GUIDEDWRITING人物篇.doc

GUIDED WRITING
【考例再现】
请从下列人物中选择你最喜欢的一位，用英语写一篇120词左右的短文。要求根据所给信息作适当发挥，且需包括以下三部分内容：
1. 对该人物的简单介绍；
2. 喜欢该人物的理由；
3. 从该人物身上得到的启示。

Thomas Edison
Helen Keller
William Shakespeare
inventor;
creative; diligent;
full of wisdom
ordinary but great woman; disabled; optimistic; eager to learn
writer; talented; imaginative;
man of all ages
“Genius is one percent inspiration and ninety-nine percent perspiration.”
“... if I had the power of sight for three days.”
“Life is a stage ...”

【范文展示】
Thomas Edison
Born in America, Thomas Edison was a great scientist and inventor. He was once thought to be a boy who was not worth educating. In fact, he was a man full of imagination.
I admire Edison a lot because of his great contribution to the world. He had more than 1,000 inventions. In his lifetime, he was always eager to know how things worked, which helped him to earn the nickname “the Wizard of Melo Park”. He was also so diligent that he worked day and night. And this explained why he had so many inventions.
What impresses me most is his famous saying, “Genius is one percent inspiration and ninety-nine percent perspiration.” Probably I
cannot be an Edison myself, but I can be a hardworking learner. From him, I realize the secret to success is not when and where you were born, but what you are doing and how you do it in your life. （湖南 2008）
【范文赏析】
●文体分析
本文的体裁是叙人记叙文或人物描写文。作者通过生动的语言，形象地描绘出了伟大的发明家Thomas Edison的高大形象。
●行文模式
作者采用了“三段式”结构进行描写：
一、创造良好的开端：
第一段是开头，作者对本文中心人物 Thomas Edison 作了简单介绍。
二、客观真实的叙述：
第二段是文章的主体部分，重点叙述了Thomas Edison的工作态度以及他所取得的成就。其中第一句I admire Edison a lot because of his great contribution to the world是主题句，其余的细节描写都是围绕这一主题展开的。
三、丰富感情的发挥：
第三段是结尾部分，作者对Thomas Edison进行了高度评价。通过引用Thomas Edison的名言把文章推向了高潮。最后一句谈了自己的感受，起到了画龙点睛的作用。
●佳句集锦
1. In his lifetime, he was always eager to know how things worked, which helped him to earn the nickname “the Wizard of Melo Park”. (本句使用了固定短语be eager to do sth.; how引导宾语从句作know的宾语； which引导非限制性定语从句，代表整个主句内容。高级词汇：eager, nickname, wizard。)
2. What impresses me most is his famous saying, “Genius is one percent inspiration and ninety-nine percent perspiration.” (what引导主语从句；引号内的名言是saying的同位语，这句名言的使用增加了文章的力度。)
3. From him, I realize the secret to success is not when and where you were born, but what you are doing and how you do it in your life. (realize后的宾语从句中使用了not ... but ... 句型；when，where, what, how分别引导四个表语从句。)
【即学即练】
根据下面表格中的要点写一篇有关美国残疾女作家海伦·凯勒（Helen Keller）的短文。

1880年
出生于美国
19个月
因病丧失视力、听力及语言能力
7岁时
遇上女老师Miss Sullivan, 在其帮助下学会了读、写和讲话。
24岁时
以优异成绩毕业于Radcliffe学院
著作
The Story of My Life, Let Us Have Faith etc.
贡献
倾注毕生精力为全世界的盲人和聋哑人服务

词数：150左右； 参考词汇： the deaf-mute聋哑人 Key4：
One possible version:
Born in 1880, Helen Keller is a well--known American woman writer with disabilities.
At the age of 19 months, it was unexpected that Helen Keller was robbed by illness of sight and hearing, which caused her to become mute. Fortunately, when Helen was 7 years old, she met Miss Sullivan who is very kind-hearted and helpful. Miss Sullivan managed to help Helen learn to read, write and talk. With the help of Miss Sullivan, Helen went to study at Radcliff College and graduated from it with honors at the age of 24. During her whole life, Helen wrote some excellent books, such as The Story of My Life and Let Us Have Faith. Besides, she devoted all her lifetime to working for the blind and the deaf-mute both at home and abroad.
All in all, Helen’s example has encouraged a lot of people whether they are normal or disabled.