读后续写——如何合理构思续写情节-学案--高三英语写作专项.docx

读后续写——如何合理构思续写情节
读后续写通常是人物、主题、情节融合或交织在一 起的叙事性文体。情节是按照因果逻辑组织起来的一系 列事件，作者往往通过情节来展现人物性格、表现中心。 因此，续写中情节的设计要关照人物形象的刻画和主题 的凸显。没有好的故事情节和语篇框架，有再多的好词 好句也是枉然，也只是词语堆砌。续写中应把情节内容 和语言形式合二为一，形成合力。但是，值得注意的是 高考续写中的情节设计又不能信马由缰天马行空，不能 脱离题目给定的前文和两段首句。我们必须依据情节发 展和常识，在给定的框架内，可按“所见、所闻、所想、 所做、所感”等给每段写5至8个句子。例如：
The story of my new family member
We found a lonely dog a few weeks ago, walking along the road in the countryside. All of a sudden, he was jumping on cars, and at the same time we thought maybe his family was camping somewhere in the neighboring areas. As a consequence we passed him by without hesitation. A few hours later, on our return trip, he was still in the same place.again and again, making an attempt to get people to stop for him. When he caught sight of us approaching, he lay down in the middle of the road, so we failed to get around him.
My father braked hard, pulled up and looked around for a few minutes, trying to figure out whether anyone around from whom he had been separated. After getting off the car, we checked the dog carefully. It didn't appear so.Then we took a good look at the poor but cute dog. He gazed at us eagerly with gloomy eyes. We circled around him in a total silence. We had an overwhelming desire to find out what was wrong with him. Unfortunately, we couldnft find any clues. He had no collar and he was really too thin. Eventually we decided that he had been abandoned. We showed great sympathy for the poor dog. How helpless he was on such an occasion! He was homeless and he had no one to rely on.
On seeing the scene, we couldn't help begging my parents to raise him.My mother agreed excitedly, nI love this lovely dog. How poor he is! It is high time that we should bring him home. nShe stared at the dog with tears welling up in her eyes. We knew my mother was willing to adopt the dog because she was so sweet and she loved dogs very much.My father thought it was dangerous to raise a dog due to the fact that we were too young. 注意：
1 .续写词数应为150左右；.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph I:
Mather said firmly, nIfhe doesn 7 bite me when I try to pick him up to put him in the car then we have a new dog.ft • • •Paragraph 2;
We took him to the vert （兽医）who said the dog appeared to be in good health.
Step I Read for elements^the plot, main idea and the themeMain idea:
My family found a lonely homeless dog a few weeks ago, walking along the road in the countryside and wanted to bring him home/raise him.
Theme:
1 .Animals are friends. Please respect friends and cherish the friendship.
2 . We are one family on the same planet and our lives should be equal.
3 .Live in harmony with animals and build a harmonious sciety.
Step II 构思续写 的内容（Logical plotting）
续写第一段的内容设计既要考虑与上文的融洽衔 接，同时也要考虑本段和最后一段开头语的呼应和衔接, 而后者是容易忽视的局部。续写第二段是文章的结尾， 要关注与文章开头的遥相呼应，凸显主题，升华主题。 1、首先把最后一句主题句写好：（读后续写的一大难题 是，如何快速提炼给定材料的主旨大意（主题）） 1. We learned a lesson from the experience that kindness and sympathy made a big difference to our life.
2 . It was actually a member of my family/This is the story how the dog fitted in with our family.
3 .Thanks to that trip, we received a cute and warm family member.
2、再把第一段的最后一句衔接句写好：
1 .Unfortunately, all our efforts were in vain and he was still very thin.
2 . Worried about his low spirits and lack of nutrition, we decided to send him to the pet hospital.
3 .However, a few days later, the dog seemed to be sick,not eating anything given to him.
3、两段首句定一框由续写的第一段首句与第二段首句确定第一段的框架
Para l:My father said firmlyJif he doesn't bite me when I try to pick him up to put him in the car, then we have a new dog”Para 2: We took him to the vet, who said the dog appeared to be in good health.
第一段内容应该是：Finally the dog was raised /the story between the dog and us.
4、二框二首正能量第二段的框架，由第二段首句与正能量结尾来确定
Para 2: We took him to the vet, who said the dog appeared to be in good health.
第二段内容应该是：The vet gave the dog medical care and the dog became a member of the family.
情节设计注意三点：
1、读后续写不需要情节多么有趣或动人，而是需要 和原文逻辑融洽，你不是自圆自说，而是帮助原文作者 “圆、并且让人感到自然，而不是突兀做作。至于什么 科幻，那肯定不行的，除非原文本来就是科幻体，那几 乎是不可能的。
2、情节尽可能简洁，不要拖泥带水，一般就是续写 一个到两个solution的组合：譬如别人的抚慰让我镇定下 来，然后耐心等待，不一会救援人物出现，脱险结束。 总共核心情节就三句而已，中间无非就是感情的变化。
3、情节既然很简洁，那么就必须有一定的细节描写 积累，否那么巧妇难为无米之炊。这样写，并非是思维固化了。实际上，好莱坞 制作电影基本上也是如此：危险出现、反派眼看就要成 功、超级英雄出现、成功挽救。中间夹杂着老掉牙的爱 情和美女。但是有谁说这就是个固定模式而感到厌倦 呢？没有，照样观众被感动得一塌糊涂的。实际上大部 分的完形和鸡汤文内容模式都是一个套路模式的，只是 换了人物的名称而已。
续写时记住三大原那么：
1 .Action 一 Response原那么：角色A的所言、所行、所感、 所想会引起其它角色的一系列反响的。不一定两个人都 要说话，无声的动作也是一种responseo同时注意内容要 前后衔接、上下连贯，语言表达风格一致。
2 .Conflict-Solution原那么：但凡故事都应有跌宕起伏，其 中人物会遇到困难或问题，但最终都能解决。（比方， 上文中第一段收养狗并不顺利）.Negative-Positive原那么：写作中一定要表达情感的变化， 无论前面是怎样的变化，最终结果都是积极向上的，充 满正能量，困难问题得到圆满解决，情感由消极变得积 极。
参考范文：
Para 1: My father said firmly, “If he doesn 7 bite me when I try to pick him up to put him in the car, then we have a new dog." The dog happily joined us with no fight at all, the only thing we were in danger of was getting licked. He kept sticking his head between the two front seats and thanked us for picking him up. The dog had clearly been on the road for some time, he was really too thin. So we fed him a lot over the course of the next two weeks striving to look after him with the hope that he would get stronger. Unfortunately, all our efforts were in vain. He was still very thin.
Para 2: We took him to the vet, who said the dog appeared to be in good health. The vet guessed the dog was about two years old. He gave the dog all the required shots and sent us on our way. Amazing! The dog is healthy." My mother said in an excited voice. So thrilled were we that we headed home immediately. We did love our new family member. The dog was a sweet companion to our family, who was a quick learner and knew how to respond to different instructions. We learned a lesson from the experience that kindness and sympathy made a big difference to our life.