新人教7浙江高考英语作文冲刺强化训练市公开课金奖市赛课一等奖课件.pptx

Tongxiang NO.2High School bobwangNMET Specialized Revision on Writing To strive for your success in writing 第1页第1页当前不少文学作品被改编成电影。有些人选择看当前不少文学作品被改编成电影。有些人选择看电影，有些人则喜欢读原著。请你以电影，有些人则喜欢读原著。请你以“Film or book,which do you prefer?”为题，按照下列要为题，按照下列要点写一篇英语短文：点写一篇英语短文：1.1.看电影：省时、有趣、易懂看电影：省时、有趣、易懂2.2.读原著：细节更多、语言优美读原著：细节更多、语言优美3.3.我见解及理由我见解及理由注意：注意：1.1.词数词数100-120100-120，文章题目和开头已给出。，文章题目和开头已给出。2.2.参考词汇参考词汇：original work/book in the original （原著）（原著）浙江高考书面表示第2页第2页理解得分理解得分,力争拿高分力争拿高分 平平 均均 得得 分分13.96考考生生332624分值l百分比分值l百分比分值l百分比 03.9%113.3%211.7%12%125.3%221.6%21.3%137.5%231.5%31.1%149%240.3%44%1510.2%250.2%51169.2%260.1%61.3%178.3%270.1%71.9%188.3%28 81.7%197.7%29 92.8%203.6%30 104.2%第3页第3页抄阅读文章中句子;不知所云.得分为0分第4页第4页语言素质欠缺语言素质欠缺;基本功差基本功差;语句毛病多语句毛病多;大大小写小写;标点符号标点符号;书写不清等等书写不清等等;得得6分分.第5页第5页卷面不整洁卷面不整洁;涂改较多涂改较多;语言错语言错误多误多;层次层次不清不清;得得11 11分分第6页第6页语言不地道语言不地道;中文式思维中文式思维;词汇错误词汇错误;卷卷面有涂改面有涂改;得得2020分分.第7页第7页有少许语言错误有少许语言错误;得得2727分分第8页第8页 Some of us think that it is better to see the film than to read the book in the original.The reason is that it takes less time to understand the whole story.Besides,the film is usually more interesting,and it is easier to follow.Some others have just the opposite opinion.They think that they can get more detailed information from the original.Meanwhile,the language in the book is possibly more lively and beautiful.Personally,I agree with the second view.Actually I have more reasons for it.I think I can stay at home,reading quietly in a situation of my own,and whats more,I am able to better understand the authors ideas.In a word,to read the original work is better than to see the film based on it.?Its a sample!第9页第9页Close your eyes and imagine how much you will score yours!Do it following me Be familiar with how to write and then take enough actions to fulfill your dream 第10页第10页Sentence structures and vocabulary1.Use correct tenses and contain all the related points 2.Make the sentence structures varied and words or phrases special.3.Organize the writing well with proper discourse marks Tenses&pointsDiscourse markers Discussion:How to get higher marks?第11页第11页 1.Susan was ill in hospital.She couldnt go to the concert.(现在分词现在分词)2.The professor entered the hall.His students followed him.(过去分词过去分词)3.He wants to improve his spoken English.He often talks with the native speakers.(不定式不定式)(一一)、非谓语动词使用、非谓语动词使用Being ill in hospital,Susan couldnt go to the concert.Followed by his students,the professor entered the hall.In order to improve his spoken English,he often talks with the native speakers.Aimed at improving 巧用各种结构增强句子表现力巧用各种结构增强句子表现力第12页第12页 4.They havent completed the program.They have to stay there for another two weeks(现在分词现在分词)(04上海）上海）5.We are faced with so much trouble,we failed to complete the task on time.(过去分词过去分词)（06四川）四川）6.If you want to find more about university course,call(920)746-3789.(不定式不定式)（05 浙江）浙江）Not having completed the program,they have to stay there for two weeksFaced with so many trouble,we failed to complete the task on time.To find out more about university courses,call(920)746-3789.巧用各种结构增强句子表现力巧用各种结构增强句子表现力第13页第13页1.He didnt realize his danger until he was left alone.Not until 2.We can save the animals by changing the plants we eat.Only 3.She is clever but she never works hard.as/though4.The clock tower stands on the other side of the streetOn the other side of the street he was left alone did he realize his danger.by changing the plants we eat can we saveClever she is,she never works hard.