短文写作专题训练.pptx

,单击此处编辑母版标题样式,2014/3/20,#,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,短文写作专题训练,李时珍中学高三英语组,短文写作（满分,30,分）,一,、写作要求：要求学生根据提示准确使用英语词汇、进行书面表达。考生应能：,1.,有效运用所学语言知识，准确使用语法和词汇,语言的准确性是写作中不可忽视的一个重要方面，因为它直接或间接地影响 到信息的准确传输。应用语法结构和词汇的准确程度是写作部分评分标准中的一项 重要内容。,2.,使用一定的句型、词汇，清楚、连贯地传递信息，表达意思,任何一篇文章都需要有一个主题，作者应该围绕该主题，借助一些句型、词汇等的支持，清楚、连贯地表达自己的思想。,二、,评分,原则,本题总分为,30,分，按,5,个档次给分,。,词数少于,100,，将分数降低一个档次,。,评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。评分档次的确定应在内容符合题目要求的前题下侧重于语言的表达,。,评分时，应注意的主要内容为：内容切题，语言表达准确、多样、连贯、得体,。,拼写与标点符号是语言表达准确的一个方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考,虑。英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受,。,如书写太潦草，以至影响辨认，将分数降低一个档次。,三、,各档次的给分范围和要求,第五档,25-30,分 完全完成了试题规定的任务。,所有内容与提示吻合。,应用了较丰富的语法结构和词汇。,语法结构与词汇应用准确，虽有个别错误，但不影响意义的表达；具备较强的语言运用能力。,恰当使用了语句间的连接成分，全文结构紧凑。,完全达到了预期的写作目的。,第四档,19-24,分 完成了试题规定的任务。,主要内容与提示吻合。,应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。,语法结构与词汇应用基本准确，个别错误对意义的表达有一定影响。,较恰当地使用了语句间的连接成分，全文结构较紧凑。,达到了预期的写作目的。,第三档,13-18,分 基本完成了试题规定的任务。,主要内容与提示比较吻合。,应用的语法结构和词汇能基本满足任务的要求。,有一些语法结构与词汇的错误，对意义的表达有较大影响。,基本能使用语句间的连接成分，全文结构比较松散。,整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作目的,。,第二档,7-12,分 仅完成试题规定的部分任务。,主要内容与提示基本吻合。,语法结构单调，应用词汇有限。,有较多语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了意义的表达。,语句间的连接成分运用不当，缺少连贯性,。,信息,未能清楚地传达给读者。,第一档,1-6,分 未完成试题规定的任务。,主要内容与提示不太吻合。,语法结构单一，应用词汇十分有限。,有较多语法结构或词汇方面的严重错误，严重影响了意义的表达。,缺乏语句间的连接成分，内容不连贯,。,信息,未能传达给读者。,0,分,-,未能,传达给读者任何信息：内容太少，无法评判；写的内容均与所要求内容无关或,所 写,内容无法看清。,四,、,近,几,年,湖北高考英语作文,1,、,2010,年高考英语作文部分,第二节：短文写作（共,1,题；满分,25,分）,请你根据以下提示，结合生活中的一个实例，用英语写一篇短文，谈谈微笑的作用。,The best example of universally understood,body,language may be the smile.A smile can help us,get through difficult situations,and find friends in a world of strangers.A smile can open doors and tear down walls.,注意：无须写标题；,内容只需涉及一个方面；,词数为,100,左右。,One possible,version,I,still remember how nervous I was on my first day in the new school three years ago,when I found it difficult to follow my teacher in the first English class.The teacher spoke English throughout the class,which was totally different from the lessons I had taken before,.,In,the morning class the next day,the English teacher came to me while I was reading the text aloud as other students.After listening to me for a while,she gave me a big smile and said she liked my voice very much.The smile shone on the whole day and the following days.A week later,I,volunteered,to take charge of English study in my class,.,Thanks,to the comforting smile in my first morning class,I began to be confident.,2,、,2011,年高考英语,(,湖北卷,),作文题目,第二节：短文写作（共,1,题；满分,25,分）,请根据以下提示，结合你校园生活中的一个事例，就与人合作这一话题，用英语写一篇短文。,Working in groups at school is an opportunity to learn about team work.Teamwork shows us how other peoples roles fit the purpose of the group,and it teaches to be patient and how to respond to different people.,注意：,无须写标题，不得照抄英语提示语；,除诗歌外，文体不限；,内容必须结合校园生活中的一个事例；,文中不得透漏个人姓名和学校名称；,词数为,100,左右。,One Possible Version,Years,of school life has taught me a lot of things,of which teamwork is the most important for me.,In fact,I didnt realize its importance until I was chosen monitor of my class in my senior middle school.At first,I did most of the duties myself while other students cared little about class activities.As a result,I was tired out and depressed.Then I turned to my teacher and he advised me to cooperate with others.Thus I began to recognize the strengths of my classmates and have everyone do their part in class.,It,is working in teams instead of on my own that has freed me of trouble and made my work more efficient.,满分,作文,As is universally acknowledged,teamwork has been playing a dramatically important role.Teamwork makes it clear that by joint efforts we can do something beyond our imagination.Additionally,it improves our ability of cooperation and communication.,The experience that our class won the annual science and technology festival still remains fresh in my mind.There was little chance that we would win at that time because there existed many great competitors in our grade.However,we didnt lose heart.Instead,we were just united closely and each member spared no effort in it.Luckily,we succeeded.,It is clear that teamwork is of crucial importance.It has magical effect,before which difficulties disappear and,o,bstacles vanish.,3,、,2012,年湖北卷高考英语作文,第二节：短文写作（共,1,题；满分,30,分,),请,根据以下提示，并结合事例，用英语写一篇短文。