高考英语作文备考学案.doc

2009高考英语作文备考学案
Ⅰ. NMET书面表达第五项要求
1. 覆盖所有的语言要点。 内容要点可用不同方式表达。对紧扣主题的适当发挥不予扣分。
2. 应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性。值得注意的是语法结构或词汇方面虽有些许错误, 但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致; 具备较强的语言运用能力。
3.有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使全文结构紧凑。
Ⅱ. 常见的不足
1 汉语式英语2 无过渡语3 句式单一,平铺直叙
Ⅲ. 如何增强书面表达效果
l 使用较高级的词汇
l 使用恰当的连接词
l 使用较丰富的句式
一、怎样使用较高级的词汇
1. Because the weather was good, our journey was comfortable.

2. We all think he is a great man.

3. Suddenly I thought out a good idea.

4. The students there needn’t pay for their books.

5. As a result the plan was a failure.

6. When she heard he had died, she went pale with sorrow.

7. She went to Austria in order to study music.

8. When he spoke, he felt more and more excited.

9.In our school, there are twenty-six classrooms.

10. You can find my house easily.
二、怎样使用恰当的连接词
连接词使文章语意通顺，前后衔接紧密，可采用以下方法：
提示1：恰当使用关联词，如when，so，if，because，so that等。
提示2：巧妙使用意思有联系的词或短语，如First, Second, Third, Soon, What’s more, As a result等。
提示3：适当使用过渡性语句，如The reasons are as follows./Every coin has two sides./On the other hand,/On the contrary,
Besides, it would be better for her to have a pet dog as I have kept one at home for some time. ( 2007全国I)
First, she can make some pocket money to meet pet daily needs and thus develop a sense of independence. Second, she can learn how to deal with various problems in the workplace. Third, she can build up new friendships and improve bet social skills. (2007陕西)
In my opinion, learning English is a step-by-step process. (2007浙江)
连接词、句型的选择
1、递进关系
（肯定）Besides / What’s more / Also /In addition/Furthermore
（否定）What’s worse / Even worse / Worse still /To make matters worse
2、时间
一…就…：The moment / On doing / as soon as /immediately / directly
不 久：It was not long before … / After a while / Soon
然 后：After that / Then / So / Next
同 时： At the same time / Meanwhile
3、转 折：however , / but / on the contrary / On the other hand / yet / although
4、顺 序：First / Second / Third / Last / Next/Then
5、条 件：If / As long as / So long as /on condition that / unless
6、强 调：It was …that / who … / So she did . /I do hope … / She did help me. /It really worked./ besides/ furthermore/moreover/what’s more/ certainly/ actually/ in fact
7、其 它：
不得不做某事：have to do sth./have no choice but to do sth./have nothing to do but do sth.
有必要做某事：There is no need (for sb.) to do sth./It is necessary (for sb.)to do …
最好 做某 事：You’d better do sth. / It’s better to do sth.
做某事没困难：have no difficulty in doing sth. / have no trouble in doing sth.
感 谢 某 人：thank sb. / be thankful to sb./ express one’s thanks to sb. /be grateful to sb. / Thanks to …
