英语提升与雅思写作.pptx

单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,2015/11/19,#,英语提升计划与雅思写作,唐伟胜 博士 教授,微博：,iamtws,唐老雅英语,什么是英语提升？为什么要提升？,别跟我提,CET-4,，,CET-6,600,分又如何？,也别跟我提,TEM-4,，,TEM-8,，,80,分又如何？,考试英语困惑了我们，也戕害了我们，一代又一代走不出牢笼,祸国殃民论,什么是英语提升？为什么要提升？,祸国殃民自然是语不惊人誓不休，但是,对,80%,学生而言，让他们学习英语的确是在谋财害命！而他们学习英语，是在慢性自杀！,什么是英语提升？为什么要提升？,But,why?,因为，你没有提升你的英语！没有提升的英语学了没用！,你学的英语：,只会考试，刷分！,只会见面问声好，临别说再见，,迷失时问路，讲演时自我介绍,外国人都学会汉语了，这些英语没有用武之地了！,什么是英语提升？为什么要提升？,你以为英语是这样学的,背四六级单词,学习蒙答案的技巧,看四六级阅读，做选择题,背作文模板,看外国电视，学几句骂人的口语,哪些人需要英语提升？,华南农业大学这样的名校学子,志在四方的学子,希望,international,exposure,的学子,喜欢英美文化的学子,希望自己的后代成为以上人才的学子,什么是英语提升？为什么要提升？,什么是英语提升？为什么要提升？,究竟要提升到什么境界？,较高境界,能与,English native speakers,自由交流，几乎没有障碍,能读英文报刊，迅速捕捉文章的,gist,能相当容易地听懂英语新闻，看懂英文原版电影，不用,subtitles,能用相当,decent,的书面英文通顺逻辑地表达自己的观点,更高境界,能很好地欣赏英文脱口秀节目（,Jimmy Fallon;Seth Meyers;Ellen),能做双语同传（,interpreting),能用英语进行辩论,(debating),能用英语写,SCI,论文,如何提升英语？,以读促写,阅读几本经典英文小说（,Pride and Prejudice,;,Persuasion;Tess of the Dbervilles,;,Farewell to Arms,),长期阅读英文报纸,(,BBC,;,Washingtonpost,;,The Guardian,;,The Economist,;,National Geographic,;,the New Yorker;the 21,st,Century,),长期阅读本专业英文文献,(,本专业期刊、著作）,以听练说,BBC;VOA;NBC;CCTV,Sitcoms:Friends;Two and a Half Men;The Big Bang Theory,Movies:Roman,Holiday;,Forrest,Gump;,Saving,Private,Ryan,如何提升英语？,特别推荐,/,听力,普特英语听力：,雅思高分策略,雅思（,IELTS,）体现了英语提升精神,听：,既有信息类一般材料，也有讲座性学术材料,说：,与老外面对面交流，考验你用英语交流的综合能力,读：,来自外刊、有一定难度的语言材料,写：,既要求描写信息，也要求写议论文,雅思高分策略,雅思基本情况,雅思是剑桥大学开发的全球性考试,希望到英联邦国家留学、移民的外国人均需要参加雅思考试,各个学校雅思分数要求有一定差异，好学校均要求总分,6.5,，单科不低于,6,分。剑桥大学需要总分,7.5,，单科不低于,7,分,2014,年，中国雅思考生达到,59,万人次,很多大学已经开始“雅思计划”并出台相关政策,雅思高分策略,如何取得理想成绩？,到培训机构学蒙答案、押题（,whats the use?),自己苦背雅思词汇、做各种真题和模拟题（,bitter,lonely,not efficient),提升英语水平，到靠谱的培训机构学习考试技巧（,highly recommended),雅思大作文的三种题型,Argumentation:,给出两个对立的观点，要求对其进行分析，然后给出自己的观点。,After high school,some people go to college to prepare themselves for future career,while others go to job market to increase their work experience.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.,雅思大作文的三种题型,Discussion,给出一个观点，要求分析这个观点是否合理,/,利弊，并提出自己的观点。,In many parts of the world there is continuous coverage of sport on television.Some people believe this discourages the young from taking part in any sport themselves.Discuss this view and give your own opinion,.,雅思大作文的三种题型,Report,给出一个现象,/,问题，要求分析这个现象,/,问题产生的原因及其后果，并提出解决办法。,Major cities grow into the surrounding countryside,as a result,young people from the country are now living in the city.What problems are caused due to the cities continued growth?What are the reasons and what solutions can you suggest?,雅思作文的评分标准解读,1.Task response,（论点,+,论据）,2.Coherence and Cohesion,（连贯）,3.Lexical Resource,（词汇）,4.Grammatical Range and Accuracy,（,句子）,雅思作文的评分标准解读,雾里看花型：能围绕题目写点别人模模糊糊能看懂的东西,=4,分,Without a healthy body,other factors are neednt to consider.,Because it is impossible to every citizens have right to deprive others in this civil society.,In conclusion,depends on different situation,laws can be introduce to ban join in some machine work.,雅思作文的评分标准解读,半梦半醒型：勉强能看懂，有些正确的句子，有些正确的单词，词能达意,=5,分,Today,as the world population keeps boosting,unemployment is a severe and hard solving problem.,In my perspective,whether they should be arrested really depends on how serious the law that they broke are.,Instead,he can be educated in the police office and pay a fine,to warn him not do it anymore.,雅思作文的评分标准解读,凑合着过型：有点想法，有点逻辑多数能看懂，有点复杂句，有几个好词,=6,分,We can draw a conclusion that the students may adapt to the society earlier if they go to work immediately.However,they are not skillful enough.It is a better choice to study in depth.,Therefore,although there are advantages for students to go to work,they had better study before working,unless they are going to study art subjects in the