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书面表达五步法书面表达五步法 指导与训练指导与训练汶上县第一实验中学汶上县第一实验中学 孙宝栋孙宝栋2015年中考英语年中考英语 I rememberLooking back at these past three years I remember many things.Then slowly I made some new friends to remember forever And now its time to graduate Wonderful memories of ours 初中生活即将结束，回忆三年让你难忘的初中生活即将结束，回忆三年让你难忘的人，以人，以“My Unforgettable(难忘的难忘的)Person”为题写一篇为题写一篇100词左右的英语短词左右的英语短文。文。真情流露真情流露Write about a person you will never forget.目标：目标：根据写作技巧根据写作技巧完成写作任务。完成写作任务。书面表达五步法书面表达五步法审审题意题意1 作文三审：作文三审：审人称审人称 审时态审时态 审内容审内容书面表达五步法书面表达五步法 初中生活即将结束，回忆三年让你难忘的人，初中生活即将结束，回忆三年让你难忘的人，以以“My Unforgettable(难忘的难忘的)Person”为题为题写一篇写一篇100词左右的英语短文。词左右的英语短文。实战演练实战演练 作文三审：作文三审：审人称审人称:_ 审时态审时态:_ 审内容审内容:_第一人称第一人称+第三人称第三人称人人+事事一般现在时一般现在时+一般过去时一般过去时审审题意题意1抓抓要要点点2书面表达五步法书面表达五步法 Who is your unforgettable person?Why will you never forget him or her?Points of this articlePersonal information 个人信息个人信息name Appearance (外貌外貌)Personality性格性格age.hobbies常用词汇：常用词汇：Appearance(外貌外貌)tall ，short,heavy,thin,beautiful,ugly,strong,long/brown/straight/curly hair,of medium height/build技巧：技巧：Brainstorm（头脑风暴）（头脑风暴）功能句型：功能句型：Appearance(外貌外貌)He/She is_.long hair,big eyes，.short,heavy,beautiful,ugly，.He/She has_.outgoing Personality(性格性格)常用词汇：常用词汇：,funny,quiet,seriousfriendly,kind,clever,smart,cute功能句型：功能句型：He/She is_.funny,quiet,serious,friendly,kind,clever,smart,cute.Personality(性格性格)Name：DaiJunliangAge:28Appearance(外貌)：tall,thin,curly hairPersationality(性格）：kind,outgoingHobby:swimmimg,playing the guitarWhat happened between him and me?When I was in university,my English pronunciation was very poor.Many students always laughed at me.But he gave up his free time to help me practice pronunciation.Thanks to his help,I improved my pronunciation greatly at last.Tip:描述过去发生的事情常用描述过去发生的事情常用_（时态）（时态）一般过去时一般过去时_ _ _resulthowwhen_ _描述发生的事情要包含哪些信息？描述发生的事情要包含哪些信息？past experience When（时间）（时间）How（方式）（方式）Why（原因）（原因）Where（地点）（地点）Who（人物）（人物）What（经过）（经过）审审题意题意1 抓抓要点要点2 定定句型句型3书面表达五步法书面表达五步法描述人的基本句型：He/She is tall/friendly.He/She has long/curly hair.He/She likes singing/dancing.描述事件的基本句型：Many students always laughed at me.But he gave up his free time to help me practice pronunciation.定定句型句型3技巧一：合并句式技巧一：合并句式She is of medium height.She has long stright hair.She is of medium height _ long straight hair.He is good at playing basketball.He can play the guitar well.句型升华句型升华He is _ good at playing basketball,_ can play the guitar well.not only but also 巧用连词巧用连词with巧用介词巧用介词技巧二：扩展句式技巧二：扩展句式Mr.Xu is my teacher.Mr.Xu is my teacher_._ ,Mr.Xu was my teacher _.who teaches us math When I was in junior middle school 巧用时间状语从句巧用时间状语从句巧用定语从句巧用定语从句who taught us math审审题意题意1 抓抓要点要点2 定定句型句型3书面表达五步法书面表达五步法 连连成篇成篇4 Who,What Ending BeginningThere are a lot of people who we will never forget in our life.Although we live in different places now,I will never forget him.My Unforgettable My Unforgettable PersonPerson 【注意文章结构注意文章结构】Body There are a lot of people who we will never forget in our life.My