浙江英语续写省公共课一等奖全国赛课获奖课件.pptx

.6月续写月续写浙江兰溪兰荫中学浙江兰溪兰荫中学 李华李华第1页第二节第二节 读后续写读后续写(满分满分25分分)阅读下面短文，依据所给情节进行续写，使之组成一个阅读下面短文，依据所给情节进行续写，使之组成一个完整故事。完整故事。It was summer,and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before.He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West.We took a plane to Albuquerque,a big city in the state of New Mexico.We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon.Uncle Paul,my dads friend,picked us up from the airport and drove us up to his farm in Pecos.第2页His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle.My dad and I spent the night in the guestroom of the farm house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby.Very early in the morning.Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast.“The day starts at dawn on my farm,”he said.After breakfast,I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens,while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze(吃草吃草).I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses.They looked really cool.第3页In the afternoon,I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride,and he said yes,as long as my dad went with me.I wasnt going to take a horse ride by myself anyway.So,my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats,got on our horses,and headed slowly towards the mountains.“Dont be late for supper,”Uncle Paul cried,“and keep to the track so that you dont get lost!”“OK!”my dad cried back.After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight.It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks,the deep green pine trees,and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene.It looked like a beautiful woven(编织编织)blanket spread out upon the ground just for us.第4页Paragraph1:Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.Paragraph2:We had no idea where we were and it got dark.第5页Basicinformation:DadWriterAvocationlikeneverbeforeAtriptotheWildWestLateafternoonnightMorningAfternoon第6页Settings:1.listeningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdowntherivernearby3.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.4.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwovenblanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.2.headedslowlytowardsthemountains.第7页第8页第9页Descriptionoftherabbit:ThelittleRabbithasacoatofwhite/brownhair.Thetwoearsarelongandprickuponitshead.Itisfurry,softandwhite/brownwithtworedeyesglaringabovethechin.Itseyesarelikeapairofsmallredbulbs.Exposedtosunlight,theybecomelittlepiecesofredthread.Itsearsarestraightandlongandtheycanturnandmoveslightly.Howcuteitis!小白兔全身盖一层雪白毛。两只耳朵很长，直立在头上。它长着一身柔软毛，瞪着一双红眼睛.眼睛像一对红色小灯泡，见到阳光时就微微眯起；耳朵长而直竖，有时还会微微转动,它多可爱啊第10页agile（动作）灵敏，灵活 abletomovequicklyandeasilyAt20yearsoldhewasnotasagileasheisnow.20岁时他并不如现在这般矫健。第11页scurryVERB(尤指受惊吓时)急奔，乱窜 Whenpeopleorsmallanimalsscurrysomewhere,theymovetherequicklyandhurriedly,especiallybecausetheyarefrightened.Theattackbegan,sendingresidentsscurryingforcover.攻击发动后，居民们纷纷奔逃躲避。Bushy-tailedsquirrelsscurrytofindacornsandnutstohide.大尾巴松鼠忙着搜寻和贮藏橡果和松子第12页gallop n.飞奔；飞奔飞奔；飞奔 v.飞驰；急速进飞驰；急速进行行whinny n.马嘶声；嘶声马嘶声；嘶声 v.嘶；以嘶声表嘶；以嘶声表示示用作名词用作名词 (n.)Thehorsewentoffatagallopacrossthefield.那匹马飞奔起来跑过田野。Allthehorsesbrokeintoagallop.全部马突然飞奔起来。用作动词用作动词 (v.)Twopeoplegallopwhipandspur,donotcomeinthecityalittlewhile.两人快马加鞭飞驰，不一会儿就来到城里。Whenrunningfree,theAfghanHoundmovesatagallop,showinggreatelasticityandspringinhissmooth,powerfulstride.自由奔跑时，阿富汗猎犬是飞驰，它平稳有力步幅显示出极大弹力和跳跃力。用作动词(v.)Thehorsewhinniedwithpleasure.那匹马舒适嘶叫著。Itisanillhorsecanneitherwhinnynorwaghistail.这匹马病了,它不会嘶鸣,也不会摆尾。第13页ProblemsandsolutionsplotWritingpurposecharactersfeelings第14页Writingpurpose:分享作者年轻时和父亲一次冒险行动，以及从父亲那学到了一些东西。Feelings：从兴奋，开心到害怕，吃惊，再到放松，开心过程Characters：文章没有显著显示出来，但父亲应该是很有经验样子。第15页Problemsandresolutions：第一段是problem产生。第二段是resolution过程。第16页Paragraph1:Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.Itwasverycute.Wetriedtohuntforit,walkingthroughforestsandhillswithoutanyrest.Wefinallygotintothedeepofaforest.第17页Paragraph2:We had no idea where we were and it got dark.Wegotlost.Throughsomedifficulties,wegotbacksafewithourefforts.第18页Paragraph1:Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.It was furry with a coat of gorgeous brown hair.After looking up at me with its pair of red bulbs,it began to scurry ahead.