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Tips高考英语书面表达高分标准高考英语书面表达高分标准覆盖所有覆盖所有内容要点内容要点应用较多的应用较多的语法结构和词汇语法结构和词汇有效地使用语句间的有效地使用语句间的连接成分，连接成分，使全文结构紧凑使全文结构紧凑假如你是高三假如你是高三(1)班的班长李华，班的班长李华，得知得知美国学生美国学生Chris作为交换生，下学期将到你班学习。请你根据以下作为交换生，下学期将到你班学习。请你根据以下提示，提示，给他写封邮件给他写封邮件。(1)表示欢迎表示欢迎；(2)介绍本班情况介绍本班情况及与及与本地生活相关的信息本地生活相关的信息（如气候，如气候，饮食等）；饮食等）；(3)希望希望Chris做做哪些事情，以增进中美学生间的了哪些事情，以增进中美学生间的了解和友谊。解和友谊。DearChris,ImLiHua,monitorofClassOne,GradeTwelve._Yours,LiHuaI.审题：审题：1.体裁和格式：体裁和格式：2.人称人称:3.写作内容及时态：写作内容及时态：邮件邮件（属书信体，格式已给出）（属书信体，格式已给出）书面表达书面表达you,I,we一般现在时，一般将来时一般现在时，一般将来时注意：注意：(1)请勿提及相关的真实信息；请勿提及相关的真实信息；(2)可可适当加入细节适当加入细节，使内容充实，使内容充实，行文连贯行文连贯；(3)词数词数100左右，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总左右，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。词数。在作文里不能涉及任何所在在作文里不能涉及任何所在地区、学校的信息，否则高地区、学校的信息，否则高考时会被视为作弊行为。考时会被视为作弊行为。字数不能超字数不能超12行，行，否则扣否则扣2分！分！转换应试意识转换应试意识表达言简意赅表达言简意赅II.佳句背诵佳句背诵1.Knowing/When/Onknowingthenewsthatyourecomingtobewithusasanexchangestudentthiscomingterm,wecannotconcealourexcitementandlookforwardtoyourarrival.得知得知我们我们.2.Themomentweknowthenewsthatwordsfailtodescribeourexcitement）得知得知我们我们.二二.介绍介绍-同位语，非谓语，定从，同位语，非谓语，定从，with结构结构1.Ourclassconsistsof50optimisticandeasy-goingstudents,allofwhomarewillingtoacceptyouasoneofusandmakeyoufeelathome.Notonlywilltheymakeacquaintancewithyou,butalsotheywouldliketogiveyouahandwhenyouareinrouble.2.MyClass,abigfamilyconsistingof50optimisticandeasy-goingstudents,arewillingtoacceptyouasoneofusandmakeyoufeelathome.4.Consistingof50students,ourclassseemslikeabigfamilywitharelaxingandharmoniousatmosphere,whichwillmakeyoufeelathome.3.Consistingof50optimisticandeasy-goingstudents,myclassisabigfamily,inwhichwelivetogetherinharmony.4.Class1,whereyouaregoingtostudy,isabigfamilyconsistingof50students,allofwhomarewillingtoacceptyouasoneofusandmakeyoufeelathome.5.Mycity,afascinatingharbor/afascinatingcoastalcity,enjoyspleasantweather,withbrightsunshinealltheyearround.6.LocatedinthesouthofChina,ourcityisrich/abundantin/isdistinguishedforseafood,whichIhopeyoulllike/youllgetaccustomedto7.ComparedwithAmerica,theweatherheremaybedifferentfromthatinyourhometown.（非谓语（非谓语)AndhereIlltellyousomethingaboutthelocallife,whichmaybedifferentfromthatinyourhometown.8.Weallviewthisasapreciouschanceforustolearnaboutwhatlifeislikeinyourcountry,especiallyschoollife.Meanwhile,wecanhaveourspokenEnglishimprovedwhenwehavefuntogether.（what引导宾语从句，引导宾语从句，when引导状语从句。引导状语从句。9Indeed,wefeelexcitedabouthavingyouasournewclassmateandwearecuriousaboutwhatlifeislikeinyourcountry,especiallyschoollife.Meanwhile,youareexpectedtoinvolvedyourselfin.,where.inthisway.ourfriendshipwillsurelybepromoted.I.参考范文：参考范文：Dear Chris,Im Li Hua,monitor of Class One,Grade Twelve.Immorethangladtoknowthatyourecomingtobewithusasanexchangestudentthiscomingterm.Infact,allmyclassmatesarekindandlookforwardtoyourcoming,andarewillingtoacceptyouasoneofus.Besides,Ihopethatyoullhavenodifficultyadaptingtothefoodandweatherhere.Itisgenerallynottoohotinsummerhereandwehaverelativelywarmerwinter,comparedtothatinAmerica.Wehavericeasourmainfood,whichIhopeyoulllike.Indeed,wefeelexcitedabouthavingyouasournewclassmate.Foronething,wecanhaveabetterknowledgeofAmericancultureandsocialcustomswithyourhelp.Foranother,weviewthisasagoodchanceforustoimproveourEnglish.Hope