高中英语写作训练.ppt

单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,A good medicine tastes bitter.,Easier said than done.,把,握英语写作评分标准提高英语写作的针对性,高考英语写作,训练,丁丽冰,教学目标：,1,、学生了解并掌握高考英语作文评分标准。,2,、学生能根据高考英语作文评分标准进行作文分析。,3,、学生能基本根据高考英语作文评分标准进行英语写作。,作文题目（,03,全国卷）假设你是李华，你的英国笔友,Bob,将于九月到你所在城市的建新华文学校学中文，来信请你在学校附近为他找一套住房。请根据图画提供的信息，写信介绍住房的情况，并告知住房面积为,25,平方米，月租,500,元。,Dear Bob:,Im very happy to receive your letter,and Im glad to hear that you will go to China to learn Chinese here.I have already found a fiat for you.It is on Fangcao Street,which is not far from Jianxin Chinese School.Bus No.11 can take you there,and it is one stop before the Chinese School.The flat is on the third floor with 3 rooms,one of which is bedroom,the other two are bathroom and kitchen.There are a bed,a sofa,a desk and some chairs in this 25 square-metres small fiat,and the rent is 500 yuan per month.Maybe this fiat is not as good as your wish,but Ill try my best to meet your needs.If it is not suitable enough,write to me and I will look for another better place.Hope you will come here soon!All the best!,Yours,Li Hua,满分理由：,本文格式正确，意思表述完整，作者在写作过程中注意长短句并用，使用了以,which,引导的非限定性定语从句等结构，从而使文章的语言富于变化。行文流畅自然，层次分明不愧为考场佳作。,Dear Bob,How are you these days?Im so glad to know that youll come to our city to learn Chinese.You asked me to find a place for you.Now Ive found one which I think is pretty good.The place is on Fang Cao Street which is near the No.11 bus stop.Its just one stop away from Jianxin Chinese School.There are three rooms,a kitchen,a bathroom and a bedroom.Though it is not very big,only 25 square metres,I think it is suitable.By the way,the rent is 500 yuan per month.I hope youll like it.If not,Ill try to find another place for you.,Yours,Li Hua,满分理由,本文内在逻辑性很强，由远及近,，,由外及内，层次分明,。,同时让步状语从句,等语言,运用得恰到好处，很出彩，再则结构完整，从开头的问候语到结尾都很完备。,满分,/,高分作文的共同点：,1,、审题准确,2,、要点齐全,3,、语言优美（语法结构和词汇）,4,、结构连贯（文章整体结构和行文逻辑）,5,、书写工整,高考英语作文评分标准,第一档（,1-6,分）,-,明显漏掉主要内容，写了一些无关内容，原因可能是未理解试题要求；,-,语法结构单调、词汇项目有限；较多语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解；,-,缺乏语句间的连接成分，内容不连贯性。信息未能清楚地传达给读者。,未完成了试题规定的任务。,0,分,未能清楚地传达给读者信息：内容太少，无法评判；无关内容或所写内容无法看清。,高考英语作文评分标准,第二档（,7-12,分）,-,漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容，写了一些无关内容；,-,语法结构单调、词汇项目有限；有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解；,-,较少使用语句间的连接成分，内容缺少连贯性。,-,信息未能清楚地传达给读者。,未恰当基本完成了试题规定的任务。,高考英语作文评分标准,第三档（,13-18,分）,基本完成了试题规定的任务。,-,虽漏掉一些内容，但覆盖所有主要内容；,-,应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求；,-,有一些语法结构和词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解；,-,应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯。,整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作目的。,高考英语作文评分标准,第四档（,19-24,分）,完全完成了试题规定的任务。,-,虽漏掉一两个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容；,-,应用的语法结构而和词汇能满足任务的要求；,-,语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试较复杂语法结构或高词汇所致；,-,应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。,达到了预期的写作目的。,第五档（,25-30,分）,完全完成了试题规定的任务。,-,覆盖所有内容要点，,-,应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，,-,语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用复杂结构或高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力，,-,有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑,完全达到了预期的写作目的。,高考英语作文评分标准,书面表达,(,满分,30,分),当前不少文学作品被改编成电影。有人选择看电影，有人则喜欢读原著。请你以“,Film or book,which do you prefer?”,为题，按照下列要点写一篇英语短文：,1,看电影：省时、有趣、易懂,2,读原著：细节更多、语言优美,3,我的看法及理由,注意：,1,词数,100-120,，文章题目和开头己给出,(,不计词数,),2,参考词汇：,original work,或,book in the original(,原著,),06,年浙江省高考英语作文,字迹潦草，抄阅读文章中的句子，不知所云,.,得分为,0,分,语言素质欠缺,;,基本功差,;,语句毛病多,;,大小写,;,标点符号,;,书写不清等等,;,得,6,分,.,我们自己的书写怎么样？,根据高考英语评分标准修改作文：,Some of us think that it is better to see films than to read the book in the original.,They have the following reasons.It takes little time to see the films than to read the book in the original.And it is interesting to see the films.People can understand it much easier than to read the book in the original.Some students think it good to read book in the original.The book in the original have many good sentences.Students can also enjoy more stories,attract many students.In my opinion,I think it is good to read the book in original.Original work tells us many stories and we can enjoy them.Read original work is good to your study.It can provide us much knowledge.Well be very happy to read the original work.,Nothing is impossible.,语言流畅,;,层次分明，表达基本准确，但,有少许语言错误,;,得,27,分,杭州第十四中学应届毕业生,沈书勤,英语总分,145,分,本篇作文得分,27,分,),Make still further progress!,阅卷教师喜欢什么样的作文,?,字迹工整,卷面整洁；,紧扣主题,条理清晰；,语言地道,过渡自然；,长度适中,.,一气呵成,黄会健,-,评卷学科组组长,阅卷教师讨厌什么样的作文,?,涂涂抹抹，斑斑点点；,层次不清，段落不分；,语句不通，杂乱无章；,书写潦草，卷面不洁；,书面表达训练题：,要点一,:,网络游戏在学生中很流行,Mike,经常课后去网吧玩游戏,.,1.Students like computer games very much.Mike often go to play computer game after class.,2.Computer games are very popular among the students,so does Mike.He often go to play computer game when he is free.,课 堂 小 结,评分标准对高分作文的要求：,1,、审题准确,2,、要点齐全,3,、语言优美,4,、文章连贯,5,、书写工整,保证,核心,前提,注重积累,注重训练,把握英语写作评分标准提高英语写作的针对性,高考英语写作训练系列：,一、高考英语写作的基本步骤：,二、把握高考英语评分标准 提高英语写作的针对性,三、高考英语写作的语言提升（夯实简单句、并列句）,四、高考英语写作的语言提升（简单句与各种从句和结构的转换）,五、高考英语写作的语言提升（连贯性训练）,六、综合训练（限时训练）,作业：,1,、完成下列作文,2,、高分作文分析,Byebye,