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writing2021/5/912021/5/92How dou you describe ones fear 1.Desperate and hopless,I had no choice but to sit in the darkness,hoping that someone would come to my rescue.2.Hearing some strange sound,I stood still,trembling thith fear/in terror.3 So nervous was I that I could clearly hear my heart pounding/beating wildly.4.My hands began to sweat and my mouth dry.I wanted to scream at the top of my mouth.5.My mind went blank and my knees were shaking.6.The terrifying scene scared the pants off ofscared the pants off of me.2021/5/93retell the storyAsk 6 basic questions:whowhenwherewhatwhyhow2021/5/94Climax (the turning point)Falling Action(which helps probem solved)Resolution(ending)STORY MAPThemes Setting(time/place/character)Rising Action（which makes problem worse）Climax (the turning point)Falling Action(which helps probem solved)Resolution(ending)2021/5/95I followed Mali I followed Mali into the jungleinto the jungleMali taught me to Mali taught me to make a bed with mossmake a bed with mossafter supper,after supper,Mali fell asleepMali fell asleepI felt alone and I felt alone and frightenedfrightenedI heard noises I heard noises of animalsof animalsI wanted to scream I wanted to scream but I stoppoed my but I stoppoed my selfselfI closed my eyes I closed my eyes and heard a and heard a thousand noisesthousand noisesI opened my eyes I opened my eyes and held a knifeand held a knife2021/5/96find clues1.the given passage:find sentences that describe the main character.1.I suddenly felt alone and afraid.1.I suddenly felt alone and afraid.2.suddenly my mouth went dry.2.suddenly my mouth went dry.3.I wanted to scream.3.I wanted to scream.4.I felt my mouth open wide,ready to 4.I felt my mouth open wide,ready to scream as loud as possible.scream as loud as possible.5.5.。1.Old Mali lit a fire.1.Old Mali lit a fire.2.He showed me how to make a 2.He showed me how to make a bed with moss.bed with moss.3.“I learned make beds,by 3.“I learned make beds,by watching and listenning to watching and listenning to others.others.tip 1:make full use of the given information;pay attention to the vivid describtion which you can use in your own writing.I was frightened at the jungle while Old Mali was more experenced.Therefore,I can count on him when I was in trouble.2021/5/97find clues1.the given words:classify:Tip 2:choose the key words covering the most important information,such as the main characters and the main objects.jungle,Old Mali,night,learn,fast asleep,fire,scream,noises,imaginarynouns:jungle,Old Mali,night,fire,noisesverb:learn,fast asleeep,screamadjective:dark,imaginary2021/5/98find clues3.the given sentences:Para 1:Para 2:I was going to see if there was a wild animal beside the fire.Old Malis quiet calm voice made me feel better.2021/5/99infer the developmentPara 1:Para 2:I was going to see if there was a wild animal beside the fire.Old Malis quiet calm voice made me feel better.tip 2:By raising questions on your own you can peoduce more details of the development of the story.what did Mali say to me?Is there a real wild animal?what was it like?How did I react?How did we solve the animal problem?What on earth was the animal?After I felt better,what would I do?2021/5/910version:para 2:tip:the last sentence of the para 1 should be naturally connected with para 2,otherwise it may looks trange.2021/5/911version:para 2:tip:the last sentence of the para 1 should be naturally connected with para 2,otherwise it may looks trange.2021/5/912first draft I thought I saw a scary animal.It was the uglest monster I had ever seen.I was nearly frightened to death.It was at that momet that old Mali comforted me.The wild animal turned out to be the shade of the trees.Old Mali understood me and told me nothing to worry about.Then I relaxed and fell asleep.2021/5/913revise and polishHardly hadwhen as if it can swallow everything in a blink of an eye.Never have I seen such a terrifying animal.I have never seen a more terrifying animalSo frightenedMy mind went blank and my knees were shaking.I was about to scream at the top of my voice/with all my strength when I heard a soft voice,“Are you OK?/Whats the matter?”looking at me with concernEmbarassed and nervoustip :try to use various sentence structures to make your writing more vivid and less boring;advanced words and descriptions of mental state,enviornment and actions are necessary.2021/5/914revise and polish2021/5/915the tipsTip 1:choose the key words covering the most important information,such as the main characters and the main objects.tip 2:make full use of the given information;pay attention to the vivid describtion which you can use in your own writing.tip 3:By raising questions on your own you can peoduce more details of the development of the story.tip 4:try to use various sentence structures to make your writing more vivid and less boring;advanced words and descriptions of mental state,enviornment and actions are necessary.tip 5:the last sentence of the para 1 should be naturally connected with para 2,otherwise it may looks trange.2021/5/916the major problems 软伤：1.情节不合理，思维跳跃过大，与所给上文不契合。2情节太简单，寥寥数语，缺乏环境动作描写和人物内心的描述3没有结局4.语言太简单，不够生动具体。A lack of accurate understanding of the given passage and reasonable imagination.2021/5/917the major problems 硬伤：1.字迹潦草，卷面不整洁2拼写错误，语法错误，句子结构混乱（时态，词汇）3.Chinglish 2021/5/918Practice makes perfect2021/5/919 5.Assignments 5.Assignments n1.n2.2021/5/920