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Sample Topic A
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Teachers should make learning enjoyable and fun for their students. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Essay rating of 6
I do strongly support the idea that teachers should make learning enjoyable and fun for the students. This I support with the following reasons.
First let us take the psychological component of a student. A child or student will be more receptive, to anything including studies, if the subject matter is presented in an interesting and enjoyable manner. If not there is every likelihood that the student will be unwilling or will reject the matter presented as he considers studying is a burden on him.
My second point is that the present day student faces tremendous amount of distraction such as interesting television programmes, drugs, distractions from opposite sexes and many more. To get the student away from all these and to get him interested in studies there is obviously no other way than to make learning interesting.
The present day students are also pressured with tremendous amount of competition from other students. With this mounting pressure on them coupled with the hugh expectation of the parents, it will lighten the burden on the young students with a more acceptable form of presentation that is in an enjoyable and fun manner.
Retention is another factor that should considered important. Any presentation which is given an interesting or enjoyable manner can be retained well by the students. If the subject matter presented is uninteresting then there is strong likelihood the student will forget the subject matter presented in days or even hours.
When presenting a subject the teacher should create a desire amongst the student to crave for knowledge on the subject and this can certainly be obtained if the subject matter is presented in a fun and enjoyable manner.
It can also be said that the present day communication system is so advanced and these are ample teaching aids and techniques to make teaching fun and enjoyable. So why not utilise the opportunities to the full so that the student at the receiving end can benefit to the full.
Last but not least I wish to say that by making teaching fun and enjoyable the life expectancy of both the students and the teachers can be extended.
Essay rating of 5
"Teachers should make learning enjoyable and fun for their students." I do completely agree with this staments. I believe that there have been many studies done on this subject, and they all indicate that if children during their first years of schooling associate learning as enjoyable and fun they will learn the subjects and retain more than if presented on a dull way. The trend in learning and education appears to support this idea.
The role of the teacher now days is more than just giving away a number of facts for students to learn. By making learning fun and enjoyable the student will also get motivated and probably do some research or outside class investigation to enrich his or her own knowledge. Some may say that this is a lot of work for the teachers. However if you look at all the tegnology available, for example computer educational programs, educational videos etc.; they all try make the learning process enjoyable and fun. It is easier for teachers to plan their classes by using such materials. Students benefits as well since they are learning without associating the process as been a tedious chore needed to get a grade and pass a class.
I do believe that in the long run both students and teachers will achive great results and a sence of a well accomplished job by approaching leaining as an enjoyable and fun activity.

Essay rating of 4
In my point of view. I do agree that teacher should make leaning enjoyable and fun for their students for the following reasons.
Firstly, students may pay more attention of what the teacher says. Instead of talking to somebody else. they may concentrate on their work. Since the most important thing is that they are not bored by the lesson.
Secondly, the teacher will be more welcomed by students For one may compare a friendly, funny teacher to those boring, strict one.
Thirdly, the lively environment of learning makes students Rave a high spirit of learning. Students may actively participate in class activities. Thus through different approaches of teaching, students may learn more or be more enjoyable.
All in all, the imperative purpose is to make students feel learning in a relaxed way not stressing too much pressure on them. Gradually, they will find interest in learning. Therefore, I strongly agree that teachers should make learning enjoyable and fun for their students.

Essay rating of 3
Teachers should make leaning enjoyable and fun for their students. Do you agree or disagree with the statement? Give reasons to support your opinion.
If my teachers make leaning enjoyable and fun for my class. I agree that. because I think it is a good way to make students remember in subject and want to study in school so I am a student in school and university long time I think I know the felling of students when teachers teach. Some teachers are strong in subject. They stay on time and teach all of time until finch. We didn't have break times or time for relax. After class we are very tired and we couldn't to remember that the teacher teach us. We know nothing, but some teacher knows about that he tries to teach us and have time to relax or enjoyable for example we take together in class or have some game to play together about subject that the teacher teachs us or have break time for drink water. I like this way to study. I think it makes us understand and want to study more than another way. I think I can say intersent every students I like if teachers should make leaning enjoyable and fun for their students. I agree.

Essay rating of 2
The teacher is imporant for school, most students don't like them. Sometimes we can finds to that teacher was boring. I think of teacher should make learning enjoyable and fun for their students. because they could by means of learning and fun get many students, another they could be better teacher and good skill from education.
And then if teacher should make learnig ciriouses with their students, I think this way not good for teacher: For xample the student will be fear and dislike to the teacher. Beside they don't like enjoy their class. maybe they cut it.
Good as well as saying the teacher is basic of education in the countrary. In the concult I like teacher learning enjoyable and funny and then I'll be interested with class and get many things. That is better for me.

Essay rating of 1
Teachers should make learning enjoyable and fun for their students. I think teachers should make learning enjoyable and fun for their student. Do you agree or disagree with the statement? Yes, I do. Why do I think so? Because the teacher is teaching the students. And the student is teaching the teachers. Of course me too. This is very impotant. It is don't forget us!

Sample Topic B
Supporters of technology say that it solves problems and makes life better. Opponents argue that technology creates new problems that may threaten or damage the quality of life. Using one or two examples, discuss these two positions. Which view of technology do you support? Why?