二、倒装句使用二、倒装句使用stands the clock tower.第14页第14页5.I could never imagine these people are living in such poor condition in my wildest dream.(06安徽）安徽）Never 6 Then I realised how much damage had been caused (06 陕西）陕西）Only 7 He may be a quiet student,he talks a lot about his favourite singers after class(05重庆）重庆）.as/though8.Along with the time spent on computer,some problems arise there Never in my wildest dream could I imagine these people are living in such poor conditionthen did I realize how much damage hadQuite student he may be,he talks .,there arise some problems第15页第15页1.He didnt realize his danger until he was left alone.2.The teachers words encouraged her greatly.三、强调句使用三、强调句使用It was not until he was left alone that he realised his danger.It was the teachers words that encouraged her greatly.It is the Super Girl Competition that makes girls gain confidence.3 The Super Girl Competition makes girls gain confidence第16页第16页1.To our surprise,he refused to take the position.名词性名词性2.I wont believe what he says.状语状语What surprised us was that he refused to take No matter what you say,I wont believe.四、从句使用四、从句使用3.When he climbed up higher,he felt more breathless.比比较）较）The higher he climbed up,the more breathless he felt.4.We all know that China will host the Olympic Games.定语定语As is known to all,China will host the Olympic Games.第17页第17页1.The manager had many problems to solve.He looked worried.(with)2.When he arrived home,he found his house freshly painted.With many problems to solve,the manager looked worried.五、介词短语使用五、介词短语使用On his arrival home,he found his house freshly painted.第18页第18页使用高级词汇、词组以增长文采使用高级词汇、词组以增长文采 1.The tourists had to ask the villagers for help.The tourists had no choice but to ask the villagers for help.2The car was expensive.I cant afford it The car was so expensive that it was beyond my reach.3.I had a good idea.A good idea struck me./I came up with a good idea./A good idea occurred to me.第19页第19页4.An interview is important to both the employer and the applicant5Im sure it is worth visiting 6 the building is higher than the surrounding onesThe building is rising up to a noble height and towering over the surrounding onesGreat importance has been attached to an interview by both the employer and the applicantI am sure it is worth touring.Im sure it will offer a feast for your eyes第20页第20页1.Some of the students think it is no use going to college because it is difficult to get jobs形容词和副词使用形容词和副词使用extremely satisfactory 4 we are supposed to take sleep,which enables us to have a good rest and be more s 2 it is recommended that we should cultivate the good habit of taking exercise3,having a healthy diet also plays 4an important role in keeping us healthy5 we should not work too hard,which does more harm than good regularHopefully sound only strongly energetic increasingly 第21页第21页 6 We must pay attention to our appearance and good manners are important 7 with preparation and a confident and honest performance,our success will be ensured 8In addition to the above,taking part-time jobs is also a way for college student to get money to pay part of his tuition9 Some TV station may provide such program as looking for criminal and children,helping to find an lover,and others which are beneficial to society equallyCareful fairlyCommon dangerous lost ideal quite 第22页第22页一、表示罗列增长一、表示罗列增长 过渡词恰当使用过渡词恰当使用二、表示解释阐明二、表示解释阐明besides/whats