future.,雅思作文的评分标准解读,明明白白我的心型：有些想法，有些清晰，有些好词，有些好句子，有些错误,=7,分,In recent years,whether the students who graduate from high school should go to college or go to job market becomes a heated topic among people.It is believed by some that college helps them prepare for future career while others think job market can increase their work experience.,Basically,law-breakers are sent to jail with the purpose of preventing them from being against the law and protecting interest of other citizens,.,雅思作文的评分标准解读,我的心思你最懂型：有思想，清晰，不少好词，不少好句子，错误很少,=8分,Undoubtedly,those who do not obey the laws should be put into prison so that they would no longer be able to harm other citizens.Once being put into jail,the law-breakers are almost isolated from the outside world and they would be watched all day long.In addition,since there are few things to do in the prison,the criminals can reflect what they have done wrong,change their attitude towards life or the society and think about how they can help to offset the impact of their mistake in order to be forgiven.,雅思作文的评分标准解读,6,、,7,、,8,分段作文比较,6,分：思想基本清楚，语言基本准确、通顺、无大错,7,分：思想比较清楚，语言比较准确、通顺、丰富,8,分：思想相当清楚，语言相当准确、灵活,9,分：思想非常清楚，语言非常准确、地道,从,6,分段到,7,分段,，要注意句式的丰富性（用点从句，用点,if,since,though,引导的句子）,从,7,分段到,8,分段,，要注意思维逻辑的顺畅，语言表达的灵活性（句式多样，分词短语，介词短语，抽象名词主语）,从,8,分段到,9,分段,，要注意思维的深刻性，语言表达的地道性。（带有一定哲理性，读起来是真正的英语）,高分作文分析,You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.,Write about the following topic:,Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world.,Do you think this is a positive or negative development,?,Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.,Write at least 250 words.,高分作文分析,-,节奏,5,个段落,290 words,Para.1:2 sentences,43 words,14%,Para.2:3 sentences,96 words,32%,Para.3:3 sentences,66 words,22%,Para.4:2 sentences,59 words,20%,Para.5:1 sentence,36 words,12%,11,sentences in all,27.3,words/sentence;,53,words in the longest sentence;,8,words in the shortest.,首位段,1/3;,中间段,2/3,。,高分作文分析,-,节奏,28 words 15 words(Para.1),15 words,-53 words 28 words(Para.2),23 words,35 words 8 words(Para.3),24 words,35 words(Para.4),36 words(Para.5),长短句配合，把握节奏感,段落首句用短句，论证句用长句，段落结论句（若有）用短句。,高分作文分析,-,用词,I strongly believe that this modern development is largely,detrimental,to culture and traditions worldwide.,(Para.1),A countrys history,language and ethos are all,inextricably,bound up in its manufactured artifacts.(Para.2),This,eventually,puts old-school craftspeople out of work.(Para.3),To see the same products in shops the world over is boring,and does not,impel,visitors to open their wallets in the same way that,trinkets,or,souvenirs,unique to the particular area do.(Para.4),高分作文分析,-,句型,The spread of multinational products can often bring,in its wake,a loss of jobs,as people turn to buying the new brand,perhaps thinking,it more glamorous than the one they are used to.,（,8-9,分）,比较：,The spread of multinational products can often make people lose their job,because people will buy the new brand,for they think it is,more fashionable than the local brand.,（,7,分）,再比较：,More and more multinational products can often let people without job,because people will buy the new brand,they think the new brand is better than the old brand.(5-6,分）,高分作文分析,-,句型,Some may argue that all people,are entitled to have access to,the same products,but I say that local objects suit local conditions best,and,that faceless uniformity worldwide is an unwelcome and dreary prospect,.,（,8-9,）,比较：,Some people may say/claim that all people should be allowed to use the same products,but I say that local objects are better,and that it is not a very good picture to see the world has the same face.(6-7),再比较：,Some people may say that we all should use the same products,but I think the local things are better,I dont like to see the world has the same face.