高一英语作文复习和讲评省名师优质课赛课获奖课件市赛课一等奖课件.ppt

单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,本资料仅供参考，不能作为科学依据。谢谢,英语作文评分细则对比表,档次,要求任务,覆盖内容关键点,语法结构、词汇,复杂结构、高级词汇,连接成份与结构,写作目标完成情况,第五档,（,2125,分）,完全,完成,覆盖全部,应用,较多,尽力使用,（语法结构或词汇有,些许,错误）,有效使用,连接，全文结构,紧凑,完全抵达,第四档,（,1620,分）,较完全,完成,覆盖全部，遗漏有一两个次关键点,满足,任务要求,语法结构或词汇方面,基本准确,，,些许错误是尝试复杂结构和高级词汇所致,简单使用,连接,全文结构,紧凑,抵达第三档,（,1115,分）,基本,完成,覆盖全部，但遗漏一些内容,基本满足,任务要求,语法结构或词汇方面错误有一些，但不影响了解，,简单使用连接,全文内容,连贯,基本抵达,第二档,（,610,分）,未恰当,完成,遗漏或未描述清楚一些主要内容，写了无关内容,语法,单调，词汇有限,语法结构单调，词汇项目有限，语言语法错误影响对写作内容了解,较少使用连接成份，内容缺乏连贯,信息未能清楚地,传达给读者,第一档,（,15,分）,未完成,显著遗漏主要内容，写了一些无关内容,语法单调，词汇有限,语法结构或词汇方面错误较多，影响对写作内容了解,缺乏连接成份，内容不连贯,信息,未能,传达给读者,第零档,未完成与关键点内容无关,内容,太少,无,无,未能传达任何,信息,附：假如,书写书面,较差，将作文降一个档次。,第1页,评分标准及分析,（一）评分标准分析,英语作文高分,“,关键原因,”,:,1.,内容,:,关键点完整，观点阐述清楚，思想主动向上。,2.,结构,:,段落层次分明紧凑，逻辑清楚，衔接自然连贯,。,3.,遣词造句,:,词汇丰富,（,防止一词多用,），,语法结构多样,（如：定于从句、状语从句、名词性从句，并列句和非谓语等,），衔接过渡词恰当有效利用。,4.,卷面：,美观性（,卷面书写规范，清楚，洁净、整齐,）,但,“,先无错，再精彩,”,！,尽可能高级词句，,第2页,书写训练：,（,1,）主要性：,A.,优异作文，书写在先。没有良好书写，文章再好，也难以博得阅卷老师,青睐，尤其是网上阅卷，电脑屏幕轻易使人产生疲惫；另外老师也无法做一定勾画。那么，字迹清秀整齐漂亮文章必定会使阅卷老师在担心阅卷中产生一个愉悦；相反，难以识别字迹和混乱卷面，会令阅卷者心烦气躁，即使你作文表示很好，也会因为书写而少得分或得低分。,B.,英语教学纲领对书写也提出详细要求：能用书写体熟练，清楚地书写大小写，词句，标点等利用正确、规范。,C.,英语作文评分标准：假如,书写书面,较差，将作文降一个档次。,（,2,）书写较差学生，从大小写字母开始练习，然后誊录词、句、段和篇章，最终自由书写。,第3页,第4页,写作流程指导（四步法）,审题：,成文：,初稿：,检验：,作文题目要求是什么？是否要写标题？是什么体裁？有哪些关键点？应分几段来写？用什么人称和时态？有没有特殊要求？,（,主要信息，最好用铅笔勾下来，以免犯错,）,2.,结构,（写几段，每段写什么，哪段转哪段承哪段,）,关键词,（关键单词和短语）,句式,（高级句式）,1.,注意语言自然流畅，清楚正确地表示。,2.,注意书写和卷面美观性,（规范，清楚，洁净、整齐）,检验是否有单词拼写，大小写，标点等错误。,（消除过失错误，防止自杀行为）,1,.,不提议：全初稿和不打初稿。,遣词造句,第5页,审题,：,现象解释型议论文，能够不写标题，三段式作文（列三个关键点），尤其要求,120,词左右。,初稿,：,(,1),结构,:,（,Para1:,结合题干，开门见山指出,“,越来越多中学开设,”,，,Para2,：,结合自己，详细分析选修课受到欢迎原因，,Para3:,谈谈自己对选修课看法。）,(,2),关键词：,a wide range of selective courses,choose from,be popular with,enjoy,a colorful and meaningful life,to acquire more knowledge,，,get fully developed,enrich school life,get well-prepared for the job hunting,develop/extend interests,make up for,be beneficial to,limited,in order to,future career,broaden our,horizons,find a satisfactory job,.,(,3),句式：,There exists,The reasons accounting for,.are listed as follows.,The reason why,.is that,.,There is no doubt that,.,As far as I,m,concerned,which,非限定从,.,，,成文,：,Firstly,.Besides,Moreover,If so,Thus,.,检验：,.,写作流程实例分析：,eg.,为了更加好满足学生需求，丰富学生校园生活，现在很多中学都开设了课外选修课，,请你依据以下关键点，写一篇,120,词左右英语短文。,1.,越来越多中学开设了课外选修课；,2.,分析选修课受到欢迎原因；,3.,以你自己为例谈谈自己看法；,第6页,使用正确简单句表示内容（,先无错,）,:,五大基本句型：,1,）主语,+,不及物动词（,S+Vi.,）,2,）主语,+,及物动词,+,宾语（,S+Vt.+O,）,3,）主语,+,及物动词,+,间宾,+,直宾（,S+Vt.+O+O,）,4,）主语,+,系动词,+,表语（,S+Link-V+P,）,5,）主语,+,及物动词,+,宾语,+,宾补（,S+Vt.+O+C,）,强调：一个句子最少要有,“,主语,+,谓语,”,（除特殊句式外，如祈使句，省略句等）,eg.,There,have,some students,scribble and litter,here,and there.(),We should,against,food waste.(),第7页,问题:,时态语态问题,Beijing will host the 29,th,Olympic Games.,Beijing,hosted,the 29th Olympic Games.,The dream has been come true.,The dream,has come true,.,We have,realized,our dream.,2.,主谓一致问题,Everyone were exciting.,Everyone,was excited,.,3.,逐字翻译问题,The athletes tried their best encouraged us.,The athletes tried their best,which encouraged,us,.,第8页,问题:,4.,词性混同问题,The Olympics were hosted successful.,The Olympics were,successfully,hosted.,5.,介词短语利用问题,Im proud of China is strong.,Im proud,that,China is strong.,We have looked forward to host the Olympics.,We have looked forward,to hosting,the Olympics.,第9页,(1).,非谓语在写作中利用,to do,(,作目标状语，作后定表动作未发生,),doing,（,表伴随，原因和结果，方式状语，作后定表动作正在,进行）主动关系,done,（,表原因和方式状语，作后定表示被动或完成）被动关系,eg.With a lot of work,to do,he worked from morning to night.,Faced with,so much school work,we have to stay up late.,When meeting,problems,we can turn to teachers for help.,简单句,到,高级亮点句,蜕变,（再精彩）,第10页,(2).,并列句在写作中利用,两个或两个以上简单句用“连词”连在一起组成句子，叫做,并列句，各个并列句中各简单句意义同等主要，相互之间没有,隶属关系，它们之间用连词连接。