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单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,Miss Chen,Xiangyang Experimental Middle School,How to write a good,article？,on writing strategies,Warming-up,What,is a,good article?,襄阳是一座闻名遐迩的历史古城，几千年来积淀绽放出一朵朵绚丽的奇葩。美丽襄阳之行即将启程，市旅游局正在招募一批志愿者担当导游，向国内外友人介绍襄阳的历史文化及巨大变化。请根据提示写了一篇导游讲解说词。,1,、襄阳是一座古城，历史文化灿烂悠久。,2,襄阳风景秀丽，有众多旅游胜地（如古隆中，鹿门寺）和特色小吃，吸引着大量的中外游客前来观光、品尝。,3,、近几年来襄阳发生了翻天覆地的变化，焕然一新的城市面貌令襄阳人民无比骄傲自豪,。,Hello，everyone.I,m your tour guide.Welcome to Xiangyang!,It is a wonderful place to take a visit.First all of,it is an ancient city with a long history and colorful culture.For instance,you can find many old buildings where some famous people in history used to live.Besides,it has many fascinating sights,including Gu Longzhong and Lumen Temple.What,s more,it is also an excellent place to try local specials,such as beef noodles and Datou,cai,.Because of these,it attracts thousands of tourists both at home and abroad to come here every year.,Another,great thing about Xiangyang is that great changes have taken place in recent years.Now it is much greener and,more,beautiful than it used to be.And the new look makes people here very proud of it.,Finally,I hope you can have a great trip!,A good article has:,Good Content,Good,Details,Good,Language,Presentation,Step 1,：,Read and,get clear of the requirements.,亲爱的同学，你将初中毕业了。在这三年的学习生活中，你一定结交了许多的好朋友，请用英语写一篇短文，介绍你的一位好朋友,Li Lei.,要点提示：,1.,他乐于助人，性格外向，兴趣广泛,2.,他成绩优秀，经常在学习上帮助我,3.,我准备送他一个,以表示感谢,4.,我对他的祝福和希望,要求：,1.,词数,90,词左右,2.,短文需包括所有要点，但不要逐条翻译，可适当增加细节，使其连贯，通顺，文中不得出现真实的人名，学校等相关信息。,We are graduating from school soon.,I miss so manygood friends,especially,my best friend-Li Lei,.,Li Lei is a top student.He is outgoing and hard-working.,He has a lot of interests and is always ready to help,o,thers.,We get on well with each other so we often,discuss our study,together and he can always find out,new ways to help me,work out problems.Im so prou,d,of him.,I care so much about him that,I,want to do something,meaningful for him.Before leaving school,I,ll send him,a,card that,I,make myself with my best wishes.,I hope he will have a bright future and that ou,r,friendship,will last forever.,Presentation,Step 2,：,Give details to support your main idea,.,Choose suitable details,The,details must,agree with,the topic sentence,.,Dear,mother,Im very lucky to,have a mother like you,.,In recent years,you have done so much for me.,.,You are always too busy with your work.,I think you are too tired.,3.You get angry with me sometimes when I cause trouble at school.,4.In my daily life,you always try your best to look after my health as well as possible.,5.You worry so much about my study that you make me stressed out.,6.You never allow me to go to school,without breakfast.,7.You often teach me the importance of working hard.,8.When I fail to get good grades,you dont get angry with me.,9.You often encourage me to regard problems in my life as challenges.,Dear,mother,Im very lucky to,have a mother like you,.,In recent years,you have done so much for me.,.,Improve the details,2.,You always try your best to take care of me.,You are always too busy with your work.,1.You are always patient with me.,2.You dont get angry with me when I cause trouble at school.,3.You help and encourage me to become a better person.,Although,you are,very,busy with your work,you always try your best to take care of me.,You are always patient with me.,For example,you dont get angry with me when I cause trouble at school.,Instead,you help and encourage me to become a better person.,Use proper linking words.,英语写作时常用的过渡语,:,表并列：,and,besides,in addition,what,s more,表转折：,but,yet,however,on the contrary,表因果关系,：,because,so,therefore,as a result,表先后顺序,：,First,Second,Third,Next,Then,Finally,表时间关系,：,when,while,after,before,then,表列举说明,：,for example,for instance,such as,发表观点,：,in my opinion,to my understanding,from my point of view,表总结陈词,：,in general,in all,in a word,generally speaking,Harbin is a good place to spend my winter vacation._,it is one of the liveliest cities in China.,it is very cold,there is much to do._,you can make snowmen,go skating,and,enjoy the Ice Lantern.Whats more,the food there is very delicious,especially snacks._,its a place where people are very friendly.,Besides that,Although,For example,First of all,Choose,the,linking words.,（连接词）,Try to use some,linking words,properly.,They can make your ideas more logical,(,逻辑性）,summary,Read the requirements carefully and decide what to write.,2.Choose the suitable details.,3.Learn to use linking words.初中阶段你印象深的是哪位老师？请用英语写一篇题为,“,The Teacher I Never Forget,”,的作文。,内容包括：,1.,简要介绍老师的性格或特长,2.,列举一个事例，说明老师是如何在学习上帮助或鼓励你取得进步的,3.,感谢老师，祝愿老师,作文要求：,1.,不得出现学校真实的名称，老师的姓名一律用,Mr.Zhang,或,Mrs.Zhang.,2.,词数,90,左右，,Write,Discussion,What trouble do you have in study at that time?,2.How did you feel then?,3.What did your teacher say or do to help you?,4.What was the result?How did you feel after that?,Exchange and improve with each other.,组内互评,作者,评价者,项目,标准,分值,得分,失分,原因,完整性（,5,）,有开头和结尾，包含所有要点,A,（,5-4,）,B,（,4-3,）,C,（,3-2,）,D(2-1),流利性,（,5,）,运用多种句式正确运用连接词,A,（,5-4,）,B,（,4-3,）,C,（,3-2,）,D(2-1),正确性,（,4,）,拼写正确，时态、人称、用词、句式等语法正确,A,（,4,）,B,（,3,）,C,（,2,）,D (1),规范性,（,1,分）,书写规范，书面整洁,A.1,B.0.5,总分,建议,Read and enjoy the examples,范文欣赏,The Teacher I Never Forget,How time flies!Three years has passed since I became a middle school student.I had very good memories of my classmates and teachers.,The teacher Ill never forget is Mr.Zhang,an English teacher,.,He is very kind and friendly.He helped us not only in class but also after class.,sample,About two years ago,Mr.Zhang,noticed,that I was,worried about,my poor pronunciation.,So,he,offered,me many suggestions to improve it,and he,also,gave me every possible,chance,to speak in class.,With his help,my pronunciation has greatly,improved.,Rome is not built in one day!,We should practice more.,