求 助 某 人：turn to sb. for help / ask sb. for help / with the help of / with one’s help
惊 奇：To one’s surprise / In surprise / Surprisingly / only +不定式（表意外结果）
结 果：As a result / Therefore / Thus / So
总 结：In a word / In short / Above all / After all/ generally speaking/ to sum up/ in all/altogether / as is known to all
表 达 观 点：In my opinion / I think / I believe / I’m sure / I guess
原因如下（很多）：he reasons are as follows. /here are many reasons for it.
浪费金钱（时间）：It’s a waste of money / time …
Task: 请在下列句子中（间）填上恰当的关联词或意思有联系的短语。
1、 Yao Ming was walking in the street he heard someone cry for help.
2、 He advised that I hire a car I could travel around in the west .
3、 It was not long the police came.
4、 he heard the cry for help, he jumped into the water to save the girl.
5、 o you agree with my arrangement ? ,do write to me soon.
6、 We can go downtown and do some shopping. , we can pay a visit to some places of interest.
7、I shared the cost of the gas with my friends . , I saved $80.
8、Eating sugar is bad for our teeth. , it may make us fat.
Task: Writing Practice
请你给《中国日报》写一篇稿件，谈谈农村儿童失学的主要原因及你的看法。
原因：
1、家庭贫穷，供不起儿童上学，他们不得不在家赚钱养家。
2、部分家长认为女孩上学无用，不愿让她们上学。
3、 部分儿童对功课不感兴趣，不愿上学。
看法：
1、 每个儿童包括女孩都应有受教育的机会。
2、全社会都应重视儿童教育，他们对国家的未来将起到重要的作用。
要求：
1、不要逐字逐句翻译。 2、语句要连贯通顺。 3、字数100个左右。
Now in the country areas, there are many children out of school. Most families are poor and can’t afford their education. They have to stay at home and make money. Some parents think daughters needn’t go to school. They don’t let them go to school. Some children are not interested in their studies and wouldn’t like to go to school.
All the children including girls should be educated. The whole society should pay attention to it. They’ll play an important part in the future of our country.
诊断：?
[优点] 1、词能达意；
2、语句表达基本正确。
[缺点] 语句不够连贯
[药方] 1、使用常见句型；
2、每两个句子之间使用关联词或过渡词。
Now in the country areas, there are many children out of school.▁▁▁▁▁▁▁▁。▁▁▁，most families are too poor to send their children to school . ▁▁▁▁,they have no choice but to stay at home and make money. ▁▁▁,some parents think there is no need for their daughters to go to school. ▁▁▁▁,they don’t let them go to school. ▁▁▁,some children are not interested in their studies. ▁▁▁▁▁▁,some wouldn’t like to go to school.
▁▁▁▁▁▁,all the children including girls should be educated . ▁▁▁▁▁▁,the whole society should pay attention to it ▁▁▁they’ll play an important part in the future of our country one day.
三、怎样使用较丰富的句式
方法一. 使用非谓语动词使句子简洁高档
Rewrite the sentences
1. They arrived at the school. They felt the happy atmosphere.

