浙江新高考之读后续写continuation-writing名师优质课获奖市赛课一等奖课件.ppt

单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,本幻灯片资料仅供参考，不能作为科学依据，如有不当之处，请参考专业资料。,单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,本幻灯片资料仅供参考，不能作为科学依据，如有不当之处，请参考专业资料。,单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,本幻灯片资料仅供参考，不能作为科学依据，如有不当之处，请参考专业资料。,单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,本幻灯片资料仅供参考，不能作为科学依据，如有不当之处，请参考专业资料。,单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,本幻灯片资料仅供参考，不能作为科学依据，如有不当之处，请参考专业资料。,单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,本幻灯片资料仅供参考，不能作为科学依据，如有不当之处，请参考专业资料。,Continuation Writing,读 后 续 写,第1页,对第五档,(21-25),作文描述：,与所给短文融洽度高，,与所提供各段落、开头语衔接合理。,内容丰富，应用了,5,个以上短文中标出关键词语。,所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表示；,有效地使用了语句间连接成份，使所续写短文结构紧凑；,Tips for writing:,1.Thorough reading,2.Creative plotting,（构思）,3.Swift drafting,4.Careful polishing,5.Neat copying,第2页,The present,Reading,：,第3页,Step 1,：,Thorough Reading,Opening paragraph,:,They say,that blood is thicker than water,that our relatives are more important to us than others.Everyone was so kind to the old lady on her birthday.Surely her daughter would make an even bigger effort to please her,?,2.The,old lady,1.others,3.her daughter,？,第4页,Para.1-5,1.What did,others,do to please the old,lady?,Mrs.Morrison,Mrs.Grant,Johnnie,2.What did,the old lady,do to celebrate,her 80s birthday?,What did she expect?,第5页,1.Others:,Mrs.Morrison,:,gave the flat an extra clean,bought a card and a bunch of,marigolds,Mrs.Grant,:,made a cake,prepared the afternoon tea,Johnnie:,gave a packet of,mints,offered to bring up,her presents,第6页,2.the old lady:,got up early to be ready for the post,put on her best dress,第7页,Language appreciation,:,a good way to describe ones mental activities,(,Para.4,),Two spots of color brightened her cheeks.She was excited like a child.She would enjoy her day.,She was so eager to get a present.,“A person was very nervous.”,His heart was beating wildly.,He was sweating all over.,第8页,she expected,：,（,Para.6),a present,family affections;,love from the daughter;,to be remembered,to be connected,第9页,3.Myra,the daughter,（,Para.2-3),Judging from the information in Para.,2-3 about Myra,what kind of person was,Myra?,Key words,：,rare,occasions,seldom,wrote,busy,a medal for the aged,第10页,2.The,old lady,1.others,3.Myra,？,Puzzle:,Would Myra,please,her mother or,let,her,down,?,第11页,Step 2,：,Creative plotting,Reminder,：,Being creative doesnt mean you can write whatever you like.Continuation writing must be designed in a,logical,and,reasonable,way.And on top of that being creative will be appreciated.,logic,+,creativity,第12页,They say.Everyone kindher daughter.?,rare occasions,seldom a medal,best clothes excited,Mrs.Morrison Mrs.Grant Johnnie.,slippercardiganlamp,She stood by the window,watching._,_,Almost,reluctantly,unwillingly)she tore the envelope open._,Would Myra,please,her mother or,let,her,down,?,Myra,？,第13页,She stood by the window,watching._,_,Almost reluctantly she tore the envelope open.,_,Use at least 5 of the following words:,please,postman,arrange for,lovely,parcels,write,birthday,presents,Step 3,：Swift drafting,第14页,Original ending:,She stood by the window,watching.,The postman turned round the corner on his bicycle.Her heart beat fast.Johnnie had seen him too and ran to the gate.Then clatter,clatter up the stairs.Johnnie knocked at her door.“Granny,granny,”he shouted,“Ive got your post.”He gave her four envelopes.Three were unsealed cards from old friends.The fourth was sealed,in Myras writing.The old lady felt a pang of disappointment.“No parcel,Johnnie?”