基础雅思写作市公开课一等奖百校联赛获奖课件.pptx

文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。Lesson 3 议论文 文章反方观点和结尾段 Lesson 4 说明文（汇报类作文）第1页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。Lesson 1 Lesson 1 雅思写作评分标准 雅思写作涵盖话题 15句框架解释 句子结构 文章第一段(1,2,3句写作)第2页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。1.1.雅思写作雅思写作Task 2 Task 2 评分标准（评分标准（7,6,57,6,5）BandBandTask ResponseTask ResponseCoherence and Coherence and CohesionCohesionLexical ResourceLexical ResourceGrammatical Grammatical Range and Range and AccuracyAccuracy7 7addresses all addresses all parts of the taskparts of the taskpresents presents a clear a clear position throughout position throughout the responsethe responsepresents,extends presents,extends and supports main and supports main ideas,but there ideas,but there may be a may be a tendency to tendency to overgeneralise overgeneralise and/or supporting and/or supporting ideas ideas may lack may lack focus focus logically organises logically organises information and information and ideas;there is ideas;there is clear clear progression progression throughoutthroughoutuses a range of uses a range of cohesive device cohesive device appropriately appropriately although although there may there may be some under-be some under-/over-use/over-usepresents a clear presents a clear central topic within central topic within each paragraph each paragraph uses a sufficient uses a sufficient range of vocabulary range of vocabulary to allow some to allow some flexibility and flexibility and precisionprecisionuses uses less common less common lexical itemslexical items with with some awareness of some awareness of style and collocationstyle and collocationmay produce may produce occasional errorsoccasional errors in in word choice,spelling word choice,spelling and/or word and/or word formationformationuses a variety of uses a variety of complex structurescomplex structuresproduces produces frequent error-free frequent error-free sentencessentenceshas good control has good control of grammar and of grammar and punctuation but punctuation but may make a few may make a few errorserrors第3页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。分数分数写作任务回应情况写作任务回应情况连贯与衔接连贯与衔接词汇丰富程度词汇丰富程度语法多样性及准确性语法多样性及准确性7 7回应各部分写作任务 回应写作任务过程中一直展现一个清楚观点展现、发展主要论点并就其进行论证，但有时出现过于一概而论倾向及/或论点缺乏重点倾向符合逻辑地组织信息及论点;清楚行文推进发展贯通全文恰当地使用一系列衔接伎俩，尽管有时使用不足或过多 每个段落都有一个清楚中心主题使用足够词汇，表示一定灵活性及准确性使用不常见词汇，对语体及搭配有一定认识在选择用词、拼写及/或构词方面可能偶然出现错误利用各种复杂语法结构多数句子准确无误对语法及标点符号掌握很好，但有时出现少许错误第4页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。BandBandTask ResponseTask ResponseCoherence and Coherence and CohesionCohesionLexical Lexical ResourceResourceGrammatical Grammatical Range and Range and AccuracyAccuracy6 6addresses all parts addresses all parts of the task although of the task although some parts may be some parts may be more fully covered more fully covered than others than others presents a presents a relevant position relevant position althoughalthough the the conclusions may conclusions may become unclear or become unclear or repetitive repetitive presents relevant presents relevant main ideas but main ideas but some may be some may be inadequately inadequately developed/uncleardeveloped/uncleararranges arranges information and information and ideas coherently ideas coherently andand there is a clear there is a clear overall progressionoverall progressionuses cohesive uses cohesive devices effectively,devices effectively,but but cohesioncohesion within within and/or between and/or between sentences sentences may be may be faulty or mechanicalfaulty or mechanicalmay not always may not always use referencing use referencing clearly or clearly or appropriately;appropriately;uses paragraphing,uses paragraphing,but but not always not always logicallylogicallyuses an uses an adequate range adequate range of vocabulary for of vocabulary for the taskthe task attempts to use attempts to use less common less common vocabulary but vocabulary but with some with some inaccuracyinaccuracy makes makes some some errorserrors in spelling in spelling and/or word and/or word formation,but formation,but they do not they do not impede impede communicationcommunicationuses a mix of simple uses a mix of simple and complex and complex sentence formssentence formsmakes makes some errors some errors in grammar and in grammar and punctuationpunctuation but they but they rarely reduce rarely reduce communicationcommunication第5页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。