公开课如何在高考英语作文中增加细节.ppt

假定你是李华。上周日在地铁站捡到了英假定你是李华。上周日在地铁站捡到了英国人国人Steven 的护照。请你用英语给你市某英的护照。请你用英语给你市某英文报社编辑写一封信，内容包括：文报社编辑写一封信，内容包括：1.简述时间过程简述时间过程;2.交代护照相关信息交代护照相关信息;3.委托报社刊登招领启事委托报社刊登招领启事.注意注意:1.词数词数100左右左右 2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。广东一模书面表达广东一模书面表达一个问题一个问题主体信息写完往往只有60-70个字，不足100词，怎么弥补词数？需要“适当增加细节，以使行文连贯”。Deareditor,ImLiHua,ahighschoolstudentinourcity.Imwritingtotellyouapieceofurgentinformation.IpickedupapassportlastSundayinthesubwaystationwhenIwastakingaridehome.TherewasnobodyaroundwhenIfounditonawaitingbench.TheownerofitisStevenwhocomesfromEngland.Havinglostthepassport,hemustbeveryanxious,butIhavenoideahowtoreturnittohim.SoIneedyourhelp.Iwishyoucouldpostanoticeonyournewspapertotellhimaboutthemissingpassport,sothathecangetitback.Iwouldappreciateitifyoucoulddomethefavor.Imlookingforwardtoyourreply.Yours,LiHua结结果果交际语交际语心理心理感受感受具体化具体化同位语同位语原因原因如何适当增加细节如何适当增加细节1.增加同位语增加同位语2.补全前因后果或目的补全前因后果或目的3.适当将写作内容具体化适当将写作内容具体化4.写出个人感受、评价或后果写出个人感受、评价或后果5.补充功能性（交际性）语言补充功能性（交际性）语言Whatkindofinformationcanoftenbeaddedtoyourarticle?1增加同位语增加同位语1IamLiHua,_(我们学校的学生会主席我们学校的学生会主席)./_(来来自中国的一位交换生自中国的一位交换生).2.Iwanttohaveapenfriend,_(希望是一位跟我有相同兴趣的女孩希望是一位跟我有相同兴趣的女孩).Chairman of the Students Union of my school.an exchange student from China.hopefully a girl with interests similar to mine.2.补充前因后果或目的补充前因后果或目的_(因为知道你对中国传统文化很感兴趣因为知道你对中国传统文化很感兴趣），Iamwritingtoinviteyoutoparticipateinthisactivity._(为了获得一些实践经验为了获得一些实践经验)Implanningtotakeapart-timejobinaforeigncompany.(1)KnowingthatyoushowgreatinterestinChinesetraditionalculture,(2)Inordertogetsomepracticalexperience,_(由于我有过丢身份证的经历），IcanfeelhowanxiousMrStevenwillbenow.(3)SinceIhavetheexperienceoflosingmyIDcard,（1)Theactivitywillbeheld_(具体时间、地点）具体时间、地点）(2)IknowtheownerisSteven_(相关身份信相关身份信息息)3When I received the dictionary,I found that _(具体存在问题具体存在问题如错印、缺页等如错印、缺页等)3.适当将写作内容具体化适当将写作内容具体化from9a.m.to10a.m.onApril11inClassroom501.fromEngland,aged38,married.thereweresomemisprintsandpagesfrom23-45weremissing.4增加结果或者是效果增加结果或者是效果(1)Ithinkitisagoodchancetoappreciatelocaloperas,_(这必将有助于你学到更多的中国文化这必将有助于你学到更多的中国文化）(2)Wecansetoutearly,_(以便我以便我们有更多的时间阅读和挑选图书们有更多的时间阅读和挑选图书）(3)Therearequiteafewmissingpages,_(变得无法使用变得无法使用)sothatwecanhavemoretimetoreadandselectbookswhichwillsurelyhelpyoulearnmoreaboutChineseculture.makingitimpossibletouse.1_（如果（如果你能帮我这个忙，我将不胜感激你能帮我这个忙，我将不胜感激（2）_（期待着你的早日回复）（期待着你的早日回复）5.补充功能性（交际性）语言补充功能性（交际性）语言(3)_(如果有什么能帮到你的，请不要犹豫告诉我）如果有什么能帮到你的，请不要犹豫告诉我）Iwouldgreatlyappreciateitifyoucoulddomethefavour.Lookingforwardtoyourearlyreply.IfthereisanythingIcandoforyou,pleasedonthesitatetoletmeknow.practice(addreasonabledetails）1.ImLiHua,_.(同位语同位语)2.Imwritingtoaskyoutohelpmefindtheownerofapassport,_.(具具体来源等体来源等)3Withcaution,Iopenedtheplasticbag,_.（结果）（结果）4 Last week,I bought an English dictionary from your online bookstore _(目的目的/原因原因)5_(若你能考虑我的建议，若你能考虑我的建议，我将不胜感激我将不胜感激).假如你是李华，你的英国朋友假如你是李华，你的英国朋友Peter来信向你来信向你咨询如何才能学好中文。请你根据下列要点写咨询如何才能学好中文。请你根据下列要点写封回信。封回信。要点：要点：1、参加中文学习班。、参加中文学习班。2、看中文书刊、电视。、看中文书刊、电视。3、学唱中文歌曲。、学唱中文歌曲。4、交中国朋友。、交中国朋友。注意：注意：1.词数：词数：100左右。左右。2.可适当增加细可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。节，以使行文连贯。3.开头语已为你写好开头语已为你写好.Dear Peter,Im glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on how to learn Chinese well.Here are a few suggestions.First,it is important to take a Chinese course.Then,it also helps to watch TV and read books,newspapers,and magazines in Chinese.Besides,it should be a good idea to learn and sing Chinese songs.In addition,You can also make more Chinese friends.Dear Peter,Im glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on how to learn Chinese well.Here are a few suggestions.First,it is important to take a Chinese course,as youll be able to learn from the teachers and practice with your fellow students.Then,it also helps to watch TV and read books,newspapers,and magazines in Chinese whenever possible.Besides,it should be a good idea to learn and sing Chinese songs,because by doing so youll learn and remember Chinese words more easily.In addition,You can also make more Chinese friends.They will tell you a lot about China and help you learn Chinese.Try writing to me in Chinese next time.Best wishes Li Hua(2016(2016全国课标卷全国课标卷)假定你是李华，暑假想去一假定你是李华，暑假想去一家外贸公司兼职，已写好申请书和个人简历家外贸公司兼职，已写好申请书和个人简历（resumeresume）。给外教）。给外教Ms JenkinsMs Jenkins写信，请她修写信，请她修改所附材料的文字和格式（改所附材料的文字和格式（formatformat）。）。注意：注意：1.1.词数词数100100左右；左右；2.2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。Im your student Li Hua.Im applying for a part-time job at a foreign company in my city during the summer vacation.Could you correct the language and the format of the application letter and resume I have written?They are in the attachment.Dear Peter,Im glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on how to learn Chinese well.Here are a few suggestions.First,it is important to take a Chinese course,as youll be able to learn from the teachers and practice with your fellow students.Then,it also helps to watch TV and read books,newspapers,and magazines in Chinese whenever possible.Besides,it should be a good idea to learn and sing Chinese songs,because by doing so youll learn and remember Chinese words more easily.In addition,You can also make more Chinese friends.They will tell you a lot about China and help you learn Chinese.Try writing to me in Chinese next time.Best wishes Li Hua并不是每篇文章都需要使用到这并不是每篇文章都需要使用到这5种增加细种增加细节的方法节的方法根据实际，进行合理的、适当的增加根据实际，进行合理的、适当的增加