“No,granny.”Maybe the parcel was too large to come by letter post.That was it.It would come later by parcel post.She must be patient.,第15页,Almost reluctantly she tore the envelope open.,Folded in the card was a piece of paper.Written on the card was a message under the printed Happy Birthday,Buy yourself something nice with the cheque,Myra and Harold,.The cheque fluttered to the floor like a bird with a broken wing.,Slowly the old lady stooped to pick it up.Her present,her lovely present.With trembling fingers she tore it into little bits.,第16页,Summary:,1.What the best continuation articles are like,content,；,language,2.Suggested procedure for writing;,Tips for writing:,1.Thorough reading,：,2.Creative plotting,3.Swift drafting,4.Careful polishing,5.Neat copying,第17页,3.A question to ponder:,“How to treat our parents”,“Listen to your father,who gave you life,and do not look down upon your mother when she is old.”,Bible,Proverbs 23:22,第18页,我续写思绪基于以下几点：,标题是礼品，这个礼品在文章末尾以怎么样形式出现必定是文章高潮部分；,血浓于水。每个周围人都对这个老太那么好，这个女儿会做更大努力让妈妈高兴吗？开篇留下这么悬念，当然能够是悲剧结尾，也能够是大团圆结局。,老太女儿工作跟老年人相关，而所以得到一个奖项，我们能够把此点了解成一个讽刺。也能够为我要写结局埋下伏笔。,第19页,She stood by the window,watching.The,postman,came as usual.The old ladys heart beat wildly.How she wished for a special,present,from her daughter!Then came the knock.There was Johnnie,with several envelopes.No,parcels,at all!Her heart sank!She scanned the envelopes swiftly,most of which were birthday cards from her lifelong friends.Then she picked out the one from her daughter.,Almost,reluctantly,she tore the envelope open.“Dear mum,sorry to have let you down so many times whether on your,birthdays,or other occasions.I got a medal for my work for the aged,but I dont think I deserve it.For so long Ive neglected the most,lovely,aged person in my life,who needs my care and company.I know its time to”Reading the letter,the old lady couldnt help but sob.Tears ran down her cheeks and dropped onto the letter.Just at that moment,familiar steps drew closer and without doubt,the old lady knew that her most cherished present was finally coming.,第20页,学生作品,:,版本,1,She stood by the window,watching.It seemed as if she had been standing there for a century,there appeared a postman in the distance.The old lady was so excited that her heart faster.Then she heard someone run upstairs and knock at the door,，“,Granny,its me,Johnnie.Ive got your letter.”“Letter?”The old lady asked,quickly walking towards the door.,Almost reluctantly she tore the envelope open.However,there was only a cheque and a paper lying there,which said,“Mom,Im sorry I cant come to accompany you on your birthday.Buy something you like with the cheque.Happy Birthday.”The poor lady put them back into the envelope,with her hands trembling and tears running down her cheeks.,第21页,学生作品,:,版本,2,She stood by the window,watching.With time dragging,a postman on the bike showed up.The bell rang.“Finally,my post is coming.”The old lady said to herself excitedly.And Johnnie clapped his hands and said,“Grandma,your daughter must send you a surprise present.”And the old lady smiled like a child.But to her disappointment,the postman only held a letter for her.“No parcels?”she asked with doubt.“No,madam.Have a nice day,bye.”,Almost reluctantly she tore the envelope open.It was a letter from her busy daughter.“Mom,happy birthday.Here is a ticket.We are too busy to stay with you.You can take the ticket to fly to us.Love,from Myra.”The old lady couldnt help but tremble.She read again and again the letter as if she wanted to eat it up.Eventually,she threw the ticket into the dustbin.,第22页,学生作品,:,版本,3,She stood by the window,watching.Finally she saw Johnnie coming towards her house.But she could see clearly that there was no parcel in his hand.She felt extremely disappointed.After a while,Johnnie arrived and gave her an envelope.