高考读后续写技巧点拨.ppt

seemydadandUnclePaulridinghorses.Theylookedreallycool.Intheafternoon,IaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.Iwasntgoingtotakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.So,mydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains.“Dontbelateforsupper,”UnclePaulcried,“andkeeptothetracksothatyoudontgetlost!”“OK!”mydadcriedback.AfterawhileUnclePaulandhisfarmhousewereoutofsight.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven(编织的)blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.Paragraph2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.答案答案写作提示根据续写第一段所给的段首句Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.可知,本段应该主要描写突然出现一只小兔子之后的故事。按照常理,突然出现的兔子一般会让马受惊。故本段应该描写马受惊后发生的事。从第二段的段首句Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.可以看出,作者和父亲迷路了。那么本段的故事主要根据迷路之后的情况展开。本段的主要内容应该是从迷路到回家的故事。写作时一定要注意以下两点:第一,从本故事的发展来看,第一段是马受惊后发生的事,而第二段是迷路之后的故事,因此要注意人物心理和情感的描写。第二,注意两段的逻辑关系。要注意第一段的内容,尤其是段尾的内容和第二段段首句之间的衔接要合理,即第一段的最后一定要有迷路的情节设计。Onepossibleversion:Paragraph1:Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.Thisunexpectedappearancefrightenedmyhorse,whichmadeitrunwildly.Itriedmybesttocontrolit,butinvain.FrightenedasIwas,Itriedtokeepmybalancetopreventmyselffromfallingoff.Fortunately,minuteslater,thehorsestoppedbeforeariver,outofbreath,andsodidI.Atthatmoment,mydadalsocameup.SeeingIwasOK,hewasquiterelieved.Butitwasclearthatwegotlost.Paragraph2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.Wedidntknowwherethefarmhousewas.Whatwecoulddowastogobackalongtheprevioustrackslowly.Butitwasreallydifficultforusinsuchadarksituation.Justaswewereatthepointofdesperation,weheardafaintvoicefromthedistance.“ItmustbeUnclePaul,”Isaid.Sowecriedbackwithexcitement.Finally,UnclePaulsafelybroughtusbackhome.Whatanamazingride!精彩语句精彩语句1.精美词汇invain白费力气previousadj.之前的atthepointofdesperation将要绝望之际afaintvoice微弱的声音2.出彩结构FrightenedasIwas,Itriedtokeepmybalancetopreventmyselffromfallingoff.(部分倒装)Whatwecoulddowastogobackalongtheprevioustrackslowly.(what引导主语从句)Writing2(2017浙江11月)阅读下面短文.根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。AVacationwithMyMotherIhadaninterestingchildhood.Itwasfilledwithsurprisesandamusements,allbecauseofmymother-loving,sweet,yetabsent-mindedandforgetful.OnestrangefamilytripwetookwhenIwaseleventellsalotabouther.MytwosetsofgrandparentslivedinColoradoandNorthDakota,andmyparentsdecidedtospendafewweeksdrivingtothosestatesandseeingallthesightsalongtheway.Asthefirstdayofourtripapproached,David,myeight-year-oldbrother,andIunwillinglysaidgood-byetoallofourfriends.Whoknewifwedeverseethemagain?Finally,themomentofourdeparturearrived,andweloadedsuitcases,books,games,campingequipment,andatentintothecarandbravelydroveoff.Webravelydroveoffagaintwohourslaterafterwedreturnedhometogetthepurseandtrav-elerschecksMomhadforgotten.DavidandIwerealwaysalittlenervouswhenusinggasstationbathroomsifMomwasdrivingwhileDadslept:“Youstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookout(放哨)whileIgo,andIllstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileyougo.”Ihadterriblepicturesinmymind:“Honey,wherearethekids?”“What?!Oh,GoshIthoughttheywerebeingawfullyquiet.”Wewereneveractuallyleftbehindinastrangecity,butwewerentabouttotakeanychances.Onthefourthorfifthnight,wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivinginvainforsometime,Momsuddenlygotagreatidea:Whydidntwefindahousewithalikely-lookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetuptentthere?DavidandIbecamenervous.Toourgreatrelief,Dadturneddowntheidea.Momnevercouldunderstandourobjections(反对).Ifastrangefamilyshoweduponherfrontdoorstep,Momwouldhavebeendelighted.Shethinkseveryoneintheworldisasniceassheis.Wefinallyfoundavacancyinthenexttown.