专题19：-读后续写高分技巧(上)(解析版)(新高考专用).docx

►专题19 读后续写高分技巧（上）
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【题型解读】
读后续写是要求考生在理解一篇不完整文章的基础上，充分调动想象创新思维，大胆预测文章缺失部分的内容走势，进行充满个性色彩的设计，并用英语进行续写表达。多以记叙文故事类文章或者夹叙夹议类文章为主，故事情节有曲折、有起伏，但故事线索的逻辑性比较强。
1.创造性：即发挥想象力，该题型具有一定的开放性，考生需用自己的语言对故事情节进行内容创造；
2.逻辑性：即根据已提供的关键信息，按照可能的合理的方向续写，使文章逻辑结构完整；
3.丰富性：即语言能力的充分体现，词汇句法的准确与复杂程度，细节描写的生动性等都将让故事更加立体饱满。

【写作特点】
①重在描述
读后续写的重点在于情节描述。描述过程中应加入更多的具体动作和情感描写。同学们往往比较擅长写"结论性"语言，而没有"画面感"、不会给读者留下深刻的印象。所以，同"们在进行读后续写时，一定要注重描述，讲究生动和画面感。

②关注语言
在高考英语写作中，考生所采用的句型结构在一定程度上会影响阅卷老师对考生写作水平的判断。考生尤其应该避免句型单一化、如通篇使用定语从句，因为这样会让阅卷老师觉得考生对各种句型掌握得不够充分。考生在进行读后续写时应该有意识地多使用不同的句型结构和语法点，比如非谓语、形容词作状语、虚拟语气等。

③注意衔接
由于阅卷老师的阅卷时间十分有限，所以考生一定要在作文中使用清晰的逻辑衔接词，这样可以帮助老师快速抓住文章结构，促使老师更好地理解文章主旨，同时也可以显示出考生写作时严谨的逻辑。在读后续写当中，时间线索串联最为重要，例如upon one's arrival、then、however、besides、while等衔接词，能够为文章提供明确的时间线索，很好地承接上下文，同学们在日常学习中应该多多积累。

④正向结局
从情节上来看，历年真题多以户外经历为主。考生需要注意设计的结局应是正向的化险为夷。例如，2018年6月的高考读后续写真题中讲述了作者和父亲去西部荒原度假时骑马游玩、却在途中迷路的故事，结局应是作者和父亲平安找到了路。同学们在写作时一定要抓住文中线索，把握好故事发展方向。
对于读后续写这样的写作题型，同学们平时一定要多积累好词好句，进行大量的句子翻译练习，并且找到合适的写作步骤，这样才能在考场上有限的时间内完成一篇高分作文。

【应试技巧】
技巧一：精读原文，理解文章要表达的主旨和思想

文字是为思想服务的，表达特定的思想需要相对应的有情感特色的文字。如果作者要褒扬特定的人或事，那么他就会用积极的文字。如果是贬低一个人或一件事，那么他就会用消极的文字。理解文章的主旨，对我们在续写中使用合适的语言有很大的指导意义。

技巧二：细品原文，分析原文的用词风格
要想对续写的文字有准确的把握，就要对原文的文字有非常准确的理解。要想准确理解原文文字的特点，就要在文章主旨的指导下，对原文的文字进行仔细的分析。对原文文字特点的分析包括：（1）对原文人物的动作和心理描写的分析。（2）对原文对话的话语特点的分析。（3）对原文场景的描写的分析。

技巧三：有机地组织自己的语言，保持和原文风格的一致
通过对原文主旨的理解和对语言的准确分析之后，我们就会对原文的语言特点有比较准确的把握，然后就可以使用和原文特点一致的文字来进行续写。

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【典例剖析】
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom, “I’m going to find a better spot for us to camp” and walked away.
With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.
“Tom!” she cried. “Help!”
No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.
  Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落) somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.