“No parcels.What a pity!”said Johnnie,“but maybe there will a surprise too big to put in a parcel.”With these words,he left before the old lady could ask him anything more.,Almost reluctantly she tore the envelope open.A thin sheet fell down.It was a cheque.She burst into tears.She even felt an urge to tear the cheque into pieces.However,through the mist of her tears,she glanced at several sentences on the other side of the cheque,saying,“Mom,you knew I had got a medal.But I dont know whether I deserve it.So I decide to visit you on your birthday.Just wait for me.”Once again she stood by the window,watching.This time,she was waiting for her daughter.Two spots color brightened her cheeks.,第23页,Kates risky journey:,In wind and rain,she started on her,difficult way,.,(,情境描写,),The storm had not washed this away,but there was,no footpath across it,.,(,场景描写,),With great care,she began the,dangerous,crossing,sometimes on her hands and knees,hardly daring,to look down between the sleepers into,the wild flood waters,below.If she,should slip,she,would fall,between the sleepers,into the rapidly flowing stream,.,(,动作描写,+,心理描写,+,情境描写,),平时怎样积累语言表示：,10,浙江,A,篇：,话题语言：,第24页,话题语言：,The urgent situation:,Suddenly,another thought went through Kates mind,like an electric shock,.,(,副词利用,+,修辞比喻,),If it were not stopped,that long train,full of passengers,would fall into the stream,.(,虚拟语气,),But,there was,no time to rest,.She still had to,run more than half a mile,and,had only a few minutes left,.(,时空描述,),Unless,she reached the station,before,the express did,many,many lives would be lost,.(,关联句式,+,语词重复,),She,did reach,the station,just as the train came into sight,.(,动词强调,+,副词强调,),“The bridge is down!Stop the train!Oh,please stop it!”Kate,shouted breathlessly,.,(,语气句式,+,动作描写,),The station-master,went pale,.,(,外貌描写,),-10,浙江高考阅读了解,A,篇,第25页,小词（副词）巧用：,I,strongly,suggest that,I,firmly,believe that,I,sincerely,hope that,I,fully,support that,As is,vividly,shown in the picture that,have a,profound,effect on,take,effective,measures to,make a,big,difference to,play a,vital,role in,Im,terribly,sorry that I lost your book,accidentally,.,第26页,各种变式,恰当句式、用词：,恰当形容或副词：obviously,clearly,apparently,undoubtedly,similarly,(un)luckily,(un)fortunately,pitifully,sadly,surprisingly,accordingly,currently,personally,seemingly,/apparently,absolutely,extremely,steadily,consequently,briefly,actually,completely/entirely,等 评注性状语：to be honest,to be frank,to be short,generally speaking,in a way,in some degree省略句：conj.+doing或done /conj.+adj.强调句：倒装句：（句中有介词短语或状语从句）with引导独立主格结构非谓语动词使用被动句:eg.It is generally believed that mutual understanding contributes to a permanent friendship.使用感叹句:eg.How terrible I felt today!I failed again in the test.使用插入语、同位语使用what引导名词性从句使用虚拟语气使用复合句（形成长短之变、节奏之美）使用谚语、习语使用特殊句式,第27页,如要表示“使”，不要仅依靠make:,a)This society still makes women unable to enjoy equal rights.,b)Women are still denied equal rights.,a)The incident made me recall one of my past experiences.,b)The incident reminded me of one of my past experiences.,第28页,如要表示“越来越”，不要只使用more and more:,a),More and more students,find learning English has become more and more difficult.,b),Students in growing numbers,find learning English has become increasingly difficult.,a),More and more teenagers,smoke cigarettes in recent years.,b)Teenage smoking,is on the rise,in recent years.,a),More and more teachers,are demanded with the development of economy.,b),There is an increasing demand for teachers,with the development of economy.,第29页,如要表示大多数”，不要一味用most:,a)Most students take a part-time job after class.,b),The vast majority of students,take a part-time job after class.,a)Most people take part in sports of different kinds.,b),The considerable proportion of people,take part in sports of different kinds.,a)Most college students take a negative attitude towards smoking.,b),The large percentage of college population,take a negative attitude towards