2. I will be given another chance. I will succeed.

3. He wants to improve his English. He studies hard.

4 When he arrives, please give me an e-mail.（使用V-ing形式）.

Complete the sentences with non-predicate (非谓语动词)
5. 听到这个消息, 他们变的很激动。
_________the news, they got excited.
6. 尽管被告知许多遍, 他仍然重复这个错。
__________________many times, he still repeated the mistake.
7. 除非被邀请发言, 你应该在会议上保持沉默。
Unless ________to speak, you should keep silent at the meeting.
Translate the following sentences by using non-predicate (非谓语动词)
8. 面对困难时，他从不放弃。

9. 引入市场后该产品大获成功。

10. 做完作业后，他回家了。

方法二. 巧用倒装结构增强句子的表现力
Complete the sentences
1. He didn’t realize his foolishness until he returned home.
Not until .
2. We can save the earth by changing the way we live.
Only
3. He is clever but he does not work hard.
as / though .
4. The clock tower stands on the other side of the street.
On the other side of the street .
Translate the sentences by using Inverted Sentences(倒装句)
5. 他从不说关于他家庭的事。

6 只有我们每个人都意识到水的重要性, 我们才能生活得更好。

7. 只有用这种方式, 我们才能有足够的精力好好学习。

8. Describe the character（济公） by using Inverted Sentence(倒装句)

9. 他是个孩子，却知道很多。

10. 墙上有个通知，上面写着“请节约用水”。

方法三. 尝试多样化表达方式
1、感叹句 e.g. 1) How happy I was when I received your letter.
2） What a kind boy he is!
3）How disappointed he was !
2、强调句 e.g. It was this young boy that helped the old granny.
3、倒装句 e.g. 1) Only in this way can you solve this problem.
2) There comes the police car.
3) Hardly had they got to the station when they met the young man.
4、省略句 e.g. They read while walking or riding on a bus.
5、with短语 e.g. I saw a young lady walking slowly in the street with a handbag in her hand.
6、定语从句 e.g. In my opinion, cyber cafes should be a place where we can find much useful information.
7、各种名词性从句 e.g. That’s what I should do.
8、各种状语从句 e.g. Use ifferent ways to describe the picture （连战的破冰之旅）一…就受到欢迎
a As soon as Lien Chan and his wife arrived at the airport, they were warmly welcomed.
b. On arriving at the airport, Lien Chan and his wife…
c. Lien Chan and his wife were warmly welcomed directly/ the moment they arrived at the airport.
d. No sooner had Lien Chan and his wife arrived at the airport than they were …
e. Hardly had Lien Chan and his wife arrived at the airport when they were …
……
Task: 按要求改写下列句子,使其更具文采。
1. He did not know what had happened until he had read the news in the newspaper. (强调句型)

2. I hope I can pay a visit to you next year.（强调）

3. Tom was puzzled.（感叹）

4. It is great fun to climb the hill.（感叹）

5. Tom and Mary like singing songs.（肯定倒装）

6. John likes to study and play.（否定倒装）

7. Though I’m weak, I’ll make the effort. (使用倒装句)

8. To his surprise, the little girl knows so many things.（使用名词性从句）

9. Soon the firefighters came.（表时间句型）

10. In recent years, Beijing has been advancing very fast.
All these make people’s lives convenient, pleasant and colorful.
a._____________________________________________which_____________________________________
b. With the development of ______________________
_______________________________
c. ____________________________so ___ that________
______________________________________________
Translate the sentences:
我校是一所市重点中学， 位于乐陵西郊。校园很美,绿树成荫。
West of Leling lies our school, which is a key school of Dezhou city. It is beautiful, surrounded with many trees/with many trees.
Task:书面表达：
联合国教科文组织某考察团正在我国某乡村参观考察。假定你是接待人员，请根据下列提示以发言稿的形式简要介绍这个村的情况：
1)大小：近100户人家，约500口人。
2)变化：过去很穷，78年后变化很大。人们生活比以前好多了。现已旧貌换新颜。
3)教育：原来的学校很小，现已经过改建。新建的教学楼有4层，是村里最美的建筑物。村所有学龄儿童在此免费就读。
注意：1）要点齐全，前后连贯。
　　　　 2）词数：100-120之间。
Ladies and gentlemen,
Welcome to our school! ① This village is very small. It has nearly 100 families and about 500 people. It used to be very poor. ② It has changed a lot since 1978 ③. People here ④ are richer than before. Now it is taking on a new look.
In the past, the school here was very small ⑤. ⑥ Now it has been rebuilt. ⑦ The newly built teaching building has 4 storeys ⑧. It is the most beautiful building in the village. All the school-age children can study here. ⑨ They enjoy free education in it.
⑩ Thank you.
Ladies and gentlemen,
Welcome to our school! ① This village is a small one with/which has nearly 100 families and about 500 people. It used to be very poor. ② However, it has changed a lot since 1978 ③ and has been developing very fast. ④ People here live a much better life than before . Now it is taking on a new look.
In the past, the school here was very small ⑤ and most children couldn’t afford to go to school. ⑥ But now it has been rebuilt ⑦ and the newly built teaching building ⑧ which has 4 storeys is the most beautiful one in the village. All the school-age children can study here. ⑨ What’s more, they enjoy free education.
⑩ May you enjoy your stay here / May you have a pleasant time here! Thank you.
Ⅳ. 习作分析
Task:书面表达(满分25分)
某中学生英语报社正开展一场题为“Young teachers or elderly teachers，which do you prefer?”
请你依据下面表格所提供的要点写一篇短文，向该报社投稿。
老年教师

青年教师

·教学耐心．讲解细致．经验丰富

·精力充沛．教学活泼．勇于创新

你的观点?

