高中英语Module6OldandNewSectionⅤWriting描述今昔对比的电子邮件教学案外研版.doc

专题课件Module 6 Old and New Section Writing-描述今昔对比的电子邮件描写今昔对比时要根据过去的情况和现在的事实组织材料。一、基本结构1开头提出主题句(提出什么事情发生了变化)；2对过去情况的描述(用过去时态，主要是一般过去时)；3对现在情况的描述(用现在时态，主要是一般现在时)；4总结句。 二、增分佳句1描述以前的情况：It was .several years ago. When I was .years old, it was . 2描述现在的情况：It changes . It becomes . Compared with it several years before, it is now . 3表达希望：I believe that . I hope that . 题目要求假设你是某中学的学生李华，最近收到美国朋友Joy的电子邮件。他在三年前参观过你校，听说你校现在变化很大，希望了解发生了哪些具体的变化。请你根据下表提示，给他回一封电子邮件。三年前一座教学楼，一个操场，学生1 000多人现在1.校园扩建：新建了一座教学楼和一座图书馆，教学楼内有音乐室、美术室、微机房等；2.学生人数：增加到了2 000多人；3.体育设施与音乐器材配备齐全；4.绿化了校园。注意：1.词数100左右；2可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3开头和结尾已给出，但不计入总词数。参考词汇：体育设施sports facilities装备equipDear Joy，I was pleased to hear from you and Im writing to tell you something about the changes in my school._Yours，Li Hua第一步：审题构思很关键一、审题 1确定体裁：本文为描述今昔变化的说明文；2确定人称：本文的主要人称为第一、三人称；3确定时态：主体时态通常为一般过去时和一般现在时。二、构思第一段：开头提出学校发生了变化。第二段：详细描述今昔对比。第三段：表达自己的祝愿。第二步：核心词汇想周全1change变化 2take_place发生 3no_longer不再 4in_use在使用 5library图书馆 6all_kinds_of各种各样的 7magazine杂志 8be_equipped_with装备有9facility设备 10musical_instrument乐器 第三步：由词扩句雏形现1众所周知，在我们学校已经发生了巨大变化。(主谓结构；现在完成时)We_all_know_that_great_changes_have_taken_place_in_my_school.2它现在不再是三年前的样子了。(主系表结构；what引导表语从句)It_is_no_longer_what_it_used_to_be_three_years_ago.3那时候仅有一个教学楼和一个操场。(there be句型)There_was_only_one_teaching_building_and_a_playground_at_that_time.4其中之一是一座新教学楼。(主系表结构)One_of_them_is_a_new_classroom_building.5在这座新教学楼中，有音乐教室、美术教室和计算机教室。(there be句型)There_are_rooms_for_music,_art_and_computer_teaching_in_the_new_classroom_building.6另一个是图书馆，里面有各种各样的图书、报纸和杂志。(where引导的非限制性定语从句)The_other_is_the_library,_where_there_are_all_kinds_of_books,_newspapers_and_magazines.7除此之外，我的学校体育设备和乐器配备齐全。(被动语态；be equipped with)Besides,_my_school_is_well_equipped_with_sports_facilities_and_musical_instruments.8我认为我的学校会变得越来越好，我希望你再次访问我的学校。(宾语从句；并列句)I_believe_my_school_will_become_better_and_better,_and_I_hope_you_will_visit_my_school_again.第四步：句式升级造亮点1用as引导非限制性定语从句改写句1As_is_known,_great_changes_have_taken_place_in_my_school.2用when引导的非限制性定语从句把句2和句3合并It is no longer what it used to be three years ago, when there was only one teaching building and a playground.3用“in which”引导的定语从句把句4和句5合并One_of_them_is_a_new_classroom_building,_in_which_there_are_rooms_for_music,_art_and_computer_teaching.第五步：过渡衔接联成篇Dear Joy，I was pleased to hear from you and Im writing to tell you something about the changes in my school. As_is_known,_great_changes_have_taken_place_in_my_school._It_is_no_longer_what_it_used_to_be_three_years_ago,_when_there_was_only_one_teaching_building_and_a_playground._Now_two_new_buildings_have_been_built_and_are_in_use._One_of_them_is_a_new_classroom_building,_in_which_there_are_rooms_for_music,_art_and_computer_teaching._The_other_is_the_library,_where_there_are_all_kinds_of_books,_newspapers_and_magazines._Besides,_my_school_is_well_equipped_with_sports_facilities_and_musical_instruments._The_number_of_students_has_also_grown_from_1,000_to_2,000._Whats_more,_we_have_planted_a_lot_of_trees_and_flowers_in_and_around_the_school.I_believe_my_school_will_become_better_and_better,_and_I_hope_you_will_visit_my_school_again._Yours，Li Hua