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4.续写完成后.请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Paragraph2:Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.答案答案Paragraph1：Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwebroughtwithus.Wedecidedtocampalongtheriver.Theviewsthereweresurpassinglybeautifulthewarmsunshine,thefreshair,thecleanwater.Wesatonthegrass,enjoyingthesplendidnature.However,whenDadwasabouttoputupourtent,hewasdisappointedtofindthatithadbeenleftinthehotel.Well,Dadhadtogobacktofetchittocontinueourcamping.Paragraph2：Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofsightsalongtheway.Everytimewegottoanewplace,Momwouldcheeruplikeachild.Shewouldgetoffthecarexcitedly,laughinganddancingaround.Togetherweenjoyedthemodernsightsinthebigcities,thehistoricalbuildingsinthesmalltownsandtheamazingsceneryinnature.Whenwecamebacktothehotelafterthetiringbutexcellentvisit,Momwouldhugusandkissusonourfaces.Howsweetshewas!Absent-mindedandforgetfulasshewas,sheneverforgottoexpressherlovetous.Writing3(2017浙江6月)阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。Onabright,warmJulyafternoon,MacHollan,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhishometoAlaskawithhisfriends.Oneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepair,buttheyhadencouragedMactocarryon,andtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled(骑行)a-longalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersathome.Hehopedtoshowthemthisbeautifulplacesomeday.ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim.“Man,thatsabigdog!”hethought.Butwhenhelookedtotheside,hesawinstantlythatitwasntadogatall,butawolf,quicklycatchingupwithhim.Macsheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofbearspray.Withonehandonthebars,hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMacsrelief,itfellback,shak-ingitshead.Butaminutelater,itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMacsbike,tearingopenhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthechase(追赶).Macwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassingcarsbutwascarefulnottoslowdown.Hesawasteepuphillclimbbeforehim.Heknewthatoncehehitthehill,hedbeeasycaughtupandthewolfsteethwouldbetearingintohisflesh.Atthismoment,PaulandBeckyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska.Theydidntthinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistsrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad.Abitlater,theyspottedwhatthey,too,assumedwasadogrunningalongsideamanonabike.Astheygotcloser,theyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,justadozenyardsawaynow.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Paragraph2:Afewminuteslater,theothercyclistsarrived.