,You,cannot choose what you are given,but you can choose how you make use of it.,注意：无须写标题，不得照抄英语提示语；,除诗歌外，文体不限；,文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称；,词数为,120,左右。,One,Possible Version,Three,years ago I failed an important exam in my life and became a student in an ordinary school.Disappointed as I felt at the shabby campus and the poorly-equipped classroom,I found the teachers patient and considerate.Besides,I enjoyed the friendly atmosphere in class.I decided to make the best of it.I worked hard and got along well with my teachers and classmates.Whenever I had difficulties,they were always available.Soon,I became one of the top students in my class,which greatly increased my confidence and got me motivated.,My,experience tells me that it is not what you are given but how you make use of it that determines who you are.,满分作文,1,In,our daily life,we can experience various kinds of things,including good ones as well as bad ones.If we are optimistic about our life,we can still benefit from the bad,things.,Five,years ago,I went to have a piano test.Unfortunately,the teacher who was to carry out the test was a very strict man.Seeing that many students had failed in the rest,I felt very nervous and didnt know whether I could pass,it or not.,After a while,my name,was called.I suddenly realized that this was a very precious chance to test my real performing skills and I might as well make full use of it to show my ability.Much to my surprise,the teacher was very satisfied with my performance and gave me a high mark,.,Through,this experience,I understand no matter what we face,we should try our best to deal with it with positive attitude.As long as we believe ourselves,were sure to succeed in the end.,满分作文,2,As we all know,our life is full of challenges as well as opportunities.Every one of us expects to be successful and deserve others respect.In my opinion,the key to success is that we should manage to make the most of what weve already had,.,When I was a child,I am fond of making things by hand.At one time,I took part in a hand-made activity in our school.I wanted to make a model house as I usually did,but suddenly I found the materials that I had werent enough.Faced with such a situation,I really wanted to give up.However,after a second thought,I thought of an idea to divide some of the materials into small parts and I finally succeeded in making a special model plane.To my great joy,I was given the first prize because of my creativity,.,After that,I understand whenever we face trouble,it is no use complaining.We should try our best to make use of what we have already had to solve problems.,4,、,2013,年高考英语作文（湖北卷）,题目：,第二,节：短文写作（共,1,题；满分,30,分,),请,根据以下提示，并结合事例，用英语写一篇短文。,We,all know that“sticks and stones may break our bones”,，,but we should also be aware that words can hurt people,too.,注意：无须写标题，不得照抄英语提示语；,除诗歌外，文体不限；,文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称；,词数为,120,左右,。,【,思路点拨,】,本文以“我们应该意识到，言语也可能会伤害别人”为题，让学生写一篇短文。体裁可为记叙文、议论文和说明文。但根据考生的实际情况，还是记叙文好些，可以通过自己的亲身体验来证明这句话。考生成文时应注意：,1.,结构上：采用三段成文，第一段引出话题；第二段讲自己的亲身体验；第三段说自己的认识，回归主题。,2.,时态：以一般过去时为主。,3.,人称：第一人称。,4.,注意恰当使用一些连词，使文章自然、流畅。,5.,适当使用一些高级句型和词汇以提高作文档次,。