想成为一位赫赫有名环境保护卫士，为城市环境保护工作尽一份力量。,长大了我想做一名律师，为那些蒙冤人、不平事伸张正义，洗脱罪名。,我要成为一名大画家，把祖国山山水水都描绘在我画中。,我以后想开一间环境优雅咖啡书屋，让人们在休闲阅读同时能品尝到美味咖啡。,我理想是成为一名外交官，让世界愈加了解中国，为世界和平发展做出自己贡献。,第31页,习作内容,此次习作是口语交际自然延伸，题目就是,我理想,。要写清楚自己理想是什么，为何有这么理想，以及准备怎样去实现自己理想。注意利用从其它学科学到知识来组成写作素材，以丰富习作内容。,习 作,第32页,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,第一步：,审题,要写清楚自己理想是什么，为何有这么理想，以及准备怎样去实现自己理想。,第二步：,立意,表示出自己对实现理想无限渴望之情。,第三步：,选材,确定了自己理想是什么之后，选择材料能够是这个理想产生过程，这个理想详细样子，这个理想该怎样实现等。,写法指导：,第33页,第四步：,思绪,1,、用设问、排比句式或引用名言开门见山点出理想是什么。,理想，多么美好字眼！每个人都有自己理想，有些人想当科学家，有些人想当创造家，有些人想当歌星，还有些人想当演员。你知道我理想是什么吗？来，把耳朵凑过来，让我悄悄告诉你吧，我理想是当一名服装设计师！,第34页,2,、习作主体部分，抓住为何有这个理想，准备怎样去实现这个理想来叙述。,想要实现理想，你会碰到哪些困难？准备怎样克服呢？,第35页,3,、习作结尾，能够用排比句式或用号召式呼应开头。,为了实现我理想，我会努力学习知识，不停充实、丰富自己，让自己成为一个知识渊博人。我相信：在我努力下，我一定能够实现理想。,第36页,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,看看他人构思：,我理想,开头：,交代“我”理想是当一名服装设计师,第五步：,方法,引用：引用关于理想名人名言来深化自己习作主题。,中间,结尾：,畅想未来，升华主题（坚信理想实现）,写“我”为何会有这么理想（由来）,写“我”准备怎样实现自己理想,首先其次,第37页,我理想,苏格拉底说过：“世界上最高兴事，莫过于为理想而奋斗。”,我理想是当一名服装设计师，我想要为我理想奋斗，创造更高兴更精彩人生。,佳作观赏：,引用名言，开篇点题。,第38页,我为何会想要当一名服装设计师呢？不是因为我在美术方面有所专长，而是因为我从小就对衣服情有独钟。我总是目不转睛地看电视里时装秀，时不时把妈妈衣柜翻得乱七八糟，惹得妈妈笑骂我是“小疯设计师”。以后我还听说了一个服装设计师为一个病危女孩设计婚纱，圆了她美梦,第39页,故事，这让我更想成为一个含有“圆梦”能力设计师了。,要想实现我理想,当一名优异服装设计师，就要有不怕困难决心和勇气。首先要加强设计知识积累，课余时间能够买一些设计类书来看，认真地学。其次，有空时候能够看看时装杂志，经常跟,点明自己想当服装设计师原因，理由充分，认知深刻。,第40页,着妈妈去商场，“观赏”他人设计衣服。当然，最主要是要报一个绘画班，打好基础。平时练练手，设计一些衣服，并不停修改。总之，我现在就要培养审美能力，先学画画，多做设计，未来再系统地学习服装设计。这么，我离成为一名服装设计师目标就不远了。,写自己打算怎样实现理想。逻辑清楚，层次清楚。,第41页,假如我真当上了服装设计师，我一定要设计出许多漂亮衣服，帮助人们变得漂亮时尚，帮助更多人实现心里梦。等我挣钱以后，我还要捐一部分给希望工程，帮助山里孩子实现自己梦想。,主题升华。,第42页,理想是促进我们前进动力，是我们生命希望。“宝剑锋从磨砺出，梅花香自苦寒来”，我坚信，只要一直勤奋、努力地学习，一步一个脚印，我理想就一定会实现！,引用名言。,第43页,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,总评：,这篇习作语言流畅，叙述层次分明，表示清楚。作者将自己理想以及树立理想原因，准备为实现理想而做努力清楚地展现在读者面前。首尾恰当地引用名言警句，丰富了文章内涵，使人回味无穷。,第44页,我理想,我们每个人都有自己理想。有理想远大，有理想平庸。有对生活美好理想，也有对事业执着追求。我就有一个事业上远大理想,当一名优异宇航员。,第45页,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,在很小时候，我就对天空有着浓厚兴趣：那朵朵白云是什么变？星星为何会发光？月亮上有什么？我们能上去住吗？,