答案答案Paragraph1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Macrusheddownfromhisbicycleandwavedatthepeo-pleinsidethecarforhelp.PaulandBeckyinsidethecargotoutimmediatelytohelphimclimbin-tothecar,inspiteofthedangerthatthefiercewolfwasrunningnear.TheyquicklypushedMacintotheircarandclosedallthedoorsashardaspossible,legstremblingandbreathless.Seeingthis,thewolfstillhowledoutsidethecarforsometimeandthenleftunwillingly.Paragraph2:Afewminuteslater,theothercyclistsarrived.Macsfriendswereshockedtohearthestoryandverygratefultotheyoungcouple.Macinvitedallofthembacktohishomefordinnerandhein-troducedhiswifeanddaughterstohistwonewfriendswhosavedhislife.Duringthedinnertheyrecalledtheadventureandtalkedaboutthewaystodealwithsuchdangeroussituations.Writing4(2016浙江10月)阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“Imgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,JaneheardahelicopterIsthatforme?Unfortu-nately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Paragraph2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.答案答案Paragraph1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Shehadtostayaloneintheforestforanothercoldnight.Janewassotiredanddisappointed,butshedidntloseheart.SheknewTommustbetryinghisbesttosearchforher.ShebelievedthatthehelicoptermusthavebeencalledbyTomandwassureitwouldcomebackagaintomorrow.Shefoundaplacenearthestreamandslept.Paragraph2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Shewalkedalongthestream,hopingtofindasuitableplacesothatthehelicoptercouldfindher.Shewassoluckythatbeforelongabigrockappeared,whichwashighabovethetrees.Theresheclimbedandwaitedwithheryellowblouseinhandfortheheli-coptertocomeagain.Tohergreatjoy,shedidntwaitlongbeforeshesawthehelicopterinthesky.Shewavedhardwiththeyellowblouseandthehelicopterquicklyfoundher.ShewasrightanditwasTomwhocalledthehelicopterandsavedher.Writing1(2018浙江宁波5月模拟)阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。Jennywastheonlychildinherfamily.Shehadaquarrelwithhermotherthatafternoonandsheranoutofthehouseangrily.Shecouldnthelpweepingsorrowfullywhenshethoughtofthescold-ingfromhermother.Havingwanderedaimlesslyinthestreetforhours,shefeltalittlehungryandwishedforsomethingtoeat.Shestoodbesideastandforawhile,watchingthemiddle-agedsellerbusydoinghisbusiness.However,withnomoneyinhand,shegaveasighandhadtoleave.Thesellerbehindthestandnoticedtheyounggirlandasked,“Hey,girl,youwanttohavethenoodles?”“Oh,yes,butIdonthavemoneyonme,”shereplied.“Thatsnothing.Illtreatyoutoday,”saidtheman.“Comein.”Thesellerbroughtherabowlofnoodles,thesmellsoattractive.Asshewaseating,Jennycriedsilently.“Whatisit?”askedthemankindly.三年模拟A A组组 2016201620182018年高考模拟年高考模拟基础题组基础题组“Nothing.ActuallyIwasjusttouchedbyyourkindness!”saidJennyasshewipedhertears.“Evenastrangeronthestreetwillgivemeabowlofnoodles,whilemymotherdrovemeoutofthehouse.Sheshowednocareforme.Sheissomercilesscomparedtoastranger!”Hearingthewords,thesellersmiled,“Girl,doyoureallythinkso?Ionlygaveyouabowlofnoodlesandyouthankedmealot.Butitisyourmotherwhohasraisedyousinceyouwereababy.Canyounumberthetimesshecookedforyou?Haveyouexpressedyourgratitudetoher?”Jennysatthere,speechlessandnumbwithshock;sherememberedhermothersfamiliarfaceandweatheredhands.“WhydidntIthinkofthat?Abowlofnoodlesfromastrangermademefeelindebted.WhyhaventIthankedmymumforwhatshehasdoneforme?”Onthewayhome,Jennymadeuphermindtomakeanapologytohermotherforherrudenessassoonasshearrivedhome.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:Approachingthedoorway,.Paragraph2:Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback.答案答案写作提示本文是一篇充满教育意义的故事。Jenny因和母亲争吵而负气离家,在街上得到陌生的面店老板赠予的面条而心生感激,在面店老板的提醒下,她终于认识到了母亲的伟大。原文最后一段提到Jenny决定回家向母亲道歉,那么后文的续写一定要围绕这一线索展开。续写第一段的提示句告诉我们这一段是Jenny到家门口后的情景,而又根据第二段的提示句“一个在她头发上的温柔的抚摸拉回了她的思绪”可知上一段最后一定要出现Jenny沉思的语境。充分利用这些信息并结合自己的想象应该可以构思出合理的结尾。本文原文的基调暗示整个故事是一个内容健康向上,具有很好的教育意义的故事。