smoking.,第30页,改变语态,a)Many people think birth control is quite necessary in China.,It is widely(commonly)thought/believed/held/(accepted)that birth control is quite necessary in China.,b)He has made rapid progress in English.,Rapid progress has been made in English.,c)We should make great efforts to prevent the environment from being destroyed.,Great efforts should be made to prevent the environment from being destroyed.,第31页,学会用名词结构来表示意思,The style of living has become more and more popular and accepted by more and more young people.,The style of living,has found its growing popularity and acceptance,among young people.,If we dont recognize the serious problem of growing population,we will make a big mistake.,Failure to recognize the seriousness of growing population will lead to,a big mistake.,If we are watching too much TV,our reading ability will be seriously affected.,Heavy exposure to TV will have a negative effect on,our reading ability.,第32页,While they were playing tennis,she started an argument that lasted all morning.,During tennis,she started an argument lasting all morning.,The novel,which is written in three parts,tells a story,that is set in the Middle Age,.,Written in three parts,the novel tells a story,set in the Middle Age.,用不一样表述方式替换从句,（介词短语、分词形式、前置形容词等）,A neighbor,who would like to help others,gets certain help in return.,A,helpful,neighbor often receives help form others in return.,第33页,We sometimes make choices that put our lives,in danger where death can occur.,College students,who do not have,enough financial backing can apply needs-based scholarship.,We sometimes make choices that put our life,in risk,.,College students,lacking,enough financial backing can,apply needs-based scholarship,第34页,转折词替换：,The children at school were familiar with games,but,Li Hua had never even heard of them.,The silence of the room was broken by a sudden clap of thunder outside.,The children at school were familiar with games,that Li Hua had never even heard of.,The room was silent,but,suddenly there was a clap of thunder outside.,灵活使用句式，关注表述多样性,第35页,not only but also,替换：,In his spare time,he not only loves surfing,but also web-surfing.,In his spare time,he is a surfer of both waves and the internet.,In his spare time,he loves not only surfing but also web-surfing.,灵活使用句式，关注表述多样性,第36页,用名词短语或动名词短语做主语替换,if,从句,If we want to end a war quickly,we must lose it.,Failure to pass the drug test,will result in your job dismissal.,The quick way to end a war,is to lose it.,灵活使用句式，关注表述多样性,If you live honestly,eat slowly and lie about your age,you can keep your youth forever.,Living honestly,eating slowly and lying about your age,can keep your youth forever.,If words are taken out of context,they are not very likely to mean the same as they do when they are in context.,If you fail to pass the drug test,we will have to dismiss you from your job.,Words taken out of context,do not always mean what they do in context.,第37页,We decided to take a taxi because we missed the bus by a second.,Because my schedule was so busy,I was not able to attend Susans wedding.,Missing the bus by a second,we decided to take a taxi.,My busy schedule didnt allow me to attend Susans wedding.,灵活使用句式，关注表述多样性,用多样表述替换,because,从句,第38页,用多样表述替换,there be,从句,1.There are 17 men who volunteered.,2.There is no denial that everyone will eventually die.There is no exception.,17 men volunteered.,Death spares no one.,3.There were many mule deer throughout North America,but they are now almost extinct.,Mule deer,once common throughout North America,are now almost extinct.,灵活使用句式，关注表述多样性,第39页,读后续写评分标准：,评分时，先依据所续写短文,内容,和,语言,初步确定其所属档次,评分时，应主要从以下四个方面考虑：,1.,与所给短文及段落开头语衔接程度；,2.,内容丰富性和对所标出关键词语应用情况；,3.,应用语法结构和词汇丰富性和准确性；,4.,上下文连贯性。,10,首次考试评分（教授语）：,1,.,评分时优先考虑考生,语言水平,：先依据语言水平确定档次，然后再综合考