分数分数 写作任务回应情况写作任务回应情况连贯与衔接连贯与衔接词汇丰富程度词汇丰富程度 语法多样性及准确性语法多样性及准确性6 6回应了各部分写作任务，但一些部分论证可能比其它部分更为充分提出了一个切题观点，尽管各种结论有时不甚清楚或重复提出了多个相关主要论点，但一些论点可能未能充分展开进行论证或不甚清楚连贯地组织信息及论点，总体来说，能清楚地推进行文发展有效地使用衔接伎俩，但句内及/或句间衔接有时有误或过于机械有时无法保持一贯清楚或恰当地使用指代使用段落写作，但未能保持段落间逻辑使用足够词汇开展写作任务试图使用不惯用词汇，但有时使用不准确在拼写及/或构词方面有错误，但不影响交流综合使用简单句式与复杂句式在语法及标点符号方面有一些错误，但这些错误极少影响交流第6页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。BandBand Task ResponseTask ResponseCoherence and Coherence and CohesionCohesionLexical Lexical ResourceResourceGrammatical Grammatical Range and Range and AccuracyAccuracy5 5addresses the addresses the task task only partiallyonly partially;the format may be the format may be inappropriate in inappropriate in placesplacesexpresses a expresses a position but theposition but thedevelopment is development is not always clearnot always clearand and there may be there may be no conclusionsno conclusionsdrawndrawnpresents some presents some main ideas butmain ideas butthese are limited these are limited and not and not sufficientlysufficientlydeveloped;developed;there there may be irrelevantmay be irrelevantdetaildetail presents information presents information with some organisation with some organisation but but there may be a there may be a lack of overall lack of overall progressionprogressionmakes makes inadequate,inadequate,inaccurate or over-use inaccurate or over-use of cohesive devicesof cohesive devices may be may be repetitiverepetitive because of because of lack of lack of referencing and referencing and substitutionsubstitutionmay not write in may not write in paragraphs,orparagraphs,orparagraphing may be paragraphing may be inadequateinadequateuses uses a limited a limited range of range of vocabulary,vocabulary,but but this is minimally this is minimally adequate for adequate for the taskthe taskmay make may make noticeable noticeable errorserrors in spelling in spelling and/or word and/or word formation that formation that may cause may cause some difficulty some difficulty for the readerfor the readeruses only uses only a limited a limited range of structuresrange of structuresattempts complex attempts complex sentences but these sentences but these tend to be tend to be less less accurate than simple accurate than simple sentencessentences may make may make frequent frequent grammatical errors grammatical errors and and punctuation may punctuation may be faultybe faulty;errors can;errors can cause some difficulty cause some difficulty for the readerfor the reader第7页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。分数分数 写作任务回应情况写作任务回应情况连贯与衔接连贯与衔接词汇丰富程度词汇丰富程度 语法多样性及准确性语法多样性及准确性5 5仅回应了部分写作任务；写作格式有时在一些地方不甚恰当表述了一个观点，但展开论证过程未能保持一贯清楚，且可能缺乏结论提出一些主要论点但十分有限，且未能充分展开论证；有时出现无关细节有一定组织性地展现信息，但总体来说有时缺乏清楚总体行文推进衔接伎俩不足、不准确或过分使用因为指代和替换不足显得行文重复没有使用段落写作，或者分段不足使用词汇范围有限，但能抵达进行写作任务最低程度在拼写及/或构词方面可能出现显著错误，且可能会对读者造成一定阅读困难仅能使用有限语法结构试图使用复杂句，但复杂句准确性常不及简单句准确性可能经常出现语法及标点符号使用错误；这些错误会对读者造成一定阅读困难第8页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。雅思写作中两个问题一、看完题目后，用汉字都不知道说什么（思维问题）；二、汉字思维有了，用英语无法清楚表示（语言问题）。思维问题对应是第一个评分标准：Task Response。假如考生汉字构思就偏题、跑题、谋篇布局有误，写出英语也必定如此。第9页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。语言技能问题对应后三个评分标准：Coherence and Cohesion考查是立场清楚，贯通一直，没有序言不搭后语，没有没有关信息；起承转合逻辑通达。Lexical Resource考查是用词贴切，掌握复杂高级词汇，拼写无错。Grammatical Range and Accuracy考查是各种复杂句灵活利用，语法和标点(punctuation)正确性。第10页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。其它评分点其它评分点off-topicunderlengthno.of wordsmemorisedpenalty(罚分)illegible(字迹潦草)第11页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。雅思写作评分雅思写作评分第12页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。2.2.