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新题型探究-读后续写 襄阳市36中 任清风Step I: Share funny jokesThe parents with their three-year-old son went to see a film. When they walked into the cinema, the attendant said to them: “ Youll have to go out if your son cries. But well refund(退款) you the tickets.”About half an hour later, the husband asked his wife, “ What do you think of the film?”“Ive never seen such a boring film.” His wife answered, “Its not worth seeing.”“I dont think much of it, either.” The husband said, “Wake the child up and_.”Step II: Requirements and assessmentsRequirements: 1)续写部分分为两段，开头已经为你写好;2)所续写短文的词数应为150左右；3)应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；4)续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。读后续写的能力要求和评分细则一、记叙文阅读理解能力 二、由读到写的思维能力 三、记叙文书面表达能力评分档次第一条第二条第三条第四条第五档（21-25分）与所给短文融合度高，与所提供的各段落开头语衔接合理。内容丰富，应用了五个以上短文中标出的关键词语。所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写的短文结构紧凑。第四档（16-20分）与所给短文融合度较高，与所提供的各段落开头语衔接较为合理。内容比较丰富，应用了五个以上短文中标出的关键词语。所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但不影响意义表达。比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写的短文结构紧凑。第三档（11-15分）与所给短文关系较为密切，与所提供的各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接。写出了若干有关内容，应用了四个以上短文中标出的关键词语。应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求，虽有一些错误，但不影响意义表达。应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文内容连贯。第二档（6-10分）与所给短文有一定的关系，与所提供的各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接写出了一些有关内容，应用了3个以上短文中标出的关键词语语法结构单调，词汇项目有限，有些语法结构和词汇方面的错误，影响了意义的表达。较少使用语句间的连接成分，全文内容缺少连贯性。第一档（1-5分）与所提供的短文和开头语的衔接较差。产出内容较少，很少使用短文中标出的关键词语。语法结构单调，词汇项目有限，有较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误，严重影响了意义的表达。缺乏语句间的连接成分，全文内容连贯。第五档： 21-25与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。所使用语法结构和词汇丰富，准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。重点考查：记叙文阅读理解能力和记叙文书面表达能力。读后续写过程中存在的问题：续写内容与所给短文在叙述意图上不一致续写内容与所给短文在相关细节上相矛盾续写内容与所给短文在语篇结构上不连贯Step III: Solution way of thinking -3 steps Step 1 read(阅读）- * given two sentences（段首语） * main plots of the passage（故事情节） Step 2 draft（拟稿）- * Predict all the possbile plot * with the help of “PRS”strategy“PRS” Strategy Problem-Result-Solution Step3 polish（润色）- * use different structures（结构） * use transitional words （过渡） * add some details （细节）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 It was Christmas Day. Pappy was working alone fixing an old lantern in the backroom when he heard the ringing of his bell on the shop door. The bell, which produced a uniquely pleasant sound, had been in Pappys family for over a hundred years. He valued it dearly and enjoyed sharing its song with all who came to his shop. Although the bell hung on the inside of the main door, Pappy had tied a wire to the screen door so that it would ring whether the inner door was open or not. Hearing the bell, he left the backroom to greet his customer. “And how can I help you, little lady?” Pappys voice was joyful. “Hello, sir.” The little girl spoke almost in a whisper. She looked at Pappy with her big brown eyes, and then slowly scanned the room in search of something special. Shyly she told him, “Id like to buy a present, sir.” “Well, lets see,” Pappy said, “who is this present for?” “My grandpa. Its for my grandpa. But I dont know what to get.” Pappy began to make suggestions. “How about a pocket watch? Its in good condition.” The little girl didnt answer. She had walked to the doorway and put her small hand on the door. She shook the door gently to ring the bell. Pappys face seemed to glow as he saw her smiling with excitement.“This is just right,” the little girl said. “Momma says grandpa loves music.” Just then, Pappys expression changed. Fearful of breaking the little girls heart, he told her, “Im sorry, Missy. Thats not for sale. Maybe your grandpa would like this little radio.”The girl looked at the radio, bowed her head, and sadly sighed, “No, I dont think so.” In an effort to help her understand, Pappy told her that the bell had been his only companion, for the rest of his family were all gone now, except for his estranged (疏远的) daughter whom he had not seen for nearly a decade. With a giant tear in her eye, the little girl looked up at him._ Later that evening when Pappy was closing up the shop, he heard a familiar ringing. _ Step 1 Thorough ReadingwhenWherewhowhatAlittlegirlwasselecting_forhergrandpainpappysshop.However,sheinsistedonbuying_,whichmypappy_dearly.HowStep 2：Draft -Creative PlottingPossible results/solution Underlined words:When:Christmas DayWho: pappy, the little girl, grandpa,momma, daughterWhat：presentHow: sigh,specialPara 1 : Problems: With a giant tear in her eye, the little girl looked up at him.Results:Solutions:Para 2 : Problems: Later that evening when pappy