(5),高分作文分析,-,句型,To see the same products in shops the world over,is boring,and does not impel visitors to open their wallets,in the same way,that trinkets or souvenirs unique to the particular area do.(,8-,9,分）,比较：,It is boring if we see the same products in shops everywhere in the world,and we will not buy them,but when we see the local products,we may open our wallets.(6,分）,再比较：,It is boring to see the same products everywhere in the world,you wont buy them,but when we see the local things,we may buy it.(5,分）,高分作文分析,-,句型,the number of cars that are,exported,from,another country,should decrease and the prices of car should increase in case,they are overcrowded,.(5),比较：,the number of cars imported from other countries should be controlled while the price of cars should be increased to prevent people from buying them.(6),再比较：,while the importation of foreign cars should be discouraged,the price of the domestic cars should be increased to upset the potential buyers.(8),高分作文分析,-,句型,If they used the bus and train instead of their car,the problem would resolve a little.(5),比较：,If they choose to travel with the bus and the train instead of their car,the traffic problem will become less severe.(6),再比较：,If the public,means of transportation,such as the bus and the train,rather than,their own car,become their,primary choice,the traffic problem will be,effectively alleviated,.(8),高分作文分析,-,思维发展,共,5,段。第一段点题，并提出自己观点：国家趋同现象不好；第二到四段分别从三个方面论述自己观点（第二段认为，国家趋同会丧失多元性和丰富性；第三段认为产品的国际化可能让本地工人失业；第三段认为，产品趋同会降低游客购买当地纪念品的欲望，从而影响旅游业），第五段重述自己的观点。因此，从文章结构上讲，本范文非常完整。老雅认为，唯一不足的是，作者显然没有考虑第,2-4,段中三个理由之间的逻辑先后顺序。其实，应该先从,employment,谈起，再谈,tourism,，最后谈,cultural diversity and richness,，这个顺序由浅入深，更为符合逻辑发展基本顺序。,雅思作文,-,从,7,分到,8,分,You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.Write about the following topic:,Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.,Write at least 250 words.,Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like.Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future,such as those related to science and technology.,Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.,原文的问题分析,结构不合理，引入话题太长（,170/414,，,41%,）,句型死板,(21 sentences,414 words),it is likely that they have come to a paradise of knowledge as well as freedom.,it is their turn to choose what they would like to study.,it is more likely for us to insist on it and make a great achievement in the future.,it can be really difficult for him to come to the peak of his career.,it is better for us to learn what we are really interested in,原文的问题分析,句式控制不严密，不灵活,：,用了,when,if,it is,which;,但没看见分词短语，没看到抽象名词做主语；没看到比较句型。,用词不考究，鲜能给考官留下深刻印象,用了,relieve,restrict,distinguish,这个级别的词汇，没有看见生动的比喻或者修辞性词汇。,结尾延伸得太厉害，引入了新话题。,对原文的评价,能围绕话题展开论述,语言表达清楚，有较好的用英语句子和词汇来表达自己的思想,结构不尽合理,语言不够灵活多变,表达和思维不够简练，比较拖沓,表达地道程度不够,创造性使用语言的能力不够,Band:7,When students are relieved from the heavy burden of endless homework in senior high schools and get enrolled in universities,it is likely that they have come to a paradise of knowledge as well as freedom.All in all,it is their turn to choose what they would like to study.,唐老雅修改：,Relieved from the overloaded burden of homework,in senior high school,many students go into college,only to find,that they,have plunged into the sea of knowledge,and without anybody telling them,where to swim,.,However,some people may start to worry about university students free choiceshow could they choose what they should study in the next four years at such a young age?How could they know which subject is useful and which is useless?What if they study some totally meaningless subjects and idle their valuable time away?,唐老雅修改,：,Some people are,filled with