雅思写作涵盖话题雅思写作涵盖话题教育类教育类 社会类社会类 文化类文化类生活方式类生活方式类环境类环境类 科技类科技类 政府类政府类第13页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。Sample 1Sample 1(/1/9 B卷大作文)Some people think government should invest more money in teaching science than other subjects in order for a country to develop and progress.To what extent do you agree or disagree?第14页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。写作提要写作提要第一步：第一步：审题审题 （读懂题目要求，明确写作方向）（读懂题目要求，明确写作方向）关键词：关键词：government government (should)invest more money (should)invest more money teach science teach science teach other subjects teach other subjects a country to develop and progress a country to develop and progress关键要求：对这种观点（你）支持还是反对关键要求：对这种观点（你）支持还是反对第15页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。Brain StormBrain Storm：同意：同意：科学教育科学教育 其它教育其它教育1.1.促进科学技术发展，科学技术是生产力，促经国家繁荣，提升国际市场促进科学技术发展，科学技术是生产力，促经国家繁荣，提升国际市场竞争力竞争力2.2.培养大量科技人才，填补国家各个行业所需要科学技术人才，推进国家培养大量科技人才，填补国家各个行业所需要科学技术人才，推进国家发展；发展；3.3.推进科学研究，处理人类很多领域问题推进科学研究，处理人类很多领域问题第16页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。不一样意不一样意二者并重二者并重1.1.科学教育主要性科学教育主要性 （见（见PPT21PPT21）2.2.其它教育主要性其它教育主要性 实现国家全方面发展需要从多方面建设，比如文化、艺术、体育等，实现国家全方面发展需要从多方面建设，比如文化、艺术、体育等，失衡发展制约国家长久发展；失衡发展制约国家长久发展；忽略其它教育，造成人才更多地流向科学领域，其它领域发展受到约忽略其它教育，造成人才更多地流向科学领域，其它领域发展受到约束；束；长久造成人才分布不均，对人才和国家都将造成一定损失长久造成人才分布不均，对人才和国家都将造成一定损失第17页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。科学教育科学教育 其它教育其它教育1.1.其它教育有主要学习价值，培养多样性人才，繁荣各个领域，促经国其它教育有主要学习价值，培养多样性人才，繁荣各个领域，促经国家整体发展和进步；家整体发展和进步；2.2.举例：艺术家、作家、画家和音乐家等巨大作用举例：艺术家、作家、画家和音乐家等巨大作用第18页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。Sample answerSample answer首段首段第一句第一句 背景背景Nowadays,an increasing number of people are Nowadays,an increasing number of people are Nowadays,an increasing number of people are Nowadays,an increasing number of people are concerned about the phenomenon that concerned about the phenomenon that concerned about the phenomenon that concerned about the phenomenon that education is education is education is education is playing a more and more important role in a nations playing a more and more important role in a nations playing a more and more important role in a nations playing a more and more important role in a nations development.development.development.development.第19页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。其它表示方式其它表示方式Nowadays,an increasing number of people are Nowadays,an increasing number of people are concerned about concerned about the the problem/the purpose+problem/the purpose+同位语从同位语从句句.Nowadays,more and more students are concerned Nowadays,more and more students are concerned about about+宾语从句宾语从句.第20页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。假如极难再短时间内想出第一句内容，就直接表示观点，两假如极难再短时间内想出第一句内容，就直接表示观点，两句话写完首段。句话写完首段。I agree with the view that I agree with the view that.Reasons are as follows.Reasons are as follows.我赞同观点是我赞同观点是原因以下。原因以下。第21页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。第二句第二句 交代辩论话题交代辩论话题However,whether However,whether more more national investment national investment should be should be put put in science in science rather than other subjects to develop rather than other subjects to develop the country the country is a controversial issue/has caused a is a controversial issue/has caused a heated debateheated debate.第22页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。其它表示方式其它表示方式主语从句主语从句 Whether more Whether more national investment national investment should be should be put put in science in science rather than other subjects to develop rather than other subjects to develop the country is a controversial issue.the country is a controversial issue.同位语从句同位语从句 S Some people ome people hold the viewhold the view that that more more national investment national investment should be put should be put in science in science rather rather than other subjects to develop the country.than other subjects to develop the country.第23页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。宾语从句宾语从句 Some people agree that.,while others Some people agree that.,while others believe that.believe that.第24页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。