more/in addition/furthermore/moreover/especially/In particular/as well as in addition,for example,for instance,in this case,in fact,actually第23页第23页三、表示时间顺序三、表示时间顺序 四、表示转折关系四、表示转折关系 at present,recently,after a while,firstly,secondly,lastly,to begin with,all of a sudden,from then on,at the same time,meanwhilehowever,while,otherwise,on the contrary,on the other hand,despite,in spite of,except(for),after all第24页第24页五、表示条件关系五、表示条件关系六、表六、表示因果关系示因果关系 七、表示让步关系七、表示让步关系 as(so)long as,on condition that,if,unlessnow that,thanks to.,due to.,therefore,as a result(of)as,even if,even though,whether.or.第25页第25页八、表示强调八、表示强调 九、表示概括归纳九、表示概括归纳 indeed,in fact,surely,certainly,no doubt,without any doubt,truly,obviously,above all,in a word,in short,in brief,generally speaking,as far as I know,As we know,as has been stated，as I have shown,As far as I am concerned,in summary第26页第26页 Pay attention to advanced words and complex structures Pay attention to discourse markers pay attention to accumulating materials for writing from our daily exercises Keep in mind that you may use some of these one day 第27页第27页Ladies and gentlemen,Welcome to our school!Founded in 1995,our school has a short history.With trees surrounding our school,it looks like a beautiful garden.The two five-storied teaching buildings are where nearly two hundred teachers work and over two thousand students studyLadies and gentlemen,Welcome to our school!Our school was founded in 1995.It has a short history.There are many trees in our school.It looks like a beautiful garden.We have two 5-storied teaching buildings.Nearly two hundred teachers work there and over two thousand students study there.第28页第28页 There is an E-reading room.We can go on the internet for information easily.The teachers are kind and patient,so we respect them.This is our schoolWe like it very much.Thank you.It is in the E-reading room that we have an easy access to the internet for informationWhats more,the teachers are so kind and patient that they deserve our special respect.Such is our school,which we like very much.Thank you.要点齐全，表示正确，但语言平淡，表示方式单一，逻辑性差要点齐全，表示正确，但语言平淡表示方式单一，逻辑性差,很难在考试评分中得到较高档次。但使用很难在考试评分中得到较高档次。但使用恰当连接词恰当连接词，较高级较高级词汇词汇、较复杂语法结构较复杂语法结构，会变得更，会变得更精彩精彩。第29页第29页Practice 最最近近你你班班举举办办了了一一场场关关于于“动动物物园园里里笼笼养养动动物物好好不不好好”讨讨论论。假假如如你你是是李李华华，请请你你依依据据下下表表提提供供信信息息，用用英英语语将将讨讨论论结结果果向向某某中中学学生生英英语语报报投投稿稿，并并陈陈说说你你观观点点（至至少发挥一条）。注意：字数少发挥一条）。注意：字数100左右。左右。赞赞成成同同窗窗认认为为1有有机机会会亲亲眼眼目目睹睹野野生生动动物物。2、有有助助于于培培养养对对动动物物和和自自然然爱爱 3、能能保保护护动动物物免免于于野野生环境危险。生环境危险。反正确同窗认为反正确同窗认为 1、浪费人力物力。、浪费人力物力。2、破坏生态平衡。、破坏生态平衡。3、动物失去自由。、动物失去自由。你观点你观点Dear Editor,Im writing to tell you about the discussion we held on whether it is good to keep animals in zoos.第30页第30页Writing Skills（写作技巧）一、审清题目，定格式。二、连接要点，巧表示。三、扩词成句，通语法。四、连句成文，合线面。第31页第31页 Dear Editor,Im writing to tell you about the discussion we held on whether it is good to keep animals in zoos.Those who favor the idea think it provides chances for people to see wild animals.It might also develop peoples love for animals and nature.Besides,animals in zoos can be protected from dangers in the wild.However,those who are against the idea think that its a waste of money and labor to keep animals in zoos.Itll also damage the balance of nature.Animals will lose their freedom if caged in zoos.I personally feel it is wrong to take animals away from their natural living areas and keep them locked up.Yours sincerely,第32页第32页 May yousucceed In writing第33页第33页