to see you soon.Yours,LiHua2.Dear Chris,Im Li Hua,monitor of Class One,Grade Twelve.Hearingthatyoullcometoourclass,allmyclassmatesfeelexcited.Wearekindandeasytogetalongwith,sotheresnodoubtthatwewillmakeyoufeelathomeonceyoureherewithus.LifeinChinacanbedifferentfromthatinAmerica.Tobeginwith,wefeedmainlyonrice,whichIhopeyoullgetaccustomedto.Inaddition,wehavehotsummer,butinwinteritsgenerallywarmer.Weallseethisasapreciouschanceforustolearnaboutwhatlifeislikeinyourcountry,especiallyschoollife.Meanwhile,wecanhaveourspokenEnglishimprovedwhenwehavefuntogether.亮点：亮点：1.句型结构有：分词作状语和宾补，句型结构有：分词作状语和宾补，so连接并列分句，连接并列分句，同位语从句，非限制性定语从句，同位语从句，非限制性定语从句，what引导宾语从句，引导宾语从句，once引导状语从句。引导状语从句。2.短语：短语：feelathome,bedifferentfrom,feedon,getaccustomedto,seeas,havefun。3.使用使用tobeginwith,inaddition,meanwhile等词语使行等词语使行文流畅。文流畅。III.改错：下列句子是写作中易出现的普遍错误，改错：下列句子是写作中易出现的普遍错误，请找出错误并改正。请找出错误并改正。1.Know that youll join in us next term,I am glad.2.There are many seafood in our city.3.You can help us in our English.4.Our class is consisted of 56 students,all of them are friendly.5.Life in China can be different from America.正：正：Knowing that youll join us next term,I am glad.正：正：There is much seafood in our city.正正：You can help us with our English.正正：Our class consists of,all of whom are 正正：Life different from that in America.6.Iconvincethat.7.Notonlyaretheywillingtomakeacquaintancewithyou,butalsogiveyouahandwhenyouareintrouble.8.Iandmyclassmateswelcomeyoutoourschool.2016广州一模广州一模假定你是李华，你要完成一项关于中英学生寒假假定你是李华，你要完成一项关于中英学生寒假生活的调查。请给你的英国笔友生活的调查。请给你的英国笔友Bill写一封信，写一封信，交流相关信息。要点如下：交流相关信息。要点如下：1写信的原因；写信的原因；2介绍中国学生的寒假生活；介绍中国学生的寒假生活；(1)时长：约时长：约20天天(2)活动活动3询问英国学生的寒假生活。询问英国学生的寒假生活。Howiseverything?ImdoingaprojectonhowBritishandChinesestudentsspendtheirwinterholidays.InChina,thewintervacationisusuallyabouttwentydayslong.ItfallsduringtheChineseNewYear,somoststudentstakepartindifferentSpringFestivalactivities,suchasvisitingfamily,eatinglotsoffoods,andmostimportantly,gettingluckymoney!Duringtheholidaymanystudentswillalsogotravellingwiththeirparents.UnfortunatelytheycanttravelforlongthoughbecauseChinesestudentsalwayshavealotofhomeworktododuringthisbreak.Manymustevenattendspecialholidayclasses.WhataboutintheUK?Howdothestudentsspendthewinterholidaysthere?Imlookingforwardtoyourreply.Yours,LiHuaII.佳作赏析佳作赏析1.Dear Chris,Im Li Hua,monitor of Class One,Grade Twelve.Knowingthatyoullstayinourschoolasanexchangestudentinthenewterm,Ifeeldelighted.AndhereIlltellyousomethingaboutthelocallife,whichmaybedifferentfromthatinyourhometown.Forexample,wehavericeasourmainfood.Itsnothotinsummerandnotverycoldinwinter,butIthinkyoullgetaccustomedtoallthissoon.Ourclassismadeupof56students,allofwhomarefriendlyandeasytogetalongwith.Nodoubtthatyoullfitinonceyourehere.WeallseeyourarrivalasagoodchanceforustoknowsomethingaboutschoolandlifeinAmerica.亮点：亮点：1.句型结构有：分词作状语，宾语从句，非限制性定语句型结构有：分词作状语，宾语从句，非限制性定语从句，从句，but连接并列分句，连接并列分句，once引导状语从句。引导状语从句。2.短语：短语：bedifferentfrom,getaccustomedto,ismadeupof,fitin,seeas。3.使用使用forexample,nodoubt词语使行文流畅。词语使行文流畅。