写作得高分市公开课金奖市赛课一等奖课件.pptx

单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,写作如何得高分？,模板当然主要，不过阅卷老师在阅卷过程中有时也会关注同学们用词和句型使用。,高分作文标志,1、180字左右；,2、是否长短句交叉；,3、用词是否恰当，准确，形象，尽也许使用能够吸引阅卷老师眼球闪光词；,4、关键词是否换用，切勿老用重复词；,第1页,第1页,写好一篇作文注意事项：,1.适当用被动代替积极，这样能更客观反应事实,句子开头不要总是用we/I(比如写结尾时不用we should pay attention to而用Attention should be paid to.)举个典型结尾：It is,therefore,high time that some applicable approaches were implemented by the service industry like that.Thus，its competitive edge will be sharpened effectively.,第2页,第2页,2.善于使用插入语，比如说把副词、连接词等，作插入语放在中间，普通放在主语、动词或者助动词后，两边分别加上逗号。如：however/therefore/for example/I believe做插入语放在中间，普通放在动词，助动词后，两边分别加上逗号。,比如说：Other individuals,however,take the attitude that,第3页,第3页,3.一定要学会换词，换形象，详细代替太宽泛。(考试中普通不要出现good,bad,many,thing,think,people,opinion等等)比如上面例子中，applicable代替proper;approaches代替ways;implement代替carry out;sharpen ones competitive edge代替enhance ones competitiveness(提升某物竞争力),第4页,第4页,标题：Computer and I,第一段：I never forget the exceedingly thrilling day when my mother bought me a computer as birthday present,which exerted a tremendous fascination on me so that I indulged myself in goggling an army of useful information I had expected,and enjoy a sea of melodious classic music.That night I was sleepless,feeling that the whole world belonged to me.exceedingly替换very,thrilling替换exciting,sth.exert a tremendous fascination on sb替换sb.be interested in sth.,谷歌替换search,an army of替换a lot of,第5页,第5页,第二段：,The dawn of the new century witnessed,the,increasing popularity,of computers.,Coincident with,the,advancement,of science and technology,computers,pouring into,the current society as a fashion are,appealing to,growing individuals,.,It is no exaggeration,to say that we have been submerged by them,in large measure!,The dawn of the new century witnessed是一个精彩句型，用来描述在某个时期发生了什么事情；Increasing popularity替换more and more popular；Coincident with非常地道词汇，表示“与一致”意思，替换With；Advancement替换development；Pour into(flood into/swarm into)替换enter into；Current(currently)替换now；Appeal to sb.替换sb.be interested in sth.；Growing individuals替换more and more people；It is no exaggeration to say典型句型，说某事是毫不夸张,第6页,第6页,第三段：To begin with,we can,freely,search desired information at any moment.Little by little,our knowledge will be well enriched,and our horizons will be greatly broadened.Additionally,we can get huge recreations online by chatting,playing games,or delivering email.,We can,freely,search用了插入语写作手法,our knowledge will be well enriched,and our horizons will be greatly broadened.用了非常精彩被动,Additionally替换In addition/Besides,Deliver替换send,第7页,第7页,第四段：There is no denying that,however,computers can function in the disservice of human beings,in a way,especially the growing violence,porn pictures,AV-films emerging on the screen,which leads quiet a few net citizens to copying.,There is no denying that,however,computers can function in the disservice of human beings,这个句子有三个精彩之处，首先There is no denying that这个句型，尚有however作为插入语，function in the disservice of替换do harm to,Emerging代替appearing(fading代替disappearing),Net citizen网民，属于精彩用词,第8页,第8页,第五段：As a classic proverb goes that no garden has no weeds.Computers do play a positive role in the development of people lives,despite a slice of unfavorable impacts.We should,therefore,take advantage of the fruits and avoid the opposite facet.,No garden has no weeds替换Every coin has two sides,Computers do play，do强调,Positive替换important/good等,A slice of替换a part of,Unfavorable替换bad,Impacts替换effects/influences,We should,therefore,take advantage of使用插入语,Fruits(并且fruits用非常形象，merits/virtues)替换advantage(defects替换disadvantage),Facet替换aspect,第9页,第9页,下列是30个最典型替换词，以供参考。,1.individuals,characters,folks代替(people,persons),2:positive,favorable,rosy(美好)，promising,(有希望)，perfect,pleasurable,excellent,outstanding代替good,3:dreadful,unfavorable,poor,adverse(有害)代替bad,4.(an army of,an ocean of,a sea of,a multitude of,many,if not most)代替many.,注：用many,if not most一定要小心，many后一定要有词。E.g.Many individuals,if not most,harbor the idea that.,第10页,第10页,5:a slice of,quiet a few,several代替some,6:harbor the idea that,take the attitude that,hold the view that,it is widely shared that,it is universally acknowledged that)替think (由于是书面语，因此要加that),7:affair,business,matter代替thing,8:shared代common,9.reap huge fruits代替get much benefit,10:for my part,from my own perspective代替in my opinion,第11页,第11页,11:Increasing(ly),growing代替more and more(注意没有growingly这种形式。因此当修饰名词时用increasing/growing.修饰形容词，副词用increasingly.,eg.sth has gained growing popularity.,Sth is increasingly popular with the advancement of sth.,12.little if anything,或little or nothing代替hardly,13.benefitial rewarding代替helpful be beneficial of,14.shopper,client,consumer,purchaser,代替customer,15.exceedingly,extremely代替very,第12页,第12页,16.hardly unnecessary,hardly inevitable.代替necessary,inevitable,17.sth appeals to sb,sth exerts a tremendous fascination on sb代替sb take interest in,18.capture ones attention代替attract ones attention.,19.facet,demension,sphere代aspect,20.be indicative of,be suggestive of,be fearful of代indicate,suggest,fear,21.give rise to,lead to,result in,trigger代替cause.,22.There are several reasons behind sth代替.reasons for sth,23.desire代替want.,第13页,第13页,24.pour attention into代替pay attention to,25.bear in mind that代替remember,26.enjoy,possess代替have(注意process是过程意思),27.Interaction代替communication,28.frown on sth代替be against,disagree with sth,29.to name only a few,as an example代替for example,30.next to/virtually impossible,代替nearly impossible,第14页,第14页,