Essay rating of 6
These are several viewpoints on the implications of technological change and advancement and such schools of thought which considerably vary have their respective validity. Technological change has its advantages and disadvantages. For one, it is true that it partly solves problems and makes life better. At the same time, technological changes may likely create new problems thereby threatening or damaging quality of life. In the developing economies, for instance, technological advantages has both its merits and demerits. The introduction and seeming acceptability and usefulness of computers have somehow helped increase the efficiency of several firms. It is not only in the industrial sector that technological change proven to be very effective. In the agricultural sector, for example, the introduction of new technologies in increasing production has been very effective in expanding agricultural produce. These are just a few examples to illustrate the advantages of technological advancement.
On the other hand, countries should be more careful on their choice of technology since it must be noted that while certain types of technology are adaptable to developed economies the same type of technology may not fit the environment of developing countries due to differing economic, social, cultural, and political factors. For example, infrastructure improvements such as a construction of irrigation dam in the mountains of the Philippines where several natives reside may likely be resisted by the population due to cultural factors. They may prefer not to have such improvements in view of traditional values. Another example is the pollution impact of some technological improvements particularly in the industrial sectors.
The choice and adaptability of new technology should therefore be carefully studied. The short, medium, and long term impact of such technology is very important particulary for developing economies. The benefits should always be greater than the costs.
I am inclined to support both positions because both views have their own validity. However, I am more convinced that technological advancement is heilly beneficial to countries so long as they are aware of the disadvantages of such technology.

Essay rating of 5
Technology by definetion refers to the improvement of the technical know how and advancement of machinery to improve the working systems in the human society. In a away this looks a very good idea in that mans' work would be made much faster and less laborious. Machines which are the main implements of technology have a major advantage to mans' ways of life. Take for example an aeroplane, which being a product of advance in tecnology has made all corners of the earth look like they are only centimetres apart. It has made the means of communication which prior to its development was very difficult much easier and less risky. Travelling to many parts of the world which are very many miles apart now only takes a few hours or days where as this used to take days or even months.
On the other hand technology has created a number of new harzards to the health of societies. The machines make life easy but also expose people to new problems. In the example considered above transportation has become easier by planes but these planes also expose people to accidents which have become so numerous and clam many lives daily. As we all know that a majority of these machines use fuel and that to use the fuel it has to burn there are new products which we introduced into our enviroment. These new products include gases from automobiles which pollute the air we breathe. These gases expose us to lung iseases, cancers and number of new ailments which have not yet been fully explored.
In conclusion I think that although advances in technology may seem favorable there are alot of harzards which it introduces into our ways of life.
Essay rating of 4
I agree with the opponents of technology say that technology creates new problems that may threaten or damage the quality of life. The most serious problem is the pollution. Toxic wastes are being dumped into rivers, lakes and even out atmosphere. Fish and other marine live cannot survive in polluted rivers and oceans. Also, toxic gases are being produced by cars, factories and planes. This is the main source which causes the acid rain. Acid rain has done a great damage to the forest that the quanlity of trees are reducing day by day. The ozone layer----a protective layer that surrounding us in the atmosphere is carring away by wasted chemicals. That means we are lossing our protective layer and letting ultroviolet to pass through. And for us, we are breathing in a lot of polluted air which may make us ill or sometimes may cause death.
Technology may solve a lot of problems but the point is the result of technology gives us disavantages more than avantages. So I a on the side of the opponents.

Essay rating of 3
In my own points of view I support technology can solve problems and makes life better. Such as deveploment of computer. Computer helps human solves thousand of problems espeaclly science. A lot of calculation was so complex. It is impossible count them from normal method It should use a very fast computer in order to compute it. Super conductor, one of the hot technology topic. A lot of sciencists study this kind of stuff. It is a very important stuff. If we can use it in normal way. That is wnderful. We can easily solve the big problem, "energy". Because super conductor has a special mental. It can pass through the energy without lossing. It is a Hi-technology's symbol.
But technology also created a lot of problem. Such as industary unless thing. Human feel dizzy from then. A lot of vehicles running on the road. Creating much CO2. Affect the earth's nature condition Recently. The weather was so bad. Because of the CO2. CO2 blocks the sun light. So the weather was inconsiderable.
Finally, I support technology. Because it is more benefit.

Essay rating of 2
The main point is tecnology, and what does tecnology, and what does tecnology do in our life, before anything we should suggest to some tecnolgy's working way in daily life.
Tecnology would be very useful but, in some condition for example as a nature distribting which it would be very dangrouse, but it could be very important in other way for better live and make the life's things to do easier.
Supporthing tecnolgy is very important -- and it would make the useful way of using tecnology, because it needs the supporters and investing to find more and more progress in the tecnolgy.
But sometimes tecnology makes some problem that I mantion in the begining of essay and it would very dangrous in some ways. For example factories trash makes some problems and makes the water dirty and it's damage wouldn't be not quality easy.
At the end I would like to say that: supporthing of tecnolgy will be helpful and make life easier, but tecnolgy must be very careful to not be a danger and risky.

Essay rating of 1
Now a days, in the life the technology it solves problems. But damage the quality of the life is very important. Because the many people to the quality of life is very high than the yesterday socizat. They are use or buys goods is more good then yesterday. So the many people to need the high quality are too many.

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