注意：1．词数100左右，开头语已为你写好，不计入总数；
2．短文必须包含表格的全部内容。要求观点明确，结构合理，紧凑连贯
学生作品1：
Compare with young teachers, I prefer elderly teachers. There are some reasons below.
For one thing, most of elderly teachers are patient in teaching. They not only spare no effort to teach the students, but also give classes carefully .They will do all they can to make the students understand the teaching content. What good teachers! For another thing, elderly teachers are full of teaching experience. This is also the most important, especially for us senior students.
This is only my opinion. I think young teachers are also good.
点 评：
亮 点：1、观点鲜明，词汇句型的运用比较灵活
2、过渡词及连词的使用使文章结构紧凑连贯、条理清楚。
不足之处：1、个别地方的表达需要改进。
1) Compared
2) more
3) try to make the classes lively and interesting
2、审题不全面，忽略了对青年教师这部分信息的处理。这一点是比较大的失误。
学生作品2:
Opinions are divided on this question.
Some students who like the elderly teachers more than the young ones think that

the elderly ones are more patient in teaching, more careful in explaining and also have a
lot of experience.
However, the others have a different opinion. They think the teachers who are young are full of energy. Besides, their teaching is lively and they dare to bring in the new ideas.
Well, in my opinion, I like both the elderly teachers and the young ones because from them we both can learn a lot.
点 评：
亮 点：
1、段落清楚，要点齐全，句式表达比较灵活，能适当运用复句。
2、过渡词运用也比较熟练。
需要改进的地方：
1) prefer the elderly teachers to the young ones
2) with explanations
3) the 去掉
4) The young teachers
Some useful suggestions:
对于英语基础不好的学生，可以这样处理：把所给的材料分为几个点，每个点用1-2句简单句表达出来；而对于英语较好的学生，尽可能地运用一些高级词汇跟适当地运用一些复合句，关键是要表达准确到位。
1. 重点词汇的处理跟运用
1）Elderly teachers have more patience. /They are more patient.
2) Elderly teachers always explain things more carefully.
They are more careful with explanations.
3) Elderly teachers are rich in teaching experience.
They are experienced in teaching. /They have more/rich teaching experience.
4) Young teachers are full of energy. /They have more energy. /They are more energetic.
5) Young teachers’ teaching is more lively. /They can make their classes lively and interesting.
6) Young teachers like to think up/bring in new ideas.
They are more ready to accept or create new ideas.
2. 句型的灵活运用
1) Some students may think old teachers’ teaching is better. In their opinion, old teachers have more teaching experience and they are very patient. Also, they can explain things more carefully.
Some students may like elderly teachers’ teaching because they think elderly teachers have more teaching experience and that they tend to be patient and careful with explanations.
2) Many young teachers work very hard. So their teaching is becoming better and better.
Most young teachers devote themselves to their work, making them teach creatively and effectively.
One possible version:
Opinions are divided on this question. Some students may like elderly teachers’ teaching because they think elderly teachers have more teaching experience and that they tend to be patient and careful with explanations. However, I prefer to be taught by young teachers. Firstly, we students have much in common with them. So they are our friends as well as our teachers. Secondly, they are more .energetic and enthusiastic. Usually they can make their classes lively and interesting. Besides, they are more ready to accept or create new ideas, including teaching. Thirdly, most young teachers devote themselves to their work, making them teach creatively and effectively.
In a word, I prefer young teachers to elderly teachers.
Ⅴ. 课堂小结
1. 使用较高级的词汇
词汇反映你知识贮存量的多少，也是衡量英语水平的一个重要标志。
2. 使用恰当的连接词
使用恰当连接词，对写一篇有“英语味”的文章很重要，能使文章上下衔接自然、紧凑。
3. 使用较丰富的句式
运用得当的句子结构可以给文章增色不少，从而使整篇文章因此而生辉 。
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