2015年考研英语(一)作文试题评析.docx

2015年考研英语（一）作文试题评析

一、小作文
51. Directions:
You are going to host a club reading session. Write an email of about 100 words recommending a book to the club members.
You should state reasons for your recommendation.
You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET.
Do not sign your own name at the end of the letter. Use “Li Ming” instead.
Do not write the address. (10 points)
2015年研究生入学考试英语（一）的小作文要求考生写一封电子邮件，以主持人的身份向读书俱乐部的成员推荐一本书。电子邮件的格式与书信相同，也是从称呼开始写起，称呼顶格写，以示尊重。由于这封邮件是写给读书俱乐部的其他成员，所以称呼可写Dear friends。
这封电子邮件的正文可以写成三个段落：第一段交代写这封邮件的目的 --- 推荐一本书。第二段叙述推荐这本书的理由。考生在此处有很大的发挥余地，可以先简要介绍一下这本书的内容，然后从两三个方面阐述推荐的理由，最后指出将在下次读书会上讨论这本书中的人物。第三段表达希望俱乐部的成员喜欢自己所推荐的这本书，并期待着自己从讨论中受益。
最后是署名。署名一般写在信末中间偏右的位置，分两行书写，上一行写客套话Yours sincerely（或Sincerely Yours），下一行写Li Ming，上下对齐。请看根据以上分析所写的范文：
Dear friends,
As the host of the next reading session, I am writing to you to recommend a book --- The Apple Tree by John Galsworthy.
The novel tells of the love tragedy between Frank, a college student, and Megan, a country girl. Acclaimed as the best story by the writer, it is noted for its intriguing plot and clever use of the English language. We are going to discuss the characters in the novel at the next reading session.
　　I hope that you will enjoy the book and I look forward to benefiting from your wisdom in the discussion.
　　 Yours sincerely,
　　 Li Ming (104 words)

二、大作文
52. Directions:
　　Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following picture. In your essay, you should
　　1) describe the picture briefly,
　　2) interpret its intended meaning, and
　　3) give your comments.
　　You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

2015年考研英语（一）的大作文继续考漫画作文。这次的漫画反映的是一个社会现象：科技发展对人际关系造成负面影响。《大学英语》曾在2013年第12期刊文，精准地预测了这道作文题。仔细观察这幅漫画，我们可以看到漫画中有一群年轻人在聚会吃饭，但这个本该有说有笑的场合却冷冷清清，大家都低着头玩自己的手机。这幅漫画道出了现代人的尴尬：科技的发展让人和人之间变得更加疏远。
在结构上，这篇漫画作文可以写成三个段落：第一段简略地描述图画，并指出漫画的寓意。第二段评论这一现象。这是文章的重心所在，宜浓墨重彩，从两三个方面详细阐述。就本文来说，我们可以从两个方面分析产生这一现象的原因：第一，现在的年轻人使用手机上瘾，离开了手机便不知如何是好；第二，现在的年轻人都是在独生子女家庭中长大，从小就以自我为中心，很少考虑别人的感受，所以他们认为可以在社交场合忽视他人的存在。这种写法有两个优点：一是内容充实、言之有物；二是条分缕析、层次清楚。
第三段总结全文，提出建议。我们可以首先指出手机已成为人们生活的一部分，因而必须有一些规则来规范手机的使用。然后建议在社交场合应将手机关闭，这样才有助于培养温暖而亲密的人际关系。下面请看范文：
The drawing depicts a typical social gathering in the age of the cell phone: Four friends are sitting together at the table, but instead of chatting or enjoying the meal they are all burying their nose in their mobile phone. It seems to warn us of the negative impact of hi-technology on interpersonal relationship.
But what’s behind this scene? Perhaps it’s the cell phone addiction. Mobile phones have miraculously enabled people to stay connected, informed and entertained anytime and anywhere. Addicted to the magic device, many people now don’t know what to do with themselves without their cell phone. The underlying cause, however, is the self-centeredness of the young generation. Brought up in one-child families, today’s teens have little consideration for others. They think it okay to tap away at their mobile phone and totally ignore the presence of others in a social situation.
While cell phones have become part of our lives, it doesn’t mean there should not be some rules regulating their use. First and foremost is turning off the gadget in a social setting, which many believe helps us foster a warm and close relationship with others. (190 words)
语言亮点借鉴：
1. they are all burying their nose in their mobile phone他们都埋头于他们的手机。
2. But what’s behind this scene? 但这种情景背后的原因是什么呢？用疑问句引出下文的分析可以引起阅卷人的阅读兴趣，还可以加强上下文之间的联系。
3. Mobile phones have miraculously enabled people to stay connected, informed and entertained anytime and anywhere. 手机已经不可思议地使人们随时随地都能保持联系、获得信息和得到娱乐。anytime and anywhere，随时随地。
4. Addicted to the magic device, many people now don’t know what to do with themselves without their cell phone. 由于沉迷于这个神奇的设备，许多人现在离开了手机就不知道该如何是好。Addicted to the magic device是一个过去分词短语，做状语，表示原因，这种写法比用原因状语从句更加简洁。
5. The underlying cause, however, is the self-centeredness of the young generation.然而，深层的原因是年青一代以自我为中心。underlying cause，根本原因，深层原因。
6. Brought up in one-child families, today’s teens have little consideration for others. 由于在独生子女家庭中长大，今天的青少年很少考虑别人。Brought up in one-child families是一个过去分词短语，做非限制性定语，修饰本句的主语today’s teens，这种定语一般放在主语之前，以使句子的结构更加平衡。
7. They think it okay to tap away at their mobile phone and totally ignore the presence of others in a social situation.他们认为在社交场合可以不停地点击手机和完全忽视他人的存在。tap away at，轻敲，轻触。in a social situation，在社交场合，亦说in a social setting。
8. First and foremost is turning off the gadget in a social setting, which many believe helps us foster a warm and close relationship with others首先是在社交场合关闭手机，许多人认为这有助于我们与别人结成温暖而亲密的关系。which many believe helps us --- 是一个非限定性定语从句，修饰turning off the gadget。这个定语从句中插入了一个简短的主谓结构many believe。