,【,范文,】,My,classmate admires my fluent English very much and I usually feel encouraged by his compliments,.,One,day,when we learned the new word“eccentric”in class,we were asked to make a sentence with it,.I,volunteered to do it by,saying,“,My deskmate,is an eccentric boy whose clothes never fit him.”Hearing this,the whole class burst into laughter and my deskmates face turned red.After class,I learned from the teacher that my deskmate would have dropped out of school if he hadnt been helped by others,.My,mindless words must have hurt him deeply,.,Not,until then did I realize words could be powerful in both positive and negative,.We,should avoid hurting others if we cant always be encouraging when we speak,.,2013,湖北高考英语满分作文,王,祖元 武汉市新洲一中,Sometimes,bad words are to us what knives to our body.I learned this from one,of,my experiences that I went through during Senior One school life.,One,day,when I was playing volleyball with my classmates in my PE class,I missed,several chances that I should have grasped to meet the ball.What surprised me most was,that,my best friend Peter called me“fool”.I was so hurt that,I,almost,accepted,the fact that our friendship came to an end.It was my,classmates,comfort,and persuasion,as well as,Peters,apology and explanation that helped me realize he did have a strong sense of cooperation and teamwork.It,wasnt,long before I forgave him and we were again close friends as ever.,From,this story,I am definitely,convinced,that bad words really have,bad,influence on us,and that only with a,good understanding,of them can we get through and get along well.,五,、高考,英语作文专项训练,1,、请,根据以下提示，结合你生活中的一个事例，用英语写一篇短文。,It is known to all that volunteering benefits others,but we should also aware that it can benefit volunteers themselves,too.,注意,：无须写,标题；,除诗歌外，文体不限；,内容必须结合你生活中的一个事例；,文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称；,词数为,120,左右，如引用提示语则不计入总词数。,One Possible Version,Nowadays,more and more people,especially young people,enjoy doing volunteering work,which of course benefits others and makes our society more harmonious.However,volunteering can also benefit volunteers themselves.,When I studied in junior middle school,I volunteered to accompany an old man in the homes for the elderly at weekend.The old mans only interest was to talk or listen to history stories.Unfortunately,I happened to be the lest interested in history and history was my poorest subject.In order to satisfy the old man,I began to study history very hard.Not only did I listen to my teacher attentively in class,but also I borrowed history books from the library and even studied history in the Internet.Gradually,I got to be fond of history and made great progress.Later,I even took the first place in a history knowledge competition.Ever since,history has been my best subject.,My experience has convinced me that while helping others,we ourselves may get developed.So,lets do volunteering work and that will benefit others,society and us ourselves as well.,2,、请,根据以下提示并结合一个事例，就“潜能无限”这一话题，用英语写一篇短文,。,As we all know,ones potential is limitless.Especially in times of crisis,you can never imagine how powerful ones potential will be.Therefore,its unwise to set limits to your,potential.,注意：,1,）不得照抄英语提示语；除诗歌外，文体不限,；,2,）文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称；词数,120,以上。,Potential,is,limitless,Its universally acknowledged that a persons potential is limitless.When exposed to various pressure or challenges,many people will be sceptical of themselves,thinking they are incapable.Perhaps,never have they realized how powerful a persons potential will be,.,An interesting story will never fade from my memory though I heard of it many years ago.An injured soldier was informed that he would spend his rest life on the wheelchair.Hearing the news,so desperate was he that he drowned sadness in drink every day.It never rains but pours,.,One day,hardly had he got out of a pub when he was robbed by three guys.Unwilling to give in,he struggled against them,however,which set off the robbers anger and therefore they set fire to his wheelchair.Just when the big fire was endangering his life,he suddenly jumped out of his wheelchair and ran through a whole street swiftly.Then he stopped to take breath,only to find that he should walk and even run normally,.,The story makes me firmly believe that our potential is limitless.Consequently,its of vital importance for us to spread the wings of our mind and grow our potential to the fullest.,3,、一个好学生应该具有许多优秀品质（如图所示），你认为哪种或哪两种品质最重要？