misgivings,about university students free choices:,how could they possibly tell,at such a young age,which subject is more useful than others and choose it as their focus of study in the next four years which are probably the most valuable time in their entire life?,From my perspective,these people seem to be too considerate to have a long-term programme for young students development.In my opinion,choosing subjects by themselves can be more helpful for individual students as well as the whole society.That is to say,parents,university and society should encourage students to study what they like,instead of restricting them to certain practical subjects.,唐老雅修改,：,In my view,however,such considerations seem rather,superfluous,for choosing a subject by students themselves is beneficial both to the students and the whole society,as well,.,Firstly,interest is the best teacher in our life.When we have passion on what we are doing,it is more likely for us to insist on it and make a great achievement in the future.,唐老雅修改,Firstly,as the saying aptly expresses,“interest is the best teacher”,which means,only when we have passion for something can we do it better,.,For example,a good teacher must love his students and keep his students interest in mind;a professional doctor needs to be humane and sympathetic towards his patients;a top pianist should be crazy about his composition,to name just few.On the contrary,if a person is not fascinated about what he is studying,it can be really difficult for him to come to the peak of his career.,唐老雅修改,A good teacher must love teaching and keep the students interest in mind,and a physician must love life-saving,before,he can be humane and sympathetic towards his patients,while a pianist should be crazy about playing and,then,become a top-notch artist.Contrarily,a person not fascinated by what he is doing,is much less likely to get anywhere in his career.Secondly,the differences between usefulness and uselessness are hard to distinguish,to some extend.,唐老雅修改,Secondly,the,boundary,between“useful”and“useless”subjects,is not that clear-cut,as some people might have expected.,Science and technology are certainly of great importance in the development of our society,but other subjects relating to philosophy and literature can also be priceless,which may not make a large profit directly,but may update our culture from a long perspective.So we cannot just simply say which subject is useful and which is useless.As long as we put our heart into what we are studying,we can make it useful.,唐老雅修改：,Undoubtedly,science and technology is,of paramount importance,to the development of our world,but it does not follow,that other less practical subjects like philosophy and literature are useless.,While the increased knowledge about our body,for example,may help us live longer,a better understanding about history,culture and ourselves enabled by liberal arts may show us what kind of life is more valuable and therefore more worth living,.,All in all,as young university students,it is better for us to learn what we are really interested in as well as keep our responsibilities for this society in our mind.Moreover,when it comes to friendship,marriage,career and so on,we need also insist on this principle.,唐老雅修改：,To conclude,rather than restricting the students to certain“useful”subjects,parents and universities should encourage them to study whatever they like to,.,By doing so,the students will be able to learn those things,be it useful or not,that really interest them,and,this is helpful to the future career of the students,and to the contribution they can make to the world.,修改小结,结构更合理了（,116/358,，,30%,）,句子控制更严密了,414 words358 words,21,senten