惯用连接词以下：,（,1,）,and/or/or else/but/so,/for/as well as/both.and/not.but.,not only.but(also),neither.nor,either.or.,（,2,）,however/therefore/otherwise/while/still/yet,等连用。,eg.,He is our teacher.He is also our friend.,He is,not only,our teacher,but also,(he is)our friend.,Not only,is he our friend,but also,(he is)our friend.,eg.Our teachers shouldnt be too kind or strict.,Our teachers should be,neither,too kind nor(they are),too,strict.,Neither,should our teachers be too kind t,nor,(they are)too strict.,第11页,(3).,复合句在作文中利用,复合句由就是主句或几个从句，由关联词相连接，如,定于从句,状语从句,或,名词性从句,。复合句使用不但能使句子结构清楚，层次分明，上下文愈加流,畅，同时也能充分展示作者利用较复杂语法结构能力。如：,1),Water is important because man can,t live without it.,Water,without which man can,t live,is of great importance.,(,定从,),2)Protecting our environment is very important.,I,m firmly convinced,that protecting our environment is very,important.,（宾从）,There is no doubt that,protecting our environment is very,important.,（同从）,It,s important that,protecting our environment is very important.,(,主从,),第12页,3)The life of Senior 3 is busy and hard.We should persist in studying hard.,Even though,the life of Senior 3 is busy and hard,we should persist in studying hard,.,（让步状从,）,4)You study hard and you can succeed.,You efforts,can pay off,on condition that,you persist in studying hard.,(,条件状从,),第13页,(4).,其它固定句式,（,强调，倒装，感叹，祈使句，复合结构,）,固定句式能够使文章语言充满层次感，从而很好地反应考生,语言利用能力。如：,1)We can only lead a happy life when everyone takes care of the environment.,Only,when everyone takes care of the environment,can we,only lead a happy life.,(,倒装句,),2),I,m lucky to be his student.,How lucky,I,m to be his student.,(,感叹句,),3)We make great progress with Mr Wang,s help and encouragement.,It,s,with Mr Wang,s help and encouragement,that,we make great progress.,(,强调句）,第14页,4)We should turn off the light when we leave the classroom.,Make sure to,form the habit of,turning off whenever we leave the classroom.,(,祈使句,),5)There is too much homework to do,so we stay up late at night.,With too much work to do,we stay up late at night.,(with,复合结构,),6)When some people are taking a shower,they make water run all the time.,Some people are taking a shower,with water running all the time,.(with,复合结构,),第15页,(5).,高级、亮点词汇利用,在作文写作中，除多用复杂句式外，多利用高级、亮点词汇一样能,让你文章出彩和与众不一样，给阅卷老师留下深刻印象。如：,1.A good relationship between teachers and students,is good for,our study.,2.Its,very,important,to protect our environment.,3.,I think,only in this way can we,get on well with,our teachers.,4.,I think,we will realize our dream,if we study hard,.,From my point of view,our,dream will be realized,through our,diligence,and,persistence.,is beneficial to/bebefits,of great significance/importance,I,m firmly convinced that,.,be on good terms with,第16页,(5).,贮备一些固定句型结构,怎样多样化表示不一样看法,1,）,People _doing voluntary work,2,）,People,_,doing voluntary work,3,）,People,_,doing voluntary work,4,）,_,doing voluntary work is worthwhile,_,doing voluntary work is a waste of