为什么？请分析原因，并结合生活实际，写下感悟。,Passion Self Discipline,（自律）,Perseverance Responsibility,Honesty ,要求,：,1,）词数为,120,个左右；,2,）文中不得出现个人姓名和学校的,信息,。,注意：,1.,行文连贯，条理清楚，详略得当；,2.,结合实例，写出真情实感。,Good Qualities in Students,One Possible,Version,There is no denying that nearly all students expect themselves to be outstanding youngsters deep in their hearts.Then what kind of good qualities are outstanding youngsters supposed to own?And which ranks as the most important quality among dozens of good ones?Personally speaking,Im strongly convinced that honesty should be put first.,There is a proverb that goes“Honesty is the best policy”,and it seems as true as it was when first created.The most important element in human relationships,whether business or personal,is trust.Here is one of my secrets.I once lied to my parents because of my poor scores.Having known the real fact from teachers,they encouraged me,showing their deep love.Later,my conscience swallowed me,growing as I told lie after lie in an effort to conceal my original deceit.I gave it up,and chose to be frank.Wow!It is better to stick to the truth!,From then on,I have kept the following in my mind:If it is not true,dont ay it.If it is not right,dont do it.,4,.,请,根据以下提示，并结合事例，用英语写一篇短文。,We,know sometimes difficult conditions can really make a man.But some parents havent realized the importance of experiencing hard times.,注意,：无须写标题，不得照抄英语提示语；,除诗歌外，文体不限；,文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称；,词数为,120,左右。,One Possible Version,I think parents should let their children eat bitter foods,do hard work and experience a hard life.,I grow up in an ordinary family,which is not so well off.I could understand the hardships my parents were bearing at that time.Therefore,I work very hard now in the hope of entering the university and changing the situation of my family and me.,I think that in a certain sense,difficult situations can stimulate a persons potential and pave the way for him to achieve success.One can be strong,brave and faithful after all these hardships he has gone through.All in all,as far as I am concerned,I think that flowers from a greenhouse can never withstand a storm but that a hard life is good for children.,5.,请,根据以下提示，并结合事例，用英语写一篇短文。,In the modern society,we should learn to share.Sharing is an effective way to enrich our life.We can learn a lot by sharing with our classmates and friends.,注意,：无须写标题，不得照抄英语提示语；,除诗歌外，文体不限；,文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称；,词数为,120,左右。,One Possible,Version,I didnt realize the value of sharing until I failed the final exam last term,during,which time I studied on my own,fearing that studying with my classmates might disturb,me.As a result,I had little communication with my classmates during the whole term.,Then my teacher had a long,talk,with,me,telling me the importance of sharing with others,.,I followed her advice and began to share my study experience,with my classmates and learn from them at the same time.Gradually I caught up with them.,It,w,as sharing that made me achieve such great progress and become more,confident.,6.,请根据以下提示，并结合事例，用英语写一篇短文。,We all know the saying,“,Gifts of roses,hand there are lingering fragrance”.It is better to give than to take.,注意,：无须写标题，不得照抄英语提示语；,除诗歌外，文体不限；,文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称；,词数为,120,左右。,One Possible Version,Do you know that when you are helping others,you are actually helping yourself?I understand