绍兴市高三英语英语高考复习研讨会课件：作文讲评 课件.ppt

单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,书面表达,按照以下要点写一篇英语短文,1,、独立完成：自行安排、自己解决问题。,2,、合作完成：一起讨论、互相学习。,3,、我喜欢的方式及理由。,注意：词数：,100-120,审题,There are basically two ways to get work done.One is to work individually.In this way,people can decide for themselves,and how to do it.,Whats more,they will be able to learn how to solve problems,on,their own.,(33 words),自行安排、自己解决问题,加工、添加信息,范文分析,People may also choose to work in a team,where they can learn from each other and help each other.Besides,they may work out better ways to get work done by discussion.,(33 words),一起讨论、互相学习,可以考虑调整信息,Personally,I prefer to work in a tea,which offers me a chance to learn how to get along with others and to share my experiences with them.As the work can be divided among several people,it can be done efficiently.Teamwork is always important.,(46 words),开放的思维；巧妙的因果关系表述,有跟没一样吗？,Individuals together make a difference.,（林静）,Working together,individuals make a difference.(,王丽芬,),Working in a team can improve my social skills,very much,.,（陈敏）,We can be more sociable.,（封雅虹）,Exchanging ideas inspires members to come up with new and better approaches to solving the problem.,（余雪芳）,When discussing with others,we,cant help wasting,time by,saying,something unnecessary,which may lead to the failure in finishing the work in time.,（陈荣高）,好句赏析,一句话表述一个核心意思,In my opinion,working in a team is the better of the two.As we know,human beings are social animals.We are connected to others whatever we do.Also,working with other people,can gain experience,.Whats more,they,may also pick out our mistakes so that we can get them corrected in time.You see,we live together,and we shall work together.,好段赏析,1,有什么问题,?,指代清楚吗,?,In my opinion,I prefer the second one.With the help of our workmates,we can solve most of the problems that cant be solved ourselves.Besides,working in a team can improve the friendship among every members in the team.The most important is that it makes me know how to share my ideas with each other.,好段赏析,2,Working in a team,you can do the things together with your friends.You can discuss the questions together.Everyone makes a difference.Everything will be easier.And during the time,you can learn good things from each other.Whats more,it can make your friendship better.Youll be happy.The life will be more wonderful.,1,、句子之间结构松散,层次不够明确,问题分析,2,、句子缺乏变化,Working out questions and planning something by yourself are called working individually.Discussing together and learning from each other are called working in a team.,（修改）,Working out questions and planning something by yourself are called working individually.Working in a team is,another,way of working,which means,discussing together and learning from each other.,3,、句子拖沓,As we know,we are all a part of our class or company,when we work in a team,we may make the class or the company better,and,we will get more ways to get our work done so that we can choose the best way to get our work done.,（修改）,As we know,we are all a part of our class or company,and,when we work in a team,we may make the class or the company better,.,Also,we will get more ways to get our work done so that we can choose the best way to get our work done.,一句话表述一个核心意思,In my opinion,I like working in a team better.Not only because,it,can,succeed,more easily and help develop our skills but also can,Though thinking independently can develop our ability of thinking better,I think that team work is more useful and important today.Because it is a world with fast pace nowadays,collecting information and sharing information with your fellow really increase your working rate and make sure that your work is more possible to be perfect.,4,、逻辑错误,(,主谓；句子之间,),清楚的逻辑关系才能准确表达思想,As a result of not being able to concentrate my mind when being surrounded by others,working in a team is not so reasonable for me.,But working in team is also a good way,it can help you learn from each other.Discussing with your team member is also very helpful.,As a member of a class or a company or the society,you are not alone,you dont have the ability to overcome every difficult facing you.,?,?,The other is working in a team,however,its quite different from the first one.(,修改,),The other is working in a team,which,is quite different from the first one.,One is working individually,the other is working in a team.(,修改,),One is working individually,and,the other is working in a team.,连（接）词误用或缺连词,5,、其他问题,?,?,Every,student,will go to the society,and working in a team can improve,your,ability of communicating with others.Whats more,you may feel happier with many friends around you.,Comparing the two way,Id prefer the second.In my opinion,firstly,In my opinion,though sometimes I prefer to work alone,I think working in a team is the better way.,人称混乱,话语重复,?,?,We cant plan everything very well without other peoples help.,The more people your team has,the more ideas you will have.,Though,they,are opposite opinions on finishing working,they,have different characteristics and different advantages.,观点太过绝对,指代不明确,课堂小结,语言能力,和,思维能力,同步发展。,用对、用好词；写好句。,逻辑思维,(,避免前言不答后语,),创新思维。（,think differently and reasonably,）,