time.,_,doing voluntary work.,Every coin has two sides.,have,（,take,，,adopt,，,assume)different attitudes towards,have different opinions on,take different views of,Some people believe that,Others argue that,Opinions are divided on,第17页,怎样表示,赞成,?,70%of the students,approve of doing,voluntary work.,70%of the students,_,doing,voluntary work.,70%of the students,_,doing,voluntary work.,70%of the students,_,voluntary work_.,70%of the students,_,doing voluntary work.,are in favor of,are for,think of,positively,support,第18页,怎样表示,反对,25%of the students,disapprove of,doing voluntary work.,25%of the students _ doing voluntary work.,25%of the students _ doing voluntary work.,25%of the students _ doing voluntary work.,25%of the students _ doing voluntary work.,25%of the students _ doing voluntary work _.,are against,object to,oppose,think of,negatively,are opposed to,第19页,在写作中除了使用以上谈到重点句型外，还应该注意文章逻辑结构和五种过渡词使用。比如：,1.,表示举例时使用：,for example,such as,take.for example,another example of,here are a few examples,namely,等。,2.,表示列举时使用,：,firstly,secondly,thirdly.finally;to begin with,for one thing,for another,等。,第20页,怎样表示个人看法,I think,each of us should make a contribution to society.,_,each of us should make a contribution to society.,_,each of us should make a contribution to society.,_,each of us should make a contribution to society.,_each of us should make a contribution to society.,In my opinion,As far as I am concerned,Personally,I,hold the view that,第21页,3.,表示归纳总结时使用,：,in a word,in conclusion,to sum up,in brief,in short等。,4.,要加强句与句之间连贯时使用,：,in addition,whats more,furthermore,on top of that,besides,moreover等。,5.,表示转折时使用：,however,while,on the contrary,nevertheless,等。,第22页,6.表原因：,because of、thanks to、due to、owing to，as a result of,etc,7.表结果：,therefore、thus、as a result、so，etc,第23页,开头方法一：名人名言,经典句型：,A proverb says,“,You are only young once.,”,（适合用于已记住名言）,It goes without saying that we cannot be young,forever.,（,适合用于自编名言）,更多经典句型：,As everyone knows,No one can deny that,第24页,开头方法二：数字统计,要想更有说服力，就应该用实际数字来说明。,所以不妨试用下面句型：,According to a recent survey,about 70,of the college students wanted to further their study after their graduation.,A recent statistics shows that,作文题：,Honesty,依据最近一项统计调查显示，大学生向老师请假理由当中,50,都是假。,作文题：,Youth,依据最近一项统计调查显示，在某个大学，学生课余时间,70,都是在休闲娱乐。,第25页,结尾方法一：结论,说完了，毕竟要归纳一番，开头很好，也必定要有一个精彩结尾，让读者眼前一亮，这么，你就能够拿高分了！比以下面例子：,Obviously,（此为过渡短语）,we can draw the conclusion that good manners arise from politeness and respect for others.,更多过渡短语：,in conclusion,in brief,thus,，,it can be concluded that,Therefore,we can find that,，,to sum up,第26页,结尾方法二：提议,Obviously,it is high time that we took some measures to solve the problem.,经典虚拟语气句型！,更多句型：,Accordingly,（所以）,I recommend that some measures be taken.,Consequently,（所以）,to solve the problem,some measures should be taken.,第27页,范文,1,（关于主题句）,Report on the Survey about our School Uniform,Recently I did a survey about,our school uniform.,I interviewed groups of students what they thought about our school uniform.The result is as following.,60%of the students interviewed expressed,their satisfaction with it.,Wearing the fashionable uniform of a good colour,they can prove themselves students and feel very tidy.The uniform also shows they are equal and there is no need for themselves to follow the fashion.Most of them considered it to be a symbol for