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hobby,source,benefit a great deal,broaden my horizons,enrich my life,2.妙用短语:as well as,a variety of,for one thing,for another,have great calm in mind,3.复杂句式:because原因状语从句,for us to choose from不定式复合结构what名词性从句,while时间状语从句。,4/24,【关键点拨】,高考书面表示最高档次评分标准中,要求“词汇丰富,有修辞意识,显示出较强语言利用能力”。所以要想在高考英语写作中取得高分,就必须使用一定高级词汇及复杂句式,为文章增加闪光点,从而提升文章档次。,5/24,1.遣词方面:,(1)措辞要贴切详细,试比较下面句子:一个人正在街上闲逛。,A man is walking down the street.,A man is wandering down the street.,经过比较能够看出,前一句不如后一句表示得详细、生动。一个词假如内涵越详细,那么在特定场景中恰当地使用它,就会收到意想不到效果。,6/24,(2)要善于利用短语,短语用得好,会给评卷老师留下深刻印象。比如:,When he was a child,he wanted to learn everything.(普通),When he was a child,he had a strong appetite(胃口)for knowledge.(高级),7/24,2.造句方面:,(1)巧用非谓语动词,利用非谓语动词,可使文句看起来更简练,使语言愈加丰富多彩,重点愈加突出,增加文采。,I covered my ears,trying to keep the noise out,but failed.,8/24,2)巧用with复合结构,“with+名词/代词+现在分词/过去分词/形容词/副词/介词”结构,常作伴随状语以增加被描绘内容生动性和情感性,使文章读起来更简练明了。试比较:,He slept all the night and the window was open.(普通),He slept all the night with the window open.(高级),9/24,(3)巧用复合句,评分标准中强调使用语法结构数量和复杂性,勉励考生尽可能使用较复杂结构,而且对由此产生错误采取了宽容态度。假如恰当利用各类从句,就会增加文章亮点。,Soon I became one of the top students in my class,which,greatly increased my confidence and got me motivated.(定语从句),10/24,(4)巧用倒装句、感叹句、强调句、虚拟语气句等,使用这些句式可使文章化平淡为生动,加强语气,使评卷老师感受作者强烈情感,起到升级文章作用。,Disappointed as I felt at,the shabby campus and the poorly-equipped classroom,I found the teachers patient and considerate.(倒装句),11/24,(5)巧用排比等句式,如能利用一个个排比句、对偶句、不定式或短语,可使文章增色不少,会给评卷老师眼前一亮感觉。,The purpose of the program is to make our school more beautiful,to make the air cleaner and fresher,and to turn our school into a better place for us to study and live in.,12/24,【写作指导】,1.巧妙遣词中忌讳,(1)防止使用自己没有把握词汇、句式等,造成弄巧成拙;,(2)防止受汉语思维影响,用词要符合英语表示习惯,语言要地道,如一些名词和动词搭配已约定俗成,不能随意打乱其搭配习惯,不然会显得生硬和词不达意。如汉语中“学到知识”,英语中就不能说learn knowledge,而要说acquire knowledge(取得知识)。类似动宾结构还有achieve success取得成功,gain reputation取得声誉,attain ones end到达目标等。,13/24,2.遣词造句关键,遣词造句是为优质语篇打基础,其关键就是:,(1)用词要准确,词义要得当;,(2)采取“曲线救国”克服生僻关键点表示;,(3)预防拼写错误,用自己最有把握、最贴切词汇、句式来表示关键点;,(4)防止受汉语干扰,尽可能用较为复杂句式来增加文章亮点,从而实现高分目标;,14/24,(5)在表示时能够采取各种手法,只要词能达意,没有语法问题即为好表示;,(6)熟练利用基本句型,适当利用复合句式,重视语言表示灵活性就能造句生动。,15/24,【对点训练】,.请标出下面作文亮点句式,How we can build up a harmonious family,A harmonious family is essential to our personal development,and our physical and mental health.A harmonious family is always,full of warmth,love and laughter.Parents and children love and,show concern for each other.They also respect and understand,each other.If a child grows up in a harmonious family,he is more,likely to be cheerful and optimistic.Otherwise,he may be,miserable and pessimistic.Meanwhile,parents in a harmonious,family are sure to live more happily and healthily.,16/24,Since a harmonious family plays a very important role in,our life,it is up to every family member to contribute to the,building of such a family.First of all,parents should be a role,model for their children and pay more attention to their own,words and behavior.Besides,they must trust their children,and often communicate with them.,As children of the family,we should also respect and,understand our parents,and try to share their burdens.If,we do so,our family will always be harmonious.,17/24,.巧用遣词造句,升级下面文章,留心一下我们周围,能够发觉陪读现象很普遍。请你依据以下关键点写一篇短文,内容应包含:,1.简明描述陪读现象;,2.分析父母陪读原因(2至3个);,3.发表你对此看法。,注意:1.词数100个左右。,2.标题已给出,不计入总词数。,18/24,Should Our Parents Accompany Us in Studying at School,_,_,_,19/24,【参考范文】,Should Our Parents Accompany Us in Studying at School,In recent years,many parents choose to accompany their children in studying,which has aroused a wide concern.,These parents are willing to leave their hometown,even quit their jobs to follow their children into the campus.Most of them rent an apartment nearby so as to take good care of their children.,20/24,Parents consider it necessary to offer a better living condition to their children.Meanwhile,it enables them to keep track of their childrens academic performance.,Nevertheless,what they have ignored is that it will get their kids into the habit of being dependent.Thus,they will never develop the ability of self-control in the future.,Trust leads to independence.So it seems to me parents should create room for childrens growth and study in order to ensure their overall development.,21/24,22/24,23/24,24/24,