所以续写一定要延续这个主题。Onepossibleversion:Paragraph1:Approachingthedoorway,Jennytookadeepbreath.Tiredandsad,shesatdowninfrontofthehouse.“Wheremightmymotherbe?”shewondered.“Isshereallysoangrywithmethatshedoesntwanttoshowanycareforme?”Again,thesceneofthequarrelappearedinhermind.Sherememberedherrudenesstohermother,andshejustrealizedthatallthescoldingfromhermotherwasduetothefactthathermotherreallycaredalotabouther.Tearsrolleddownhercheeks.Paragraph2:Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback.Sheraisedherheadtoseethefamiliarfaceandtheworriedeyes.“Hereyoucome!Ivebeenlookingforyou,”camethetiredvoice.Jennycouldnthelpbutthrowherselfintohermothersarms.“Imsorryandthankyouforallyouhavedoneforme.”Sheexpressedthesincereapologyandthegreatgratitude.Thenshefeltthehugtightened.Writing2(2018浙江六校协作体)阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。ItwasChristmasDay.Robinwasworkingalonefixinganoldlanterninthebackroomwhenheheardtheringingofhisbellontheshopdoor.Thebell,whichproducedauniquelypleasantsound,hadbeeninRobinsfamilyforoverahundredyears.Hevalueditdearlyandenjoyedsharingitssongwithallwhocametohisshop.Althoughthebellwashungontheinsideofthemaindoor,Robinhadtiedawiretothescreendoorsothatitwouldringwhethertheinnerdoorwasopenornot.Hearingthebellring,heleftthebackroomtogreethiscustomer.“HowcanIhelpyou,littlelady?”Robinsvoicewasjoyful.“Hello,sir.Thelittlegirlspokealmostinawhisper.ShelookedatRobinwithherbigbrowneyes,andthenslowlyscannedtheroominsearchofsomethingspecial.Shylyshetoldhim,“Idliketobuyapresent,sir.”“Well,letssee,”Robinsaid.“whoisthispresentfor?”“Mygrandpa.Itsformygrandpa.ButIdontknowwhattoget.”Robinbegantomakesuggestions.“Howaboutapocketwatch?Itsingoodcondition.”Thelit-tlegirldidntanswer.Shewalkedtothedoorwayandputhersmallhandonthedoor.Sheshookthedoorgentlytoringthebell.Robinsfaceseemedtoglowashesawhersmilingwithexcite-ment.“Thisisjustright,”thelittlegirlsaid.“Mommasaysmygrandpalovesmusic.”Justthen,Robinsexpressionchanged.Fearfulofbreakingthelittlegirlsheart,hetoldher,“Imsorry,missy.Thatsnotforsale.Maybeyourgrandpawouldlikethislittleradio.”Thegirllookedattheradio,bowedherhead,andsadlysighed,“No,Idontthinkso.”Inanefforttohelpherunderstand,Robintoldherthatthebellhadbeenhisonlycompanion,fortherestofhisfamilywereallgonenow,exceptforhisestranged(疏远的)daughterwhomhehadnotseenfornearlyadecade.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:Withagianttearinhereye,thelittlegirllookedupathim.Paragraph2:LaterthateveningwhenRobinwasclosinguptheshop,heheardafamiliarring.答案答案写作提示文章原文主要介绍了门铃的特别以及它对Robin的意义,而由小女孩与Robin的对话可知小女孩看中的是Robin的门铃。续写的第一段的第一句话已经给出,从这句话可以看出当小女孩得知门铃不卖后很失望,再看下一段第一句,Robin又听到了熟悉的声音,显然Robin最后还是把门铃卖给小女孩了。因此第一段主要写Robin忍痛割爱,把门铃卖给小女孩的过程,而第二段应该是卖了门铃之后,小女孩为Robin做的事情。Onepossibleversion:Paragraph1:Withagianttearinhereye,thelittlegirllookedupathim.Shemanagedaforcedsmile,murmur-ing“Thankyou,anyway”andturnedtowardthedoorway.SuddenlyRobinthoughtofhises-trangeddaughter.Lookingattheleavinggirl,Robincalledout,“Howmuchhaveyougottospend,missy?”Hearingthat,thelittlegirlemptiedherpurseontothecountertwodollars.Afteraquickstruggleinhismind,Robinsaid,“TodayisChristmasDayandthisisyourluckyday.Thebellcostsexactlytwodollars.”Holdingthespecialbellclosetoherchest,thegirldancedout.Paragraph2:LaterthateveningwhenRobinwasclosinguptheshop,heheardafamiliarring.Hecouldntbe-lievehisears!Thereinthedoorwaystoodthelittlegirl,ringingthebellandsmilingsweetly.Puz-zled,Robinwentu