As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me? Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.
Para.1 ：But no more helicopters came and it was dark. 
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Para.2 ：It was daybreak when Jane woke up.
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【写作构思】
1.浏览所给信息，确定主题大意。
Who: Jane, Tom
What:Jane was lost
When:One weekend in July
Where: In a forest
Why: A quarrel with Tom, her husband
The main idea:Jane was lost in the forest for three days and survived in the end. Jane learned how to control emotions and deal with conflicts.
2.确定主要情节所用关键词和段落开头语
开头：start to quarrel
发展：kept moving...; had to stop for the night...；heard a helicopter
结尾：待定
Para.1 But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.(Jane是如何熬过那一晚的)
Para 2. It was daybreak when Jane woke up. (Jane是如何获救的）
3.添加细节
扩大Jane在夜晚内心的冲突和Jane当晚与次日与环境之间的冲突。
4.结构完整，收尾呼应。
为了做到首尾呼应，使文章结构更加完整，考生可以在第二段的结尾回扣文章开头Jane与丈夫的争吵和冲突，充分体现本次经历后二人的感受。

【佳作赏析】
But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Immediately, an absolute darkness ruled the forest. Jane, exhausted and scared, lay down near a stone, missing her familyat a distance. All the fantastic memory crowded in and she couldn't help crying, "Hadn't I quarreled with Tom, walked away and climbed to the high place, I wouldn't be trapped in this awful place, confronted with the danger of dying." She regretted with endless anxiety, and then became asleep with shining tears in her eyes.
It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Weak as she was, she struggled to her feet, continuing searching for assistance. To her great joy, a helicopter was flying overhead again and again. Eager and excited, she flagged her yellow blouse and spared no effort to yell so as to attract others' attention. Fortunately, she was eventually noticed and brought into the helicopter. There, she saw her husband, a man staring at her, wearing an expression of relief. As tightly as possible, she hugged him and was too thrilled to say anything. Besides, they agreed never to quarrel again, determining to live the life to the fullest.

【写作思路】
首先，在逻辑上，要做到了合理合情：起初，主人公身陷森林，内心充满了悔恨，在面对困难时焦虑、畏惧；之后，主人公努力求生，最终获救，并且领悟到了一定的人生道理。纵观整个故事，情节发展不仅符合两段给出的开头所限定的情景要求，而且还设置了一定的悬念，增强了故事的可读性。
文章第一句 "an absolute darkness ruled the forest" 中， "rule" 一词就使用了拟人的修辞手法，让森林阴森黑暗的一面展露无遗，同时描绘出主人公身处绝境的紧迫性。在 "Eager and excited, she flagged her yellow blouse…" 一句中，直接将情绪形容词放在句首，使用了非谓语动词的语法，表达精练。
此外， "There, she saw her husband, a man staring at her, wearing an expression of relief." 一句中，使用了几个短句，却包含了两处非谓语动词语法，同时活用了 "wear" 一词，把两个人相见时的场景生动地描绘了出来。

【词汇拓展】
1） 表示并列关系的过渡词：and, as well as, or ，Not only … but also
2） 表示转折关系的过渡词：but, yet, however , although , though …
3） 表示时间关系的过渡词：first, second, third, and then, finally after, before, after a few days, at last, at that time, later, in the past, immediately, in the meanwhile, when, while, then, after that …

【举一反三】
2021年6月新高考卷（母亲节的惊喜）
A MOTHER'S DAY SURPRISE
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother's Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jema found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jef turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jef to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff's hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear！The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
注意：

1.续写词数应为150左右：
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答
Paragraph1
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.

Paragraph 2
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.

参考答案：
Paragraph 1:
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.
“Don’t panic!” he handed each one a wet towel, helping them clean the mess quickly. After that, Jeff stammered out their plan, his face flushing. However, Father laughed, “Sounds great! I can teach you to cook.” At this, Jenna and Jef almost jumped to their feet, joy in eyes. Under his careful guidance, it didn’t take long before the French toast and chicken porridge were ready. Everything settled, Father left the kitchen, promising to keep their secret.
Paragraph 2:
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
Meeting their smiling eyes, Mother felt confused until they presented the breakfast and said “Happy Mother’s Day”. Mother gave them a tight hug, “Unbelievable! You can cook! It’s the biggest surprise I have received.” Her face lit up with happiness. “They have known how to take care of others.” Father said in response to her excitement, winking at Jenna and Jef. They couldn’t help giggling. It was a secret only shared between them. （150 words)

