外教点评高考作文.doc

下表提供了你所心仪的南、北两所大学的招生信息。通过比较作出选择，并结合个人情况说明理由。

南方大学
北方大学
学费
8 000元/年
5 000元/年
招生人数
20人
10人
优惠政策
无
加20分

学生习作·外教批改
From_the_table_we_can_see_that_there_are_two_universities_above.1 Though both of them are the excellent schools.I think I would will2 make my mind up3 to go to the northern university.
Firstly，the education fee in the northern university is 5,000 yuan per year cheaper than that of the university4in the south.Secondly，with the government’s great_concerns plans5，more and more universities were_build_up are being built6，such as the “211” contributions，the universities in China have enhanced，enhancing7 their capability.Not only the southern universities，but also the northern universities are all a good choice.Thirdly，if I choice choose8 the northern university，I can　added add9 20 points in to10 my original score.Why_not_I_choose_it11 Why shouldn’t I choose it?
As far as I am concerned，choose choosing the northern universities is a_wise_determination the wisest decision.
All in all，I think northern university is the best choice12.
旁 批
1．这一点是显而易见的，不需要提及。要尽量用有趣的事实或者问题作为文章的开头，这样才能引起读者的兴趣。
2．I think后面的从句中常用将来时，所以这里不必说I would。
3．“做出决定”正确的英文表达是make one’s mind up/make up one’s mind。但是在正式的文体中最好使用decide。
4．注意应完整表述进行比较的两件事，这样读者才能明白你的意思。
5．plan比concern更好。后者意为“对某人来说是重要的或感兴趣的事物”，隐含的意思是消极的，即政府似乎在担心这件事。这里说的是政府的计划，所以用the government’s plans。
6．这是一件正在进行的事情，因此应该使用现在进行时。
7．使用分词结构能够缩短长句子。而且，现在分词是一个复杂结构，可以使你赢得更高的分数。
8．单词使用错误。choice是名词，应该使用动词choose。
9．注意情态动词后面要加动词原形。
10．动词搭配错误。正确的搭配是add something to。
11．这不符合英语疑问句的构成。应该是Why shouldn’t I choose it？或者Why wouldn’t I choose it?
12．这句话与前面一句意思相同，表述重复。

这是一篇尚可的作文。文章结构合理，观点有逻辑性。但是文章内容有些薄弱，而且作者犯了在高三阶段不应该
犯的语法错误，例如：can added，if I choice，As far as I am concerned，choose the...。
尽管作者的词汇量不够，难以完全回答题目要求，但是作者能较好地把握这类文章要求使用的比较结构。

高分作文秘诀之三：使用一般现在时时，不要忘记单数第三人称动词要加s。例如：
Instead of (不要说：)Her father forbid her to watch TV because he is afraid that it will affect her studies.
Use (要说：)Her father forbids her to watch TV because he is afraid that it will affect her studies.
Instead of (不要说：)It not only provides you with lots of knowledge but also develop your interests.
Use (要说：)It not only provides you with lots of knowledge but also develops your interests.

最近，某网站对“高中教育是否应该取消文理分科”进行了调查，有数万名网民参与投票。结果如下：
人数比例
原　　因
54%主张取消文理分科
1.学生综合素质和竞争力下降；
2．不利于培养学生的人文素养。
40%主张保持文理分科
1.学习负担小；
2．有充裕的时间发展优势学科。
请根据表格的内容，以“Should Science and Arts Education Be Separated？”为题，写一篇120词左右的英语短文，谈谈你对当前的高中文理分科教育模式的看法。
参考范文：
Should Science and Arts Education Be Separated?
Recently a survey has been conducted about whether the separation of science and arts education should be cancelled？54% of the people agree to cancel the separation practice while 40% are against it.
Those who are in favour of canceling the practice think that the separation of science and arts education has resulted in the poor quality of students，which cannot satisfy the demands of modern society.Besides，students need a good understanding of both science and arts to improve their personality and national competitiveness.
However，those who want to keep the separation argue that it is better for students to be educated separately because it can relieve students’ heavy load.With fewer subjects to learn，they can have more free time to take exercise and learn their favourite subjects.
Personally，I agree to cancel the separation practice.