“Why not catch it and bring it back to Uncle Paul?They must be very happy.”With this thought,I rode hard to hunt for it.Dad saw it and had to follow me.The rabbit was very agile,soon entering a mountain forest.We had to get down the horses,continuing the chase and totally forgetting the track back.Even though we tried desperately,the rabbit was out of sight in the end.Then we realized we were in the deep part of an forest.第19页Paragraph2:We had no idea where we were and it got dark.And dark clouds seemed to be gathering in the sky.Taking out the cell phone,we soon found something was wrong:no signal.And no compass.Frightened,I stared at Dad ,trying to seek a solution for the trouble from him.“Maybe what you have learned in geography class works,he said,pointing to the stars in the sky.I knew he meant the North Star.Soon we found the right direction.We hurried back finding the horses.And the river was in sight again.The family was worried and about to call the police.At the sight of us,they were relieved and hugged us tightly.There was nothing more memorable than this rabbit hunting in my life!第20页第一篇 Cherie老师Paragraph1Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.Instinctively,Iyelledoutloud,pullingbackthereinshardinordertostopthehorsefromhurtingthelittlecreature.Badlystartledbythesuddenincident,thehorsespedoffthetrackintoanotherdirection.Dadfollowedcloselybehind,callingouttotellmehowtosoothetheterrifiedhorseandIdidastold.Finally,thehorsecalmeddown,butweseemedtogetlost,unabletogobacktothemountainroad.Paragraph2Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.Wanderingaround,wewerestillstuckinthedilemma.Muchtoourdelight,thesoundofwaterinthedistancecaughtourattentionanddroveustotheriverbank.Dadproposedthatweshouldwalkalongtheriverwhichmayleadustothefarmhouseandnothingseemedbetterthanthat.TimeappearedtobemerrierandshorterwhenIstayedtogetherwithDadandbeforelong,thefarmhousecameintosight.Whatathrillingbutmemorableexperienceitwas!第21页第二篇：Katie老师Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.Iimmediatelygrewfondofthefurryrabbitandcalledoutexcitedly,“Dad!Look!”Alarmed,therabbitranawayinaflash.Ifollowediteagerly,hopingtocatchitasmytrophyforthetrip.Mydadjustfollowedme,knowingitwasimpossibletostopme.Wetrackedtherabbitforabouttenminutesuntilitgotcompletelyoutofsight.Depressedandtired,Isuggestedgoingback.Butapparently,wehaddivergedfromthetrackUnclePaulwarnedustokeep.(86words)We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark.Thethoughtthatwemighthavegotlostinsuchdarknesssentshiversdownmyspine.Tearsoffearandregretfilledmyeyes.Fortunately,DadwasnotsopanickedasIwas.Hekeptsilentandlistenedverycarefullyashetookmyhorsereinandledtheway.Wehadwanderedforwhatseemedlikeageswhensuddenlyarivercameintosight.Hopefully,wecouldfindourwaybacktothefarmhouseifwefollowedtheriver.Finally,wearrivedhomesafelyjustintimeforsupper,butwhatanexperience!Itturnsouttheresalwaysawayoutofanyplightaslongaswestaycalm.(114words)第22页第三篇：Oz老师Paragraph1Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.Itwassoquickthatmyhorsewasscared.Thehorsestartedtoneigh,shiverandgraduallylosecontrol.ItsuddenlyrantoanotherdirectionawayfromtheinitialtrackUnclePaulhaswarnedustokeep.Mydadheldtheropetightlyinordertocalmthehorsedown.However,itdidntwork.Ourcowboyhatswereevenlostwhilethehorsewasrunningwildandfinallywefelldownfromthehorseandthehorsejustranawayleavingmeandmydadlyingontheground.Paragraph2Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.Mylegswerehurtsothatmydadhadtocarrymeontheback.“Wegetlost,right?”Iaskedmydad,“Yes.Butdontworry,wellfindthewaybackhome.”Weslowlywalkedtowardstheluminousdirection.“Iguesswerelateforsupper.”Sensingmyfearandconcerns,mydadtriedtomakemelaugh.Atthattime,wesawtheriverinfrontofus.“Dad,thisistherivernexttoourfarmhouse.Wecanfollowtherivertofindourwayhome.”“Exactly!Howcleveryouare!”Thenwefollowedtheriverbankandfinallyourhousecameintooursight.Reflectingonthismemory,Iregardedthisexperienceasmyspecialadventurewithmydad.第23页第四篇：Niehai老师Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.Itgotsuchafrightthatitrushedatahighspeed.I,frightenedtoo,grabbedthereintightly.Minuteslater,thehorsewasoffthetrackandIfoundthattherewasnosignofmydad.Inthemiddleofnowhere,Ifeltawaveoffearwraparoundme.Worsestill,theraincamepouringdownandIwaswetthrough.Afterseeminglylonghours,therecamealoudcryofmydad.Asaquickresponse,Ishoutedinaloudvoice.Dad,Imhere!Tracingmyvoice,Dadfinallyfoundmeandwegotreunited.Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.Themoonburstthroughthecloudsandcastitssilverlightalloverthewetland.Wewanderedslowlyonourhorses,feelingatalosswhattodo.Suddenly,thesoundofafloatingrivercaughtmyattention.Dad,maybewecanfindthefarmhousedowntheriver.Dadnoddedwithapproval.Withgreatcare,werodeourhorsesalongtheriver.Shortlyafterwards,theUnclePaulsfarm,sureenough,cameintooursight.Finally,wegottothefarm,safeandsound.Whatatriplikeneverbefore!第24页第五篇：Tanya老师 Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.Myhorserearedintotheair,letoutafrightenedwhinny,andgallopedoffthetrack.Iheldonfordearlife,brancheslashingintomyarmsandface.Finallyhesloweddown,thenstopped,butlookingaroundattheendlessseaoftrees,Iknewwehadgottenhopelesslylost.Icalled;theonlyanswerwastherustlingofthewindinthetrees.Thehorsemeanderedthroughthelonesomepines,withmecontinuingtocallandscanthehorizonforafamiliarlandmark,earsprickedforthesoundofahorseorahumanvoice.Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.AtlastIheardthewelcomesoundofrushingwater-theriver!Gratefullywewenttothebankanddrankourfill.Wefolloweditinthedirectionthatthesunhadset,andeventuallyheardthefamiliarfrogs,andsawthecomfortingsightoftheoldfarmhouse,mydadshiningahugelampfromtheporch,guidingourwayhome.第25页Molly Dorighi3/6/07:52:35pmLostinTheWild,WildWestItwasthesummer,andmydadwantedtotreatmetoavacationlikeneverbefore.Hedecidedtotakemeonatriptothewild,wildwest.WetookaplanetoAlbuquerque,abigcityinthestateofNewMexico.WereachedAlbuquerqueinthelateafternoon.UnclePaul,mydadsfriend,pickedusupfromtheairportanddroveusuptohisranchinPecos.HiswifeTinacookedusadeliciousdinnerandwegottoknowhissonsRyanandKyle.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomlisteningtothecrickets,owls,andcoyotes.Veryearlyinthemorning,unclePaulwokeusuptohavebreakfast.Thedaystartsatdawnonmyranchhesaid.Afterbreakfast,IwenttohelpauntTinafeedthechickens,whilemydadwentwithunclePaultotakethesheepouttograze.IwasimpressedtoseemydadandunclePaulridinghorses,theylookedreallycool.第26页Intheafternoon,IaskedunclePaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.Iwasntgoingtotakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.So,mydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains.DontbelateforsupperunclePaulcriedandkeeptothetrailsothatyoudontgetlost.OKmydadcriedback.AfterawhilewecouldhardlyseeunclePaulandhisfarmhouse.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunblendedtocreateamajesticscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwovenblanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.原文地址：原文地址：http:/ kat第27页Suddenlyalittlecoyotejumpedoutinfrontofmyhorseandstartledhim.Hewassostartled,hetookoffrunningfasterthanIimaginedhecould.IwasholdingonashardasIcouldandmydadwastryingtokeepupwithme.Myhorsegotoffthetrailandkeptrunning,andonlystoppedonceitreachedtheriver.Itseemsthewatermusthavecalmedhimdownabit.ItwasabeautifulspotandasfrightenedasIwasjustafewminutesearlier,IwashappythatIgotachancetoseesuchaplace.Mydadthoughtitwasgorgeoustoo,buthesaidthatwehadtoleavebecausethesunwassettingandhedidnotwantustogetlost.Wehadleftthetrailandwedidnothaveacompass.Thelastthingwewantedwastotrytofindourwayhomeinthedark.Weturnedaroundtostartbackbutthetrailwasnowhereinsight.Thefrightenedhorsehadrunsofastandsofarthatwehadnoideawherewewere.Bynowthesunhadalmostdippedbehindthehorizonandwehadtothinkfast,sowetriedtofindourfootprintsinthedustysand.Butaswelookedwegotevenmorelostandthenitgrewdark.Mydadhadagreatideatofollowthestarsbacktotheranch.Irememberedthatthebigdipperwasrightabovemyunclesranch.第28页第29页Wemadesurethatourhorseswerecalmbeforewesetoffonthelongjourneyhome.Withdoubtfulthoughtsgoingthroughmyhead,Ihopedthatwewouldntseehungrycoyotes.Weheadedtowardahighrocktoseewherethebigdipperwasinthesky.“IseeitDad,Iseeit,”Isaidexcitedly.Myhorsegavealittlesnortandaswesetofftofindourwaybackhome.Wegallopedalongthedirt.“Honey,stop,”mydadsaidwithashakyvoice.IstoppedwithastonishmentbecauseIhaveneverseenmydadsofrightenedinmyentirelife.“Ithinkthatsanothercoyote.Itsaboutdinnertimeforthem.“GO.RUN,”mydadshouted!Wegallopedlikethewind.Atlastwewereattheranch.Ihuggedmyuncleastightasamamabearhugginghercubs.IsnuggledtheirdogBaxterandkissedmydadgoodnight.AsIgotintomypajamas,Iwasrelievedtobesafeinmybed.IyawnedasmyeyesslowlyclosedandIdriftedofftosleep.n.喷鼻息紧抱；偎依第30页