students.,On the contrary,about 30%of the students held different opinions.,They thought it had an ugly colour and wore uncomfortably.,Besides,they thought it unfashionable and had a dull style.,10%had no idea about it.,In general,our school uniform is popular with most of the students,but it still needs some improvement.,第28页,Report on the survey about our school uniform,Recently,a student made a survey about our school uniform.,60%of them students like the school uniform,.They though the school uniforms whose color is good made them look tidy and handsome,and it also tells others that they were students.Besides,wearing it means not following fashion,because everyone is equal.,However,30%of the students are the other way around.,In their opinion,it is uncomfortable.What they don,t like is that they old-style and the unpleasant color.,10%of the students have no idea about it.,All above is about the survey,.Everyone has different idea.It is hard to say who is right.,第29页,关于失学（表原因）,Now more and more children in the countryside are out of school.,One of the reasons is that,their parents havent much money to afford their school.They have to stay at home to earn money to support their families.What a pity!,And another reason is that,many parents think it is useless for girls to study and they would not like them to go to school.On the other hand,some children are not interested in their lessons and would not like to go to school.,I think all the children,including girls,should have the right to receive education.We have the duty to lend them a hand when they are in trouble.All the people should pay attention to the education of children who will play a very important part in the future of our country.,第30页,网吧,With the development of the Intenet,（,with,结构）,the net bar plays an important role in people,s life.More and more people,especially students,like to go to net bars.They are absorbed in,playing video games,making bad friends and having a chat with,“,Meimei,”,on the net in the bar.Some students often go on playing late into the night in the net bar,（举例）,.,As a result,（表结果not only does it do harm to their health but also produces a bad effect on their studies.,（亮点）,Now a lot of net bars have been shut down in Beijing.But some students go by bus to the net bars at suburbs to play.,Fortunately,more and more parents and schools have realized it.Recently,more than six thousand students ensured that they would be far away from net bars in Jinzhou city,Liaoning Province.It is quite necessary for the students to get rid of the bad habit.,第31页,health,Which is more important,health or wealth?,（短问句开头）,It is a hot topic among people.I can hardly answer this question.I didnt realize that health is more imporant until I saw a businessmans real life.,A successful businessman,one of my father,s friends,devoted himself to his business.He works from morning to night every day.There is no weekends in his mind.He often says,“,I must earn much money so that I can get what I want.,”,Lately,he is ill.Though he has a lot of money,he can do nothing but lie in the hospital,s bed.,（举例）,So I think health is more important than wealth.People can do nothing if they are always in poor health,let alone happiness.No matter we are rich or not,we can not ignore the importance of health.,第32页,第33页,