unforgettable person is my college classmate.He is very tall.He has curly hair.When I was in university,my English pronunciation was very poor.Many students always laughed at me.But he gave up his free time to help me practice pronunciation.Thanks to his help,I have improved my pronunciation greatly.I will never forget his kindness.His kindness will encourage me to help others who are in trouble.BodyBeginningEnding审审题意题意1 抓抓要点要点2 定定句型句型3书面表达五步法书面表达五步法 连连成文成文4细细检查检查5检查时态检查时态 检查人称检查人称 检查语法检查语法 检查词数检查词数 细细检查检查5注意书写一定要工整！卷面整洁不一定加分，卷面潦草一定要扣分！抓要抓要点点2定定句句型型3连连成成文文4细细检检查查5时间时间 地点地点人物人物原因原因 合并句式合并句式扩展句式扩展句式注意篇章结构注意篇章结构添首尾句添首尾句/段段查时态查时态查人称查人称查语法查语法查词数查词数书面表达五步法书面表达五步法审审题题意意1审时态审时态审人称审人称审内容审内容开心收获开心收获 初中生活即将结束，回忆三年让你难忘的人，以初中生活即将结束，回忆三年让你难忘的人，以“My Unforgettable(难忘的难忘的)Person”为题写一篇为题写一篇100词左词左右的英语短文。右的英语短文。书写要求：书写要求：1.词数为词数为100词左右。（开头已给出，不计入总词数）词左右。（开头已给出，不计入总词数）2.可根据具体要求和参考词语适当发挥。可根据具体要求和参考词语适当发挥。3.文中不得出现真实姓名文中不得出现真实姓名。My Unforgettable Person There are a lot of people who we will never forget in our life._ 小试牛刀小试牛刀I can do it!注意人称注意人称 注意时态注意时态 注意句法注意句法 注意词数注意词数 贴心提示：贴心提示：评分标准评分标准1.（1315分）符合题目要求，内容完整，层分）符合题目要求，内容完整，层次结构清晰，表达清楚，语言无误。次结构清晰，表达清楚，语言无误。2.（912分）基本符合题目要求，内容较完分）基本符合题目要求，内容较完整，层次结构较清晰，表达较清楚，语言有少整，层次结构较清晰，表达较清楚，语言有少量错误。量错误。3.（48分）部分符合题目要求，内容不够完分）部分符合题目要求，内容不够完整，层次结构不够清晰，表达不够清楚，语言整，层次结构不够清晰，表达不够清楚，语言有较多错误。有较多错误。4.（03分）不符合题目要求，整篇表达不清分）不符合题目要求，整篇表达不清楚或只照抄、拼凑几个提示词语。楚或只照抄、拼凑几个提示词语。佳作赏析佳作赏析 I cant forget him because he impressed me a lot.When I was in high school,there was a teacher who taught me more than that in class.He was a very kind man and taught us geographyWe all liked to take his class,though geography was not our major course.What impressed me a lot was his grace.You could see him always smiling.He got angry only when we were too noisy in class.After class,he often played soccer with us.He used to be a very believable defender and never fouled on any of us.We all liked to call him Teacher Miao and he was just like a friend,not a teacher.His personality inspired me to be kind to everyone I met.That was my well-beloved Teacher Miao.And he is the person I cant forget.【2014山东潍坊】八、写作山东潍坊】八、写作(满分满分15分分)6月月15日是父亲节。请你以日是父亲节。请你以“My Father”为题，写一为题，写一篇短文。从性格、爱好等方面简略介绍一下你的父亲，篇短文。从性格、爱好等方面简略介绍一下你的父亲，重点写一个曾经发生在你们之间的令人感动的故事，并重点写一个曾经发生在你们之间的令人感动的故事，并简要说明你将如何回报这如山的父爱。简要说明你将如何回报这如山的父爱。写作要求：写作要求：1.短文详略得当，条理清楚，行文连贯，逻辑性强，短文详略得当，条理清楚，行文连贯，逻辑性强，书写规范书写规范;2.短文中不能出现真实的人名和地名短文中不能出现真实的人名和地名;3.词数词数80词左右。词左右。参考词汇：感动参考词汇：感动move(v.)回报回报in return(adv.)【2014山东潍坊】八、写作山东潍坊】八、写作(满分满分15分分)6月月15日是父亲节。请你以日是父亲节。请你以“My Father”为题，写一为题，写一篇短文。从性格、爱好等方面简略介绍一下你的父亲，篇短文。从性格、爱好等方面简略介绍一下你的父亲，重点写一个曾经发生在你们之间的令人感动的故事，并重点写一个曾经发生在你们之间的令人感动的故事，并简要说明你将如何回报这如山的父爱。简要说明你将如何回报这如山的父爱。写作要求：写作要求：1.短文详略得当，条理清楚，行文连贯，逻辑性强，短文详略得当，条理清楚，行文连贯，逻辑性强，书写规范书写规范;2.短文中不能出现真实的人名和地名短文中不能出现真实的人名和地名;3.词数词数80词左右。词左右。参考词汇：感动参考词汇：感动move(v.)回报回报in return(adv.)Rome wasnt built in a day!Rome wasnt built in a day!Practice makes perfect!Practice makes perfect!May all of you succeed!May all of you succeed!Thank you！