第三句第三句 交代自己写作观点交代自己写作观点My view is that the government should invest more My view is that the government should invest more money money in science in science rather than other subjects.rather than other subjects.其它表示方式：其它表示方式：In my view/opinion,.In my view/opinion,.I agree with the view that.,for the following reasons.I agree with the view that.,for the following reasons.第25页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。假如在第二句交代辩论话题时，用是假如在第二句交代辩论话题时，用是“一些人认为一些人认为.，而另而另一些人认为一些人认为.”.”，第三句表示观点时候能够简单地写成以下，第三句表示观点时候能够简单地写成以下形式：形式：I agree with the former/latter view for the following I agree with the former/latter view for the following reasons.reasons.第26页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。第二段第二段第一句第一句 本段中心句本段中心句Firstly,it is obvious that Firstly,it is obvious that science education promotes the science education promotes the advancement of science and technology.advancement of science and technology.第27页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。其它同义替换句式其它同义替换句式Firstly,it is clear/apparent/evident/true/undoubted Firstly,it is clear/apparent/evident/true/undoubted that.that.Firstly,there is no doubt that.Firstly,there is no doubt that.One reason for this is that.One reason for this is that.第28页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。第二句第二句 对中心句进行拓展、解释、说明。对中心句进行拓展、解释、说明。In modern society,science and technology is the most In modern society,science and technology is the most influential driving force behind the productivity and influential driving force behind the productivity and material prosperity and can make the nation become material prosperity and can make the nation become more competitive in the international market.more competitive in the international market.第29页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。More specifically,.More specifically,.More precisely,.More precisely,.第30页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。第三句第三句 重申写作观点重申写作观点So,science subjects should be core subjects and get So,science subjects should be core subjects and get more financial support.more financial support.其它表示方式：其它表示方式：Therefore,it is important/necessary/crucial for sb to do Therefore,it is important/necessary/crucial for sb to do sth.sth.第31页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。第三段第三段第一句第一句 本段中心句本段中心句Moreover,Moreover,investing more money in science can investing more money in science can cultivate lcultivate large amounts of talents arge amounts of talents with scientific with scientific knowledge and technological skills for different knowledge and technological skills for different industries,driving the progress of the whole country.industries,driving the progress of the whole country.第32页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。表示表示“深入，增加信息深入，增加信息”同义词同义词furthermore,as well as,besides,moreover,apart from furthermore,as well as,besides,moreover,apart from this,in addition,additionally,what is morethis,in addition,additionally,what is morenot only.but also,not only.but also,第33页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。第二句第二句 举例举例For example,For example,scientific discoveriesscientific discoveries,such as,such as space space exploration,exploration,vaccine developmentvaccine development,genetic genetic engineering,and so on,engineering,and so on,are of are of great great significance to significance to our lives our lives and the betterment of the country.and the betterment of the country.第34页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。第三句第三句 例证解释说明例证解释说明We are facing a complex society with many unknown We are facing a complex society with many unknown areas,so without enough scientific expenditure,it is areas,so without enough scientific expenditure,it is hard to image what the world will be like.hard to image what the world will be like.第35页文档仅供参考，如有不当之处，请联系改正。第四段第四段第一句第一句 讨论反方观点讨论反方观点That is not to sayThat is not to say we can ignore the other subjects,such we can ignore the other subjects,such as as culture,art,PE,etc,or the countrys progress will be c