was closing up the shop, he heard a familiar ringing.Results:Solutions: Tip 1 Key Words Tip 2 consistent logicStep 3 : Polishing(Para.1Edition 2)With a giant tear in her eye, the little girl looked up at him. She forced a smile, murmuring“Thank you”and made her way to the door. There was a dead silence in the shop. Suddenly Pappy thought of his daughter. Driven by a sense of sympathy, Pappy called out, “How much have you got to spend?”Hearing this, the little girl counted money in her purse-two dollars altogether. After thinking for what seems like a few seconds, Pappy announced,“Today is Christmas Day and this is your lucky day. It is two dollars that the bell costs exactly.”The child danced out with great joy, the special bell held in her hand.(Para.2Edition 2)Later that evening when Pappy was closing up the shop, he heard a familiar ringing. He couldnt believe his ears! There in the doorway stood the little girl, ringing the bell and smiling sweetly. Puzzled, Pappy approached her. Have you changed your mind, little lady?No, the child grinned ,Momma says the present is for you. Before Pappy had time to say another word, the child mother stepped in. Holding back her tears, she gently said，Hello, Dad.1. vivid verbs 2. inner thoughts (looks,surroundings, dialogues)怎样让记叙文生动起来呢？动作描写2-5个,环境描写1-2个, 对话1-2个,表情或心理1-2个3.advanced phrases &structures 4.proper transitional wordsMake your narration more vivid with appropriate movement.Eyes- stare / glare at / look her in the eye / , with her eyes shining/ filled with tearsHis eyes sparkle with excitement/ gratitudeHands- pat him on the shoulder/head,grasp/hold ones hands,point to sb/sth, wave his handsHead- nod/shake his head violently. He thought for a momentTip 3 To enrich the plot, we can add_, _,_, _, etc. Tip 4 You can get your writing polished by using 1. vivid verbs 2. inner thoughts (looks,surroundings,dialogues)3.advanced phrases &structures 4.proper transitional wordsWhich group do you favor?- First,besides/plus/additionally/furthermore, whats more, - fortunately, unexpectedly, surprisingly, happily for him, Inspired by, Out of curiosity/ Driven by curiosity, Apparently, needless to say, immediately, in an instant,insteadDrafting&Polishing : *Think of all the possible details based on the outline about 70 words(try the vivid description) * positive, logical, reasonable, well-connected * neat handwriting *Dont forget to underline the key words you have chosen.Step IV: Practice It was summer, and mydadwanted to treat me to a vacation like never before.He decided totake me on a trip to the Wild West. We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of NewMexico.We reachedAlbuquerque in the late afternoon.UnclePaul,my dadsfriend,pickedus up from the airport anddrove us up to his farm in Pecos. His wife Tina cookedus a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle.My dadand I spent the night in the guestroom of thefarm houselistening to the frogs and water rolling downtherivernearby.Very early in the morning,Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast.“The daystarts at dawn on my farm,”he said.After breakfast,I went to help Aunt Tinafeedthe chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take thesheepout tograze (吃草). I was impressed to seemy dad and Uncle Paul riding horses.They lookedreally cool. In the afternoon,I asked UnclePaul if I could take a horse ride,and he said yes,as long asmy dad went with me.I wasnt going to take a horse ride by myself anyway.So,my dad and I puton our new cowboy hats,got on our horses,and headed slowly towards the mountains.“Dont belatefor supper,”Uncle Paulcried,“and keep to thetrackso that you dontget lost!” “OK!”mydadcried back.After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out ofsight.It was so peacefulandquiet and the colors of the brownrocks,the deep green pinetrees,and the late afternoon sunmixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautifulwoven (编织的)blanket spread out uponthe ground just for us.。Paragraph1Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse. _Paragraph2Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark. _提出问题：Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse. 问题结果： Instinctively, I yelled out loud,pulling on the reins（缰绳） hard in order to stop the horse. But uselessly, the horse sped off the track into another direction.解决问题： Dad followed closely behind, calling out to tell me how to soothe （安慰; 使平静）the terrified horse and I did as told. Finally, the horse calmed down,but we seemed to get lost, unable to go back to the mountain road.Attention : the last sentence of part 1 should be consistent with the following story.Step IV: Homework Review what we have learned in this class.