2021年6月浙江卷（第一份工资）
My dad, George, only had an eighth grade education. A quiet man, he didn't understand my world of school activities. From age 14, he worked. And his dad, Albert, took the money my dad earned and used it to pay family expenses.
I didn't really understand his world either: He was a livestock trucker, and l thought that I would surpass（超过） anything he had accomplished by the time l walked across the stage at high school graduation.
Summers in the mid, 70s were spent at home shooting baskets, hitting a baseball, or throwing a football, preparing for my future as a quarterback on a football team. In poor weather, I read about sports or practiced my trombone（长号）.
The summer before my eighth grade I was one of a group of boys that a neighboring farmer hired to work in his field. He explained our basic task, the tractor fired up and we were off, riding down the field looking for weeds to spray with chemicals. After a short way, the farmer stopped and painted at a weed which we missed. Then we began again. This happened over and over, but we soon learned to identify different grasses like cockleburs, lamb's-quarters, foxtails, and the king of weeds, the pretty purple thistle. It was tiring work, but I looked forward to the pay, even though I wasn't sure how much it would amount to.
At home, my dad said, "A job's a big step to growing up. I'm glad you will be contributing to the household." My dad's words made me realize that my earning might not be mine to do with as wished.
My labors lasted about two weeks, and the farmer said there might be more work, but I wasn't interested. I decided it was not fair that l had to contribute my money.

Paragraph 1
The pay day arrived at last.

Paragraph 2
I understood immediately what my parents were worried about.
参考答案：
Paragraph 1:
The pay day arrived at last. I was glad that I finally got the payment after working hard for two weeks. While walking back home with an excited mind. I conceived many plans about how to dispose of it. I needed a new football because the old one we played had already worn out. I intended to purchase my favorite chocolates. Upon approaching the house, I noticed my dad and mom standing beside the old truck, looking sadly. It seemed as if something unpleasant happened. “How much do we still need to pay for a new truck?". asked my mother. Three hundred dollars, but we just had two hundred left.”

Paragraph 2:
I understood immediately what my parents were worried about. Really, the truck my dad drove often broke down on the way, which made my dad in trouble. My parents had intended to buy a new truck but couldn't afford it. Suddenly, I realized what I should do. Stepping forward, I said, “Dad, here is what I received for my work. I think it would help you a little.” A little surprised at what I said, my mom hugged me tightly. That night, before I went to bed, l thought I would tell the farmer the next day that I would continue my work, after all l grew up.

2021年1月八省联考（好心的墨西哥一家）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
During this past year, I’ve had three instances of car trouble. Each time these things happened, I was sick of the way most people hadn’t bothered to help. One of those times, I was on the side of the road for close to three hours with my big Jeep. I put signs in the windows, big signs that said NEED A JACK (千斤顶), and offered money. Nothing. Right as I was about to give up, a Mexican family in a small truck pulled over, and the father bounded out.
He sized up the situation and called for his daughter, who spoke English. He conveyed through her that he had a jack but that it was too small for the Jeep, so we would need something to support it. Then he got a saw (锯子) from the truck and cut a section out of a big log on the side of the road. We rolled it over and put his jack on top, and we were in business.
I started taking the wheel off, and then, if you can believe it, I broke his tire iron. No worries: He handed it to his wife, and she was gone in a flash down the road to buy a new tire iron. She was back in 15 minutes. We finished the job, and I was a very happy man.
The two of us were dirty and sweaty. His wife prepared a pot of water for us to wash our hands. I tried to put a $20 bill in the man’s hand, but he wouldn’t take it, so instead I went up to the truck and gave it to his wife as quietly as I could. I asked the little girl where they lived. Mexico, she said. They were in Oregon so Mommy and Daddy could work on a fruit farm for the next few weeks. Then they would go home.
注意：
续写词数应为150左右；
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1
When I was about to say goodbye, the girl asked if I’d had lunch.

Paragraph 2
After they left, I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag.
Possible version 1:
Paragraph 1:
When I was about to say goodbye, the girl asked if I’d had lunch. I shook my head and said no, wondering why she asked such a question — was she going to treat me to lunch or something? “Wait a minute,” said the girl, and then she went back to the truck. After a few minutes she came back with a paper bag. “Here are some Mexican snacks and you can have some when you are hungry,” the girl smiled. I was so surprised and touched that words almost failed me. I just said a “WOW!” instead of a “Thank you!” when I took the bag.
Paragraph2:
After they left, I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag. When I saw what was in the bag, I was overcome with a mixture of respect and gratefulness. In addition to the snacks, there was the $20 bill. What a kind and respectable family! They are a perfect example of what kindness really means. And I’m sure I will pay it forward. （145）
Possible version 2:
Paragraph 1:
When I was about to say goodbye, the girl asked if I’d had lunch. Of course not, for I had been trapped there for quite a few hours. She then had a word with her parents an