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单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,本资料仅供参考，不能作为科学依据。谢谢。本资料仅供参考，不能作为科学依据。本资料仅供参考，不能作为科学依据。谢谢。本资料仅供参考，不能作为科学依据。,单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,本资料仅供参考，不能作为科学依据。谢谢。本资料仅供参考，不能作为科学依据。本资料仅供参考，不能作为科学依据。谢谢。本资料仅供参考，不能作为科学依据。,作文讲评,1/26,作文很好同学（18分以上）,谢勤,杨乐,韩笑,汪文慧,阅读下面两篇作文,张怡,童玲,蒋凤仙,黄霞,2/26,3/26,4/26,请思索,为何第二篇语言不比第一篇差，但分数却低得多呢？,第一篇,字迹清楚,，卷面整齐。,第一篇因为用了较多,连接词,每段内条理更清楚，,一目了然,。,第一篇,段落,分得很清楚，而第二篇最终一段,一目了然，一清二白,很主要,。,5/26,6/26,7/26,8/26,9/26,10/26,11/26,12/26,13/26,此次书面表达中出现的一些问题,14/26,防止惯用单词拼写错误,communicat,oppinion,truely,mordern,enjoies,massage,monther,paly,a children,childrens,slove,lifes,communicate,opinion,truly,modern,enjoys,message,mother,play,A child,children,solve,lives,15/26,忽略词性,错误严重,wide our horizon,we can chatting,As the time going by,ignore the communicate with their parents,share theirs opinion,It is not benefit to our study,widen,our horizon,we,can chat,With,the time going by,As,the time goes by,the,communication,share,their,opinion,It is not,beneficial,to our study,16/26,句式错误千奇百怪,The boy is playing the computer doesnt want to talk with his mother.,The boy,who is playing/playing,the computer,Many students are addicted to chatting online ignore the significance of communicating with their parents.,Many students,who are addicted/addicted,to chatting online,Lots of teenagers would rather playing computer games than talking with their parents.,Lots of teenagers,would rather play,computer games,than talk with,their parents.,Talking with our parents is important,it can help us communicate with each other better.,Talking with our parents is important,which,can help us communicate with each other better,Be faced with these problems,I think we teenagers should talk with our parents as much as possible.,Faced with,these problems,I think we teenagers should talk with our parents as much as possible.,17/26,中式英语笑话百出,We cant ignore our parents good.,Our parents eat more salt than we.,Let them know our mind has what thought.,If you dont want to face to face communicate with your parents,There is generation gap exists in most families.,Compared with computer,parents are more important.,18/26,We should communicate with our parents,more and more,.It can help us know our parents,more and more,.It also can help our parents know us,more and more,.,When his mother wants to talk with him,what he says is that,“Cant talk now,Im chatting.”,句子拖沓,19/26,好句好段观赏,1.As children,we ought to,pay attention to increasing the awareness of,communicating with our parents,.,(三四-蒋凤仙),2.I am opposed to such an attitude towards life.,Personally,I strongly believe that a child addicted to communicating online will become less outgoing,thus causing,the inner life terrible.,Besides,chatting online too much,to a great extent,will lead to“the generation gap”.,(三七-胡土清),20/26,从试卷前面试题中寻求灵感,Besides,we can tell them about our exciting day at school.,(杨乐-完型填空),The Internet has become a platform where people are fee to share their opinions,values and experiences.,(单项选择5),What is more important for us students,in my point of view,is to share difficulties with our parents rather than talk with strangers online.,(杨乐-单项选择12),For us students,many problems arise from being addicted to chatting online.,(单项选择15),21/26,怎 样 让 书 面 表 达,文采飞扬,1.较高级词汇,2.丰富语法结构,3.恰当连接词,短语优先,弃旧取新,22/26,非,谓,语,各种从句,with复合宾语,倒,装,虚,拟,强调,句型,利用各种语法结构，句式灵活多变，能够使文章增色不少。,2.丰富语法结构,23/26,书面表示努力方向,1.,字迹卷面,清楚,2.,结构清楚,：防止文章条理不清。,要有段落（3-4段），不能一段到底。,一段之内及段落之间要有,巧妙,连接,伎俩。,3.,语言正确,：防范语言失误。,单词拼写不错,词性意识要强,句式利用正确,语言地道：防止中式英语,4.,思维严密：,防止逻辑混乱,24/26,Homework:,Correct your own compositions and rewrite it.,25/26,Thank you,bye-bye,26/26,
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